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Review of Everwinter pt I  
Review by Lexi
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dreamopolis,
You have your intro rated Non-E, but I'm not sure why. You may want to change that because it won't be viewable by everyone.

*Note5* Comments and Suggestions:
*Thumbsup* You paint some vivid scenes for the reader in this story! It really helped bring it to life.

*Idea* Try double spacing in between paragraphs. It's easier for the reader to not lose their place.
Birch trees where mingled here with the colossal firs.
*Bullet* You present a nice picture, but "where mingled here" doesn't make sense. It makes sense to say it this way:
*Idea* Birch trees mingled with the colossal firs

*Down* There's a few places where you confuse "where" for "were".
They where used solely for one purpose
*Bullet*They were used
He could smell them, they where close.
*Bullet* were close
but how close they where was anyone’s guess
*Bullet* close they were

It wimpered and fell backwards
*Bullet* whimpered and fell backward
He then whiped the knife
*Bullet* wiped the knife

I hope you didn't mind me commenting and offering suggestions.
Keep Writing!
~ Lexi
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Review of Dreaming  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Godborn,
Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you don't mind my comments or suggestions.

*Note2* Comments & Suggestions:
*Idea* You may want to list this under the relationship and romance/love genres. It'll help you gain exposure.

*Thumbsup* Unattainable love is a good topic to use when writing poetry. This is a good attempt for one of your first poems.

I am dreaming again
That I make part of a plan
Consuming my soul
Not just a part but a whole.
*Question* The first and second line are a bit confusing to me.
*Idea*I make my dreams
a part of my plan.
It consumes my soul,
and keeps me whole.

Its full of empty spaces
*Bullet* It's

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of LUCKY  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Edward, Welcome to Writing.Com!
I hope you don't mind my comments or suggestions.

*Note4* Suggestions & Comments:
*Thumbsup* I really like the emotional metaphors you use throughout the poem! The imagery you use adds a certain flavor to your poem.

Anger is a cold wind, keeps butterflys away
*Bullet* butterflies
*Up* Good contrast here! I think a few adjustments makes it read a bit smoother though:
*Idea* Anger's cold wind keeps butterflies away
*Idea*Anger is a cold wind, keeping butterflies away

Jeolousy a heavy rain
*Bullet* Jealousy's a heavy rain

Hatred's a barren winter, no life to we found
*Question* "to we found" doesn't make sense here. Did you mean:
*Idea* Hatred's a barren winter, no life to be found

Hope is a seed, in the ground must go
Love is the sunshine, makes the seedling grow
*Bullet* Consider changing these two lines up a bit. I really think this works better since you're using "gardening" terms in the lines to follow:
*Idea* Hope is a seed left in the ground to sow
Love is the sunshine, making the seedling grow

Some forever flout the verity found in life
But God won't forsake, or ever slow your strife
*Bullet* This rhyming pair is used commonly. I think you can make your poem stand out more if you try something else.
*Idea* Some forever flout the verity found in their own hands,
But God won't forsake you, or leave stranded on His sands.

*Bullet* Your poem sends out an important message while addressing the values in life.

Keep writing!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Ruby,
Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you don't mind my comments and suggestions.

*Note5* Comments and Suggestions:
*Thumbsup* Your poem shows what can be a common factor in some relationships. It can be difficult being involved with some who lacks appreciation for you. I like that you showed both sides of the coin. I got to see how they both felt, and from different perspectives.

With blacked teeth
*Bullet* blackened teeth

He seldom spoke
With kindling spite he roared a bitter joke
With that the girl by his side
Eyes watered and her lip shivered
Seeing this he permitted a warm glance
*Bullet* In this stanza it becomes unclear if you are referring to the girl or the man. Also, if someone speaks with spite then it wouldn't be seldom for them to tell a bitter joke. Spiteful people are mean and malicious, and your poem is about someone who mistreats his girlfriend. How about try something like this to make it clearer:
*Idea* He seldom spoke
in affectionate tone, he roared a bitter joke
with a girl by his side.
Her eyes watered; her lips shivered,
permitting him to send a warm glance.

