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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
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Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
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stream of consciousness
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Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of Oblique  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

This sounds a lot like what my husband went through and continues to battle to a large extent. Therapy can help a lot with changing your lifestyle and reaching your goals. Husband did a little therapy, but I wish he had stuck with it.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! I found this through the random “Read & Review” feature.

I've never done NaNoWriMo personally, but I'm glad you are looking forward to it. I know it's a great motivator for many people.

Thanks for sharing your writing :)
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Review of The Sunglasses  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Watch out for verb tense consistency. Some of this is in present tense and some is in past tense. I like how the speculations were different from the truth in the end. I suspected that she was blind, but part of me was hoping for some kind of supernatural surprise.

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Review of Theirs  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This makes me nostalgic for my university years when I would just see people and connect with them.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Ring  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! I'd sign the non disclosure agreement, personally. Labor was hard, but parenting is harder, and I've heard so many daycare horror stories that I'm not interested in going back to work. Thankfully, I have that choice, but many parents don't.

Also, workplaces are notoriously unsupportive of pumping milk:
https://youtu.be/y1j0nv9Jc6o

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Review of My Mom is Me  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

These are come beautiful sentiments. I'm blessed to still have both of my parents alive, though I can imagine honoring them in a similar way.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Bottles  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very interesting metaphor and provides a lot of food for thought.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Whisper  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for taking me on this journey with you.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Hhh  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (1.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

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Review of the lost dog  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep writing, and I am sure you will improve rapidly.

The grammar could use work. If you want a more in-depth look at sentence structures, I recommend reading "The Elements of Grammar" by Margaret Shertzer.

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Review of the story book  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an impressive list but rather overwhelming. I recommend sharing your stories one at a time.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The dragon's den  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for taking me on this journey with you.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Unrequited  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This makes me nostalgic for my university years . . . and a certain professor from the history department. I never took a class from him. He just responded to an ad I wrote back in the days of Craigslist casual encounters.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review of The Journey  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will write a magnificent tale!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Speaker  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a skillfully crafted piece. It gave me a lot of food for thought, too.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of WHAT IS LOVE  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is truly sad. Education is the cornerstone of the advancement of our species.

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Review of One Hot Day  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

My child is only two and a half, but this brings to mind the battles I may have to wage in coming years. I'm preparing to fight for my kid all the way!

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Review of SIRE  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've certainly had a similar figure in my life, though I have to say he came to me through different circumstances.

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Review of Ol' Big Ears  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very fun concept. I love second person stories, too.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as am, are, is, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This sounds like a very intriguing tale. I keep imagining Pearl from Steven Universe, though.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I love second person fanfics! I would have written mine this way if it wasn't against the rules on fanfiction.net. For the mum and dad, I recommend they use Honey, Darling, Dear, or something along those lines when they address each other so you don't need to pick names.

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