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This is a very great start to a story! It was well written with no misspelled words or grammar errors. The plot is very solid and written with great visuals and details. Well done! Keep writing!
GeminiStar
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This is a very inspirational piece. You have a positive way of looking at every review that you get, no matter if it's bad or good. I am like you when it comes to nasty reviews, I just throw them to the wayside and not even pay attention to them. After all they are not worth my time or the breath that it took for those trolls to write the mean review. I have had the idea of writing a fantasy story of my own but didn't have the inspiration until I read this piece. I look forward to reading more stories from you!
GeminiStar
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Astounding! Brilliant! I can tell that you've worked extra hard on this! I didn't find any flaws, grammar/spelling errors. You followed the form perfectly! This was a very touching poem about two men. The form reminds me a lot of a double acrostic only using the alphabet. Thank you for introducing me and inspring me to try a new form of poetry! Thank you for sharing this with me! I will definately have to try this one!
GeminiStar
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This was a very cute story. I think that I like this one better than the alternate one that you made. At least this time the guy smiles at the girl. I would've liked to have seen the story go a little further, but that's just my opinion.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any spelling or grammar errors.
Closing Remarks:
This was a very cute story. Write On!
GeminiStar
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Overall Impressions: You go girl! I am glad that you stood up for yourself! People who believe in the "Friends with benefits" thing have their heads screwed on the wornd way, that's for sure. I knew men that were that way. I blew them off and told them to take a hike. I was 26 before I met my fiance. When I first met him I tested him. I made him wait a week before I let him touch me. It worked, I possibly misjudged him too, but I had to protect myself. We have been together for over three years now. Men are not only like that, women are too. It's sad that the average person no longer wants a comitted relationship, instead they want the "Friends with Benefits" or the "One night stand" those are the people without morals. Trust me, there are great men out there. You will find him one day. I promise. You have a lot of street smarts and high intelligence. Keep it up. *hugs*
Gemini
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This was a great start to a sci-fi story! I hope that you plan to write more on this. What an awful place our world would be if the government controlled every aspect of our lives.
Plot Comments:
You did a great job on the plot, it was well thought out and made sense.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done!
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Overall Impressions:
A very breathtaking piece of poetry.
Rhythm/Structure:
This poem had a great flow and structure. You also chose great words for this as well. I had to look some of the words up so I could understand the poem better!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done!
Favorite Part:
"Silver swans silently swoop in the glow of the somnolent moon." My favorite!
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This was a very gut-wrenching story about your grandfather. I am so sorry for what happened to him. It was a horrible way to go. I hope that one day you will heal from this. I wish you nothing but the best out of life. *hugs*
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any spelling or grammar errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest.
This is a very charming peom that you've written! I love the Christmas tree shape and all of the colored letters to make up the lights. You did an excellent job writing and constructing this. I imagine that a lot of people will appreciate the time and effort that was put into this piece. Well done!
This was a great story about the bond between a father and his son. It also showed the dark side of depression and how it can affect relationships with the ones that you love. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. You did a great job with this story! Keep writing!
This is such a beautiful example of a haiku. You captured the essence the grand and majestic mountain tops! I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done on a perfect example of haiku poetry! I hope to be by your port to look at more of your fine work! Write on!
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Good job! I really enjoyed reading this chapter! This was well written with great detail.
Format:
You are doing a great job with the plot and the detail of the story. The characters are well described as well as the events that are occurring in the story.
Content: You keep to the story, without getting off track. Well done!
Suggestions:
I found one typo:
EP-1 Remove 'You' out of this. It seems that it doesn't belong there at all.
Closing Remarks: You are doing an excellent job on this novel! Keep up the great work! Take care!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: Hello! I just wanted to take the time to rate and review this impressive guide to poetry forms! You are doing an excellent job with this so far. I think that it was an excellent idea to rate the difficulty of the forms. I have been using this as a guide for almost a year now and I would be lost without it! Thank you for constructing this! Well done!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: This was really cute. Most of the entries that I have reviewed so far have been pretty gory and icky. It's nice for a change to review something not so harsh, especially since I am about to go to bed. You did a nice job on this. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Good job! Good luck in the contest!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: Yikes! That was an eerie tale that you wrote! I really enjoyed reading this! It was an easy read, written in great detail. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: I think that this story has a lot of potential. I think that it's rather good. It just needs some more detail and emphasis on the plot and the characters. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors. You did an excellent job otherwise. If you need any ideas for your story, just shoot me an email and I will help you out the best I can. Good job! Keep writing! Good luck in the contest!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: This was so beautiful! It had great rhythm and flow, it also had great structure too! I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Your description and detail were excellent. This was a very touching and heartfelt piece of poetry. Well done! Keep writing!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: This was a very well written piece! I enjoyed reading it! You did a wonderful job with this! I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done! Keep writing!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: This was a very well written poem about abuse, and also a very heart-wrenching, and heartbreaking! I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. This had great rhythm and flow. Well done! Keep writing!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: This is very accurate as to what it's like to move into an apartment for the first time. I don't think that all poetry needs punctuation. This poem seems to do just fine without it. Well done! Write On!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: This is very cute and funny! I really loved it! It had great rhythm and flow, and I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done! Write On!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: This was a wonderful poem! I have never seen anything like it. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done! Write On!
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Overall Impressions: This was a very fun story to read. I found only one typo towards the end of the story, in the last line, you put 'your' instead of 'you'. I just thought that I should point that out. Other than that, well done!
Gemini
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Overall Impressions: This was a very cute and unique childrens story. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. I like the idea of an alternate ending, though the second ending was a little strange it was very cute. Well done!
Gemini
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I can tell that you've worked extra hard on this! I didn't find any flaws, grammar/spelling errors. You followed the form perfectly! This was a very touching poem about two men. The form reminds me a lot of a double acrostic only using the alphabet. Thank you for introducing me and inspring me to try a new form of poetry! 
Overall Impressions: You go girl! I am glad that you stood up for yourself! 
I am so sorry for what happened to him. It was a horrible way to go. I hope that one day you will heal from this. I wish you nothing but the best out of life. *hugs*
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Yikes! That was an eerie tale that you wrote! I really enjoyed reading this! It was an easy read, written in great detail. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. This had great rhythm and flow. Well done! Keep writing!
I really loved it! It had great rhythm and flow, and I didn't find any misspelled words or grammar errors. Well done! Write On!