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Review Style
I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
Public Reviews
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Tal turns up in the story and seems okay now, though I was unsure at first if he was a good or bad guy. It's good that we meet the girl in the photo from an early chapter and await some information as to what the quest of the two friends is and what adventure lies ahead. This part continues with a good quality of writing and an easy read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Introduced to new characters and we learn a little more, though not much. The chapter mainly involves a journey to the camp and a meeting with Silver Eagle Feather. This is unfolding in a way that makes me want to know more. Very well done and keeps me interested again throughout with no flat spots and no typo's noticed..
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story continues to entertain me. Character names: Stick-In-The-Dirt and Silver Eagle Feather, classic and can only make the reader smile with these imaginative names. Although a pleasant read there is always the thought of something lurking nearby. Excellent writing and no typo's spotted.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am impressed by your writing style and the ease to which I seem to flow through your serial chapters. I still don't understand why a young girl is chosen for the quest, but this in no way spoils the story. Perhaps it will become apparent later, or as this could be aimed at young adults, the early teenage readers may relate to the story with greater interest with young heroic characters. As in all good serials, the hook at the end of all the parts so far has prompted me to read the next part to find what happens.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is my favourite so far. I think the theme running through it is very cleverly done. The reader learns some things but is denied others. The only thing that sticks in my mind is: what is about the girl that makes her right for the quest? The ending is a bit of a surprise and leaves the reading wondering if the creature is good or evil. The last paragraph indicates the later.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Still in the shop and a lot to take in. I thought I would struggle at first but managed to keep it all together which I was pleased with. Anne is, to me, not just a shop keeper but a bigger player, or maybe not. All will be revealed no doubt. It looks as if there is an exciting, if not dangerous, adventure ahead. The writing style remains excellent for me and no typo's were spotted. I look forward to the journey and arrival at the island.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An enjoyable read giving in this part what I term real time as opposed to fantasy. This introduces me to two friends who I believe one or both will play a major part in the fantasy as it unfurls. The setting is easy to visualise and the characters are well-drawn. It has a good entertainment value to me and I love the style of writing. The character names are good and as I sometimes find in other works of fantasy/SF the names are made in such a way as to make them almost unreadable. Would I like to read on with this serial? You bet.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A great start to the serial. A beast-like character seems to be the main focus in this part. The description is enough for me to visualise the setting. To quote the author: "the seeds of curiosity had been planted." They certainly have with me and I look forward to looking at the next part to see how it all fits together.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This chapter is a treat to read. The story flows well and there is a good element of suspense. I noticed a few bits that may need attention. “taking a deep breath she_” Although this is obviously an interruption it looks like missing text on the page . Perhaps 3 dots... would look better./ “silence with(out) him interrupting her” / “I know that your sorry (you’re) “. I noticed “it’s” a couple of times and I’m not sure if they should be possessive, or not. What I particularly like is the way the names of your characters roll off the tongue. So often in fantasy/SF character names are difficult to pronounce. Thank you for a very good read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I was going to say "Once Upon A Time" is a bit of a cliche nowadays but when I read on I found it was relevant to the writing in the prologue. A great idea and I wish I had thought of it. This is a good prologue, not too long and filled with facts that will ensure I read on. The writing is of a high standard and I spotted no errors. I look forward to more from you.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Brilliant. I thought I would read on from the last item as I wanted to know the fate of Spit. I am glad I did. This not only kept my interest but also kept a smile on my face even though Spit had fallen on hard times. I was even treated to a bit of a quiz with the voice mail which I soon saw as "Mr Mann your stinking cat's no good." The only bit I was not sure of was when Spit was driven back to his jet because a previous paragraph implied he was already there. Spit ends up at the hobo's camp fire. I don't know if you have plans to continue with this, but I would sure like to know what happens to Spit, even though I'm a dog person.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
