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Review of The Savannah  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was a piece suggested for review

Overall impression of piece: This is very interesting. I am a zoo volunteer and love the big cats

Grammatical and spelling errors All quotes including continuing quotes start with a capital

What I liked?*Smile* This is kind of a personal story of animal interactions. It is immediate and powerful. I love the give and take. They seem a little human

Points to Ponder*Idea* Somethings don't quite make sense like since years. Such day no llion is seen in gazelle country. I am not sure what such refers to

How the piece made me feel: YOu do have an ability for storytelling. This seems pretty attractive.

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Review of Curiosity  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was a newbie review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Block formatting generally requires a line in between paragraphs. On the screen, it become hard to read.

What I liked?*Smile* I like the detail about going into the cellar. Counting the steps is good. Pretty good setting

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Most mothers don't have they're kids break into the cellar. I need more of a reason. Katie at least introduced herself, but I could have used a bit more explanation. I am looking for some reason the story happened.

How the piece made me feel You didn't give us anything to go on in your bio. It helps us as reviewers to know something of the author

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Review of From Beyond  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Rampaging dust bunnies on a bender? Why not?

Overall impression of piece Captured my imagination.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Of course, they multiply like rabbits. They are part of the natural flora and fauna. Pasteur might have been wrong about spontaneous generation

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Seems ok to me

How the piece made me feel They really are an accepted animal at our house. They are definitely untamed. Sure, blame it on alapse in the space-time continuum. Everything else is

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I write essays. I saw this in recent additions

Overall impression of piece: This is kind of a day in the life type of piece. I do envy you

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* I liked the appointment add. We all could use helps

Points to Ponder:*Idea* For a short piece,this isn't very focused. If you want authors to think of the things they have to help them, say that. Liking something to do something is helpful. A lot of us need to feel we are doing something useful

How the piece made me feel Work is sometimes hard. That is why we get paid for it

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Review of Alea iacta est  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I do like history

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Honor has more than one meaning. Perhaps pride might have been better.

What I liked?*Smile* You seem to have all the people in the right order. You seem to know the back story well

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am missing the wife's miss-givings. Was she psychic? I don't get the latin in the title

How the piece made me feel The story always has a back story. This is plausible and tenable.

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Review of FATE OF A SEAL  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece You had a request for this, but I was detained after the deadline. It interested me so here goes. I review because I like to

Overall impression of piece. This is an impressive undertaking. The Navy never does anything in three hundred words

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* You have short terse sentences that seem to work. I can't imagine that any of these folks are long winded. It does seem to carry the action

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This kind of loses something in not knowing whose story it is. It might work better as a first person account. I know that 300 words is a tremendous challenge. You could write a book on what these guys are like. Kind of unsure what the conflict is all about. Was it an enemy combatant or their own team?

How the piece made me feel I was Navy(medical corps) but was very well versed on Seals. You are correct. These are the heartiest of warriors

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I have a review request and thought I would look at other things too

Overall impression of piece I like short pieces. This seems to be an almost universal occurrence that is easy to identify

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* Short staccato sentences really match the probable mood. You have emotions of outrage and personal questioning that we all seem to go through

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Palaver might be a bit over the top. I have a good vocabulary but had to look it up

How the piece made me feel: Most of these things, "Seemed like a good idea at the time.: I have had a number of them

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Review of I See Old Ones  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter. It is definitely part of a spiritual culture

Overall impression of piece Definitely appreciated. It should never vanish

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is pretty visceral in its outlook. I feel the dream. Do we miss dreams today? Martin Luther King is the last "dreamer I can remember. The I have a dream segment is totally not in the script and almost all that is remembered.

Points to Ponder:*Idea*The tie in of Grandmothers to grandfathers seems a little vague. Did they wait in dreams? Did they understand? I am not indian but women seem to understand things more than men

How the piece made me feel

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Review of The Bar Mitzvah  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the spiritual newsletter. As a Christian, I do know some things of Judaism.

