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I see a journey, at first uphill, with many obstacles, where one finds grace to continue through faith and by putting trust in that grace. Though the journey is ongoing, the traveler seeks not only self-fulfillment but the ability to share that grace with others and help others along the way. A heartwarming essay.
The detailed examples draw the reader into a story, so that the message conveyed becomes more personal and memorable Grace can touch everyday events and experiences; grace can be found if one is open to it, and shared with others.
As an essay, the transitions are occasionally uneven in tense changes, suggest using quotes or italics to separate the other voice, i.e., the second paragraph, "...Told me, "You are never alone. Never alone." or "...Told me I am never alone." I think the quotes or italics might have more impact in story form.
also a couple places that have a quick tense change, i.e., sixth paragraph, "And grace pours out. You hold me close..." (in place of poured out) where past and present collide???
Thank you for sharing this beautiful message of hope ~ at places waxing poetic (i.e., "I do not have a direction, I do not have a clue. I do not have anything Lord, except for you.") that remains with me after I have finished reading.
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