She talked of little else than he
He talked nothing of her
*Bullet*I understand what you're saying here, but I easily tripped on the words. Maybe try:
*Idea* She only spoke with thoughts of him;
He never mentioned anything about her.

The voice of which she spoke a gentile dull flatness
*Question* "Gentile" pertains to religion, so I am confused by what you mean here. Are you saying she's trying to give off the impression that she doesn't care, but her voice suggests otherwise?
*Idea* Her voice sounded nonchalant, yet gentle.

He ran way at twelve at five
That man was sorted out by an irrational pursuit
*Up* I know that you have chosen to not use punctuation in your poem. However, in areas like this you really need it. If you don't use it it then doesn't make sense.

*Bullet* I think this is a good start. I really like your the theme, and think people will be able to relate to this situation.

Keep Writing!
~ Lexi
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Review of One Eye Open  
Review by Lexi
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Linda,
I think it's great that you are able to express yourself through writing. You may want to try listing this under a few more genres (emotional, drama, family). It'll help you gain exposure when people use the search tool. I hope you don't mind me pointing a few things out to you.

*Note5*Comments & Suggestions:
She lay sleeping with hidden sorrow.
I lay at rest one eye opened
*Up* If you're laying at rest it seems odd to have an opened eye. That phrase sounds like you're on edge, rather than resting. Also, I think a few changes in the wording would improve this line:
*Idea* She lay sleeping, hidden in sorrow.
I lay with one eye opened
My mine races
*Question* Did you mean mind?
So young to leave and rest
*Bullet* Consider using a different word instead of "So". It seems to make more sense if you say something like:
*Idea* Too young to leave and rest
ones own hand
*Bullet* one's own hand- because you need to show possession here.

Keep writing,
~ Lexi
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Review of I told you  
Review by Lexi
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Villanelle,
I noticed a few things when reading this. I hope you don't mind my comments or suggestions.

*Note3* Spelling & Grammar:
Brief Description- mothers surpressing
*Bullet*mother's suppressing
so much larget than they seem
*Bullet*larger
everyone elses x2
*Up* You need to show possession in these areas.
*Bullet*everyone else's
wihes to rebel
*Bullet* wishes
bid you farewel
*Bullet* farewell

*Note3* Suggestions & Comments:
And they're spread so far, so wide, and are so unstable.
*Up* You are referring to the stars in this line. "Unstable" seems like an odd word to use in relation to the stars. I know that you have a rhyming pattern here, but consider cutting the word "so" & "and" in this line and maybe try reworking it using a different rhyming partner.
*Idea* fable, cable

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Road of Life  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.0)
Neoma,
I have a few suggestions for you. I hope you don't mind.

We must never look behind,
Only the future should shine.
*Bullet*Consider changing the second part of this line up a bit:
*Idea* We must never look behind,
if we wish for our future to shine.

For in this world of sorrow and pain
For if we are weary of the raven,
*Up* The previous lines flow smoother into those lines if you omit "for".

A place of with no strife,
At the end of the road of life.
*Up* The "life" and "strife" rhymes are used so commonly. How about spicing it up a bit?
*Idea*All our worries will be slowed
when our lives meet the end of the road

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Clocks  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Kayleigh,
I know this is a work in progress, but I still have a few suggestions for you. I hope you don't mind.

*Thumbsup* Your descriptions of the setting allow me to gather a mental picture. I think it'll be interesting to see where you take the relationship Arnold has with his Uncle Chester.

*Bullet* brief description- obssession- obsession

From the first moment he touched it he was a man obsessed.
*Bullet* Consider switching a few things in this sentence.
*Idea* From the moment he touched it, he was an obsessed man.
surface tckeld his fingertips, it was as if an unknown ghost had entered his body an filled him with an unquenchable passion.
*Bullet* This sentence tends to run on, but a few small adjustments makes it work.
*Idea* tickled his fingertips, it was as if an unknown ghost had entered his body, filling him with an unquenchable passion.

