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Review of On Reviewing  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Mr. Pearle,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Your piece on reviewing was informative. I hesitate to give you a review for fear of being categorized. I myself have received some of the types of reviews that you mentioned, and found them useless in improving the quality of my work. Unfortunately, I, like so many others here are not professional reviewers. I lack the skills to give an in depth critique of the work of others. However, with that said, I do know the basics. I noticed no spelling errors, nor typos in your piece. (Thank you for that!) Also, it appears that you put much thought and research into the content.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None that would improve the piece.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I look forward to visiting your port and reading some of your work. Please continue to "write on"!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear sigh,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Your free-verse style was good, as was your imagery.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: I think that if you used some punctuation within the piece, it might emphasize certain points of the poem. Please bear in mind though, that this is simply my humble opinion.

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!


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Review of Scars of Heaven  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Twilight's Madness,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: When I initially read this poem, I had spotted a couple of places that I felt needed some attention. Then, in order to learn a little more about you, the author, I went to your site to read your "bio". I found there the revised copy of your piece, and you had already made those corrections! Your free-verse poem flows well. Your imagery is strong.

Errors:I noticed no errors(in the revised piece!)

Suggestions: None.

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear intheventofire,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: I thought that this short story had the makings of a good longer piece. Have you considered lengthening it?

Errors:I did notice a few grammatical errors. However, I neglected to point them out because as I said I am not an expert. I think that your piece would benefit from a review from someone who can give you more insight than I would be able to do. Also, sometimes, my speech patterns and those of writers from other places don't always agree, so I am hesitant to suggest corrections.


I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Sena Slaughter,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group.Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: A sad, but lovely poem. Alzheimer's is a terrible thief that steals the soul of our loved ones. Thank you for sharing.

Errors:e:smile} None noticed.

Suggestions: None.

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear hill,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group.Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: I enjoyed reading your tale. I am sure it will be even better when you finish it. I found it to be intriguing.

Errors:I noticed one small error that I am sure is a typo. In "Chapter 2" line 2, you wrote, "...the turns around to face them..." I think you meant to say "...he turns around to face them..." *Smile*

Suggestions: None.

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear NOA,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group.Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: A lovely story. Your character development was good. I could hear a mother reassuring her child that the wind would not take her away. Good job! Your descriptive phrases conveyed your message well.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear slarg,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group.Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: A nice piece written to your love! The flow of your free verse poem was good. It expressed your adoration for the person that you have deep feelings toward.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Corina,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group.Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: I think you wrote a very descriptive piece about someone that apparently you felt was an influential person in your life. It sounds like she was an awesome coach! Congratulations! The flow of your free-verse style of poetry is very good!

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

I would like to welcome you to WDC, and hope that you find the happiness and encouragement here that I have experienced. I have had such a positive and phenomenal time here! The other writers have been very kind, and have assisted me in striving to become better. The contests are terrific ways to expand your talent, and I hope that you will get involved in some of them if you haven't already! The prompts provide great resources to get your creative juices flowing.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!


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Review of Itzpapalotl  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Dear SoCal,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. Please remember that the opinions expressed are my own. Please use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Wow! I really enjoyed this eerie story. You packed a lot into less than 500 words. Good flow of the story, and good/believable character development.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dear Harry,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A very heart-felt poem to a father. The flow is very good, as is the word choice. It is sad to "lose" a loved one to that dread disease...so sad to see them in the state that Alzheimer's places them! If this item is true, you have my sympathies! Even at 92, we don't want to lose someone we love.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None that would improve the piece.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Legend,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Interesting story! It rings of someone who has "been there done that". Is this possibly a true account? If so, I am so glad that you lived to tell the tale (and thank you for the service that you gave to our great country).

Suggestions: *Smile*None.

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Clones  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear Michael Cohen,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Interesting free-verse piece. Good flow of words.

Suggestions: *Smile*In the third verse, third stanza, did you mean "restrained terror"? I read it several times, and felt that it might be a "typo".

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Dear Truewing,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: An interesting story with a moral.

