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Rated: E | (2.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

While the subject of your story is action, the story itself is very difficult to read.

Each sentence should begin with capitalization. Make sure there is punctuation at the end of each sentence. Watch for spelling.

This reads like a very rough first draft. With some work (all writers go through many rewrites), this could be a good piece. Keep writing!*Smile*

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

Now {i]I have the creeps!*Laugh*

There is nothing like a cryptic phone call to set one on edge.

I like how you never elaborate further on the message. This leaves your readers' imaginations open to their own terrifying interpretations.

It did read rough in a few spots. Otherwise, nice!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

I don't think one can get much farther from home than this! I can't imagine being so isolated, especially for important events.

I didn't feel emotion with this poem. Perhaps I'm picking up on a scientific mind.

I appreciate the footnote. I love learning new things!

~Nikola


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

When I read this story, I felt emotion of loss and a sense of pride for my country.

I really like this piece. It flows well while telling the story you needed to tell. I found your characters realistic and sympathetic.

One comment:
I paused wrap my pathetic scarf tighter around my neck to try to keep warmer when a hand touched my shoulder.
The first part of this sentence reads rough.

Nice work!

~Nikola


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Review of Christmas Lights  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as the judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! . Thanks for entering!

There is a lot more to this story I think! I like the way in which you set it up. Your description is good and the flow is nice.

I would have liked to know more. I have so many questions! What was her real mindset? Was Jenkins alive?
I take it more was taking place on Earth. Ground control would not have been left unmanned and I'm pretty sure the glow of China had nothing to do with Santa.

You do capture the beauty, and loneliness of being in space. ( I can only imagine not having been to space myself.)

Nice!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as the judge of "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! . Thanks for entering!

I like this story. It paints the picture of someone willing not only to take his present in his own hands but to shape his future as well. I like that the young man's goal is to help others.

Some comments:

The prompt is meant as a stand alone sentence--not something to add to.

There are several places in the story where words such as "a", "of," etc. need to be. Read your work aloud to catch these kinds of things.

I enjoyed your entry!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

What a beautiful Christmas surprise! Sometimes all we need is to know that someone cares in order to live life again.

There are some spots that are choppy. Some words are misspelled and a lot of repetition. Minor things that a rewrite can cure.

Merry Christmas!

~Nikola


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Review of Noel Surprise  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

I love a good mystery, especially one as sweet as this! I like the fact that you left the mystery for your readers to contemplate.

Your poem flowed well and the word choice played the fun up.

Merry Christmas!

~Nikola


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Review of Hells gates  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your October entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! . Thanks for entering!

This story has great potential! I like the idea of the road, the car, and the final destination.

It does need some work. It reads choppy in places. It is rushed. Slow down and tell the story. Add details. Use words that evoke your readers' senses. This will have greater impact.
I think it would have greater impact if told by someone as a legend of the area or from the point of view of the girl, or boy, walking on that road.
Give it a try!

~Nikola


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Review of Emotions  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your October entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! . Thanks for entering!

I like the idea of this story. A man who has lost the woman he has lived his life for walks away and he must find himself again. I think it's a story that so many can relate to.

Try to slow the pace a little. Let the reader feel with him. Choose words that speak of emotion.

Leave spaces between paragraphs. It makes it so much easier on your readers.

Does he actually take the boat? If so, what are the consequences? It could play a huge part in him finding himself once more.

Thanks again for entering!

~Nikola


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your October entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! . Thanks for entering!

Good for Sam! I'm glad she walked and kept going. No one deserves what she faced.

I would have loved to know his side of the story. Who was he cheating with?

This flows well. It does get wordy in places. Read your work aloud. It help you catch what doesn't quite work. (That's the best piece of advice I've ever received.)

You could run with this. Add the details of David's affair and more of how Sam grieves, and eventually, copes.

Thanks again for entering!

~Nikola


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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your October entry as judge for "I'll Give You a Sentence Contest"   by Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! . Thanks for entering!

This story has the potential to be really good. I like the setting and pace. The idea is a good one.

It does need work. It changes from past to present tense constantly. Use present for the part of the story being told now and past tense for the flashback.
Utilize pronouns. The reader will understand you are writing about Ron without the constant repetition of his name.
It also might help the suspense to slow the pace just a tad. Not too much but enough to let it build.

Just a little elbow grease.*Wink*

Thanks again for entering!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (3.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

Sounds like a great relationship! My sister and I are 4 years apart. Of course there was that separation once I hit junior high and high school but we grew closer as we got older.
I loved the bit about wrestling! My family and I used to attend the matches in Ft. Worth, Texas every Monday night!

