I selected to read and review this poem when I came across in the nature genre list.
I love this poem because of the main thought of the poem about our mother nature. It’s written so beautifully that makes me read your poem to the end. It describes lot of problems created by us (the human being). We the human being rules the sea, air and land. But today she is getting polluted by us.
Even though we know that there is no other planet to live.
Now comes time to have a new start and think and do to save our dear planet. You are telling all these beautifully by the lines of your poem “It’s time to make my final stand, to make you go away,
to clear the smell and clean the land, and seek a better day.”
My name is Mina~ and I'm reviewing for "The Newbies Academy Group" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
Initial Impression: I like this sweet poem and the little rhyming.
I think if you mentioned the poetry form that would be better.I enjoyed reading your poem.
You used varieties of words choice to create the mood of this poem. I learned some new words from this poem (capricious, evading). Here you beautifully described the characteristics of the cats. Yes, cats are always self-confident. I like this form (Cinquain). I will try to write one like yours.
Hello Cynaemon, I just read your story"The Magic Cat" . The way you wrote your story kept me reading. I like the smallest details of the story.
The old cat, her magic bouquets had making most of the peoples wishes comes true and change their entire life. But, they are ungrateful after they receive something good.
The cat remembered the lost days when she had danced in the moonlight. How they had whirled and twirled through the grand ballroom, and out into the summer garden, dancing lightly on the smooth lawn, their paw prints leaving no more marks than that of a soft wind.
The story floated so well. I like the happy ending.
I love the way you described the main character.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read this poem. It’s a beautiful poem. I read it a year ago but I read it again and again. When I read this poem it reminds me a pond in my village home.
The poet watched from behind a frosted window the change of the nature. She could imagine that she is a part of the nature. She expressed her feelings by using good word choice. She painted beautifully the nature of the pond to create the mood of the poem. I like the rhyming of the poem. Every stanza of this poem has the rhyme scheme of A, A, B, B, X, X. this makes the poem more beautiful.
I like the lines
Shimmering, like a diamond, beneath the moonbeams,
this whitewashed vision cloaking its unacknowledged dreams,
such as I, embracing desires of a destiny separate,
to a statue of stone, is singing a lullaby with a heart.
I am not a writing expert and I am constantly learning from this site but the only thing I would say I am touched by your poem. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing.
I read your "A Winter's Kiss"
I like this poem because each stanza reminds me the beauty of the season winter which just over. The poet painted the beauty of the frosty winter with some good words choice. She could think she is a part of nature. She enjoyed the snow falling. I like the last stanza
“This visit from the white winter frost;
I long to see and would never dismiss.
It holds a grace I cannot compare-
the brittle cold of a winter's kiss.”
A beautiful nature poem. Thank you for sharing.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read your thoughtful piece.
Yes, self-confidence is one of the most important things in our life. We cannot go forward without it even to achieve the smallest goal of the daily routine we need self-confidence and positive thinking.
I learned a lot from this writing. It’s written so well that I easily understand. I like the third paragraph “foundation of self confidence”.
Suggestion: I am not a writing expert but I would like to say you to write if using color font and also with the number and the bullet points so the readers can read it smoothly.
I really enjoyed and learned a lot from this. These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Hello Megan
I just read this poem. I always like the poem which tells a fairy tale story. I like the story of this poem because of its smoothness and the happy ending. It flowed wonderfully from beginning to end .
Here the poet telling that a sad princess left home to fulfill her wish on a scary night. The Princess was scared, but still nothing would stop her from trying to fulfill her dream, and finally she receives the special gift —she had children. I can imagine that too. The story of the poem is simple but so beautiful. I like the lines
"The fairy flew
to the castle to look at the children. The fairy was happy. She loved granting
wishes. She flew home to the forest on Pegasus. All was right with the kingdom."
Hello Just an Ordinary Boo! I just read this poem about child fear. I am now reviewing your poem on behalf of The Simply Positive Group.