Suggestions: *Smile*Unfortunately, I am not an expert at reviewing! I think that your piece could be enhanced by someone who critiques with the knowledge of grammar. There are some reviewers/editors here at WDC who could make some wonderful suggestions to benefit you. You have a good story line, and I would like to see you take it a step further and expand the tale a little. But, like I said before, I am lacking in the ability to give you the quality of suggestions that I feel you deserve. Good luck with this piece!
I hope that you enjoy the time you here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Three of a kind  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear ghost,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Your free-verse style of poetry flows well. I thought it to be a nice tribute to your friend.

Suggestions: *Smile*None.

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Dead Rose  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Darkrave,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Your free-verse poem flows well. It is a dark piece, but that is a genre that appeals to many.

Suggestions: *Smile*None noticed.

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Dragonfly  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear dragonfly,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Concise free-verse poem. Your imagery is lovely.

Suggestions: *Smile*None noticed.

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of Basketball Dreams  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear rob,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. . Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Interesting piece with a twist. Good character development.

Suggestions: *Smile*In paragraph 15 of the first section, it looks like you left off the "s" in Luke Waters name. In the third section, first paragraph, you have a typo in the sentence that begins "...The dress she worse wasn't..." should read "...The dress she wore..." These are only minor suggestions, however. Please don't think I am being overly critical. I am only attempting to assist you with making your piece better.

I hope that you enjoy the time you spend here at WDC! Since I joined, I have become addicted! I have met many wonderful writers and have entered lots of contests! I have found the prompts to be challenging! If you have not gotten involved yet, you might want to check out the great contests and activities found here.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Dear NL,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I am reviewing your piece for the Simply Positive Review Group. Please keep in mind that this review is my opinion only. You can use or discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: I thought this to be a well-written story. It caught my attention and held it to the end. Good job!

Errors:I noticed a couple of tiny errors in punctuation. In paragraph 30 and again in paragraph 37, you omitted the punctuation at the end of the sentence.

Suggestions: None.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Dear Milkman,

Hello! I am Nani! I am here with a review of your piece for the Simply Positive Group Review Forum. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Well-written story of such a tender time in a child's life...especially when the child has to endure an embarrassing moment during such an auspicious day!

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!

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Dear Crickado,

Hello! I am Nani! I am here with a review of your piece for the Simply Positive Group Review Forum. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: A lovely poem. The flow is smooth and the rhymes are perfect! The content is such a bittersweet testimony to a beloved that is unattainable.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!

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Dear IncurableRomantic,

Hello! I am Nani! I am here with a review of your piece for the Simply Positive Group Review Forum. Please remember, that the opinions expressed are my own. You can use or discard anything that is contained within. I am certainly not an expert, only an humble reader who enjoys visiting the ports of other members here at WDC.

Overall Impression: Your story rings so true! Respect does seem to be lacking in a lot of relationships today....sadly not just among the younger generation! I thought your story to be well-written with good character development and dialogue.

Errors:I noticed no errors.

Suggestions: None.

I really enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading more in the future! Please continue to "write on"!!

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Review of Bad Taco  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Josh,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or. discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: Interesting musings! I think it is very close to the point for many who are not native to our country. A good essay on a point of view that is overlooked in our society. Some people tend to be blind to the plight of these people.

Suggestions: None.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Review of The Muse  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Aurora Marie,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or. discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: Interesting style! Succinct descriptions lend to its appeal! The flow is smooth.

Suggestions: Only a small one...I am sure it is a "typo".....In the fourth line you wrote: "...And is seems to me..." I think you meant "...And it seems to me..." *Smile*

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Douglas,

Hello, I'm Nani, and I will be reviewing your piece as a part of the Simply Positive Newbie Review Group. Please remember that this review is only my opinion, and you can use or. discard any portion of it that you see fit.

Overall Impression: A very dramatic piece. I found that it flowed from verse to verse leaving the reader spellbound. Your imagery was lovely.

Suggestions: Not really a suggestion as much as it is a question. In the first stanza, fourth verse, and again in the last stanza, final verse, you use the word "revelry". While this does make sense, I wondered if you might have meant to use the word "Reverie" which has a close meaning, but is also the military wake up bugle call, and would provide a nice word play? This is only my humble opinion, and just something about which I wondered. It really doesn't make much difference in the impact of your piece.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Please continue to "write on"!

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