I really think this story has good potential. It reads like a first draft. The verb tenses jump from past to present and back again. You could choose stronger words that evoke the senses to bring this to life for your readers. Just a little polish is all it needs.

Thanks again for entering!

~Nikola


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

I really enjoyed this story! Very imaginative and tragic. Greg takes the impact of the surgery better than I would have.

This is well written. The story flows nicely and the characters are believable. You showed Alan's character well. I found nothing out of kilter.

Nicely done!

Thanks again for entering!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"   by Writing.Com Support . Thanks for entering!

This is well written and gives your reader a good insight, not only into the mother's heart, but to the destiny of the daughter.

The mother's conversation with the mist is a wonderful tool in moving the story along. It weaves together well.

The description is wonderful. The conversation, although you readers technically hear only one side, is well done.

Nice work!

~Nikola


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Review of A Teenage Romance  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

This is a great story! I like how you bring the setting and the feelings of your character alive for your readers.

A few comments:

In one place, you have "that" twice where one would do.

When Julie called, the character said she mentioned those three dreaded words. It's four.

I love this. The prompt was to use that sentence itself as the last one. Here you used it as part of another. Be aware in future entries!

~Nikola


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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

I like the idea of your story. It has a great fairy tale feel to it. I was almost expecting the dragon to be the princess in disguise!

This does need work. There are places where your sentences aren't clear and misspelled words. Just some elbow grease will do the trick.*Smile*

~Nikola


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Review of Saving Tina  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

This tugs at my heartstrings! I love animals and hate to see them mistreated.

This story flows well. You definitely got across to your readers the emotion and mindset of the little girl.

I think you could really add to this and make it even more powerful. How does the rescued dog rescue the little girl in return? Not necessarily physically but emotionally as well.

Nice job!

~Nikola


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

While I appreciate talking to a person, I often find it difficult to convey my deepest feelings in the spoken word. I leave those words to my writing. I feel freer to express them in that format.

It sounds like Lillian is a wonderful friend! Those kinds of friends are precious.

I could tell you were trying to get more word count for your NaNo writing. I can appreciate that. The words that counted most, though, were those to your friend.*Smile*

~Nikola


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Review of Listen  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

Oh my! What a terrifying time for a little girl! I am so sorry. Thank goodness for Julie!

While this doesn't have a rhyme scheme, I feel the rawness is perfect for the subject. This poem is heartfelt and your words show not only the terrible events but the gratitude for an adult who would listen to a frightened child.

My heart goes out.

~Nikola


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Review of He Said, She Said  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

Opposites attract, right? I like this tale, in poetic form, relating the differing points of view. I would be more like the husband. I'm not fond of gatherings, especially large ones or those with people I don't really know.

I like how you shared his feelings on parties and how the couple had differing memories. I think I would have bopped her on the head for the constant correcting!*Laugh*

The flow is nice as well as the rhyme.

~Nikola


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Review of Thirteen Pumpkins  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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I'm belatedly reviewing your entry for "Invalid Item"   by A Guest Visitor . Thanks for entering!

This is a perfect poem for me to read today. We had a major cold front move in last night and it is cold! The last two lines sums up today in my neck of the woods.

This is a fun poem. I could picture the pumpkins lined up with different faces carved on them.

Again I apologize for the lateness of my review.

~Nikola


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Review of The Message  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi!

I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

Nothing like fear to heighten a good surprise! I guess Randy's mother knew him well because I would never had taken those kinds of chances!

In the very first paragraph, you switch from first to third person. Watch for that.

I do like the way you wove the story. Your description was nice. I especially loved
Dishes in the sink. No one broke in to wash them. Whew!

With a few touch ups here and there this could be a really great piece!

~Nikola


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Review of Compass Points  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

I love your take on what gave Einstein his love of science! It truly does take the right nudge to fuel our inner geniuses.

A fun rhyme scheme! I have no idea how you find some of these words to match up. Obviously a vocabulary greater than mine.*Wink* Those "big" words, though, fit perfectly with the character that you illustrate here.

The poem flows nicely. A delight to read.

~Nikola


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Review of The Last Phone?  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing your entry as today's judge for "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week"   by Sophy . Thanks for entering!

An interesting take on the prompt. My question is how long has civilization been this way and is there a power source to charge the phone. Trivial thoughts in the bigger picture.

Your story flowed nicely and your characters are believable. The dialogue and description are great.

Nice!

~Nikola


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