I am writing a review of your poem when you aren’t here.
I know you are nowhere but it feel everywhere
Sometimes I visit your port and have read the wonderful poem written by you.
I still remember the encouragement you have given me as I was here as a newbie.
Initial Impression : This poem is absolutely wonderful gratitude poem.. I like the beautiful words the poet has put together for his dad which expresses his feelings.
Theme and Creativity :This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. Your poem flowed smoothly with your crafted words. The poet recalls his memory through this poem.
The poem : A beautiful gratitude poem.
My favorite lines
“Dad was a poor man but he had much love.
When we needed help he'd ask God above.
For His love and care whenever He prayed.
More dad prayed more love came our way.”
Final Impression: : Beautifully told and written.
I know that people are never really gone. Our soul lives the earth after death. I want to know you that we have miss you every day. In our hearts you will always stay loved and remembered with the wonderful writing you leave behind.
Yes, you are a King. Thank you being the most thoughtful writer I’ve ever met. You will be in our heart and never be forgotten. May your soul be rest in peace.
I am writing a review of your poem when you aren’t here. Sometimes I visit your port and have read the wonderful poem written by you. I still remember the encouragement you have given me when I was a newbie.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
Initial Impression : This is a good gratitude poem. I like how you woven your thought into words. I like the concept.
Theme and Creativity :your poem flowed smoothly with your crafted words. I like the rhyming of this poem.
The poem : Through this poem the poet blessed his brothers who died in cancer. The poet could imagine that his Mom and dad are waiting up in heaven's blue sky. The poem expresses the feelings about a brother has.
My favorite lines
“I was the big brother you all wanted to one day be.
You all trusted and admired all there was about me.
That was then when all our dreams turned out fine.
Now we face a challenge of a new and deadly kind”
Final Impression: : A beautiful poem. I enjoyed it reading.
I know that people are never really gone. Our soul lives the earth after death. I want to know you that we have miss you every day. In our hearts you will always stay loved and remembered with the wonderful writing you leave behind.
Yes, you are a King. The golden memories of you we will treasure forever.
Thank you being the most thoughtful writer I’ve ever met. You will be in our heart and never be forgotten. May your soul rest in peace.
I want to welcome you to WDC. It's been a pleasure to review your poem"Dear Mum" on behalf of the “"The WDC Angel Army"
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you.
Initial Impression : This is a good gratitude poem. I like how you have woven your thought into words. I like the concept.
Theme and Creativity:I like the simplicity of this poem and the little rhyming.
The poem: Through this poem the author questioned what his mother did for fun, did she go to school walking or on a bike. The poem expresses the feelings about his mother. I like the picture you have painted here.
A mother loves her child unconditionally and nothing else can stand beside mothers love. Through the poem, the poet expressed his feeling. My favorite lines
“This great love that I have got
For the world around me
Whether it was you Mum or not
I miss you Mum”
Overall Impression: : I enjoyed it reading. I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. Thank you for sharing.
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Mina
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I like your thoughtful poem the beauty of day and night. Our life has both dark and bright side. Both are beautiful in different ways. The bright day associate with happiness, joy, and beauty. And the night is also beautiful because after every dark night there comes a bright day. You wrote beautifully “for there are millions of stars in the sky and a huge shining moon up high”.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I loved this poem. The descriptions are well written and very vivid and artistic. Especially the autumn’s images you have painted here. You have used good imaginary for example “invisible houri fairy” and “Playing hide 'n'seek with a brownie groom camouflaged in the heap”.
Overall Impression : A beautiful poem. I enjoyed your poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read your poem. It's been a pleasure to review your poem on behalf of the “"SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" . This review for "Sunlight Dances" .
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
First Impression :
I like the beautiful images the poet has painted here. The Poem :
I like this poem. The descriptions are well written and very vivid. That rhythm is smooth and has good thought inside every line.. I like how each line is interwoven into stanzas.
Favourite lines :
I love the second stanza, “ Our hearts were pledged to each other,
Sacred vows to one another.
Sunlight dances on light and dark,
In stately oak, we carved our mark.”
where the narrator told beautifully the power of sunlight and its effect on our lives.
I enjoyed it reading. I learned how to write a sixteen line Quatern poem. Thank you for sharing.