*Idea* Try listing this under a few genres so you'll target your readers when they use the search tool.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of ALONE  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Meg,
Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you don't mind my comments or suggestions.

*Note5* Suggestions & Comments:
*Thumbsup* Very nice imagery! I like how you let nature play a part in this poem to describe the situation.
brief description- descibing- describing
no where special to go
*Bullet* nowhere
The trees sweep and sway, the wind it will blow
*Up* The second half of this line doesn't sound as smooth as the first part. How about:
*Idea* The trees sweep and sway; the wind continues to blow
My love has appeared...my cries he has heard
*Bullet* We already know it's your love that will hear your cries, so maybe try something like this:
*Idea*My love has appeared, my cries have been heard
*Idea* You may want to list under the nature genre too.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Steal a walk.  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome to Writing.Com, Christian.

I hope you don't mind my comments and suggestions.

*Note2* Suggestions & Comments:
*Thumbsup* An artist and painting is a great metaphor for writing romantic poetry. I like your attempt to use imagery. It allowed me to see like a painting on a canvas.
*Bullet* Your title caught my attention right away! It's ambiguous, so it could have been about anything.
strokes of your artists loving hand,
*Up*You are referring to one person here:
*Bullet*artist loving hands
of what maybe his best portrayal,
*Up* You don't mean maybe like possibly in this line:
*Bullet*what may be his
Even without fine strokes, minute detail and pastel colours,
*Bullet* There should be a comma after "detail".
And I glimpsed your face in the crowd.
*Up* You glimpse at something, but you can't just glimpse it.
*Idea*And I glimpsed at your face

*Bullet* You have a good start. I think with a little tampering your poem can only improve.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Queen Bee  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Sweetrain,
I think using the queen bee to show domination and power is a good idea. I did notice a few things. I hope you don't mind my suggestions.

brief description- an agressive women
*Bullet* an aggressive woman

with your thousands of males buzzing all around
*Bullet* In the previous line you already show possession by saying "your hive", so I think this works better:
*Idea* with thousands of males buzzing all around

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of sunset  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Kit_kat,
Hi there! Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you don't mind my comments and suggestions.

*Note4* Comments/Suggestions:
*Thumbsup* Nice attempt to show the reader the sunset through your words.
Brief Description- explaination - explanation
The clouds on the horizon,
All stained blood red
Pink, golden and shining,
Are fluffy white beds.
*Bullet*Consider making a few adjustments here. "blood" seems too harsh a term to relate to the beauty of the sunset you describe in this poem.
*Idea* The clouds on the horizon,
all stained candy-apple red
Golden pink and shining,
floating fluffy white beds.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of beneath my skin  
Review by Lexi
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
JD,
I think this poem expresses how difficult it can be for someone to overcome unfortunate obstacles. You show heartache and confusion throughout this poem. I do have a few suggestions for you. I hope you don't mind.

*Note5* Suggestions:
beneath my skin
emptyiness begins
shredded
shattered
broken
deep within
*Bullet* emptiness
*Up* Consider changing up your line breaks here. I think it really makes a big difference. The pauses seem more natural and the format is more consistent.
*Idea*beneath my skin
emptiness begins
shredded, shattered,
broken deep within

bleeding through
are my thoughts
always you
*Bullet* Consider switching your second line with your first, and possibly adding a word to the last line.
*Idea* My thoughts are
bleeding through,
always focusing on you.

no where to go
*Bullet* nowhere
I ache with dispair
*Bullet* despair

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of quiet inside  
Review by Lexi
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi JD,
I hope you don't mind my comments and suggestions.

*Note2* Suggestions/Comments:
*Bullet* You have a lot of dark emotions running through this poem that show what it can feel like when you don't have anyone to turn to.

