Overall Impressions: Another clever journal about your cat! Cats are indeed intelligent. My cat will try over and over again until he gets his way. When he attempts to dump up on the window ledge above my bed I usually push him or put him in another direction. Sometimes I will shove him off the bed. If he continues to do many times over, I will lock him out of the bedroom. After a half hour or so he will meow and paw at the door to be let in. I will usually give into his demands and let him in. After that, he usually behaves himself after that.
Plot Comments:
Again, you have cleverly put together a great journal about Fred.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done!
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Overall Impressions: Cats are so funny! My cat Max is the same way. He does some pretty cruel things to me at night. For instance, he will wait until I am fast asleep, and then he will jump at the window above the bed and cause a commotion with the metal blinds, which in turn wakes me up. He has even gone as far as biting my feet while I am sleeping. He can be quite a snot sometimes, lol!
Plot Comments:
You did a great job making a journal about your cat.
Character Comments:
Fred sound hilarious, lol!
Imagery:
I could see Fred dangling from the clothes line. That's a cat for you!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for a wonderful read!
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Overall Impressions:
What a wonderful start to a book! You had me glued until the very end. This is a very unique story in its own way.
Plot Comments:
You are on a great track on this. It's a very exciting story line and I can't wait to read more!
Character Comments:
I hope that you will go into more detail about the mysterious man in black. It would be cool to know more history on this character.
Imagery:
You gave excellent imagery, especially of the mysterious man in black. Very intriguing!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
This is a well-written piece and I am glad that I read it. Great job! Welcome to WDC!
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Overall Impressions:
This was a great and interesting story! Your narratvie aspect in this was excellent, when you talked about your mother, then brothers and sisters.
Imagery:
You gave a lot of detail and descriptions in this piece. I loved the description of the run-down red house.
Flow:
You made this story into an easy read.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for submitting your request!
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Overall Impressions:
I really enjoyed this! It's very unique from anything that I have seen!
Imagery:
You provided excellent imagery and descriptions.
Flow:
This was very easy to read and whizzed right through it.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Sorry that it took so long to get to. I am really glad that you submitted this because I think that it's a really cool story. Well done!
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Overall Impressions:
This was a well written letter to yourself. The dialogue was excellent. I liked how you were sort of yelling and arguing with yourself, that was cute.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this with me! Keep writing!
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This is a great novel! You did a great job with the narrative in this piece. I also love how you set the chapters on Roman Numerals. Nice touch! I especially love the name that you have given this.
Imagery:
You provided this story with wonderful imagery and descriptions. I like how you put the setting in Japan and described the Geisha girls too!
Flow:
This story read smoothly and easily.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I found a few errors within this:
Chapter 2 - Paragraph 2- "bath" should be "bathe"
Last paragraph Chapter 2 - "under neath" should be "underneath"
Closing Remarks:
A wonderful novel! As far as the rating on this story, I think that it's fine the way that it is. I am not sure if the word breast is considered over a 13+ rating or not. Keep writing! Good job!
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Overall Impressions:
This was a nice little piece that you wrote.
Emotional Impact:
I was very touched at the end when you talked about your little niece. Getting good grades in school can be tough, as well as frustrating if you get bad marks. One always needs to keep in mind that the teachers/professors are there to guide and help us when we need it.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this story! Write On!
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Sorry that it took so long to get to you! I have been extremely busy in the last few months. On to your review!
Overall Impressions:
This is a great page and a great idea!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
You might want to remove the invalid item posted on this page. I will be back to review some of those works when I get all caught up! Great job!
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It makes me angry that our world's people are considered criminals just because they are poor, hungry, or abused. What has our world come to? When their time comes, the ones who incarcerated these people will pay dearly for what they've done. This is an excellent essay.
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This is simply beautiful! I love it!
Emotional Impact:
I wish that I had dreams like this all the time, I would certainly wake up more refreshed every morning!
Imagery:
You gave a beautiful description in this piece.
Flow/Form:
You followed the Acrostic perfectly!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Favorite Part: "Never to fade from the heavens' sight, Gems sparkling in velvet on high."
Suggestions to make the poem better:
I would like to see you bold the first letter of each sentence and maybe put some emoticons or something to dress it up. Or perhaps a picture to go with the poem? These are just my ideas. You don't have to follow them.
Closing Remarks:
Excellent job! Thank you for entering! I hope to see you in round 3!
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Imagery:
You gave great visuals of a beautiful spring day. I especially love the references to flowers.
Flow/Form:
This is a perfect example of an Acrostic poem! Good job!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Favorite Part: "Never ceasing to amaze; Growing wild in the Springtime haze."
Suggestions to make the poem better:
I would try putting the text in some spring-like colors, such as light blue, green, light green, or pink. Or you could mix some of the colors together. Play around with it a little. This is just a suggestion, you don't have to follow it if you don't want to.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for entering! I hope to see you in round 3!
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Overall Impressions:
Another clever journal about your cat! Cats are indeed intelligent. My cat will try over and over again until he gets his way. When he attempts to dump up on the window ledge above my bed I usually push him or put him in another direction. Sometimes I will shove him off the bed. If he continues to do many times over, I will lock him out of the bedroom. After a half hour or so he will meow and paw at the door to be let in. I will usually give into his demands and let him in. After that, he usually behaves himself after that.
I love medieval stories and poetry. You did a great job with this!
I loved how you put the words in Irish dialect.
I am really glad that you submitted this because I think that it's a really cool story. Well done!
I have been extremely busy in the last few months. On to your review!
What has our world come to? When their time comes, the ones who incarcerated these people will pay dearly for what they've done. This is an excellent essay.