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I enjoyed reading your entry - hope to see more of your work soon
What a creative 'take' on the prompt ~ bringing the young king full circle and, perhaps, the message, that by his failure to deal with all segments of his kingdom, lost not only his kingdom, but his own physical stature (literally as well as figuratively)
The conversational transitions are natural and easy to follow
As a story, the plot also is easy to follow, interesting, with little telling over showing. The opening is a bit omniscient, i.e., 'how were tolerance, honesty, and patience' instilled? then how did they wane?
Also, near the end, the Angel's comment, I think "...though smaller in stature..." might be more visually accurate? Also, the summation, consider the defining statement, which reads as if he played in the tree as a child, where earlier I think he played about the tree?; and either a semicolon or dash to separate the final statement "where once I was King."
Thank you once again for offering this vivid and provocative vision of what could perhaps happen to a life not lived in the moment, opportunities not taken
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