*Idea* I think you could really spice this up by adding a bit of imagery. Your theme allows you to play around with adjectives and images that'll help the reader envision your piece. For example:
keeping quiet inside.
feelings are smothering me.
*Up* "keeping quiet"- you could relate this to someone unable to speak even though they are trying to voice the words. "smothering me"- A blanket that tries to give warmth and comfort, but ends up giving off to much heat.
*Idea* My mouth forms silent words.
I'm smothered by a blanket of emotions.

confusion and dispair
*Bullet* despair

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of When I Was White  
Review by Lexi
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Sandpebble48,
Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you don't mind my comments or suggestions.

*Thumbsup* It would be a great place if no one saw color or gender. I think a lot of people are unfairly judged because of appearance or preferences. There's so many people that are labeled and stereotyped because of society. Your story shows that if people should just look at others and situations for what they are, instead of how they appear.

*Note5* Suggestions & Spelling:
Captain and Tenille
*Bullet* Tennille
Cindi Lauper
*Bullet* Cyndi
my father's stoginess
*Bullet* stodginess
assasination of President
*Bullet* assassination
endless rollercoaster
*Bullet* roller coaster or roller-coaster
whose cars only travelled
*Bullet* traveled
he was assasinated
*Bullet* assassinated
I would often hear my mother refer to that family as being "light, bright, damn near White" so as far as I was concerned that meant that we were White and they were trying to be White.
*Up* Since this sentence is rather long it needs a few commas. Try:
*Bullet* I would often hear my mother refer to that family as being "light, bright, damn near White", so as far as I was concerned that meant that we were White, and they were trying to be White.
We shopped in stores where White people shopped, all of my friends were White and everything that I enjoyed was suburban and Black people did not live in the suburbs where I grew up.
*Bullet* I think this might work better if you divide this up into separate sentences. If you leave it this way it's a run-on.
*Bullet* We shopped in stores where White people shopped. All of my friends were White and everything that I enjoyed was considered suburban. Black people did not live in the suburbs.
I read a lot and Nancy Drew Mysteries were my favorite books to read.
*Bullet* This sentence isn't making sense, but a small adjustment would make it work.
*Idea* I read a lot and Nancy Drew Mysteries because they were my favorite books to read.
I watched a lot of television and I identified with "Leave It to Beaver," "Father Knows Best," "Ozzie & Harriet," and the like.
*Question* "and the like" of what? Do you mean you mean that you were like the characters on those shows?
*Idea* I watched a lot of television and I identified with "Leave It to Beaver," "Father Knows Best", and "Ozzie & Harriet,".
My mother was really big on education and would have us randomly pick words out of the dictionary and we would have to spell them and give the correct definition or there would be hell to pay.
*Up* Your story uses the word "and" often. Try breaking some of your longer sentences into separate sentences to omit some of them.
*Idea* My mother was really big on education. She would have us randomly pick words out from the dictionary. We would have to spell them and give the correct definition, or there would be hell to pay.
I always thought that my parents listened to Motown because they just liked that kind of music, me I preferred Pop
*Up* I get what you're saying here, but if you're going to keep it this way you need a comma between "I" and "me". Consider changing this up a bit to make it clearer:
*Bullet* I always thought that my parents listened to Motown because they just liked that kind of music, while I preferred Pop


Keep writing!
~ Lexi
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Review of Beautiful  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Blue,

I hope you don't mind my comments or suggestions.

*Note4* Spelling & Suggestions:
*Thumbsup* Your story makes some valid and important points. Physical appearances should be the last priority when it comes to knowing people. Good job in showing that here!
*Idea* You may want to put this under a few more genres to help you gain exposure (teen, emotional).
were not the poisionous words
*Bullet* poisonous
but he didnt snicker
*Bullet* didn't
she had the potenial
*Bullet* potential
solid representaion of beauty
*Bullet* representation
He saw how attractive her spirit was, how stunning her heart was, and how breathtakingly intelligent she had the potenial to be was.
*Up* I understand what you're saying here, but I think there's a clearer way to say it. How about something like:
*Idea* He saw her attractive spirit, her stunning heart, her intelligence, and the great potential she had.
The faces of both the girls and the boys he was with dropped.
*Bullet* This sounds a bit wordy. Maybe try something more simple:
*Idea* Everyone's face dropped.

