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#4551781

Review of Prisoner

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Hello P.X. Vexxus , I'd like to wish you a very happy account anniversary this morning, I do so hope that you are having a wonderfully blessed morning today.
I was really shocked by the amount of emotion you showed in writing this piece of poetry.. I really thought that you did a fantastic job you used all of the poetic devices that I can think of right off. you used alliteration, assonance, and you used rhyme and it was in a good and powerful way too. I could almost envision you throwing off the chains of oppression. I think this poem was , you are certainly a storyteller in your poetry and I would love
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I thought that your title is excellent and appropriate the only thing I would suggest is that you write something in the item description location to describe the poem.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.

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#4551777

Review of Infectious

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Hello z.crespo , I'd like to wish you a very happy account anniversary this
morning. I do so hope that you are having a wonderfully blessed day today.
I thought that this was quite a good title especially for nowadays, with the pandemic and all. this poem seems to be about falling in love and how it spreads. Let's only hope that it does in this day and age of hate. I only pray for us all to live together with love and in peace. This type of writing is helpful to get that thought out there. This poem is structured in a different sort of way,
it starts with two quatrains (four-line stanza) then it is followed by a septet, or a seven-line stanza; next, you used a sestet or a six-line stanza,; then another
quatrain and finally ending with another sestet. I have never seen this combination of stanzas before, I think you may have invented a new form, and honey there is nothing wrong with that. I think you did a really good job with your poem ...
you keep writing and I'll keep reading thanks for sharing and God Bless You.

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#4551565

Review of Parents!

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Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this is a quatrain poem written using quatrains

Theme: the theme is parents and technology

Flow: I thought that the flow of the poem was really good as was the rhythm.

punctuation: The punctuation is correct to the best of my knowledge.

tone: the tone is light

Title: the title, "Parents", is appropriate for the poem.

Suggestions: I thought that this was a really well written piece of writing.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551560

Review of What is Silence?

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Hello jubshaw , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: you have structured this poem using four quatrains

Theme: this oi=oem describes what silence means to you,

Flow: The poem flowed very well without rhyme and the rhythm was steady.

punctuation: there was no punctuation used in the writing of this poem.
which is perfectly okay.

tone: the tone of this poem was what I can only describe as "matter of fact".

Title: The title, "What is Silence?", describes the poem and asks a question........ what is silence? this is the only punctuation used in the writing.

Suggestions: I thought you did a really good job creating this little poem, it is really very nice.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551556

Review of Dear Father

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Hello Neil Clair , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this opioen is structured well and I must say it is a precious note which you wrote to you father and all fathers for fathers day.

Theme: This is a kind of thank you note for your father

Flow: this little note flowed well and was nicely written.

punctuation: the punctuation looked correct to me.

tone: the tone was loving and thankful

Title: the title, "Dear Father", is a nice touch it is written as you would start a letter and shows love.

Image: I get the image of him brushing your hair as you get ready for school or church.

Suggestions: This is a lovely little poem dedicated to your memories of your father and the love you feel for him.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551436

Review of Im growing old.

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Hello MatildaRose , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this poem is structured in a very pleasant way, using multiple stanzas to create a wonderful sounding poem.

Theme: the theme was reminiscent of the past, memories by a mother thinking about what used to be many years earlier.

Flow: the flow was excellent and the rhythm was good there was also some rhyming going on.

punctuation: The punctuation is something I am not well versed in so I would suggest asking someone else about it.

tone: I thought the tone was sad and lonely sounding

Title: The title, " I'm growing old." tells us what the point of the -poem is. it is appropriate and also I notice that you ended it with a peri9od which to me makes me think you are saying "That's it"!

Suggestions: I thought that this was well written and I really liked reading it.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551434

Review of The Antidote

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Hello {suser:(the0hawk}, I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this short fiction writing was well spaced which made it easy to read.

Theme: The theme of the story is that Dr. Koch found a cure and they were going to try it out, it was awful!