Overall impression of piece: This is definitely cross-cultural and interesting

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile*: This seems pretty personal and very detailed. You obviously know this and have authority

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Too much detail. I would know what I am up against if undergoing bar mitzvah. I would go more for the basics. Bar would be son of and mitzvah commandments. Christians to have to keep rightousness. Perhaps we are not as different as most think. I think this is written from a Jewish perspective with all the detail

How the piece made me feel The tallit is kind of a symbol of a committed follower. Jesus wore one

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Review of Choices  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual pieces. I write them

Overall impression of piece: It was almost like being there. I could feel it

Grammatical and spelling errors: Well punctuated. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile*: There are a lot of visceral images here. I could feel them

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Faith could use more descriptors. You spent most of the time on destiny. I think faith is what changes us on the inside and makes all these other changes (which are inevitable) almost meaningless

How the piece made me feel The best poems make you want to feel alongside of the poet. We do live in a destiny filled generation and subsequently, very unhappy. Of course, destiny goes back to almost the dawn of time

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Review of Lead me  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I write spiritual pieces so I try and review them too

Overall impression of piece: I think this is the heart of many seekers

Grammatical and spelling errors Tomorrow and days don't seem to mesh

What I liked?*Smile* There are interesting rhymes in here. I like some of them not being end rhymes

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Human potential is kind of coming down more on the human side than the God side. Generally, people are only burned at one stake. God is hope. God's interpretation of hope is a sure thing

How the piece made me feel By not filling in Port stuff, you haven't given me much to go on. I would fill that in

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Review of Dear Me  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I have read a lot of your work and perhaps commented on one or two. You do fascinate me

Overall impression of piece: This is specific in a lot of things

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and through reading numerous of your other things, pretty complete. You are leading the most difficult of people--yourself

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Vision seems a tad unclear. What does success look like? Obviously, there is a business angle. There seems to be a relational angle to

How the piece made me feel We live and die with visions. I am writing this not just for you but for me too

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Review of In the closet  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and I like words and expressions

Overall impression of piece This is honest and heartfelt. I get it

Grammatical and spelling errors ... means words have been left out. I don't see it in your usage. All quotes start with a capital. Probably want worst instead of worse

What I liked?*Smile*. A lot of our expressions are very colorful. Your ideas are interesting and personal.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Nothing too overt.

How the piece made me feel I am about as conservative as they come. I have opinions. Judging is not in my job description. My daughter has announced and she still lives with us. I care and will talk about issues if and when she is ready. Maybe furniture people are gay. Look at the musical Kinky Boots

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting and indeed, it is.

Overall impression of piece: You obviously lived and knew this well

Grammatical and spelling errors Paragraphs are kind of choppy and could be lumped together to be more cohesive. Between time and I there should be a semicolon. These are two complete sentences. Yes it was my father is a run on sentence

What I liked?*Smile* You quickly identify how you know all these things

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Piano man is someone very specific. I think it might be Elton John. (Can't remember.)

How the piece made me feel We are often inspired by events that bring things to mind

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I looked over a number of your things and was interested in what you were doing. I grew up in Edmonton

Overall impression of piece: Short succinct and to the point

Grammatical and spelling errors Ingrained I believe is one word

What I liked?*Smile* This is pretty honest and forthright. It has a touch of a common person that someone can relate to

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Fear is a tricky thing. You are trying but perhaps you need to say, at what. Do you have other means of support? It is kind of hard to see where you are going, The purpose of this is unclear. Are you trying to encourage? To sell your services?

How the piece made me feel I have been writing for about 50 years. I have put some time into mechanics and have developed a voice. It is amazing how many haven't. The fears are we aren't relevant and no one will read me. Nonfiction is that way. I like how you are putting yourself out there

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I found this interesting so I bookmarked it

Overall impression of piece: YOu have obviously studied this. There is a lot of information here

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* They say that Nazi Germany wasn't as different than Roosevelts administration, Even their symbols weren't that different. Lindberg was a Nazi sympathizer

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There is so much information it is hard to fathom truth from rhetoric. You have to be able to answer the question of, "Why shall we believe you?" It might be better to lead with one overpowering fact and give more detail and possibly, a footnote.

How the piece made me feel Any one of these paragraphs could be made into a piece and fleshed out a bit. What does this all mean? People need to have meaning with a government that is in obvious chaos.

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Review of Questions  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting

Overall impression of piece: I think we are defined by our questions. We know a lot more than we give ourselves credit for.

