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Review of New Beginnings  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear CC,
Please accept my review of your story: New Beginnings - Jean must start over, without his love.
I must tell you - I loved it, honestly... but I wanted more, much more... it's just the beginning of something more, right?
My suggestions - because it is well written, sincere, full of sadness and real meaning (sometimes, when we are sad we write the most awesome pieces, I have, dear CC, especially one called Dear Me). So, here are my suggestions, please follow them, if you feel its right for you and your piece:
1. Instead of Other, for static item, put short story... and this will make you stronger and determined in writing MORe into your NEW story;
2. Write on!
3. Persevere, no matter what, express your thoughts into paper (or your keyboard);
4. Describe the characters - you, him, your friend, the first kiss, your innermost feeling, at the court house, the divorce, the first moment you met...
5. Please correct the space between "he has to ..." and "grow up";
6. Please put a period between "so bad" and "How...".
That's it! You are set to go - write the most amazing story now and... I'd like to be the first one to read it, again, CC!
Your new friend in WDC!
Christina Daltro

A dragon reading a book by candle light
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Review of Stripes  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Dawn Light,

Ohh I loved your sweet, poignant and powerful little poem. It struck me deeply. Enjoyable, funny, sincere and so true! My favorite part: "Your smile and sparkle can't match my black stillettos..." Hah! Great! You said it so well. I also liked this part: " to run my Revlon red claws straight through your baby blues." Hah! Nice! Really creative.
Please accept my little but sincere review and be sure that I'll be looking forward to reading more of your work. You did good. Write on!

A dragon reading a book by candle light
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Review of The Boy's Problem  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Well, I must tell you, Matthew Lewis, this is one hell of a good story! I really, really, really liked it and I especially liked the ending - sarcastic, realistic, dark and deadly. Loved it. I have been writing for some time now and reading a lot of stories in order to understand human nature, people, life's meaning, abstract thoughts, languages, feelings, the "dark side" in one's mind (even mine) and the world we live in. I become more and more susprised each day and today - it was you.
As a happy and determinesd member of WDC, I like to review stories and poems and I was recently added as one of the reviewers of a review group. I have not found a short story like your The Boy's Problem since I joined and I urge you to allow it to be read by everyone, make it public and let the WDC avid readers out there find your piece and enjoy this... troubling yet great story!
No spelling mistakes but please correct the word 'middle-aged' in the second line of your story.
I am giving you a 5 rating, if I could, it would be 5.5! I haven't given a 5 rating for some time now, so please feel pleased - you deserve it!
The way you wrote the second part of the story, "They" as I call them" impressed me deeply because even though I was born in Philadelplhia, I have lived most of my life in Brazil. I have been living in Florida, for a year now, and believe it or not, I listen to other Americans, in malls and supermarkets or in airports and restaurants, speak like that, act like that and become etremely aggressive to one another or over food and prices of services. Sometimes I am not understood, because of my accent, and I am put aside, rejected, as well as my fellow Mexicans or Porto Ricans. A strange country and people, mind me, but I love this country as my own. And you, you think the way you do because maybe the boys thoughts - not acts - are yours, especially because you lived abroad and traveled the world - your line of vision is wider, you outgrew.
Congratulations. I've never written such a long review.
Make this story PUBLIC immediately. Don't change a word. You say you admire my stories. Now, someone admires yours. Christina Daltro
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, my name is Christina Daltro and I will be reviewing your poem because I really enjoyed your work.
Poem: The Night That Surrounds
Favorite Part:
"Next to sun is moon
next to moon is night
night being the darkness
left with no protection."
Likes: The poem is beautiful. It is full of meaning and dreams. It is well written, deep and emotional. The second, third and fourth verses meant a lot to me but I thought the first verse was somehow complicated to understand.
Dislikes: Nothing disliked me.
Characters or images I liked: The night and the day; the day and the night...
Overall impressions of item: A lovely work of art put into words.
My reviews are honest, encouraging and respectful and express my sincere, overall impression for the improvement of your piece.
Christina
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
FANTASTIC, funny, witty and smart. I enjoyed it very much! I liked the way you made Moses travel to different countries and their reactions, in different cultures and accents. Really nice and crwative. I was wondering, while I read, how would it have been if you had decided to make him continue down from Mexico to South America and to Brazil, where I'm from, and how would you have set the conversation. I don't know much about poems and rhymes because writing poetry is quite a daunting task. Nice work! Christina Daltro
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Review of Tales of Terror  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Great idea! I posted my story! Christina daltro
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes, I got it and I enjoyed this essay (or story) immensely. It was interesting and kept me going and going. I wanted more dialogue between Cue and Weh (or Yah). You made me go on a long journey from: Mount St. Helen, unread journals, astrology, mathematics, discoveries, Minutia, sub-atomic particles and quantum physics... all the way back to Bigfoot and Cue engaged in a conversation in the woods. Wow! Very nice. Really! Do you have more of these... mysterious essays? Christina Daltro
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I simply loved your story. Congratulations. It's well writtten, witty, funny, direct and sad, too. I wanted more but your ending was about right, I guess. I enjoyed the read and laughed when you wrote: 1."how silly my butt sticking out of the door must look" and 2. "That's fiber for you." Nice, really nice. Christina Daltro
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I must confess that I am not very fond of poems but while searching for something nice to read before going to bed I found your Front Step Medittation - full of sorrow and wisdom and deep meaningful words. I especially liked this:
"The solution to this are the secrets kept
And the courage to heal from the rest."
Very nice. Christina Daltro
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed The Strange Creature. You wrote it well and you used the words and paragraphs in an interesting way. I still wanted more. It must have been difficult to write it, though. Isay that because I can only write short stories, narrative but never poems. So difficult. Nice work. Christina Daltro
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Great! Here is my entry for the Absolute Monthly Horror Contest: for The Reading. I hope I did it right! Christina Daltro
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Review of The Dialogue 500  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I think the idea is great! I'd like to participate in your 500 Words Contest very much with a shorter version of one of my static short stories from my portfolio, that I wrote especially for this contest today. It has 500 words, only dialogue, no he/she said and I'm sure that it fits all your rules. It's called: The Reincarnation of a Stubborn Soul. I would like you to please let me know where and how do I enter the story as I have never participated in a contest before. I know about the b-item format but not where to enter it as my entry for your contest. Thank you! Christina Daltro (Chrisdaltro)
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi,
I liked the idea very much! This is the first time that I participate in a contest so I hope that I'm doing it right. Please tell me if this is the place to enter my short story "with a twist" in your Twisted Tales Contest for November. Here is the bitem link: {bitem: 714906} for my short story called The Wall - 2095 words. I think it's what you want for the contest. Please take a look. I'm not sure I'm doing it in the right place so please help me out here! Thank you! Christina Daltro
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I was looking for something interesting to read and I found your story Fist Things First. I really enjoyed it and laughed in the end. I liked your style and the way you nicely managed to tell a story in 300 words. You won the contest, didn't you? It's great. I have to give you a 5 star rating and I'd like to say thar this story was entertaining and fun. Christina Daltro
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Review of My Safe Harbor  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
My Safe Harbor touched me deeply. I liked it very much even though I'd rather read a short story or novella than a poem. But, the words and sentences you used - You call to me from seas. I sail to ride your waves. - made me go on reading and brought me pleasure and, maybe some kind of recognition. I feel the same way about somebody, the same thoughts, the same way. Nice!
Write on! Christina Daltro
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Review of Fox Paw  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
What a heartful, hurtful and beautiful story. It touched me deeply. I thought of an occasion like that with my... mother. Your story made me go back in time and pain. Nice, very nice. I especially liked this part: " Pain, after all, is just another sensation. Accept it and it’s not so bad." Christina Daltro
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Kathie Stehr, What a beautifil, heartful poem. I made me cry. I guess I wasn't prepared for its depth and for your words; the way you use them in your poem. I especially liked this part, my eyes were immediately wet: "Then varnish, stain and seal what remains." And the last paragraph, soo nice. I'm not that fond of poems you know but I really liked yours. Christina Daltro
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I read your story The Matchstick boy. It was really interesting. I sincerely liked it. Mysterious and real. Was it? I was curious until the very end. As for Tommy, I guess this is how an arsonist starts his career... with an aunt like Hilda (even the name reminds me of a mean, German housefrau). I liked this: "It was still lifeless and hopeless." As for the note with the mysterious message "N-1-2", please help me out here --- what does it mean? A mathematical sequence? From the Bible? I need to know! Maybe it's more an American thing (I'm Brazilian and sometimes I have a hard time with some expressions). Good story! Christina Daltro
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Review of I Wish  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice. It is short and full of meaning. I wish I could write poems like you; I write short stories and sometimes I don't know what I'm doing. I liked your I wish, especially this part:
"But wishes are for children and we are grown now,
so you must find your own way,"
You make it look so simple and meaningful but I know it isn't.
Christina Daltro
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Review of FOREVER  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was powerful. What a story. Man-creature, man and God and, the machine. Time. I liked this: "That is the secret of forever." And this: "I have been here for so long that time no longer holds any secrets." Also this: "They are here for only a moment in time." Very nice. I liked the ending... it's like the beginning but seen from a different perpective. It made me think and wonder about life, fate, hidden doors in the future. A bit scary, isn't it? See what you did to me? It was a good read, for sure. Christina Daltro
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Review of My Grief  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was very nice. I don't know much about poems but I did like My Grief. I especially liked this:

"Losing them…
I can't go back

Lost them…
to being with you"

It is sad but deep in feelings. I wish I could write poems like you do.

Christina Daltro
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Review of Sweet Water  
Rated: E | (5.0)
The eternal mother's love and forgiveness. Lovely. I really liked it and the way you used the words. Nice. I liked this: "that sweet water of forgiveness". Christina Daltro
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Review of 13 Steps  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow. This was different and powerful. I liked it. I liked the way you used and chose your words to describe the story.
Christina Daltro
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Review of HARDLY HEATHENS  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Very nice. I liked the way you started your story and, especially this:... "his gaze fixed upon the shimmering dust particles suspended within a shaft of sunlight— like billions of stars of a micro-Cosmos." I liked this, too: "How is Alvarez any different than the ‘stupid prophetic butts’ he sent scurrying down his driveway?" Your story had reason and logic and... so much truth. Christina Daltro
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Review of Atrocity  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ohh my, dear friend, that was spooky, creepy, scary and weird. I was looking behind me when I read it. I heard a noise and looked right behind me, it was nothing... but it scared med or was it you with your story of demons and monsters and a man monster. Poor Jenny. Poor man. I liked the Wendigo... as he knew exactly what it wanted. I though that Josh was the Wendigo and the Wendigo was Josh... but Josh was weaker. Probably, wiser. I liked this: "Condensation on the window, the fingerprint of hot breath in the cold air. It formed an oval of ghostly white splattered against the darkness." I liked it. I don't think I'll think my dark short stories are creepy after this. Do you wake up at night (as I do) to write this? Good work. Again, I like your usage of words. I can't do this. I wish I could. I won't be able to sleep well tonight if I hear... noises. Christina Daltro
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