Hi, I just read this. This reminds me something which I’m not done yet. Especially I like “Grow my hair down my back” “Have peace at all times.” “Learn to paint” I already learned paint but I have to sharpen it.
“Take piano lessons.” I like the symphony of piano” Be as elegant as Audrey Hepburn.”
“Watch the sunset. Watch the grass grow” Sometimes I like to lost myself in the nature with her trees, flowers, rivers and the seas.
I just read this poem of yours. Here you paints a picture and imagine that you flies upon “butterflies’ wings” and a fairy gift you something to repair this world; to repair “brokenhearted people”; to repair those whose hearts are hate-filled.
The image of the “butterfly” is an imaginary image of the good deeds of the mankind.
We live in this world the only planet to live in and we want to make this world a paradise by our own good deeds. The poet could imagine; with magical dust she ceases the war and brings everlasting peace in this world.
This simple and beautiful poem has a thoughtful message on it. Thank you for sharing with us. Your poem flow like a floating sea wave.
I am reviewing one of your essay.
You studied “ Chinese, Japanese, Korean, Spanish, Indian, American, Italian and French.” Lot of things you studied!!! I also like cooking but not like you.
Do you ever study “Bangladeshi cuisine”?? it almost similar with “ Indian cuisine”. You are right that fresh ingredients has the most nutrients and put just the right amount of seasoning can make the food more tastier.
Hi,
Firstly welcome to Writing.com
Yes, flower is the most beautiful creation of the world. All the poets always compared women to flowers. True love lies in our heart. Real love can hardly ever die. Love shouldn’t be throwing like tissue paper. In your poem you are using some good words to create the atmosphere of the poem.
I like the line
When my beauty and value had gone away, you threw me out
Suggestion: Capitalized all the first words of your poem. Cut your sentences a little shorter.
Overall Impression: A thoughtful poem. Keep writing.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful.
As I love cooking so I was curious to know the recipe. Though all the ingredients are not available in our country but I will try to make some of those.
About "Chocolate Spritzkuchen" I feel like making this cookies after reading this.
and the "Oatmeal M&M Cookies" I think making this could be easy.
Hi Whatsit, I just read this and I am reviewing you for "Anniversary Review"
I learned a lot of things from here. Especially these points caught my eye "Build the Vocabulary" "Keep up with current events" "Show some curiosity" and "Read out loud".
Yes, you are right that One can gather a lot of knowledge by reading newspaper, magazine,or journal. I believe it is beneficial to be curious and nothing can be learnt without curiously.
Thank you for sharing this important piece with us.
Hi Sam, I am reviewing you one of your nice emotional poem.
The subject of your poem kept me reading on. All of us have to pass the old phase of age. As we grow old everything changed inside us and we almost become children.
Then we need help from someone or the others.As we grow older we are worried about everything a thought always circulating in our head like "Who will take care of us? At that time if we attacked by the the diseases like "Alzheimer’s" its make our life difficult. But we don't have to worry because our children will look after one day.
"He’s always safe with them, after all, he is… their Dad." you explained it all by this line.
The flowing of your poem is like a floating sea wave. A beautiful poem.
Hi I am reviewing you for "Anniversary Review" . Childhood is the beast part of our life. "Innocent" and "Wonder" with these two words you had expressed how beautiful the childhood was.
As we grow up responsibility overtake us. We cannot be "carefree" anymore. Yes, Growing up is no longer a dream,
it's a reality.
Hi, Welcome to WDC. I just read this poem of yours. In your poem “she boils on inside” and “inside so patiently” you are telling that how patiently she hold herself inside. In our life we are deal with rejection and disappointment and this is very common. Impatient people never succeed in life and to them life is meaningless. And we should overcome impatient by self-defeating.
Hi KjkI want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.
Initial Impression: I like the “curious mind” of your poem.
Theme and Creativity: we know that curiosity kills a cat. All the great inventions in this world are indeed born out by the curiosity of the people. The teenage people have a curiously and urge to know more about things in the world around them. In your poem you described it beautifully. I like the lines
The mind goes on a journey
Into a deep, dark beyond
Hi, I just read this poem of yours. This is a beautiful poem.
In this world some people less happy then ourselves. We are not happy in our own position and places. Happiness depends upon ourselves. Some people think that only money can bring happiness. Riches struggles to find happiness running after the money. A certain point of time they are not happy to run after the money.
On the other hand a small sum of money makes the poor people happy than rich.
In your poem you use many good examples.
Hi, I just read this about depression. Yes. depression is like a monster and it has different size and shapes. It is the great obstacle in our pathway, it robs our sleep, it makes us helpless. Here you described it so well.
