You requested a review form me and here it is.
This story absolutely broke my heart. I understand that having children can be everything to some but Delores
is missing out on something just as important, love.
I think that using first person is perfect for this. It allows your readers to feel the pain of the narrator. It is palpable in each word. I was devastated that he chose the end that he did.
I love your use of description! Not only did it bring to life the setting but also the emotion of the husband. Your word choices are very nice!
Since you requested the review, I went more in depth than I normally do for contests.
We met in Athens, Etienne is great pilot with a plane modified for sky diving and Auguste is a rather shy, sky diving instructor extraordinaire.
Etienne is *a great pilot...
I brush my teeth with minty fresh toothpaste and hope for the best.
"with minty fresh toothpaste" is probably not needed here.
I said, “We will have a two hour delay before we can fly,” repeating Etienne's message, sensing that it might be a long difficult wait.
I said" is not needed here.
"What am I, Dolores? "Tell me."
You don't need the quotation marks before "tell."
When we reach the airport we have more coffee and silent conversation.
Perhaps silence rather than "silent conversation?"
Etienne breaks a long and rather awkward silence. “If you have your cameras ready we can take off in a little bit. I retrieve my case with two Hasselblad cameras, four lenses and two motorized backs loaded with film and take it to the plane.
Place quotation marks after "little bit."
This is well written and engaging. I felt a great deal for your characters. You have a wonderful writing style!