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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a creative and brilliant idea*Heart* to showcase a new member of wdc and afford the potential of additional reviews and encouragement for his or her work*Star*

As a forum, the opening invites the casual visitor to read further, check out the names of the stars and the sponsors ~ a good venue for their work as well to be read and reviewed onsite.

The parameters, 'rules' and timetables are all easy to understand. Hope to see this continue for a long time to come ^_^ Here's my gp contribution toward this worthy and altruistic venture.

Keep Writing!
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First, I think this is a creative and innovative idea for a group ~ intriguing title as well ~ dedicated to reading and writing speculative fiction ~ fantasy and science fiction.

As a forum, the opening banner entices the reader ot continue on and see more details. The purposes, goals, and requirements are clearly defined and the group only item links are easy to understand, and they work*Smile*

Thank you for the opportunity to join on a conditional basis, I look forward to reading some great writing here and hope to add mine one day soon. Here's a token gp contribution toward the group's efforts to foster quality scifi and fantasy writing here at wdc

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Review of A Pause In Time  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
The images in each stanza grow from yearning, imagining and dreams, to the reality of holding onto love at Christmastime. Whether dream or reality, it is a beautiful, heartwarming image, one that most if not all can relate to.

Reading aloud, the images are easy to follow throughout each stanza, and the rhythm is fairly even throughout.

Thank you for offering this beautiful work,
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I really like the idea of challenging poets to write in any style in response to a single word prompt, then provide a prompt for the next writer.

As a forum, the opening invites the casual observer to read further, offers a link to a previous like item (which works), which also has fun and creative poetry to offer, then showcases right in the forum the individual responsive poems to the given prompts.

Reading through the poems themselves, each affords a view of the poet's style in responding to the given prompt. Definitely a 'favorites' link to return to time and again not only for the new poems that will appear, but to read more of the work of the poets posting here.

Thank you for offering this challenging and lively venue for creative writing*Thumbsup*

Hope to see it continue for a long while,
Keep Writing!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great forum for collecting the gps to distribute to two really worthy causes ~
my gps for the gifted tickets to larryp for his wdc birthday are attached hereto.

Many thanks,
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I like the altruistic theme and personally agree that very worthy causes are benefitting from this raffle.

As a forum, the opening banner is inviting, opens the door for the visitor to read further ~ links are provided (which work) that offer more detail as to the recipients of the raffle gps, as ell as ticket holders. The rules, ticket costs, donors, timetable, are all clear and easy to follow.

I'm attaching my gps for five tickets to this review and wish good fortune and happy holidays to all the participants.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a splendid idea ~ each prompt invites the next writer to challenge the muse and post a poem to be read and enjoyed by all ~ inviting alternatively reflection, a smile, at times even a sigh or tear, before reading the next entry.

The forum itself is inviting, pleasing to the eye, and easy to follow ~ hope to see it continue for quite awhile.

Keep Writing,
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Review of Wild Card Review  
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Great idea and a fun forum ~ two pronged, opportunity to win a mini port raid and to win prizes for reviewing as part of a raid ~ challenging (20 reviews in 20 days, but the value in completing is a chance at winning valuable prizes) ~ *Thumbsup*

As a forum, appealing to the eye from the banner on forward ~ the object of the challenges is clearly defined, rules, time frame and card selection process clear; instructions for entry easy to follow.

Hope to see it continue, and here's a token gp contribution toward that end
Good luck,
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This is a delightful 'lesson' on the rules of chess; very visual, described in a delightful story poem form. I see images of medieval magic blended in some instances with Mel Brooks' 'History of the World'*Smile*

Reading aloud, the rhyming adds to the image of spellcasting by the queens as each stanza offers a creative look as to why the 'pieces' move in the way that they do. Good visual descrption of castling even a novice to the game would be able to follow*Smile* Just a couple places I stumbled over the words a bit seeking the rhythm - third line first stanza, perhaps tighten a bit something like "one queen practiced magic black, the other practiced white"; the fourth line second stanza - to keep the rhyme seems a bit forced?; fourth stanza third line - using 'prepped' a modern word kind of take me out of the medieval mood for a moment, perhaps a bit tighter with the line?

The ending makes me see the chesboard tipping (being tipped or tossed) and smashed, along with their world, by the 'checkmated' player.

Delghtful line to which I returned ~ "The queens both limited each Head's heel" ~ *Smile*

Thank you for offering this delightful story-poem chess lesson!
Keep Writing!
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Review of esteem practiced  
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The title fits the piece ~ and each line of the quote is rife with imagery, rings of honesty and passion. I can see the speaker reciting this memorized list, staring into the face of the insulter, then taking the response and sardoncally reflecting on what he should have practiced along ith the words.