An entertaining fantasy that captures and potentially keeps the interest of adult and junior readers, especially if they are cat lovers. A well-written piece and I noticed no errors. The ending prompts the question of what happens next? I think most readers would take a look to find out.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a good start to your novel and retained my interest as I read through. It has good potential to develop the story further. However, there are a few things that need attention, mainly capitalisation at the start of sentences and I noticed kate was not capitilised. Also a couple of typo's: "Mrs KLm (Kim)" / "really matter(ed) because" "/ Andrew new (knew)" all these are easily fixed and will make the story a better experience for the reader. I noticed that the surname Kim is known by both characters so I assume that they might be somehow related. If you continue with this I would certainly read more.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Chapters 3 and 4. Again I feel that these two chapters should be put together as one. The story continues nicely and I wonder if you are going to continue with this. I could certainly read on, finding this a bit different and an interesting read. In one sentence you use the word "hanger" twice. I think it would be better to replace one of them with another word as it seems to stand out. Also noted a possible typographic error: " I heard the doos slid open (slide). I thank you for a very enjoyable read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good read on this second part although I feel it could be added as part of the first chapter. Again a good standard of writing and a storyline that keeps up the interest of the reader. I wonder how she is going to get through the next part and will certainly read on to find out.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
As a 15 year-old you have given a nice piece of writing. I looked through and spotted no errors. The story is original and held my interest throughout being a Star Wars fan myself. You do have talent and W.D C. is a great place to develop that talent given that I believe there are many here who would help you. Well done with this and I look forward to reading on. It is great to have young people here. May the force be with you.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A chapter with good potential to be extended into a novel. There is a lot going on and the era is ideal for a lot of threads as it leads into WW2. The writing is good and held my interest throughout. I noticed a few minor errors for your consideration. Firstly, not really an error. I think it should be established that the car is an open-top as soon as it is described as it can be confusing later. / " first few of the fallen cousin" (view) / "we have everything we." seems a missing word. / "And so here was, existing" ? / "No desire to be stuck a(t) home" / At breakfast she was drinking tea but then she was drinking coffee. / "Persephone was away that she was sliding" (aware) / On a piece of this length these are very few suggestions. This is another good read with good characterisation and visual descriptions. Yes, it has potential as does the author.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I was looking for another piece of good quality writing from you and found it with this. This is the type of story that I like to read, although fiction it comes over as if it is a story of real people. I was wondering throughout how you were going to end this piece and found it to be a brilliant credible conclusion. I only noticed one typing error: " {font:times 'My class ran late,' he said,". Very well done.
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Review of Starlings  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a good piece of writing you have here. Although you say it is part of a larger work, it seems to stand alone very well. It does contain a nice message in it to remind us who we are. I found no error in this piece and look forward to reading more of your work
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Review of I AM ORDINARY  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
I assume the second line refers to the first line above it. Avtanshika should have a capital letter. I would put "to" between "light" and "everything." Just an idea, I think the last bit could read: always happened to be in trouble.
I did like your small intro to WDC. Perhaps a small bit about yourself in the bio may attract others with similar interests to yourself and also give an insight to the reader who the writer is, but it is not obligatory.
Welcome to WDC.
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Review of I AM ORDINARY  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
I assume the second line refers to the first line above it. Avtanshika should have a capital letter. I would put "to" between "light" and "everything." Just an idea, I think the last bit could read: always happened to be in trouble.
I did like your small intro to WDC. Perhaps a small bit about yourself in the intro may attract others with similar interests to yourself and also give an insight to the reader who the writer is, but it is not obligatory.
Welcome to WDC.
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Review of The shelter  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Glad to have come across this short story. It retained my interest and enjoyment throughout not only because of the high standard of writing but also because the content is set in an area and time where I lived. Just a bit of nit-picking: sweet and chocolate rationing ended early in 53 and the story is set in 55. The ending is good and has a "Tales of the Unexpected" feel about it. The last piece: "his torch in one hand" seems to me to be missing something. A great piece; I thank you for sharing it.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an enjoyable story and easy to follow and understand as it flows to the ending. The ending is good but I would like to know more about the "consequences". Characters and pace are well done, and the storyline is credible given the category of the story. However, I feel that the author needs to proofread the story as there seem to be some minor errors that can easily be fixed. A recommended short story though.
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Review of Checkmate  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A good piece of writing to prompt the reader to find out more. Seems like a start to a World War One story but could be another conflict. Franz sounds like a German to me and I wonder if this is the start or the conclusion to the tale. Nevertheless, I think that you could be on the right road if you decide to continue with this, if you have not already started. I assume you have a plan worked out. Good luck and welcome to WDC.
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Review of Luna  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A nice little thought-provoking story. Very well written and an enjoyable read which perhaps can one day be extended as it certainly has the potential to become a longer piece. Maybe the start of the adventure of the two characters. Well done with this and welcome to WDC.
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