It's been a pleasure to review your story on behalf of Simply Positive Group.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
First impression: This is a good about a lady who spends a lot of time on the street corner. I love your story because of the concept.
The story: I always wonder how some people are so bad at the helpless poor women. I felt sorry for Alice.
You give a good description to this character for example where you wrote “Her clothes are outdated and mismatched -- pink pants too short and too tight. Her sore feet are graced by a scruffy pair of sneakers. Though Alice doesn't smell like roses and is grimy for lack of a bath, she resembles a well-loved doll, a beauty aged by the passing of time.”
I like the happy ending of this story.
Suggestion: I think you need a paragraph break to make your story more interesting.
Overall: Nice concept. I especially like the central character Alice. I like the way how you wrote all these.
I love poetry and sometimes I write it too. Poetry is a soul breathing.
I understood this was written from the view of personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. My favorite lines
"Like a small child I leap from my bed
Imagery and words are set free
As I tap on the computer keys
Ideas are beginning to take shape"
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy Writing!
Mina
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This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you. I've read a few more of your poems and I thought that the poems that you have here are really beautiful.
First Impression : I like the beautiful images the poet have painted here. I like the opening and the humorous ending.
The poem: this poem is about a tree that gave the poet's heart pleasure. The plot is extremely simple but beautiful. The poet watched a tree outside his window turned a bright pink in the early spring which has given comfort to the poet.
I like the way you have crafted your words in this poem. Your rhyming scheme is beautiful. I like the lines
“Within the growing tree some birds would sing,
A rope is hanging down to hold my swing,”
Overall Impression : A beautiful poem. I enjoyed your poem.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you. I've read a few more of your poems and I thought that the poems that you have here are really beautiful.
First Impression : I like the words of this poem. I like your thought process.
The poem: this poem is about writers block. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. I like the imaginary of this poem “The author acting like he was dead, while he sat in his den”. And the lines “Not a tale to tell.
Curiosity planted its seed in my head.”
Your rhyming scheme (a,b,a,b) makes this poem brighter.
Overall Impression : A beautiful poem. I enjoyed your poem.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you. I've read a few more of your stories and I thought that the stories that you have here are really beautiful.
First Impression : This is interesting story, beautifully written with the prompt. I like the smoothness of your writing.
The story: I especially liked the forest pictures you have painted here for example where you wrote:
” Sometimes the forest harbors little reddish foxes. I’ve seen squirrels and chipmunks there, too. Lots of birds. Birds love the woods. They flutter from tree to tree and squawk at me when I run down the path that leads in and down under the trees.”
I like the way how you wrote this story. I understand, I read just a chapter that’s why it seems incomplete to me. I think it may fit on the next chapters later on. Otherwise, it’s a beautiful story. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
Characters: I think your character Ricardo de la Noche is well developed. You give a good description to this character for example “His legs swung back and forth. Hairy legs. Legs nothing like mine. He was shirtless, too. A wonder to see”
I also like your role in this story.
Dialogues : Dialogue floated beautifully between the characters and wasn't boring at all.
Overall Impression This is interesting story. Beautifully told and written. I can’t wait to read another chapter from you. I enjoyed it reading.
General Impression:
I like this thoughtful poem. Here you beautifully painted the human nature.
The Poem: I like the words of this poem. The tone is soothing. Your rhyming scheme makes this poem brighter. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Yes, we get only one life and in life we have many things to do. We must learn from the mistakes. We the human being have responsibility towards others. We must do some good works before we die. I liked the way you wrote this poem with very clear descriptions and presentation.
Favorite Lines:
“Live to do good works, to improve society
without seeking reward, fame, or notoriety.
Display selflessness toward all in good amount.
You will live only once. Make it count!”
Closing Comments: Wonderful poem. I enjoyed it reading.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy Writing!
Mina
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I read your beautiful poem "When Autumn Comes" from the romance genre.
The Poem: I like the autumn images the poet has painted here. The poet remembered his wife and the good time they have spent together. I assume it is from experience and I I like the sweet and sad tale of this poem. The poet wrote this poem to describe loneliness after losing his wife. The poem has lovely romantic thought.
I like the way the poet expressed his feelings into words.