Technically no errors, or spelling nits, but for one missed comma, after "myself" in the second line, before the quote. Also, a question, is the fourth line "The face that" in its first occurrence a part of the quote or his thoughts only ~ if thoughts, perhaps italicize to set off? else should probably be in quotes.

Thank you for offering this provocative and passionate work!
Keep Writing!
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Each reading of this poem gave me a slighter take on the meaning, much depth and pathos*Heart* Comparing the seasons to life and autumn to approaching old age, when "time washes away the memory these aged eyes foggily see." as he reflects on his wife looking 'forlornly' into his eyes. Is she seeing the loss of this passion, or does she still feel it and seek it in his ~ very intense. The ending, does he mean that he will love better again in eternity?

Reading aloud, occasional rhyming perhaps where the image wants to be linked and it seems that there is a point and counterpoint in each stanza - questioning and answering in his own mind in a way, ruminating on changing of the season along with change of life.*Smile*

Free verse or a story poem, either fit if a form is sought; vivid and intense imagery. I don't sense rhythm in the lines, but the stops within each stanza separate the images. Some of the transitions appear a bit uneven, but that's perhaps in keeping with the nature of the question being posed.

Thank you for offering this poignant work ~ it stays with me after I have finished reading.!
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Provocative and reflective, I ponder the meaning of what he seeks, to speak his peace to his savior; apparently he will have the chance, being freed from confinement in this world.

Reading aloud, I note but a couple of places I am slowed, the firt stanza, using "only" in two consecutive lines, consider perhaps "four white walls my sole company"??? or something simlar; also the third stanza "but 'they' won't listen" seems to transition abruptly from the first two lines as "they" is not defined? I read back to see if a mention made, and oculn't locate it.

The ending not sad, but resigned, accepting*Star*

Thank you for offering this provocative work!
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Review of No more goodbyes  
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Although at first reading I sensed sadness, reading again offers more a resigned acceptance and sense of strength in coming to terms with a tragic occurrence or betrayal.

Reading aloud, there is a linear flow to the images, assonance in couplets within the stanzas serves to add some rhythm to the imagery.

"Don't let one moment be for granted" *Star* the message that remains with me after I have finished reading.

Thank you for offering this poignant work!
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Review of Imagine  
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This piece opens very visually, and I find myself wanting to close my eyes and think, imagine{e;smile} The ubiquitous "they" raises a hand to slow me a bit "they say..."*Smile* Then picturing the speck, I think a spirit, perhaps human, perhaps not, but then the transition to Elvis in Shropshire kind of breaks the mood, perhaps it's intended to, but feels abrupt. I do like the comparison to the tortois and the hare ~ although an image ethereal, compared to the lumbering tortous^_^

So although some transitions may be a bit abrupt, the imagery is vivid and imaginative.

Thank you for offering this provocative work!
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Review of LOVE POEMS  
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I like the creative spin in your acrostic ~ as if wdc speaks to the writer who departs then wants to return, welcoming one back after any absence*Thumbsup*

Reading aloud, use of measured rhythm and rhyme makes the images flow more readily one to the other for me*Smile*

Thank you for offering this wonderfully provocative entry!
Keep Writing!
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Review of The Snoop  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed reading your poem, lyrical, the use of alliteration with 's' words evoking an image of a chlld with a missing tooth reciting the poem^_^

Reading aloud, I smiled troughout, and found the rhythm fairly even and easy on the ear.

thank you for offering this delightful poem ^_^
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Review of Fishing With Dad  
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I too have been fishing at dawn and you describe so vividly the sense of being at peace with the world as the day wakes, along with the frustration at the petty annoyances that precede the real journey*Thumbsup*

Reading again for style, I see some telling in place of showing, especially in the beginning. Suggest perhaps some rewording, reordering of some sentences to put me in he picture along the journey. i.e., something like "Dad led Jimmy by the hand through tangled brush as I followed along the narrow path, barely avoiding their flinging branches." (a rough attempt to describe the active voice) Also, later in the paragraph, avoid "I could hear" and instead, something like, "my heart beat in tune with the giant turbine engines forcing the cool river water into the hydroelectric dam"

The transitions are a bit abrupt, i.e. where he flashes back to dressing, perhaps incorporate it into his reaction to the mosquitoes? resentment of his brother's more thoroughy clad body.

The imagery and visuals engage my senses, picturesque language. And the ending is well described - I can imagine him not grabbing the pole intentionally to be able to savor the time he was actually anticipating.

