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Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I love that you are a child of God. Praise the Lord for that and I'm very pleased to meet you Princess Sherelle. I too am a Christian. In fact I just enrolled at Regents University in the M. Div. program. I am a chaplain and need the additional training. Your poem testifies about telling Satan to suck an egg. Go for it girl!

Your spelling and grammar: Looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the testimony.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I didn't like the format. It was hard on the eyes.

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Review of Up we go  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: From an existentialist point of view this poem is right on target. There is no hope and we're all doomed. However I am not an existentialist. I am a Christian and I have lots of hope and faith to pull me through the dark times.

Your spelling and grammar: Again we're left to wander
The steepest depth of madness
Hoping for absolution
And this everygrowing dreariness
Is out to take us over
And to poison us with questionable ideals
Hollering insanity"

"Everygrowing" should be "ever growing".

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that it gave a different perspective.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: The format. I prefer rhyme and meter over free verse and prose.

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Review of An angel's love ~  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This is a wonderful Shakespearean sonnet. I will be the first to say I am no authority on iambic meter so I don't know if this is meter or not. I do know what I like and I like this poem. It tells the story of a man meeting a fairy and loving her on the river bank.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the rhyme scheme and meter even if I could not judge it.

What I liked least about your article/poem was:Nothing thus the high score.

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Review of I Am Free  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This is a poem about a suicidal person. No, I have not faced your demons. I have faced similar demons. I was a punk you know. I fought at the drop of a hat, carried anger like a best friend, hated everybody and everything, used enough drugs to tranquilize a horse, and drank like a fish. I've been where you are. I know there is a way out. If you begin to feel that way again give me a shout and we'll chat. I'm usually on here or close by. I check my email several times per day.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you are able to give voice to these feelings.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: maybe the format. I write a lot of free verse myself but prefer rhyme and meter.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. I hope if you ever feel this way again you will chat with me or call 1-800-273-8255. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of The idiot  
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This is a piece about somebody's obviously critical ignorance. People often criticize what they do not understand. I have never read a six word story. Perhaps I should. I believe maybe I am guilty of criticizing what I do not understand at times. I try to be more open to new ideas now. I know it is impossible to graft a new idea onto a closed mind.

Your spelling and grammar: The very beginning of your piece says "A imp" and it should be "An imp". An is always used in place of "a" when the object of the word begins with a vowel.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you criticized the critic. All too often people let ignorance slide instead of correcting it.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: the format. It was captioned a poem but was more like a blurb or paragraph.

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Review by Chris Breva
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: You have a poem here that talks about what makes success. You seem to think that a lot of success rides on luck and future generations. I disagree. I believe we make success, though I am not doing a really good job of it at the moment. Luck is a superstition I don't believe in.

Your spelling and grammar: looked okay to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that it is an opposing point of view to my own.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: The format. I prefer rhyme and meter.

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Review of Us  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This is a poem about love and impending heartbreak. I appears you are being manipulated from the context. In fact I would go so far as to say you are wrapped around somebody's finger. Not a good place to be under any circumstances.

Your spelling and grammar: The word "dirverged" in stanza three should be "diverged" and the "I" in the last stanza is a personal pronoun and thus is capitalized.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you seem to be taking another look at yourself and realizing that you are not insignificant.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: the format. I prefer rhyme and meter usually, though I am developing an affinity for free verse.

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Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I agree one hundred percent and can relate to what you are writing about here. I have narcolepsy and often find myself in that semi-catatonic state between sleep and consciousness where dreams become realities and the senses are distorted. I found that when I began to be treated for narcolepsy many of these symptoms went away. I take 60 mg of adderal daily to combat it and stay awake, then I take ambien at night so I can go to sleep quickly. I find the combination works well for me. Your informative piece will hopefully reach and help many.

Your spelling and grammar: Looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked knowing I wasn't alone in suffering a sleep disorder and most of all that it isn't my imagination. My favorite line was "n all cases I have found (including those patients of my G.P.), this catatonic state occurs, as the person is about to drop off to sleep, or just upon awaking from sleep. Although it can begin at any age, it most often has an adolescent onset."

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. Hopefully somebody will read it who needs it. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review by Chris Breva
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This is a poem about a winner. She has been through the trials and instead of allowing them to defeat her she figured out how to take the pain and turn it into triumph. She knows that the secret is in knowing that even though it hurts in the moment it too can be made into something good. She is a conqueror.

Your spelling and grammar: No problems that I could see.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: The second stanza "She hears the voices from her past
Yet claims her choices as her own
Chooses that which yet will last
And reaps the good of sorrow sown"

It tells me she adopted the philosophy of many recovery programs and took a hard look inside.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the five stars.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. I am on a similar path of recovery and know what your character is going through. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Estee Lauder  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I like this glimpse of your mom's perfume. I especially liked that you found the perfume bottle missing after a baseball win and then your dog comes in smelling like the perfume. I don't believe in coincidences. Like you I believe your mom was watching you and let you know it. I also like that your perfume makes your daughter think of you. Chanel 5 makes me think of my sister.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the consistency you show in wearing the same perfume enough to remind somebody of you.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: the format. It was a bit long for me.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. I hope you continue to be reminded of mom. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Literacy  
Review by Chris Breva
Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I agree with you. I nearly did a minor in Literature in college as an undergraduate. In fact I have the had all the necessary hours that I could have declared it as a second minor but the college declared me a history minor and I did not dispute it with them. Like you I love literature and your character is immersing themselves in it as a reader and a writer. Good job.

