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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear KB,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers for this week. Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: A beautifully written nostalgic piece. I can relate to traveling with my cousins in the car and the adults trying to keep us occupied rather than complaining. Your style was very easy to read and kept my attention from first to last. I enjoyed your imagery.

Suggestions: None.

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of A Lost Muse  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Super Sleuth,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: Good rhythm to this piece. It sounds to me as if that muse that you pray for has been granted (LOL)! I enjoyed reading your poem. Your rhyme pattern was good throughout the piece.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Breezy,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A lovely poem and a refreshing retelling of a story that I never tire of hearing! Our Father in Heaven does love us and renew His promises to each of us through His son, our Savior. Thank you for sharing this powerful piece!

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

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Review of Angel  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear WhirlwindX,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: Thank you for sharing your point of view with all of us here at WDC. Sounds like this young man is quite "taken" with the beautiful young lady! Your thoughts flowed well throughout this piece.

Suggestions: *Smile* None.

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Winter Moments  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Keystomykarma,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: Thank you for the lovely reminder to enjoy life's little quite moments! Great advice! I enjoyed reading your free-form verse.

Suggestions: *Smile* None

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear OneFrighteningLittleMonster123,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: An interesting story line, as outlined in your "forward". I would like to read more.

Suggestions: I noticed in two places in the beginning of the story, you used houses in its possessive form in paragraphs 8 & 12 , but did not use the apostrophe. *Smile* Perhaps "In the new house's tiny kitchen" and " the house's best feature" would be better in my opinion....but, remember, this is only my humble opinion. I am just a reader here at WDC and not an expert!

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be.challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Shattered Tears  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Mandy Joe,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A nice piece about heartbreak and remembrance in the loss of a loved one. Very sad!

Suggestions:I think that this would be an excellent piece if you wanted to expand it to include more detail and character development. *Smile*


I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be.challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A nice "day in the life of..." piece! Isn't it great to put into words a carefree day!

Suggestions: Please don't think I am being critical, but I *Smile* only noticed a couple of things....in line 2, I think you should have written "fed the chickens" instead of "feed the chickens..." In line 5, you wrote that Peter "...proceeded to pant...", and I think it should be "....proceeded to paint..." (probably just a typo)...

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be.challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Least Favorite  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Juliet,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: Your free-form style is flows well. The feelings that you convey are sad. It is difficult for me to comprehend that parents would have "favorites" among their children. I have three of my own-each one different in their own right. Although each is different, it makes each of them special to me, and I love them all! I have read your "bio" and understand that you think your "differences" make them treat you as though they don't care. Hang in there! I know that you will look at things differently one day.

Suggestions: I am not sure whether or not your punctuation and capitalization errors are part of the style of your piece. If that is not the case, then, in line three did you mean parent or parents, and in lines six and seven, you should capitalize "i". *Smile*

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be.challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Me and My shadow  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Dear Lonely girl,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A melancholy piece crying out with loneliness! It flows well and paints a picture of someone who feels the pangs of being alone.

Suggestions: Please don't think I am being critical, but in the last stanza third line from the bottom, you wrote "..you can rely on knowone..."
I think you may have meant "...you can rely on no one..." While there were other places where the punctuation or capitalization rules were disregarded, I thought you may have done this for emphasis....?...

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be.challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Dear aralls,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: You are definitely NOT a bad mother. I think that you deserve an award for braving the trials of adoption of a special needs child. Thank you for sharing a portion of your experience. This will be a very powerful piece and a good tool for others who have and will experience similar feelings.

Suggestions: None.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
It would not allow me to rate without a review...sorry!
Rest in peace, Larry! I know that God was waiting for you when you reached home.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear luvtoread95,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers for this week. Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: A very encouraging piece! We should all strive to "reach for the stars"! Thank you for reminding us to do so. There was a melodic flow to your free-verse form.

Errors:In the third stanza, fifth line, you wrote "Any star was to far". I think it should read "Any star was too far". *Smile* I have trouble with synonyms sometimes, too.



Suggestions: None.

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I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future!
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Review of Privileged  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear level49,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers for this week. Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: We really do teach materialism to our youth! Your piece speaks volumes! Your free-verse style flows smoothly.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

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I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Carol Michelle,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or. discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A very sad story. Unfortunately, in today's society, this story is being played out much too often. This is a terrible testament to tell to our teens. We teach them that thin is beautiful and anything else is flawed and undesirable. We fail to accept our sisters, daughters and friends at face value. We strive to reach what we have been taught by TV and movies is perfection. Some cannot deal with being "different" when they have other obstacles to overcome. And, the weaker ones turn to suicide. You have addressed a great problem within your concise piece.

