I like the delightful conversation between the two characters. It really made me laugh.
My favorite lines:
” And there it sits. Behind us, on the table, sits my
Lonely paper heart, which I gave to him. My heart, left behind to
Be swept into the garbage, abandoned by the one who held it.
My broken paper heart.”
I like the main thought of the poem.
It’s written so beautifully that makes me reading your poem to the end. Thank you for sharing this lovely little lyrics based poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read your newsletter. I learned many about Jane Austin. Jane Austin’s “Pride and Prejudice” is my favorite. From your piece I learned a video game released based on Pride and Prejudice. I think it will be fun to play this game.
I learned Jane Austen included card games in her books.
I have watched Jane Austin’s pride and prejudice several times. And I enjoyed the movie.
The way you wrote this newsletter makes me reading this to the end. It is neatly written. You have used lots of paragraphs that give the readers the info they need.
The image you used is beautiful. Thanks for the information. It’s well written.
I just read your piece "Counting my Blessings" Yes excellent reminder to us. God made this beautiful world for us. Our family is the most precious gift of the god. But sadly we often forget to count our blessings to them. We don’t pay the respect that they deserves.
Suggestion:
Punctuation marks: There should be a space before the period.
I like this thoughtful piece. I enjoyed reading.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing. It's pleasure to know someone like you.
Here you compare our life with a movie. You are telling that we are the actor. Yes, . We’re the actor living in a movie. We all have our roles.
In our life there are so many ups and down both drama and comedy. Sometimes there may be scary scenes and sometimes drama or comedy. There are so many challenges in our life.
Our director is GOD, the one who orchestrate everything.
Suggestion: I think a little bit of editing will make this piece more interesting.
Overall I like the philosophical thought of your writing. I like the way you wrote all these.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read this dialogue based piece from read and review page.
I like the delightful conversation between two characters Billy and his father. Billy fixes cereal for father's day, but he needs milk.
I want to thank you for your sweet conversation, which made me smile.
The dialogue flows wonderfully and kept me reading to the end. I learned that well-written dialogue upticks the plot and gives the reader new data about the characters.
Suggestion: you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be more interesting.
I enjoyed reading this piece. These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Hello, Neva,
I just read this thoughtful piece of yours. The way you wrote this make me reading this piece from the beginning to the end.
Yes, God is invisible. He is the creator of all the life in earth. The all-powerful and all-knowing creator.
I like the point
"Since we cannot know God directly we must know Him (God is referred in the male because each of the known and remembered Manifestations are male) through His Manifestation or Messengers."
Its well written. Thank you for sharing this piece with us.
I just read this delightful poem. The story you telling here makes me reading this poem from beginning to the end. Rooster crowing in the morning very loud, with a cock-a-doodle-do that wakes the poet at dawn.
I like the rhyming of the poem.
Favorite lines:
No time to fret, I must set him straight;
it’s disturbing to me, a wee-morning woe.
Some are too crude, it’s beyond the pale;
they’re the rude of the Earth, as far as I know.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. it followed the prompt.
I just read your poem from read and review page. I like the story of the poem. The flow of your poem nicely crafted into words. I liked the rhyme scheme you chose and the way the lines were arranged into stanzas, your descriptions and use of imagery are beautiful, I especially liked these lines:
We’d dump our haul on the neighbor’s lawn; he’d be impressed.”
“Granddad, will you take me frog hunting? We could go now.”
“Wyatt, all the toads have disappeared! Who’d have ever guessed
that the frogs would be gone. Things just aren’t the same somehow.”
A really wonderful picture was painted with your words.
I saw your name on the Anniversary review page and I chose this fairy princess poem for review.
It is an interesting story. The imagination is great. I can imagine your story too.
I liked the rhyme scheme you chose and the way the lines were arranged into stanzas, your descriptions and use of imagery are beautiful, I especially liked these words:
Life in her castle will no longer be lonely.
The sun will shine and her heart will be happy.
She will still rule the land but it will be a new journey,
The fairy Princess and her Prince will live happily ever after
and peace will be throughout the land.
A really wonderful picture was painted with your words. The images you posted here are beautiful.
I just read your small poem. Winter is one of my favorite seasons, and your poem remind the winter which has passed.
I like the simplicity of this poem and the little rhyming. I want to thank you for your sweet description of the season winter. I enjoyed reading your poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I lust read your gratitude poem about friendship"Silent Scream"
The poem is beautiful with the flow of your words. Your words remind me one of my friend who lived far away. Somehow your word captured what I am feeling for her. I like the lines
How long can you ignore your pain
and excuse your lack of care
How long your feelings locked away
'Till they're no longer there
A wonderful example of heartfelt friendship. I enjoyed reading your poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Initial Impression: I just read this acrostic poem "CONFUSED" . This poem is beautiful with the flow of your words.