Write on!
~Lexi
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Review of GATHERING CLOUDS  
Review by Lexi
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
CountryMom,

*Thumbsup* I really thought it was a great idea to use this title to retell different aspects of Noah's Ark.

*Idea* You may want to list this under the spiritual/religious genres.


Thank you for entering round 32 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck! Please keep your eyes open for the next round.
~ Lexi
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Review of Gathering Clouds  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Erin,
I hope you don't mind my comments or suggestions.

*Note4* Comments & Suggestions:

*Thumbsup* Your poem shows the love child has for their mother. I like that you also show how a mother tries to protect her child from knowing her own heartaches. Your ending warmed my heart.

My son did wake and confusedly he spoke.
*Bullet* I get what you're saying here, but something seems awkward in that line.
*Idea* How about something like:
My son awoke and incoherently spoke,

A boyish grin he gave and began to think,
*Idea* Consider switching it around a bit like this:
He gave a boyish grin and began to think

A while has fled; The sun did shine
*Bullet* "Awhile" and the second part of the line throws me off. how about:
Time has fled with the sun's shine

Thank you for entering round 32 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck! Please keep your eyes open for the next round.
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Erin,

I hope you don't mind my comments or suggestions.

*Note4* Comments/Suggestions:
*Thumbsup* Nice use of onomatopoeias! Sometimes they are overused in a poem, but you didn't do that here.

*Thumbsup* Though this isn't based on "Romeo and Juliet" it still had certain aspects that reminded me of that.

Every turn is like the madman’s dance,
Stab here, shoot there, in a trance.
*Up* I think a few changes in the second line makes this sound a bit smoother. How about something like:
*Idea* Every turn is like the madman's dance.
A stab here, a shot there leaves me in a trance.

*Question* Your poem uses the AA/BB/CC pattern everywhere, except for these lines:
This battle has age with nothing to win,
Yet, it goes, with no pause in between.
*Idea* How about something like:
The battle wages on, yet there's nothing to win.
I've grown tiresome, and my patience is wearing thin.

Thank you for entering round 32 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck! Please keep your eyes open for the next round.
~ Lexi
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Review of Take My Gift  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Katy,
I hope you don't mind my comments and suggestions.

*Thumbsup* I think you show the special bond that sisters can share. Your emotions come across clearly.

*Note3* Spelling & Suggestions
I have pondered many a day
Of the memories I have made
If you omit "a" here, I really think it sounds better.
*Idea* I have pondered many days

But I am not worthy in such a means,
And have not a way to provide you with these things
*Bullet* I think that you can make these lines sound smoother. There were a few places that made me stumble.
*Idea* I don't have the proper means
to provide you with the finer things.

ot retreat in sincerity and serentiy
*Bullet* or and serenity
your eyes and feel yourslelf
*Bullet* yourself

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Faded Glitz  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.0)
EriNation,

Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you don't mind my suggestions and comments.

*Thumbsup* Nice work in your attempt to use imagery here. Your title caught my attention and made me want to read this piece.

*Thumbsup* I like that you show the confusion someone can go through during times in their life.

*Bullet* Kudos to you for using the new font and size options here, but I would consider dropping down one size in the lettering.

