I read your veteran's poem "When I Came Back from Vietnam"
I found your name on the anniversary review page. I choose this item for review.
Here you beautifully painted the perfect war picture. Your poem is wonderful inside every line. I love the story of this poem and the way you wrote this. The flow of this poem floated beautifully with your crafted words.
Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful.
I like the lines
I hope someday you will see.
You made me feel like half a man,
When you coldly turned your back on me,
When I came back from Vietnam.
Your poem touched me. Thank you for sharing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I found your name on the Anniversary review page and I pick this poem for review.
Yes, Friends play an important role in our life. They encourage us when we are sad. And give us good suggestion to solve our problem. They encouraged us always to keep our chin up.
And yes, having good friends is like having treasure. Young or old, all of us need friends in our pathway.
This poem is small but rich in words. It is easy to read and understand.
I've read some of your poems and I have to say that I really like your work.
I found your name in the Anniversary review page. I am now reviewing your story.
First Impression: A clever story. I like the ending.
The story: Mr. Beale who loves his work and who congratulated himself for working through the weekend.
But one day he was attacked by the bank robbers and he fought bravely until the end.
Characters: Mr. Beale , robbers and Martha.
Dialogue: The dialogue floated beautifully between the characters.
Punctuation marks: I think you need a hyphen between the word all leering “The circle of men grew tighter like in one of those ghastly slasher movies, what with the stockings and the lopsided faces all leering down at him” and a comma after the word shoving “shoving which”
Overall I impression: I enjoyed reading. It’s well written.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I found your name on the anniversary review page. I choose this item for review.
I like the sweet narrative poem. It’s really a good poem for the children. There are important messages in last three stanzas. Especially in these lines
You can be a friend!
When someone needs one,
Teach them how to have fun,
Cheer them up when their sad,
Talk to them when their mad.
I enjoyed the story of the Rat who has a tambourine in his hand.
I thought this piece was very nice. I enjoyed it very much.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I found your name on the aniversary review page and I select this item for review. Hotel California is one of my favorite song. I like the parody of the classic song, Hotel California.
It’s a very delighted poem. I really enjoy it reading. It keeps laughing. The flow of this poem floats beautifully with your crafted words.
The way you wrote this poem keeps me reading it from beginning to the end. I especially like the title “Hotel COWlifornia” .
I am reviewing you for anniversary review.
I just read your poem about feeling. It is beautiful and reminded me of someone.
The poem flows beautifully with your crafted words. I like the little rhyme. The punctuation marks give this poem an extra flavor.
I like the lines Time seems to help put all in to perspective.
Perspective can help with the truth?
Truth! Can truth help define feelings?
Feelings; what is this feeling I have?
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read your piece. The beautiful nature picture you painted here makes me reading your poem to the end. Each season comes different looks and beauty. And yes, Spring is certainly the best season of all with smell of flowers. When warm air begins to flow, birds start singing.
I like the sweet descriptions of this poem. The tone of this poem is beautiful. I like the lines
In my back yard is a symphony
Beginnings of spring harmonize with traces of winter
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.Thank you for sharing.
I read this when I come across adventure genre list. The way you wrote this makes me reading it from beginning to the end.
How Nathan discovers his powers and saves his village from a sea monster. Before Nathan born a hunter’s mighty sword feel to earth at Winnie’s feet. She kept the heavy sword herself for her nephew. Waiting for the moment.
Sea monster attack him one day and Nathan fought fiercely with the mighty sword and killed the monster.
The conversation between the characters flows smoothly. I found it very entertaining. Thank you for sharing and allowing me reading and reviewing your work. I really enjoyed and learned a lot from this.
This is an amazing poem, and it shows a lot more about the reality. As the children grown up they leave their parents. You beautifully wrote how mothers feel for her children. In mother’s heart, each child will always be her kid..
Favorite lines: The chubby, little feet pushing along the floor, at some wee hour of the morn;
Noisily appearing at the bedroom door.
Thank you for sharing and allowing me reading and reviewing your work. I really enjoyed and learned a lot from this.
I like this thoughtful poem. It describing what happens after death. The poet could hear lying on the hospital bed that the angels above her whispering “what shall happen with her?”
She imagined that the angels will lead her to the afterlife. You wrote this poem beautifully. The tone is soothing that kept me reading to the end. I like the lines
“I give my life to God
As I did there on Earth
For living in God’s light
Can truly sum your worth”
I enjoyed your poem. A beautiful poem, great write and the way you displayed life after death.
I just read this narrative poem. Yes, fighting is not the way out. I like the wonderful example of Giant Joe’s story.. Tiny boy Joe lived with his mother and his mother called him “Giant Joe”. This made Tiny Joe very proud. Joe’s mother teaches him the value of life.
Here you focused on the positive side of life. The tone of this poem is quite. I like the little rhyming. The picture you are painting here is beautiful.
You have used punctuation marks where they are needed.
My favorite lines: “So you see kids learn from this
And be nice to everyone
If someone is being mean to you
Don't let them think they've won”
I enjoyed reading. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
This poem is absolutely beautiful. This story reminds me my pet dog. The flow of your poems floats beautifully. I like the lines
There once was a dog named Blue,
who really didn't mean to eat your shoe.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your piece "The Storybook of Life" . I like your philosophical writing. We know that story play a vital role in our life. They are our good friends. The joy of reading a good book cannot describe in a words. When we are in trouble, or alone or in a great depression books stand by us to wipe out our tears.
