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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I really like this poem but it does need some work.

I have a soft spot for tales and songs of the seas, especially times of old. I like what you did with that here.

Watch those "I's". Remember to capitalize!

There were several rough places and at least one place with no rhyme. Read your poetry aloud. This will help you to
catch those places and correct them. It's one of the best writer's tools!*Smile*

Keep writing!

~Nikola


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Review of No pelicans  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I think, with some work, this could be a good story. I like the idea of it but it needed more.

First, the prompt addresses the captain as "sir" but your captain is female. This doesn't work.

I was confused by the turn of the crew all being animals. Give your readers small hints during the course of the story if you wish
for this to remain a surprise at the end, otherwise make it clear from the beginning.

Perhaps tell the story in first person. This will allow your readers to feel the situation.

Keep writing!

~Nikola


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In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

*Laugh*I definitely chuckled as I read this.

The flow is great and the word choice adds to the ambiance of the poem. Guys for sure will relate while us gals will
get a good grin out of it.

Fun read!

~Nikola


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In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (4.0)
HI!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Ah, classroom pranks. I remember those days!

I like the setup and execution for this story. It caused me to recall my school days and that's been
awhile!

Always capitalize the beginning of a sentence even when in quotations.

Fun story!

~Nikola


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In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I can see how that prank went wrong! Oh my!

You could have gone crazy with this. Adding more suspense to keep your readers wondering what happens.
It reads choppy. Read it aloud to find where it doesn't sound quite right and play with the wording. It's work but
fun too!

When entering poetry in "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 , you only need to post the line count. You don't have to count the words. *Wink*

Keep writing!

~Nikola


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Review of Through The Door  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as the judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

I really like this! There is danger in the form of her father and his overbearing nature. There is suspense in his threats. In the end,
Liz made the right choice. Freedom beats money-based tyranny.

This is nicely written. I believed in your characters. I loathed the father while rooting for Liz.

The happy ending is a great lesson in making one's own choices.

~Nikola


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Review of Chasing a Dream  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as the judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

While I don't watch The Voice (it coincides with Dancing With the Stars), I do know the premise of the show. Also I'm a huge Blake Shelton fan!

I like that you took the prompt in this direction. It's fun, engaging, and keeps the reader in suspense until the end.

Comment: when writing the song lyrics, put them in italics so that that your readers will know that is what they are, especially for those not familiar with the tune. (Good choice by the way!)

Fun read!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

This story is well written and engaging from beginning to end. It's a nice blend of plot and character driven.

The dialogue, setting, story and characters are believable.

I found nothing out of kilter. Nice job! I enjoyed reading this!

~Nikola


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Review of If only she knew  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

I like this. It has a good story line, is powerful, and well done.

The dialogue is believable. You use just a touch of violence to get the point across.

There are a few misspelled words. Also, I had a hard time believing that she would so easily trust Simon. I feel that if
you drag that part out a tad longer, it would really hook your readers and have them cheering them on.

Good job!

~Nikola


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In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I like your idea and what you are trying to say here. As artists, it can be difficult to find an idea that is fresh and a voice that is
our own.

Work on this some. It doesn't always rhyme. Either keep the rhyme or make it more of a freestyle piece.
It does read roughly. A great tool in writing is to read your work aloud. This helps you to hear where the rough
spots are and what words don't quite work.

Keep writing!

~Nikola


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Review of Losing Your Voice  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Your poetry is always fun to read! This one is no different.

I can't imagine not being able to talk. (Although I can think of a few others who would be delighted.)

In the first stanza, last line: when I think of birds, the first thing that comes to mind is singing which is certainly not voiceless.
I realize that it fits with the rhyme. Just a thought.

Fun poem!

~Nikola


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Review of Wendell Ames  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Love this! The rhyme and sing-song feel add to the whimsy. What an interesting place Wendell has discovered! It would be fun to explore such a place.

The flow is nice and rhyme is wonderful.

Good work!

~Nikola


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Review of Either-Or Ames  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I love the writing style of this story! It reminds more of a bygone era.

I see the relationship between the fascination with walnuts and Wendell's thoughts on the brain. Nice correlation!

This flowed well. The story was interesting to read and kept my attention.

Good job!

~Nikola


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In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I have to admit, you had me until the end! This story is fun to read and gave me a chuckle or two.