My Favourite:
"Rhododendrons wilt;
flowers won't bloom.
Inedible fruit
like stones wither alone
on sagging branches like mine."
Final Thoughts: A beautiful poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I saw that you have an anniversary this month and I thought to read your "Appomattox Autumn" as part of my participation with Anniversary Review event this month.
General Impression: This poem is unique. I like this thoughtful poem. Here you beautifully painted the human nature.
The Poem: The tone is soothing. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Yes, history repeats itself and there is no way out. We learn from the mistakes what was our ancestors have done. And we try to make better future. But sometimes we too did the same mistakes and we haven't always been very good at tackling them. I liked the way you wrote this poem with very clear descriptions and presentation.
Favorite Lines:
“Or doomed to travel dark roads, die is cast
Tears, grief and mourning, oh what was it for?
Time hurries by, new century at last
Condemned to repeat careless ways of the past”
Closing Comments: Wonderful poem. I enjoyed it reading.
Mina
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It’s been pleasure to review your story "Storms " of behalf of "Angel Review Forum" .
I have found that you have written some horror story here and I pick this piece for review.
First Thoughts:This is sweet poem about nature. You have painted the stormy day picture beautifully.
The poem: The poet felt the rain sitting at home. She talks about the happiness of the nature after the windy and stormy night.
The beautiful nature poems about our nature allow us to truly appreciate the world. In your poem you presented a fresh nature after storm. I appreciate the simplicity of this poem.
My favorite lines:
"A fresh, clean smell it brings
Like that of newborn things.
Oh, how the earth seems to gleam
The rainstorm seeming to make things clean."
Final Thoughts:I enjoyed reading this poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing.
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
General Impression:Both of the poem are beautiful. You have good imagination. I like the concept.
Something to Think About This two poem is beautiful inspirational poem. The tone is soothing. It flows extremely well with your crafted words. It is easy to read and understand. The poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming and it brings innovative life in words. I like how each stanza ended with the word “I'm a clown”. I think in life we all are acts like clowns. I like the way you put down your thoughts. This poems packed with messages.
Favorite lines.
“Hate the sins, not the sinner
Help your kins, be the winner.”
A Few Closing Comments: these are wonderful poem. I enjoyed reading this poem. I hope to hear from you soon.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
It's been a pleasure to review your story on behalf of Simply Positive Group “"Lilly's Great Adventure" .
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you. I've read a few more of your stories and I thought that the stories that you have here are really beautiful.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good children story, beautifully written with the song prompt. I especially liked the conversations between the characters.
THE STORY:This is a story of a little girl Lilly and a Unicorn Rainbow. You have a good imagination.
Dialogues : Dialogue floated beautifully between the characters and wasn't boring at all.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Lilly”. You crafted her so beautifully.
SUGGESTION I am not an expert but I found a few things you will need to watch when you write again
1. I found the spelling mistakes for example “approch ” “Thay ” “coverd” “heartshaped” and so on.
2. Dialogue should begin on a new line for each speaker for example you wrote "What happend next granpa?" Said Lilly, "well, The Unicorn flew through the sky, and back to it's magical kingdom" said granpa, "wow, do you really think there could be a place with a magical unicorn, granpa?"
You should write
"What happend next granpa?" Said Lilly
"well, The Unicorn flew through the sky, and back to it's magical kingdom" said granpa
"wow, do you really think there could be a place with a magical unicorn, granpa?"
You need to give some paragraph break. Otherwise, this is a wonderful story for children.
Final Impression : you are a good story teller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
I read your thoughtful piece"Freedom of Speech" . I am now reviewing your piece.
General Impression: this is good piece of write. I like the concept Freedom of speech. I like the way you displayed it with George Washington quote: “If freedom of speech is taken away, then dumb and silent we may be led like sheep to the slaughter.”
The article: Yes, freedom is speech is really important for our life. I agree with you the in recent years, some of the press tend to spin news in one direction.
Freedom of speech enhance our true self.. freedom of speech is our basic right. It allowing society to develop and progress. We can share our thoughts, idea and opinion. I like the presentation and descriptions of this piece.