Grammatical and spelling errors: None obvious. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting rhyme scheme that is subtle, yet very effective. This is almost like a Psalm tot planet Earth. Images show what you mean with very little telling

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Can't think of any

How the piece made me feel We don't like to think we can know truth. Perhaps creation is an image that waits to be colored in in our clumsy way

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Review of I Am Home  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter. The topic is something I am dealing with myself, although I have lived in the same house for twenty-five years

Overall impression of piece Simple, direcy and to the point.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This brought up a lot of interesting questions that might be deeper than you planned on going. What is orientation of the soul?

Points to Ponder:*Idea*There is a lot of telling in this. I think the things that more express the poetic form is, "What does it feel like or look like?"

How the piece made me feel We have become a homeless people. We think we are something, but without a center to define us, we are not much

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece A please review me piece. Welcome to wdc

Overall impression of piece You really get 7

Grammatical and spelling errors Lots of grammar things. All quotes start with a capital. She is missing a capital. I think you are going for block formatting which generally has a line in between paragraphs

What I liked?*Smile* I kind of like Molly as narrator. The dialogue is quite right on. You have heard it before.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You might pick up more of the grammar if you use grammarly on your computer. It is a free download. I use it

How the piece made me feel I was amused. I like kids

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Review of Humor and Society  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors individual in third line is not a possessive. No apostrophe. It is when joined together has an apostrophe. Its possessive does not

What I liked?*Smile*. I like your offbeat way of looking at things. We could use more humor on capital hill

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Third stanza I think is about humor. Fourth is probably society. It is a little unclear

How the piece made me feel Does life has to be fair? I am not sure on that one

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Welcome to WDC. You have talent that needs to be developed

Overall impression of piece: This is very honest and forthright for a 13 year old

Grammatical and spelling errors dashes are two hyphens put together

What I liked?*Smile* Most of the time, these are adult reminiscences looking backwards. To even understand a single parent Dad is really incredible. The language is definitely compatible with 13 and works

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Doorbell ditch kind of is hard to get. You might use sincerely, your 13 your old self

How the piece made me feel Makes me wonder what I would say to myself. People don't really change until they want to.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this to come back to. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece I get the essence of this piece and understand it

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is well formatted and easy to read. We have a lot of people who have lost the ability to try

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You need to define mistakes. They are not all equal. Dropping the ball on the one yard line is not a character flaw.

How the piece made me feel You are not necessarily beautiful because you make mistakes. Some are boorish and lead to end of relationships. Some are downright fatal--like drunk driving. You are absolutely correct that people fail because they stop trying

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Review of Supremacy  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the Newbie review articles. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: I kind of get this. Arguments do become kind of all-consuming,

Grammatical and spelling errors It's should refer to words which are plural. Perhaps they are. It kind of looks like we are missing some commas, like after muster and generation

What I liked?*Smile* Our arguments are kind of greedy. "My way or the highway."

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Gluttonous squabble. I get the word. Arguments eating each other needs to be brought out more. Rapacity is kind of a stilted word for something so basic to what you are saying

How the piece made me feel Do our arguments eat each other up? I think they might. That is intriguing

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Review of Our fate  
Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece Interesting. I felt some of this

Grammatical and spelling errors: Them in the first sentence is unneeded. Sometimes has three distinct sentences so it is a run-on. Can deny is two words. Which is misspelt

What I liked?*Smile*. This seemed personal and I felt you truly believed it. A lot of your images are visceral and easy to feel

Points to Ponder:*Idea* The moment is pretty rambling in structure.

How the piece made me feel This is there. Proofing would help. I use grammarly, a free download. Some grammar help would be in order.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I write a lot of essays. I saw this one without a review and thought I would comment

Overall impression of piece: A lot of folks don't think this is a real issue, but I do. We are raising a generation that is so plugged into electronics, most people seem schizophrenic

Grammatical and spelling errors A lot of these sentences aren't sentences. First one is kind of a salutation Most of second paragraph is a run-on sentence. Semicolons generally join sentences instead of using an and

What I liked?*Smile* Definitely a colorful piece. This is a major battleground. With computer games, you are getting a dopamine hit like taking cocaine.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Most would not know about the famous whiskey speech. Give us a footnote or a url. I have no real idea where you stand. Don't write about something if you think no one is interested.

How the piece made me feelCulture is about how we make relationships with people. Electronics, in general, get in the way.

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