You are right that most of the kids are feared about dark. Sometimes a simple object makes them afraid. In your poem you are telling all these beautifully. I like the rhyming of this poem. Every stanza of this poem has the rhyme scheme of A, B, A, B, . Rhyming not only makes your poem more interesting, but also makes the rhythm brighter. Thank you for sharing your poem. I enjoyed it reading.
I just read your piece “The Need of the Hour”.
Yes, you are right we the human beings cut the trees to meet our present requirements. But should we ever think what will happen if all trees will cut down?
We need trees in our environment for us to breathe for food and shelter. We need trees not only for ourselves but also for the ecological balance.
I like the subject of your writing.
Suggestion: I think you should need some paragraph break and need look for the punctuation mark.
A little bit editing will make your piece more interesting to read on. Keep writing.
My name is Mina~ and I'm reviewing for "Simply Positive Group" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work.
Initial Impression:: I like this sweet little nature poem about autumn.
This poem is beautiful. I especially like the wording of the poem. The poem flow wonderfully from beginning to the end.I like the last stanza
Such are the signs widely spreads in nature,
For those who understand,
The purpose of creation.
Hello Nela
I just finished reading your piece about “Life”. I like the idea and thoughts of your writing about life.
We come in this beautiful world only for a short period of time. In this period we have to do many things.Each and every moment of our life is so precious.
We know life is not so easy. It is full of fear, depression, stress and we might want to avoid these things altogether. We know we can’t fully avoid these thing but we can reduce it (at least partially!) if we look the brighter side of the life.
You are right we can make our life beautiful by laugh and smile because they could lower our stress level. So we should put a happy face.
Punctuation: put the comma after the words, like (smile,) not (smile ,) and put some paragraph break so the readers enjoy your writing.
This poem is beautiful. I like this acrostic poem. The poem is telling about the beautiful nature and of the season autumn. Each season brings different looks and beauty.Here you used some good words choice to create the mood of this poem like "Vacillates ‘tween "
I like the ending of the poem with "Red". The poem follow the rules of the acrostic poem.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
My name is Mina~and I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would write something about your work.
Initial Impression: I like the thoughtful writing piece of yours.
We the human beings are the best creation of the God. Only we have big brains. We can do the things which other species cannot. We think differently from all other creatures on earth. Only we can make moral judgments. The history's greatest inventions achieved because there was a question why?
Suggestions:I think if you put some paragraph break that will be make it more interesting to read.
I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
I just read this newsletter about the Black Cat. Color black itself is the symbol of evil, fear, mystery and death. But somewhere black is the color of personality.
Somewhere black cat associates with bad luck or the power of evil. People say that the witches turn themselves into black cat.
After reading this piece I learn a lot about the beliefs and superstitions of part of the world. Especially “Fishermen's wives like having black cats for pets because they thought they would protect their husbands”
I like the simplicity of your writing. I enjoyed the story of Maxi. It flowed wonderfully and it is very delightful. Thanks for sharing.
I just read this poem. Yes, we all the writers are like the painters. A painter paints picture with the colors and we the writer’s paints with our words. Writing brings things to life. We are continuously creating something for the readers. We capture the words and painting picture with out words.
This poem is short but rich in words. I like the lines “Big ones, medium ones,lined up on my wall.
If you look close you will see them all.”
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You wrote this piece easily, you used lot of space per paragraph and you keep it short that makes the reader read it from beginning to the end.
I learn how to review a product from Amazon.com. Thanks for your important notice that we have to post it in Writing.com because we did this review for Writing.Com.
Come back to WRITING.COM (Important: The review you are doing is on Writing.Com, not Amazon.Com)
I sometimes like to read books from Amazon but I didn’t review them all. From now on I will follow the rules while review.
Thank you for sharing your helpful writing with us.
Ms. Pat, I just read this beautiful emotional shape poem.
Your poem told the wonderful relation between mother and daughter. For a girl a mother is her whole world. A mother and daughter relation is the most powerful bond in this world and nothing comparable with this.I like the good wording of this poem.
