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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I saw your item on the Review Request Page and thought I'd stop by.*Smile*

I found myself making a mental rundown of my own purse's contents while reading. I would be willing to bet most of the respondents were mom's. I don't have most of that stuff in my purse. I do, however, carry migraine meds with me. Does that count as aspirin?

I found this fun and entertaining. It flows well and you had my attention throughout. I saw no missteps anywhere.

Would love to hear what men make of this!*Wink*

~Nikola


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Review of Who Sits Best?  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

*Laugh*This is hilarious! I said when the reality craze hit that it was just a fad. Apparently a long-running fad!

This story picks up on the fact that folks will watch anything! It is well told and fun to read. I was pulling for old Minerva and kinda figured what had happened but it was enjoyable to read.

Nice!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Basically this is a good idea...IF we could get total transparency from the politicians. Which I doubt we would.*Wink*
It gets a bit out of control when talking about adding segments for actors, church leader, and first responders. Those should all be shows of their own.

This is a bit choppy in places. It loses the thread of the pitch when it spirals to other points of interest. There are words where they don't belong also. Read your work out loud. It will help you catch those things.

I like the basic idea. It would be interesting to watch!

~Nikola


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Wow. I do not like your narrator! What an awful woman! Which, of course, means you nailed it with her! You readers will automatically dislike her and wish her to fail. I know I did.

At first I wasn't sure what to make of Mr. Man. I thought she was dehumanizing him until later in the story when it's revealed to be his actual name. Either way it works because she is all about herself and no one else.

Well written. This flows great, the dialogue is nice and her POV is dead on.

Good job!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I like this story! Voice and song can be powerful and this demonstrates just that.

This is well told. The flow is nice and the feelings and horror this race suffered come across well. I was sad to see that they destroyed all others but could understand their decision.

Nicely done!

~Nikola


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Review of Depression  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is powerful and speaks to me. I suffer from depression. Not a great thing but I deal and move on as best I can. I think you summed that up here.

The flow and rhyme of this poem are wonderful! The words you chose brought the feel of depression across well.

~Nikola


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is intriguing! I wonder just what the prince did to cause strife with the Guild.

I found it interesting that the prince chose to exact these measures during a peace conference. Sly!

What became of the woman at the beginning? Did she sing the song as well? The lightning from the hall gave me cause to think the wizard survived and will exact his own revenge, perhaps with the lady by his side.

In the third paragraph, it should be "sat" rather than "sit."

I would have loved more details of how we got to this point and what took place afterwards. You could run with this!

~Nikola


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Review of The Mission  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your story as the judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

First let me apologize for taking so long to judge this contest. I had some health issues in mid-April and am finally getting on track.

Have I met Tosh before? Perhaps in a Writer's Cramp entry? He seems familiar.

I like this! You tell a story well. The action flowed nicely. I liked brave Tosh. Was sad to see his ending (or is it?).

~Nikola


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your story as the judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola has a Soul . Thanks for entering!

First, I apologize in taking so long to review and judge the contest. I had a health issue in mid-April and am finally getting back to normal.

This is a wonderful story! I love anything paranormal.

Well written, it flows nicely. I did see what was coming but I don't mind. I enjoyed the journey of getting t that point.

Nice!

~Nikola


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Review of Fate or Chance?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Nicely done! The flow is very nice. Your point come across well.

I must admit that I'm not very informed on the different styles of poetry but I understood the pattern here. Good work!

~Nikola


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Review of Gone  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is a nice melding of the excitement of graduation, the fear of an abuser, and the love this girl has for that same abuser.

The last caught me off guard. I would like to think that I'd have a feeling of relief and freedom. I do realize that many still have feelings for their abuser in spite of what is being done to them.

This is well written. There are a few bumps but nothing that can't be corrected. I like the way you ended this piece. It lets your readers ponder what happens next in Eve's life, what decisions she will make now.

Nice work!

~Nikola


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Review of Broccoli Trials  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

Love the final line! It's also nice to see a parent relent because they understand. I think most of us had this kind of battle with our own parents over some food.

This flowed nicely and was fun to read!

~Nikola


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Review of Hunter McGee  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I enjoyed this! The rhythm is fun and addictive.

The poem itself reminds me of Robert Service. He was a poet that my dad loved and would read to me as a young girl. I still have the book.*Smile*

As I said, fun! It flows well. I love your word choices. They bring it to life for your readers.