Flow: This story flowed well from beginning to end, I really liked it and I thought that it followed the prompt by using the required line also.

punctuation: I believe that the punctuation looked correct to me.

tone: The tone was confident and smooth

Title: The title, "The Antidote," was appropriate for the story.

Image: I can easily envision a few people standing around a lab.
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Suggestions: I thought that you did a very nice job writing this short piece of fiction. this is a time when people feel as they could relate to a story about finding an antidote.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551430

Review of A Wedding Dream Come True

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Hello Amay , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: i Thought that the structure of the short story was just perfect, it was written as a letter to David, your friend.

Theme: The theme was a surprise wedding for you and engagement all in a week.

Flow: I thought that the flow of the story was really well.

punctuation: The punctuation is correct to the best of my knowledge.

tone: it had a happy and very pleasant tone to it I thought.

Title: I thought that the title, "A Weddin g Dream Come True", was just perfect and very appropriate for the story,

Image: I can easily envision your wedding how beautiful it must have been.

Suggestions: The story was fresh and very interesting and fun.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551342

Review of The Price of Immortality

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I thought that you wrote a very nice poem it is the type of writing that many would call
thought-provoking and also interesting as it shows into your psyche.
I would like to thank you for entering my contest and I wish you good luck and hope you will enter again in July, I will give my decision sometime after the 25 of June.

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#4551018

Review of A Chance

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Rated: E

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Hello chantelle , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed d

Theme: Your writing is good, but I feel as if I came in at the middle of a story or something.

Flow: the flow of the story was good, it moved at a brisk pace. but I am feeling as though this was like chapter six in an eight chapter book.

punctuation: perhaps it is just me but something seems to be missing.
the punctuation is correct to the best of my knowledge.

tone: the tone was smooth and easy

Title: the title , "A Chance," is appropriate for the story.

Suggestions: I think perhaps you need to answer the question, what happens?

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551017

Review of QUOTES AND WORDS OF WISDOM

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Hello isokarifrancis , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: This item is hardly even an item, it is just one line of wisdom. but I must say that you packed more wisdom into one line than many do in an entire poem or paragraph of a story.

Theme: " If your mouth becomes a storehouse of the words for the holy books, your inventory will consist of all-around goodness and quality success."
punctuation:the punctuation is correct

tone: the tone is thoughtful and educational

Title:the title, "Quotes and Words of Wisdom", is very appropriate this is a quote that is -packed full of wisdom.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551015

Review of No More Asking

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Hello JMariah , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this poem is structured using three sestets or three stanzas with six lines.

Theme: The theme of this item was the shadows that dance around the room in the moonlight at night.

Flow: I thought that this item flowed really well and that it had a great rhythm and the rhymes were right on every time.

punctuation: the punctuation seemed to be correct and in place also.

tone: the tone was kind of spooky but it was not dark.

Title: The title, " No more Asking", was a bit thought provoking,

Image: I could imagine a room with streams of light dancing shadows and an overall spooky feeling.

Suggestions: I thought this was the best poem I've read today soi far,
and I've read many. keep up the good work

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551013

Review of My Soul

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It is well written and says everything it is meant to say.

punctuation: the punctuation seems to be in place and ve correct to me.

Title: The title, "My Soul", is so good and it shows the depth of feeling you have for this person,.

Image: I can envision to starcrossed lovers embraced and kissing.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions,, I thought it was very brief but it says what it needs to.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4551010

Review of Epitaph

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Hello tauqeerwrites , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

iThis is a poem about work and worship it is an epitaph
Flow: it seemed to flow really well and I liked what you spoke or perhaps it was the way you spoke you seemed sure
punctuation: the punctuation was, for the most part, missing with exception of some parenthesis and a question.
tone: the tone was forceful and strong maybe even confident in what you were writing.

Title: The title, "Epitaph", is exactly right for this particular poem.