Sometime, it may be difficult for a mother to deal with her daughter in the adolescence time. In this poem you are telling that you feel sad when your daughter growing up and away from you. You wrote everything so sweetly to express the feeling for your daughter.
A nice emotional poem. It touch’s my heart. Thanks for sharing.
I just read your poem. Now I am reviewing your poem for Anniversary Review. This poem is sad but beautiful.
Here you are telling that how much you feel your dear brother Wayne. The poem describes the emotions you feel when you lose your brother who was died in Cancer. Here the poet remembered the days when he was young; he played with homemade toys which he made with his brother Wayne. He could remember the food they ate together. God bless your brother Wayne.
I like the last stanza of the poem
God awaits you brother Wayne in heaven on high.
Mom and dad are waiting up in heaven's blue sky.
The rhyme and the flow of the poem flowing well. Thank you for sharing your beautiful poem with us.
My name is Mina~ and I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.
Initial Impression:I like the subject(music) you pick for this poem.
Music is the best medicine. It creates a dramatic effect on our mind and also our brain. It heals our pain. You know that sometimes music help patients to recover soon. Yes you are right the sound of the trumpets, drums, pianos, guitars and all the musical instruments are very soothing.
Suggestions:I think no punctuation mark need for this poem.
I enjoyed reading your poem from beginning to the end. Keep writing
Hello Ms. Winnie, I just read this poem. This poem is beautiful.
The wonderful relationship between the father and daughter make me reading this poem. A father creates the most influence in her daughter’s life and he raising his child with great care. Sometime his daughter shares her information with father rather than her mother. One day she leaves her parents though it is very painful for her parents but they should let her go.
I like the rhyming of the poem and the lines
I did not know her destiny,
What plans God had designed.
Had I foretold life’s brevity,
Could I have changed His mind
I enjoyed reading your poem from beginning to end. Thank you for sharing your awesome work with us.
Hi mahima, I just read your story about online shopping from the review request page. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
I prefer real shopping rather than online shopping. Though I know that online shopping is more convenient and it consume a lot of time. But I think people spent more money to purchase the thing on online. I have had experience of some dishonest online store. They send me the wrong and sometime broken item.
Grammar and punctuation: Add a space after period or comma. Some examples I taken from your writing “Few months later I became a pro .I knew when to shop ,” it should be ““Few months later I became a pro. I knew when to shop,”
Hello Ms. Winnie How are you ,I just read your beautiful story. I am not a writing expert.
WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS ITEM:I like the description of the nature. Especially I like this line “The smell from the surrounding woods is poignantly earthy.” And “The crickets sing their nightly serenade. The wind picks up, rustling the trees, and the empty rocker next to me sways”
FIRST IMPRESSION: A beautiful story.
SETTING: Setting is good.
CHARACTERS: the character Wilma and Thomas developed well.
DIALOG: Dialogue floated normally between the characters (Wilma and Thomas) and I could imagine the scenes where they were.
Hi, Alexi I just read this Cinquain poem about autumn . A small poem but rich in words (declining, perished). Autumn is one of my favorite seasons. At that time leaves are falling down over the ground changing their color from green to red, orange, yellow or brown before falling. Grasses getting touches of brown and the leaves are scattered by the autumn breeze.
The nature of the autumn picture you painted here makes me reading your poem.
A beautiful poem.i Learned how to write Cinquain poem. Thank you for sharing.
Hi Lynda, I just read this beautiful story and I think I will read more of your story in future. Here you are telling that How Leprechaun obliged Grady and gave him his gold by three wishes. I like the dialogue flowing between the characters.
The characters building is well (Grady and Leprechaun and other). I especially like the ending of the story where you said “Well you can fool a Leprechaun sometimes, but an Irishman, never.”
I enjoyed your awesome story from beginning to the end. I like the way of your writing. Thanks for sharing your story with us.
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