Nice!

~Nikola


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Review of John, Doe  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

I get the impression that this is the first draft of your story. It is very choppy and does need work.

There are numerous misspellings. Some spots don't make sense. It definitely needs work.

On the plus side, I like where this is going. You have some great description here and I loved the ending.

I think if you put some work into this piece, it can be a great story! Keep writing!

~Nikola


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

You have a really good story here. I like the tale you are weaving.

It does need work. There are misspelled words and partial sentences throughout. This is an easy fix.*Smile*

I also feel that there is more here to tell. I know there is a word count for this contest. Now that it has been judged, you could go wild with this! Add more details. Make your readers' senses come alive. Go into more detail about the cultures of the two main characters (even the grandmother!). Have fun with it!

These are things that all writers deal with on a daily basis.

Keep writing!

~Nikola


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Review of What The...?  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is a wonderfully written piece!

The dialogue and actions between the siblings is so natural. They are believable.

Your flow is great. You lead your readers through the tale with no hiccups.

I love the humor and love felt as I read.

I found no errors. A nice, solid story!

~Nikola


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This really touched me! I'm disabled and while mine aren't visible, I still deal with stigma.

I don't know if this autobiographical or not. I love the attitude that the narrator has. Calmly and politely dealing with those who don't know better. And I love the fact that she took the time to educate someone and open their eyes. I try to educate as well. I think it's the best tool we have for helping others see that we are just like them.

Well written and a wonderful story,

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

This is an intriguing tale. I like where you went with it and how it ended.

However, I would have liked a bit more detail. How could one personality/possession not be able to hear what the lady said to Rachel? This also needed more flow to the story. It felt disjointed.

I feel, that with some rewriting, this could be a really wonderful piece! You are onto something here.

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp"   by Sophy v.2021 . Thanks for entering!

What a creative way to get kids to eat healthier! I would think it would be fun for mom and dad too.

I like the way you give examples of the things tried. This gives your readers a sense of being in the moment.

I Can't Believe It's Not Butter should be in caps since it's a brand name.

Leave a space between paragraphs. It will make it easier on your readers.

Good!

~Nikola


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Review of Painter of Dreams  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

Wow! This is a great story! It flows well and the storyline itself is wonderful.

I felt for Maya and wondered myself what her mystery was. It was heartbreaking that she couldn't see the same beauty that the doctors and scientists could. It was also sad to me that they were studying her as a subject rather than a person. The ending, Maya's ending, was tragic as well.

Nice work!

~Nikola
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I really like this! You weave quite a tale here.

I love Sato's active imagination. Much like a writer's in how he conjures stories about the place and the people in it.
You also caught me by surprise. I wasn't expecting your story to take the twist that it did. Nice!

You slipped into first person in one sentence. Also, in a few places, you changed verb tenses.
Otherwise, a wonderful piece!

~Nikola
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Review of Rendering  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

What an enchanting, and slightly dark, story!
I would love for serendipity to take me where it wanted. How fun ife would be!

I love your description. Spring is making its presence felt here and your description of flowers and plants made me want to work outside in my own yard. I could envision the setting so well.

And the dark element of Emily's mysterious stalker was a nice touch. I was left wondering who he was and about her special talents. In this case it works. I gives your readers something to ponder over.

Nice! I enjoyed reading this!

~Nikola
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Review of Willow Wonderland  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I love your description! You bring your settings to life with the words you chose.

There are good bones for a story here. It does need some work.

You switched from first to third person. This confuses your readers. They aren't sure whose point of view the story is in.

There are spelling errors and it is choppy and unclear at times. Try reading your work aloud. This can help you catch these things.

Keep writing!

~Nikola
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

This is well told. You wove the story through Steve's troubles as he winds his way through the forest. Nice!

I didn't catch the connection between the drawings until mentioned in the story. It caught me off guard. Very nice touch!

What a sad way of being for the lady. I can't imagine how tragic it would be to draw the ends of these sad lives.

~Nikola
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Review of Dragonflies  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I love how you wound the rituals of the dragonflies into your story, relating one to the other.

My mother was much like Robert in that she had that perfect mold that she expected me to fit into. It shaped our relationship much like your main characters.

This flows nicely. The emotion behind the narrator is believable. Your word choice is wonderful.

Nice!

~Nikola
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