Confusion is a part of our life. I often confused about life just like everyone else.
Favorite lines: “Desiring all that I dream to be reality”
OVERALL IMPRESSION: This poem has good thoughts inside every lines.. I enjoyed reading your poem. A thoughtful poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read another beautiful poem of yours. I like your poems.
Initial Impression: The poem was unique and it flowed wonderfully from beginning to end.
Theme and Creativity: This is lovely nature poem inside every line. This poem is not just about a tree, but also the feelings the poet had when he saw them.
Favorite lines : I like the lines
I fought to keep my country safe, from the bloody dogs of war,
and soon I’ll rest within God’s arms, a warrior’s life no more
I enjoyed reading your poem.
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
My name is Mina~ and I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group" . I thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.
Initial Impression: This poem is beautiful with your words. Theme and Creativity: This has lovely gratitude poem inside every line. You nicely told the sweet relationship between two friends. The bond between the friends is the only real and purest bond in the world.
Favorite lines : I like the lines
Both of us blowing in the wind
for I have not seen such beauty since
My right much more elegant than I
I knew I would soon have to say goodbye
Suggestions: you need to capitalized all the first words of each line.
I enjoyed reading your poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Initial Impression: The poem was unique and it flowed wonderfully from beginning to end.
Yes, most of us often fear of changes and we often like to walk on the same road.
But some of us courage enough to take the risk even though we know the road ahead is harsh and hard. Some of us are ready to pay the price.
Favorite lines:
A choice for easy or for tough,
a payment, only just enough.
As time advances we shall be
beholden to eternity.
OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The rhyme scheme of A, A, B, B make this poem more beautiful. I like the rhyming of this poem .
I enjoyed reading your poem. It’s beautiful.
Hello Nbnelson2, First welcome to WDC. I just read your poem Time and Space. I was a science student and I know the Einstein theory "light bends because space is wrapped"
I enjoyed reading your poem. I like the thought of this poem. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
This poem contains powerful feelings of the poet. The images of this poem make me read this poem from beginning to the end. I like the vivid imaginary of this poem. “Old winds” “Old waters” “Old leaves” all the snapshots beautifully distilled in words. I like the lines
Old winds blow the mutterings of the ancestors
to swirl and eddy where they spark new growth
or sound the trumpets of morrow time, still,
ever dancing to the heartbeat of my soul
A beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing.
The Story: We all know that a true friend is hard to find, but Cece was lucky because she found a friend like Julie. This story is unique and it flowed wonderfully.
The day before Julie died Cece dreamt that “Julie walked further and further into the mist that hung over the fields until I could barely see her”
This was a message which Cece realized later.
Final Thoughts:
The way you wrote this story makes me reading this from beginning to the end. I enjoyed reading. A beautiful story about friendship.
It’s been pleasure to review your poem on behalf of Anniversary Review. I really love this poem because the thought of this poem is wonderful. You are right, that in our life we often feel disappointment because sometimes there are things beyond our control that have nothing to do.
But disappointment often fuels the climbs to the peak of accomplishments. You wrote everything beautifully in your poem. I like the lines
And we will once again be rewarded
For our unbelievable pursuit
Of triumph and glory.
Hello,Oldwarrior
I just read your poem. A dark tale of a cruel Halloween curse
The poem is unique and flowed wonderfully from be from beginning to the end. I like the way you wrote this poem. The rhyming A, A, B, B makes this poem more interesting and faster. I like the lines
That sound you hear, on the window pane, and the howling of the wind,
shall make its way inside your home, and thus will be your end.
So listen now and listen well there’s a way to fight this curse,
but being bad and playing tricks, you only make it worse.
This poem is beautifully written with a smooth flow to your words. I enjoyed reading.
I just read your poem. I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful. The poem is beautiful not only because it brings innovative life in words but also captures the moment of life. Being with nature is really wonderful.
Here you are crafted all those by some good word choice. The foamy splash of water wipes out your pain. The sea, its air refreshed your heart. It is just like entering a world of different rhythm. She is telling this by the line “The playful squeals of laughter gently tug at me,
drawing me back to earth as inevitable as gravity”
The poet excited to be with the beauty of the nature. I really love this poem.
The poet wrote it so beautifully in her poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.
Mina
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