Your spelling and grammar: The one thing that stuck out to me immediately was line two which says "endless words never end."

It feels more like it should say "endless words never ending."

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I like poems about writing and the look into the mind of the author.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Just the first stanza. I think it is a little obscure.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of 87 Sadnesses  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: You are absolutely correct. Sadness, indeed hardship, can be a big positive in our lives. I like to use farming metaphors to express it. Farmers know that the best places to grow crops are in the valleys. The valleys in our lives make us strong.

Your spelling and grammar: looked fine to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the insights you made here that sadness is not all bad.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Maybe the format. I prefer rhyme and meter poetry.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: One of my favorite scriptures in the Bible is "Love bears all things", 1 Corinthians 13: 7. This poem reminds me of that scripture because although you know she hurt you once and is likely yo do so again you are willing to forgive and forget. Good write! Obviously you recognize her brokenness and accept her anyway. The brokenness makes her strong.

Your spelling and grammar: Nothing that I could see.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the theme of love throughout it.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Maybe the length. I like shorter poems due to my attention span.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. I hope you all are still together and have many beautiful years. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of My Heart's Key  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: We all know the pain of heart break and this poem expresses it well. I think everybody could easily relate to this and hope that it is just a poem and that you did not experience this.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the rhyme.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I would deduct fractions for originality but it's hard to be original when writing about love.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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for entry "Moon in the Morning?" 
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: It is not really unusual to see both the sun and the moon out at the same time. What would be unusual is to see them in close proximity as the sun is so much brighter. However I have saw the sun, moon, and morning star in the sky at the same time, which was really odd. I imagine your co-workers did think you insane though.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: the way you laugh at yourself.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: the format. I seemed inconsistent.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Sin  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I like this poem about the seven deadly sins. I happen to know that all sin is deadly but the sentiment still stands. All sin comes from these ones and you've described them well.

Your spelling and grammar: Looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the one on sloth the best. I can be guilty of that easily.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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for entry "It's Time" 
Review by Chris Breva
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I always wondered if the advertisements were true about dogs having anxiety about going to the vet. I guess your story answered that question from your character's point of view. I thought it was about somebody being executed!

Your spelling and grammar: looked good.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the twist at the end.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Life Would Be  
Review by Chris Breva
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: No! The world would not be better off without you. I don't know you but you have value to me as a poet. I liked what I read here and have asked myself those same questions. Then I met Jesus and all that changed for me. My life has purpose now and meaning. I serve others which fulfills me. You can too.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I like that you have potential. You know there is more.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: That you asked some questions that made me uncomfortable for you.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review by Chris Breva
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: You could be a stand up comedian with these jokes. I read the whole things and laughed all the way. Old age certainly isn't for wimps is it? However it beats the alternative!

Your spelling and grammar: Looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the comments about the Jim and the toes the best.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

Closing remarks: Thank you for the laughs. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Come Unto Me  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: Sounds very inviting. Somebody is lucky to have somebody love them this much.

Your spelling and grammar: Looked fine to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the romance and the reassurance strewn throughout.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: I thought it was going to be a rhyming poem but the rhyme was inconsistent. I still enjoyed it from beginning to end though.

Closing remarks: Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of My Haikus!  
for entry "A Falling Leaf " 
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I am not the greatest judge of haiku, though I have written a ton of it myself. I do know your haiku has the right syllable count and theme. I like the way you take something as simple as a leaf and make a poem of it.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I love metered poetry and haiku is one of my favorites.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: nothing thus the high score.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. Keep on writing! Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Purpose  
Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I like the way you do this self-examination. Sometimes self-reflection teaches us a lot. I also like the way you compare the crooked lines in your drawing to the straight ones and realize that straight is often best.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I think I liked the self-reflection the best.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: the format. I thought a rhyming poem would work best.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. Keep up the self-reflective learning. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review of Night and Day  
Review by Chris Breva
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: I think we have all had people in our lives from whom we were as different as night and day. The skill is in learning to love them anyway and that takes God. I liked the way you weaved "different as night and day" throughout this poem.

Your spelling and grammar: looked good throughout.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the rhyme scheme. At first I thought it was familiar but I was wrong. I was thinking of pantoum form.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing this. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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Review by Chris Breva
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This is a poem about two hearts who have been through the wringer of bad relationships only yo find each other and be happily ever after. I love a fairy tale ending and this has one.

Your spelling and grammar: Looked good to me.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked that you found love at last.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: The following line did not compute with me. "What was scorn by the storm?
now resembles serenity."

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Review of The Raft  
Review by Chris Breva
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I really enjoyed reviewing your article. Please take anything I say here as my personal observations. Use what you can and lose the rest.

My overall impression of your work: This is a poem about shooting the rapids but it makes a good metaphor for a love affair. I noticed the ups and downs of an affair all through the poem. The character ends up heartbroken but that is one of the dangers of the rapids.In the very end the character realizes that even if it was rough it is still alright and seems ready to do it all again.

Your spelling and grammar: I saw no issues with these.

What I liked most about your article /poem was: I liked the personification of the raft, the metaphor to love, everything.

What I liked least about your article/poem was: Nothing thus the high score.

Closing remarks: Thank you for writing. Happy account anniversary from Anniversary Reviews Forum!

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