*Note3*Suggestions:
surrounds are all studed
*Bullet* Did you mean studded?
the li'l girl within
*Bullet* lil'
For a while i
*Bullet* awhile I
*Bullet* You have semicolons throughout this piece that should be commas, or that shouldn't have any punctuation mark at all. If you placed a comma at the end of a line simply to show a pause, your line break does that already. A semicolon connects 2 related sentences.
Been a long time since i've taken a walk;
*Bullet* You don't need a semicolon after "walk".
i find it strange retracing my steps;
*Bullet* Your semicolon should be a comma after "steps".
Awe seized me in the stillness of night;
*Bullet* comma after "night"
*Bullet* I suggest going through your poem and seeing if you have 2 complete sentences where your semicolons are. Take a look at what I mean:
For awhile I was there, peering at myself;
through the reflection the night sky conveys.
*Up* When you read the lines by themselves you have 2 fragments, not 2 complete and related thoughts. You don't need any punctuation in the end of your first line. Your second line is a natural continuation of the the previous thought. Do you know what I mean?

I'd be happy to take another look if you decide to make any changes.
Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Noticed  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey, Jessie! Welcome to Writing.Com. I hope you don't mind my comments and suggestions.

*Thumbsup* I think that plenty of people feel they go unnoticed. You do a good job in showing what that feels like for someone.

*Note2* Spelling & Grammar:
dwell onthe past
*Bullet* on the
everything go's by
*Bullet* goes by
{of thier future
*Bullet* their
is all to real
*Bullet* too real
heartache and dispare
*Bullet* despair
seems to great a thing
*Bullet* too great
*Up* Use "too" when it comes to showing to what degree.
truely x2
*Bullet* truly
others cretique
*Bullet* critique

*Bullet* You have this listed as poetry, but it's not formatted like one. I think if you make certain line breaks throughout your piece it'll resemble a poem more. Take a look and see what I mean:

You Say:
The need for an equal in mind and spirit is all to real, all of the heartache and dispare this one thing could heal.

*Idea*My Idea:
The need for an equal in mind
and spirit is all too real.
My heartache and despair
are what I need to heal.

*Up* Try formatting the rest of your poem in this manner. I think it'll make a big difference.

*Bullet* The word "I" should be capitalized throughout your poem.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Stay Precious  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dawn,
Your poem offers good advice for your child. You show a strong bond between a mother and child. I hope you don't mind my comments.

*Note1* Suggestions
My hand wavers just above the pink blanket
That is covers her small figure.
*Bullet* That is covering
Such a precious moment;
Watching a child sleep.
*Bullet* Your semicolon should be a comma here. A semicolon connects 2 related sentences.
There is only one thing that I would
Want to ask of her, for I hope she will always
Stay precious.
*Bullet* The pause after "for" seems strange. Also, I think a small change will make this stanza sound much better.
*Idea* Want to ask of her; I hope she will

Thank you for entering round 32 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck! Please keep your eyes open for the next round.
Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Tosca,

When you have children moving isn't an easy thing to do. I hope you don't mind me pointing a few things out that I noticed when reading this.

*Note3* Spelling & Suggestions
wake up in my own cosy
*Bullet*cozy
they’re dependant on rediscovering
*Bullet*dependent
*Bullet* Think about double spacing in between paragraphs. It's easier on the eyes.
Eventually I will find the secret hole the dog is escaping through to terrorize next door’s cat and I will even learn to roll over relatively undisturbed by murderous growls outside the bedroom window.
*Bullet* I think that this sentence could be stated more clearly for the reader. Also, it seems too long without punctuation. It gets confusing because there's too many things going on here. How about breaking it into 2 sentences and adding some punctuation?
*Idea* Eventually, I will find the secret hole the dog is escaping through to terrorize the neighbor's cat. I will even learn to roll over relatively undisturbed when murderous growls are outside the bedroom window.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Magnet & Steel  
Review by Lexi
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Aurelio,
It's funny how different songs can bring back memories for someone.

*Note3* In Paragraph 11:
I loved you, I worshipped you, and
*Bullet* worshiped

I'll be featuring this in my next issue of the Romance/Love Newsletter (10/25). We're discussing the most romantic songs. I hope you'll tune in to check out the issue.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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