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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a delightful idea. Thanks for joining to share your joy of reading with the community.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I feel like I've been here a few times, though in some cases, I didn't advance quickly enough. Timing is key.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is lots of fun! However, in today's world, I can't imagine anyone letting a child run home alone, unless the houses are super close together.

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Review of Alive (Nightmare)  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review of Waterdog  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This was a funny read. I've seen some Family Guy, though not an extensive amount. It felt a bit disjointed, though, as if the references were jammed in places they didn't fit.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

I like the way the chain of events is interconnected with the protagonist's family. I also like the way religion and science are blended here.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of Farewell  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This has a lot of powerful emotions in it.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as am, are, is, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing and make it less wordy.

Example: The ballpark was packed, and the crowd was electric.
--> An electric crowd packed the ballpark.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for requesting my review!

What strikes me most about these lyrics is the concept of "When HE taps us/me on the shoulder." On the first read of this, I assumed that HE referred to God, and then I saw that it was referring to the Reaper. As such, the part about dancing with all the girls struck me as lustful, and the part about eating all the finest foods and licking the platters struck me as gluttonous. I'm not religious these days, but I used to run with that crowd, so I often see things from that perspective. It was the capitalization that made me assume we were talking about God, though I noticed the change from He to HE in the middle of the song. Was it supposed to be God at first, and then the Reaper later?
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Review of What Love is  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This reminds me of the feelings I have for my first love, though he made me no promises except in my dreams. I still dream of him sometimes, and I believe there is something deeper there on a spiritual plane of existence that we will eventually have access to.

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Review of Might I?  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I have these feelings myself from time to time. It sucks so much.

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Review of Happiness  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is quite a profound tale. The writing is crisp and clear even if the memories are not.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of Forest Interlude  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is an absolutely beautiful piece. I enjoyed the mystery as well as the journey.

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Review of My Boys  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is a super sweet poem. My son is 2.5, and many days are starting to look like this, though we don't have a consistent bathtime. I typically spray him down after we eat popsicles outside or if he's been playing in the dirt. When we do have a proper bath, it's usually whenever I want a long soak in the tub.

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Review of Bobby  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

Thanks for sharing this very emotional tale. I have a few similar memories, but nothing quite as profound as this.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This reminds me a lot of a big breakup I had. There was no hitting, but there was sleep deprivation, and it took some time for me to realize that the sleep deprivation was physical abuse. I'm sorry you had to go through this.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This looks like a great start to a lovely collection. The first one here has some difficult words to chew on, so I'm not sure how to apply that wisdom to my own life.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This is a lovely recollection. I don't have videos of my ancestors, but I'm taking a lot now, so hopefully my son will have things to show his children and grandchildren.

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Review of Oblique  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This sounds a lot like what my husband went through and continues to battle to a large extent. Therapy can help a lot with changing your lifestyle and reaching your goals. Husband did a little therapy, but I wish he had stuck with it.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

I've never done NaNoWriMo personally, but I'm glad you are looking forward to it. I know it's a great motivator for many people.

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Review of The Sunglasses  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Watch out for verb tense consistency. Some of this is in present tense and some is in past tense. I like how the speculations were different from the truth in the end. I suspected that she was blind, but part of me was hoping for some kind of supernatural surprise.

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Review of Theirs  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This makes me nostalgic for my university years when I would just see people and connect with them.

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Review of The Ring  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! I'd sign the non disclosure agreement, personally. Labor was hard, but parenting is harder, and I've heard so many daycare horror stories that I'm not interested in going back to work. Thankfully, I have that choice, but many parents don't.

Also, workplaces are notoriously unsupportive of pumping milk:
https://youtu.be/y1j0nv9Jc6o

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Review of My Mom is Me  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

These are come beautiful sentiments. I'm blessed to still have both of my parents alive, though I can imagine honoring them in a similar way.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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