Suggestions: really don't have any suggestions for you, just keep writing and keep the confidence high.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4550929

Review of ruwth is writing...

for entry "~ A Story-Poem ~"

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Hello ruwth , I am so happy that you decided to enter your poem in my contest. This is the first month in a long time that I have held it. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day. I want to wish you good luck in your endeavor.

Structure: this item is structured using one hundred short lines of print. I really think this was more close to fifty lines as it is written. because the lines are so very brief.

Theme: I think that the theme is very commendable I love the Bible and I believe all of the problems that face mankind can be remedied if people would follow the laws set forth in this very important book.

Flow: I didn't think the lines flowed but the entire story did as a whole.
There was a lovely pace that the story had,

punctuation: I really didn't pay a lot of attention in this subject as I am not an expert on it myself.

tone: The tone was loving and educational in some respects.

Title: The Title, " A Story-Poem", was appropriate but I do also think another name Such as a Book of Life 0r something about the Bible would be more creative. but yours does work.

Suggestions: I really loved your story-poem and I adored the subject matter.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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Review of John The Ripper

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Hello tauqeerwrites , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this was created using six quatrains.
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Theme you are not safe nor is the one controlling you

Flow: this poem flows alright and has some rhyming in it. It's rhythm is a little strained.

punctuation: there is no punctuation used in thisd particular poem, which is fine.

tone:the tone was harsh and matter of fact.

Title: John the ripper",is a play on the old "Jack the ripper" character

Suggestions: I really had a difficult time following this poem.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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Review of My dear old brother.

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Hello MatildaRose , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this item is structured using ten quatrains and a single line separating one part.

Theme: Your brother was stolen according to your poem, he was taken from his bike off the road.

Flow: This poem flowed very well with good rhyming and a nice rhythm.

punctuation: The punctuation seemed to be correct to me, however, I am no expert on punctuation. it looks okay though. The grammar also seems to be right in place.

tone: the tone was sort of sinister I thought. and really sad.

Title: The title, "My dear old brother", makes me question if this is sarcasm on the part of the brother or is he really a dearly beloved brother or is he another brother to get rid of.

Image: I can envision a young fellow being stalked and taken from off his bike.

Suggestions: I do wonder which type of feeling you are playing on sadness or sarcasm. If this is a true story then I am so very sorry this has happened to your family and may God watch over you.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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Review of Dear Me

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Hello fyn , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: This item is structured as s professional letter. to oneself.

Theme: a letter from fyn to fyn about his writing and reviewing skills and efforts.

Flow: the letter flowed well However, the grammar was a little bit off.
though I think it was meant to be that way as a form of comedy.

punctuation: I guess the punctuation was okay, but I am not certain because I am not the best student of punctuation.

tone: Title: The title, "Dear Me", is the premise of the letter and is appropriate.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions but saw no mistakes.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4550238

Review of GANDHI

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Hello Dr M C Gupta , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: Written in abcb, 7-6-7-6 syllabic format

Theme: Gandhi, a sainted Indian who brought freedom from British.

Flow: I thought that the item flowed well and had sone rhyme and rythm

Punctuation: The punctuation was correct to the best of my knowledge.
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tone: tribute

Title: the title "GHNDHI" I think by putting it in all caps really
puts a spotlight on him.

Suggestions: I thought you did a great job.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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Review of INTERNET ADDICTION

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Hello Dr M C Gupta , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: the structure is written in pentameter.

Theme: internet addictition

Flow:I thought that the item flowed well without rhyme or rhythm.

punctuation: the punctuations I usually leave because I am not good at it myself.'

e:sun} tone: inquizative

Te:dragonflyp} Title : "internet Addiction" is appropriate as a title
I thought you did a fine job creating this poem which asks and answers the question is the internet addictitive.

e:muglp} Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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Review of Day One

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Hello {suser:chandtelle, I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this item is structured using a one-paragraph form.

Theme: The theme is war or should I say the caos that comes about after the war. You discuss the soldiers and the government.... rich!