One who suffers, know how bad the depression is.
People cannot get rid of this depression by themselves and should get rid of the claws of the "depression monster" by taking medication.
Hi, I just read this. Yes, it is true that all fairy tale have happy ending. When I was young fairytale seems real to me. But our life is not a fairytale it has many ups and down. Life has many obstacles and stress and
it has both sorrow and happiness
So, we should admit that life is not a fairy tale.
Hi, I just read your opinion about life. Yes, life is unpredictable. God fixed our fate and one day we all leave this beautiful world this is a common truth. Our life is a river and its waves takes us where we don't know yet. In life we have face many obstacles and we have to admit this. So, we should enjoy our life whatever we want to do.
Thanks for sharing your opinion with us. Well written.
Hi, I just read this essay. The subject of this essay keeps me reading this. In this world we all depends on each other. He humans rule our earth and we have some responsibilities to protect them. In your essay you said that Many scientists think viruses aren't even truly alive at all. Is it true?
and yes we could not imagine a world without plants and animals.
Know lot about strange a world and plants. Thanks for sharing with us.
Hi, I just read this poem of yours. Human mind is very mysterious. Sometimes bright and sometimes filled with dark clouds. "my heart you stole" In this line you express your feelings so deeply. I like the word of your poem. I like the lines
Like quicksand,
My thoughts transcend,
Slowly,
Hi, I just read this poem. Our life is full of obstacles and stress. But we have to admit it. In your poem you are using many good words specially the lines where you are telling "Walk till your feet bleed and your legs can go no more". Yes, we should keep walking with hope. Hope is the light on our pathway. Only hope can keeps us alive.
Your poem is very inspiritional. Thanks for sharing with us.
Hi, I just read this poem. This poem is beautiful because you are used many good words. Our life has two different side the bright and dark. Brightness is there because of darkness. You are using "our" too many times. But I like the rhyming of your poem.
Hi, I just read this beautiful poem. After a long winter spring comes and nature looks like a canvas on the earth. The picture you painted here make me reading this. Though short but the words are wonderful. "Robins" "rabbits" "green grass" all the natural elements blended together makes a lively spring picture. I like the word of this haiku. I like the lines
rabbits feast on garden fare
while the green grass grows.
Hi,JosieStrange I just read your poem "Happiness"
Our life is full of obstacles, stress and depression. We should admit these on the way of our life.
Happiness depends upon ourselves and today’s world we are struggling to get happiness. Our mind is a mysterious palace sometimes it covered with clouds,sometimes rain and sometimes with bright sunshine brighten our mind. Here the poet express her feeling by this line "Yes I see through the rain." In this poem the poet used good word choice and rhyming pattern. I like the lines
But I see through it.
Yes I see through the rain.
Instead I let it chime.
Hi, Zeke
I just read this ans I would like to review this poem. In this world nothing is perfect but today people are struggling to get perfection. Our life is full of obstacles and if we overcome this we would win. Yes if we perfect the world make us queen. In your poem you are used some nice language, rhyme and word choice. I like this poem because of its words. I like the lines
But, if you were only perfect.
You wouldn't be the love of my life.
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON
I am reviewing you for "Anniversary Review"
In our life if nobody listen to us we should move forward alone.
If somebody not talk with us we should talk with ourselves.
If nobody comes in the stormy night then we should broke our chest ribs ease our soul, and let the light come in our hearts by ourselves.
In your poem you used various nice words that create the atmosphere of the poem that makes me reading your poem. I like this poem because of its rhyming.
I like the lines
Whenever you feel you’ve nothing else to give,
ease up on yourself, and learn to live.
My name is Mina~ and I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
Hi, I just read this poem. The description of nature "dusk-blanketed shores" and where you said "dusk-blanketed shores" "Cloud droplets" all things blended together makes a beautiful nature picture that make me read your poem from first to last.
You are using some good words, rhyming is well, keep writing.
Hi,Dr M C Gupta
I am reviewing you for "Anniversary review"
Men and women both makes the world beautiful. Each depends upon other. If man is the sky women is the floating clouds. Men and women both beads a necklace with an invisible thread.
Now a days sometimes men hurt women and give her so much pain.
Hi, I see your name in Anniversary Review page. Though I am not a good reviewer but I like to read poetry.
Season come season go it is the cycle of the nature. After winter come spring then summer. Each season has different variation and color these things follow cycle. Our planet is constantly changing from one shape to another. Sometimes human activities can change the nature. Only the planet earth we can live in. Each and every steps we thanks god for letting us live in this world.
The tone and mood of your poem is nice that kept me reading.
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