One suggestion at the end, "something struck - striking love" consider another word for striking, so as not to mirror 'struck' perhaps 'stirring' ?? or something similar?

Thank you for offering this vivid journey!
Keep Writing!
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Review of As One  
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I see a beautiful rendition of the first blush of love, grabs the heart and grows with each cherished memory{e;heart}

Reading aloud, the use of rhyming in each couplet ties the images together, adding some rhythm to each stanza. In some of the couplets, I can almost sense a heartbeat*Smile*

Suggest consistency in the rhyming by perhaps using singlar dream in third stanza, i.e., "...and in every dream" to rhyme with "seem" in the next line???

"You and me as one, I'm glad I took the chance." leaves me with a smile,
Thank You^_^

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Review of My Dark Angel  
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Your story is well told in a linear style, the transitions easy to follow to the expected conclusion. I like the depth of the visual and sensory descriptions, which draw believable images of what is happening throughout.

There is some telling which could be tightened with perhaps combining some of the sentences in the opening to make the visual and sensory images, which are really great, more immediate*Star* also, reversing some of the quotes with their descriptions, i.e., "You know what I want," he whispered, his lips against my ear." ???

also check the consistency of tense ~ i.e., 'look up' (present) in the same sentence as 'began' (past) ??

Thank you for offering this sensual journey into the dark side!
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Review of Journey's End  
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The journey appears to start on dry land, then cross rivers and end in the skies ~ the ladderlike shape of the words adds to the image of climbing a trail, and keeps the eye rooted to the physical as the images become more ephemeral.

Reading aloud, the single word lines in ladder form make me want to call out those words, stress and hold them, adding rhythm and linking the visual image in the opening lines of each stanza with the internal thoughts related in the final lines. I see open eyed innocence boldly setting forth, then traveling though life's pitfall, and finally, with more studied eye, hesitating before the unknown future.

one line didn't quite fit for me, or perhaps I just didn't get it ~ the third stanza, "as I charter nature's calls" ?? don't get the intent of 'charter' there?

Thank you for offering this compelling work!
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Review of A Father's Lament  
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Thank you for sharing this vivid portrait in poetic form.

Reading aloud, the free verse doesn't require rhythm, but your use of rhyming in the second and fourth stanzas serves to more fully hold the image together, adding a sense of rhythm to the story being related, the memories being shared*Thumbsup*

absolutely beautiful line for me ~ "...rest your head on my chest for a perpetual moment, an infinite caress." *Heart*
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Review of The Evergreen  
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this is a very appealing shape poem, and the green live branches fit the verbal images you portray, standing atop the stark stem as man sparks a fire then the offspring from the earth ~ the blue, "annointed by heaven" makes me think of the tree borne atop clouds for but a moment*Smile*

Reading aloud, the images are vivid, the words not merely to keep the shape, but give the tree shape; engage all my senses where I can almost smell the pine and touch the branches flecked with pinetar*Smile*

one smal suggestion to keep the tense in the present at the end ~ consider "arise" in place of "arose" ??

Thank you for offering this wonderful treatise to life and nature, and a beautiful tree to showcase it!
Keep Writing!
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I love a good thunderstorm! and I am seeing not just music in a storm, but the music of a storm*Star* It's played like a symphony with a full orchestra of light, sound, really beautiful.

Reading aloud, the intensity builds with the images you present, then gentles as a storm that is passing. I note but a couple items, i.e., common spelling of Lightning (delete the 'e'); and the fourth stanza, final line, consider simply "Magnificent solos" as more visual, deletng "The" ???

Thank you for offering this beautiful image of a summer storm!
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Review of caught in a maze  
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I was moved by the solemnity and depth of your poem. The imagery is vivid and I can see myself bumping into corners and sharp angles as I feel my way through, realizing I'm back where I started, I think (interesting bit of ambiguity at the end)*Star*.

Reading aloud, I note several rhythmic schemes, each fairly even within a stanza,and the rhyming in the second and fourth lines of each stanza helps me pull the image therein together, before taking me deeper into the maze.

I am slowed but a bit the third stanza where the ominous opening is lightened just a bit the fourth line; you define depression as the captor immediately and I suggest you consider simply "with poisoned lips" the fourth line to maintain the depth, make me purse my lips with the feel of it??? (I deleted the second 'her')??

Thank you for offering this all too realistic depiction of depression.
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Review of REALIZATION  
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I like the pastoral urban image you paint well with your words. I can feel the comfort and peace of a day coming to its close.

I find no spelling or grammatical errors, and the voice is natural and reflective.

Keep Writing!
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