Flow: Your item flowed well and there were no unnecessary stops anywhere.
It was easy to follow from start to finish.

punctuation: The punctuation seemed to be okay to me, I am not very good at punctuation or grammar. but it sounded fine.

tone: The tone was bitter and sort of enraged.

Title: The title, "Day 1", I personally think the number one would do better if it were spelled out like "ONE".

Image: A war-torn town comes to my mind when I read this.

Suggestions: I thought that you showed one side of the plight. It was angry sounding and sort of sad.

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#4549715

Review of The Philosophy of Chaos

Review by Lisa Noe

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hello chushychus, I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: the structure creates a picture that favors s Christmas ornament.

Theme: the poem's Theme is chaos, it was dark and
thought-provoking
Flow: it flowed okey I thought

punctuation: the opunctuation was correct

tone: the ton was chaotic

Title: the title was appropriate for the item

Suggestions: I thought you did a fantastic job showing what chaos is.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4549711

Review of Hand Waving? Waving Hand?

Review by Lisa Noe

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

your words are in red and my words are in blue. You made the following mistakes, I have copied yours, then I corrected it in blue.

I still remember about my experience. This day my father invited some people from my church to came in my house. 6 p. m. o'clock some man has came, they has preapared to present in my church. My father decided to training sing at second floor in my house. You must know: my house was not inhabited since ten years ago. So, you can imagine now, how scream my house.
In second floor, I was sat in front of the door. My eyes can see all things that in the room. The door’s room was opened when iI sat in front of it. The room was so dark and stuffy. It can be seen without you in the room. And then in this room, there is have a little room-bathroom that are rarely used also in this room a lot of my father’s book piled up.
When I sat there, I have been already felt that was something wrong there. But, I can’t find that. Until all the people tried to sing a song, my eyes see something. Exactly in front of me. I am speechless.
When I realized it-it that looks very white but transparent it’s not same wall in my house, it’s like a jellyfish. It’s form like a piece of hand. There is no body or head. I immediately shouted-“Pak, there was someone who called me, but there was no one there who was just a hand waving at me.” (*Pak it mean Dad in English)
Immediately all of the people was shocked. Then my father asked for me, “You see only a hand waving for you, right?” “Iya, Pak.”(“Yes, Dad.”) So, my father pleased to all people to go back and tried in the first floor.
So, if you it’s me what do you think about my experience? Are you shocked? Or are you scared? You can believe or not-because that I became known all of the “ghost” in my house. Now, is no disruption about “ghost” in my house.

To with, in line one, remove the word (about).
came in will be come to
the second sentence should be come
have prepared will be next instead odf has repaired.

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training will be train
on the second
at my house
In the second floor
in the same sentence remove the word at before the word in
not the same instead of not same.
It's formed not it's form.
remove the word to
If you were me, what do you think of the experience?
and finally, change in to at.

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#4549708

Review of LORD, BESTOW GRACE

Review by Lisa Noe

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hello Dr M C Gupta , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: * Written in abcb, 7-6-7-6 format

Theme: The death of school children, taken in a fire in India

Flow: the flow was terrific and there was no rhyme

punctuation: the punctuation was correct.

tone: the tone was sad and melanchol

Title: the title, "Lord, Bestow Grace." was very excellent and appropriate for the item.

Suggestions: I thought that this was a beautifully written memorial and tribute to the children.

*poseryp*

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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#4549707

Review of Proud to be a Dandelion

Review by Lisa Noe

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Hello JMariah , I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.

Structure: this item is structured using two paragraphs, both brief.

Theme: the theme is what type of flower you are, a dandelion is what you are.

Flow: I think it is fine to be a dandelion, they are always there for you and they aren't that bad to look at either.

punctuation: the punctuation seemed to be correct to me.

tone: light and happy

Title: the title , Proud to be a Dandelion", is just great and appropriate for the item.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for you and I found no mistakes with your writing.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.

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