I love the lines
"If you are in pain, you are not alone.
If you are joyful, you are not alone.
If you are lost, you are not alone.
If you are searching for something, you are not alone."
You written beautifully that keeps me reading.
Suggestion: I think you need some paragraph break. So that will be more interesting.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your piece "Being Perfect" . Yes, nothing is perfect in this world. The truth is that life can never be what you imagine. If we want to be perfect we should earn and give a little bit of it to the poor.
The way you wrote these make me reading from beginning to the end. I especially like the lines
"On the verge of dying, people will know that the happiness they were after, in fact, never existed on earth, but they had an ounce of it left in themselves to strive unconsciously for it, and that is how life keeps going on. "
I love the good descriptions and the presentation.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read this newsletter. I like the way you wrote all these. This piece is written very neat. I learned a lot about Jane Austin’s writing from this piece. I learned that an author like Jane Austin often do the grammatical mistakes.
Beautifully written. I can understand every word. The images are interesting.
I read your poem "The Infinite Journey" You blended life, nature and people together with your crafted words. This poem shows a concern for beauty and truth and imagination. I like the images of this poem. Through this poem you painted a beautiful nature picture.
I like the lines
Water runs beneath our feet
through the scattered rocks
Friends we've made with birds and bees
made it hard to see
Beautiful poem. You wrote it very meaningfully and philosophically. I like the flow of this poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read this poem "Firefly" a year ago now I read it again. I like the simplicity of this poem. Here you are telling that the beautiful fireflies gives your heart pleasure. You feel amazed by love of nature. Yes, it is better to let them go. I like the message of this poem.
My favorite lines:
One small insect brings much joy
After a hot summer's day.
Come and watch the fireflies
Be a child for just a day.
A beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone.
I just read your poem. I like the wording of this poem. Yes, words are powerful. Words give us freedom to express ourselves. They have an incredible power to make up happy, to ease our pain. A single word can change the whole world.
I like this free verse poem. This poem is unique with the flow of your words. The way you wrote this kept me reading to the end. I like the lines
“Language that can transform reality
with such an inherent brilliance
that it transcends the confines
of belief.”
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read your poem. I like the story in this poem. I read some of your poems and I would say that the poems you wrote here are really beautiful.
God made this beautiful world for us and we the human rules over the land and the sea. But we only explore 5% of this vast sea. Science and technology going too fast that may be one day we will explore this mysterious ocean.
And this poem perfectly follow the prompt “The sea, once it casts its spell, holds on in its net of wonder forever.” This poem is beautiful not only in the language but also the image you painted here. The rhyming scheme (a,x,a,x) makes this poem more interesting. I like the lines
The ocean, the sea
she will be my home.
Her nets have been cast,
her waves I will roam.
The tone is good. The flow of your poem flows like floating sea waves.
I just read your poem. I am now reviewing your poem on behalf of simply positive group.
The beautiful spring picture you painted here makes me reading this to the end. Each season comes different looks and beauty. In spring sprouted leaves smiles on the tree. The buds opened and the colorful flowers appearing. One could not help but be happy in such a joyful company of flowers.
I like the lines
The tulip fields of colors bold,
red and pink, plum and gold
to herald spring, they now unfold.
In your poem all the things blended together makes a beautiful nature picture.
I like the rhyming scheme and the flow of this poem. I want to thank you for your sweet description.
I just read your another poem "Fate" and I like the words.
I like the subject of this poem and the little rhyming.
Long distance relationship is one of the most challenging things we ever go through. So many people love from afar, never finding the courage to drive the situation. Only fate can tied up the two hearts. Fate creates our destiny and we participate in its unfolding.
In your poem you are telling these by these lines “But fate dealt this hand, there was never a chance; now I'm going country and you like to dance.”
I like the way you wrote this poem.
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read your poem “When Fish Fly”. The beautiful nature picture you painted here makes me reading your poem from the beginning to the end. I can imagine a river where some fisherman busy to catch flying salmon fish. Where an eagle swoops down to catch the salmons fish.
I like the imaginary of this poem. I love poetry and I write too. I've enjoyed reading your poetry.
Here you have used punctuation marks where needed. I like the lines
We all know, fish don’t fly, they just swim,
But the salmon is confused, it's no lie.
Thrashing fish, churning waves upon the water
Swim upstream, just to spawn, then they die.
Thank you for sharing your awesome work with us.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Best of luck with all of your writing.
I just read your story. I liked the way you told the story with very clear descriptions and presentation.
My favorite: “the bridge was falling apart, the fire blazing from one wooden plank to the next, moving closer to Princess Kaci.”
How a mighty Knight (Knight Addison) with a magic sword saves their life from dragon.
I like the conversation between the characters. Thank you for sharing this excellent story for children.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I found your name on the anniversary review page. I am now reviewing your story.
I understood that this blog was written for “blog image contest”. I also participated in this contest. I think your story followed the prompt. The story flowed wonderfully from beginning to the end. I the characters “Byron”.
The Dialogue between the characters is clear and appropriate for the situation. Thank you for sharing.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy Writing!
Mina
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