Favorite part: Changes in society can only happen if freedom of speech is allowed. Free speech helped women obtain their rights, abolish slavery, and improve horrific working conditions, to name a few.
A Few Closing Comments: Overall, I thought this piece was very nice. I learned many from this piece.Thanks for the links.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I saw that you have Birthday Aniversary this month and I thought to review your poem. It's been a pleasure to review your poem “"Waiting on the Shore" on behalf of Anniversary review.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you. I've read a few more of your stories and I thought that the stories that you have here are really beautiful.
FIRST IMPRESSION : This is a good poem about pet. I like the wording and the rhyming of this poem.
The poem:. Beautifully told and written. You paints a nice picture . The poem has soothing tone and lovely thought inside every line. Your rhyming scheme (aba) is absolutely beautiful. I like how each stanza ended. I like the imaginary.
Favourite lines:
” Come, emerge from the wave.
Throw the Frisbee.
I promise to behave.”
SUGGESTION I didn’t find any mistake.
I enjoyed it reading.
I am sending you a review on behalf of Simply Positive Group"The Weathered Pages" . The review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS ITEM:I liked this poem and the way you telling this. I like the concept.
FIRST IMPRESSION : Beautifully told and written. The poem has beautiful thought inside every line. I like the repeated line “The weathered pages stained with age.” I really liked the way you put out your feelings into words.
FAVORITE LINES :I liked the last stanza
“Much to tell, yet nothing to say,
The weathered pages stained with age.
Echoes and shadows barely there.
Silent voices on faded page”
OVERALL IMPRESSION: This piece is so wonderful . I enjoyed it reading.
General Impression I especially like this poem. It packed with advices and I like the way you displayed these. The eight stanzas was my absolute favorite.
The poem I admire every word choice which is very true. And the flow was smooth and continuous, nice rhythm , and the poem creating a sad reflective atmosphere that keeps me reading it to the end.
A Few Things You Might Want to Work On
I didn’t find any mistake. Favorite lines/b}
If everyone could just take the time and give someone a smile,
they could possibly make a lonely life just a little more worthwhile.
A Few Closing Comments Overall, I thought this piece was very nice.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your "Come and Walk" . I am now reviewing your poem.
General Impression a good poem for a heartfelt friendship. I like the way you displayed it. I particularly like the concept.
The poem I like the way you put your feelings to your friend. A fiend is someone who walked with us on our journey, who never leaves us in life’s twist and turn, a friend gives us a shoulder when we fall, they makes us laugh . You are telling all in your poem. I especially like the lines
"Sometimes you may stumble and I'll give you a hand.
Sometimes I may stumble and you'll give me a hand."
Suggesstion
I think you need to shorter 8th and 9th line of your poem . I learned that a long line should leave you breathless.
"Perhaps my journey will be too hard and you won't understand and you'll walk away.
Perhaps my journey will be too hard and you will understand and decide to stay."
A little bit of editing will make your poem interesting.
A Few Closing Comments Overall, I thought this piece was very nice.
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General Impression This poem has a soothing, quiet tone. I appreciate the simplicity.
The poemThe images you have painted beautifully kept me reading your poem to the end. I like the way you put your feelings into words while walking in the evening. The beauty of evening cannot be expresses in words. Sunset really is the most beautiful time of day. Incredible images of early evening light from across the world makes us mesmerized.
A Few Things You Might Want to Work On: I didn't find any mistake
A Few Closing CommentsI enjoyed it reading. It's beautiful
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
General Impression A nice poem the tone is soothing.
THE Poem Beautifully told and written. The poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. I like how each stanza. Your rhyming scheme (a,b,a,b) is absolutely beautiful.I really liked the way you put out your feelings into words. Yes, sometimes people love someone who has no clue and are about to be separated from them. It comes softly. Some people love, never finding the courage to come up and say something but others don’t have any problems showing it. I think nothing can be achieved without passion.
Favorite lines
The future is very difficult to forecast,
Nothing constructed in today is built to last,
Maybe one day I will smile looking on the past,
Ten years is forever yet it vanishes so fast
A Few Closing Comments I like the way you crafted your words.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy Writing!
Mina
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Mina
General Impression a good poem for a heartfelt friendship. I like the way you displayed it. I particularly like the concept.
Suggesstion