Suggestions: Only a couple of minor ones! I am not meaning to be critical...just helpful in your editing. In the second line, you wrote " In the window of one frosted window sat Emily Brown." The repetition of "window" makes this sentence seem flawed. Perhaps you could change one of the usages of the word to something like " In the reflection of one frosted window sat Emily Brown." or " In front of one frosted window sat Emily Brown." or something like that. The only other suggestion that I have is to correct the typo in this sentence "She was the child of a mother who would never lover her..." to make it read "She was the child of a mother who would never love her..." These are only suggestions, however. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

I look forward to reading more of your work in future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of One by some  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Wordism,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or. discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: Your concise, free-form style is unique. I enjoyed your play on words within the stanzas. Perhaps you will find this "someone".

Suggestions: None.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Oldwarrior,

Hello! It's Nani! I am here with a review of your piece for the First People's Review Forum. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: As with most of the pieces that I have read while visiting your port, I found this to be a wonderful poem! It is so heartfelt and sincere! I loved reading your words, and knowing that you write from experience as well as from the viewpoint of an American. You know what it is like to serve and to wait, and to be held in the palm of God's hands. Thank you, not only for a lovely poem, but thank you for your service to our country!

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!

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Review of My Papaw  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear HannalovesMrDarcy,

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I am reviewing your piece as part of the Rising Stars Member to Member Reviewing Forum. Please remember that this review is my opinion only. Please use or discard it as you see fit.

Overall Impression: I enjoyed reading your "tribute" to your Pawpaw! Your love for him fills the lines!

Errors:I noticed no grammatical nor spelling errors.

Suggestions: None.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! As always, please continue to "write on"!!
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Review of Autumn  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Connie,

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I am reviewing your piece as part of the Rising Stars Member to Member Reviewing Forum. Please remember that this review is my opinion only. Please use or discard it as you see fit.

Overall Impression: Concise and descriptive! I enjoyed reading your piece about autumn. It is my favorite season of the year! I thought this to be a good example of a form that I was not familiar with before today.

Errors:I noticed no grammatical nor spelling errors.

Suggestions: None.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! As always, please continue to "write on"!!
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Review of Dream With Me  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Nicki-D,

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I am reviewing your piece as part of the Rising Stars Member to Member Reviewing Forum. Please remember that this review is my opinion only. Please use or discard it as you see fit.

Overall Impression: Good flow of verses. A good example of kyrielle form!

Errors:I noticed no grammatical nor spelling errors.

Suggestions: None.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! As always, please continue to "write on"!!
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Review of Bad Lands  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Medusa,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A well-written thought-provoking opinion piece.

Errors:I noticed no errors.
Suggestions: None.
I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I joined the site in June of this year. My experience here has been phenomenal! I have had such a positive one! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear A.J.Stevens,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: What a fantastic dream! If only I could be so lucky!! I enjoyed your free-verse piece, and the thoughts that it provoked! This might make a good story if you lengthened it and developed your characters a bit.

Errors:I noticed no errors.
Suggestions: None.
I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I joined the site in June of this year. My experience here has been phenomenal! I have had such a positive one! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!
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Review of The Wind  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear pixieprincess,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A nice personification of one of the forces of nature! The rhythmic verses flow smoothly.

Errors:I noticed no errors.
Suggestions: None.
I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I joined the site in June of this year. My experience here has been phenomenal! I have had such a positive one! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Losten Lyrix,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: Beautiful thoughts and words from a man in love! Thank you for sharing!

Errors:I noticed no errors.
Suggestions: None.
I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I joined the site in June of this year. My experience here has been phenomenal! I have had such a positive one! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!
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Review of Faded Fears  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Jade,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: This would be a very good beginning to a longer piece. Perhaps you will develop it at a later date!

Errors:I did read your "bio" and know that you indicated that spelling was not your forte'. I did notice a few small spelling errors and/or typos. Please don't think I am being critical--this is just an effort to assist you with editing your piece. In line 1, you said " There is something in the forrest. My freinds is hidden in the trees pleeding for my help." I think it should read " There is something in the forest. My friend is hidden in the trees }b}pleading for my help. In the second line, you wrote "I do it any way". I believe it should read "I do it anyway." And finally, in line 3 (or the first line of the second paragraph), you wrote "The depths af the darkest night turn to light". I think it should read "The depths of the darkest night turn to light." But, please remember, I am not an expert! This is only my opinion!

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I joined the site in June of this year. My experience here has been phenomenal! I have had such a positive one! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!
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