Sheila is a great character, sharp. Geoff is a great foil for her.

This is enjoyable to read. It flows nicely and the dialogue moves the story forward well.

Nice!

~Nikola


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In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is very powerful! The decisions we make, no matter the circumstances, can indeed come back to haunt us. This story proves that in a very dramatic fashion.

Your characters and dialogue drive home the point of consequences. The story flowed well.

Nice work!

~Nikola


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Review of Jeremy's Dream  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is well written. I was engaged, as a reader, throughout.

I found parts I can relate with, personally. I had an ill mother that I helped to care for. You bring the life Jeremy had , as well as this new life, to well, life, for your readers. Your choice of words are just right.

I saw nothing out of kilter. Nice!

~Nikola


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Review of Family Feud  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I like the idea behind this story. While it was appropriate for the family to be questioned, I would have loved to see the boyfriend take the stand as well.

I know there is a word count, but more sensory words and description would have added so much.

There were a few sentences where an extra word was needed or should be deleted.

~Nikola


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Review of The Locket  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your February entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

This story is filled with the urgency of rescuing the women from a life that would be worse than death. It is tragic on all accounts.

While I like the story, I felt it does need some refining. Add to it, use descriptive words to awaken the readers' senses.

It's a good piece, it just needs some polish to make it great.

~Nikola


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Review of The Locket Key  
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your February entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

Unfortunately, I have to disqualify your entry. Rules state that the prompt sentence be bolded.

You have an interesting tale here. I like the concept. More detail would help your readers feel Adam's story better. Perhaps tell it from a first person point of view.

Some sentences read choppy and some need clarification. Just some polish and you could have a really good piece.

~Nikola


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Review of When All's Lost  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your February entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

This is well written and kept my interest throughout. Even though the man and woman remain nameless, your readers will feel a connection to them. Everyone has experienced the things the man was in some form or another.

The story flowed well and is an enjoyable read.

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your February entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

I like the fact that the locket gave Andrew a new outlook and that he began to see it in a more personal way.

Comments:
but he found himself looking at her longer and longer intervals between each time he opened and closed the locket.
This reads a little rough.

I had questions about the history behind the woman whose picture is in the locket. Were these stories flights of fancy that Andrew imagined was behind the woman's look? Were they true stories of the woman?

I would have loved to know if Andrew had the conscience to return the locket to its rightful owner.

I love the imagery that you employed. I could see the locket in all its intricate beauty. I could picture the careworn woman.

Best of luck!

~Nikola


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Review of Separate Ways  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your January entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

What a bittersweet story! I'm pulling for Marvia and Robert. I hope it works for them.

This reaction is a good thing! It means that your readers are sympathetic to your characters. We want good things for them.

The story flows well and the framing of the beginning and end are a nice touch.

Good work!

~Nikola


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Review of Me and Rooster  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your January entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

Unfortunately I have to disqualify your entry. The rules state that the prompt sentence be bolded. It's a shame because this story would most likely have placed.

I really like this story! Anything to do with horses, cowboys, and the West have a special place in my heart.

This is well written. The story flowed well and the dialogue is believable. I was rooting for our hero and Rooster.
Nothing out of kilter. Nice work!

~Nikola


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your January entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

Wow! A dark story for such a light-hearted seeming prompt. Nice!

I like the story. The characters are believable and the dialogue is great. The flow is nice as well.

I know there was a word limit but I would have liked to know what happened. Did the threat turn out to be no more than chatter or did something more catastrophic happen?
The scene with the marines and Will's compassion and the need to correct the parking situation.


He picked up his messenger bag, the one she bought him for Christmas last year. He’d laughed and asked if this was supposed to be his man purse. She shrugged, “You carry it around for a while and see how you like having to carry it and everyone else’s stuff.”

Love this!

He pulled up to the security check point and after showing his badge and greeting the attendant by name. He drove to his assigned parking spot see a car parked there.

This should be one sentence.

Nice work!


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Review of Run  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your January entry as the judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

Unfortunately, your entry is disqualified. The sentence given as the month's prompt is to stand alone.

However, I really liked this story! Your descriptive words and way of writing bring your readers in and hold their attention. The story is complete and enjoyable.

~Nikola


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