ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3398452

Review of Among the Branches

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation about mated birds. A skillfully crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You capture the essence of birds as they feast on blossoms as they hang precariously on the trees branches.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the contentment in a day of the life of these birds well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3398282

Review of Pachyderms

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about elephants that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the characteristic of the elephant.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the wonder and nature of the elephant through their peacefulness, power and sensitivity as contrasted with their mistreatment by their predator, man.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3398276

Review of Louisiana Alligator (A Limerick)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a fight that ends in stew. A fun read. Humorous. A well crafted limerick. Good form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this 'confrontation' which leads to a meal.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I would change the period at the end of line one to a comma. This will make the flow and rhythm smoother in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba. Perfect feminine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You have a good sense of humor which is expressed well in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on the gator. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3398267

Review of Lest We Forget

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about God's love for us through His creation. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of nature, the peacefulness and beauty of it as seen through the lens of your eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of daisies: 'they wave from across the road'

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line throughout poem is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line four of stanza two (we, see).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your faith beautifully in this pieces.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of God's love. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3398259

Review of The Golden Rays Of Sunrise

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the grace of God. A heartfelt invitation to come to know the Lord. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of faith through the use of aspects of nature.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklk. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. A beautiful testimony that comes from your heart. Lovely words of praise and adoration to God. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3396057

Review of Family Reunion

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about love for family who come together for reunion. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a warm picture of this reunion that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for family and friends in these special memories that are keepsakes that you hold dear.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3396049

Review of Shine On Me

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Rockin' Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and prayerful confession about personal shortcomings and hardships. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff ghii. A good mix of near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling in this prayer of supplication. Your faith in God shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3395279

Review of EnduReview

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about being encouraging and uplifting writers as you write reviews of their work. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express your need to be helpful and nurturing of these writers whom you review.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3395264

Review of REPRISAL

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about sin and grace found through Christ our Lord. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaaa bbbb cccc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as your express your thoughts and feelings about sin in your life and how you have found grace through the Savior who took the sins of world upon his shoulders. A message that we can all understand as Christians.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3394728

Review of Cemetery Hill

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the passing of your brother. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for your brother with poignance in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3394719

Review of Release

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about loss and depression. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Nice imagery and descriptives of pain felt.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the darkness of loss in this poem very well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3394716

Review of in my heart theres an air that kills....

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the heart and grudges held. Heartfelt and dark. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that is short, concise an succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the darkness of hate and sin that can result in death.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3394671

Review of Rat Race

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and children's poem that is entertaining and suspenseful. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the antics of this mouse on his daily run.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba ccddc aaeea. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in the last line of your poem (kick, stick).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling and a fun read. A very good parody of the original poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3394657

Review of Sleepytime

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write/parody on lullaby Hush a bye Baby. Heartfelt and loving. A very nice blend of free verse and rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives as you paint a picture of lulling a child to sleep.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Nice use of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme in lines two, four, six and eight.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Melodic. You express the love one has for their child beautifully as they lull them to sleep in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3394653

Review of Jack Sprat

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Form/Style:

A good write about Jack Sprat and his wife that is creative and fun. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives of Jack and his wife.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the love between this couple very well and their acceptance of each other. A lovely message. I especially like your closing verse.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of character in poem. Good use of dialogue. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3394489

Review of Shining Star

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write and tribute to your mother as you watch the beautiful night sky. Nice blend of free verse and rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of this star shining in the night sky.

Flow/Rhythm:

Rhythm is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the love you feel for your mother and the comfort it brings you in knowing that she is watching over you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Just a note, in line five should be 'breath'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3384782

Review of Autumn Requiem

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about summer's end and the sadness it brings this faery as she paints the leaves of autumn. A good take on the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted Decuain. Near perfect form.

Originality/Imagination:

An original piece. Imaginative.

Content:

Contest is good.

Flow/Rhythm/Rhyme:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good execution of iambic pentameter (there was a slight bauble in line 5). Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express her feelings of sadness beautifully in this piece.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Thank your for participating in my contest. Write on.

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#3381212

Review of Yesterday

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about yesterday's sunset. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of sunset and the weather that any reader can see in their minds eye.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice personification of darkness that falls upon its victim and fog rolling upon its prey. Vivid descriptive/comparisons. Nice simile: 'dew drops sweet as wine'.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dbeb f. Every second/fourth line in stanzas one and two are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the beauty of this time of day, a moment in time that becomes yesterday.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3369627

Review of Open Your Eyes

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about life and freeing oneself from pain and being cleansed and renewed. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of feelings as seen through the lens of nature.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice. A good mix of near rhyme and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Warm and comforting.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line one of stanza three - should be 'yourself' and in line three of stanza three - should be 'you're'.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3362088

Review of Praying For A Sign

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about this woman praying for her love who is away and whom she misses so much. Heartfelt. A good interpretation of the picture prompt. Perfect form.

Originality/Imagination:

Nicely original and prayerful.

Content:

Content is good.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Deep expression of emotion as she asks God to send her a sign about the man she loves, when he will return to her.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as is the descriptives.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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#3362016

Review of Spirit Dance

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

MY FIRST PEOPLES FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and song of love. Heartfelt. A very good interpretation of the picture prompt and perfect form.

Originality/Imagination:

Original as the wind sings of this special love in your heart you have for this special person.

Content:

Content is very good.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express how special this love is to you.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the morning.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Thank you for participating in my contest.

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#3357180

Review of Grey

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about how you feel about the world and its affects upon you. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart, you paint a vivid picture of hiding in the world alone, an empty shell in this darkness waiting for the light of hope.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter, 4/6/4/6 syllabic form throughout all stanzas. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as your express your thoughts and feelings about the 'grey' of life and how the emerging sun comes to disperse the grey restoring hope which allows you to find yourself once more.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition and questions for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3357175

Review of Poetry ?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

An excellent write about what poetry means to you. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter, iambic tetrameter. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you state what poetry means to you; how you express yourself through it and the solace it brings you, lifting your spirits. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Mum

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and tribute to your mother who has passed. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good; unique rhyme scheme. A nice mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece: (alone, own); (days, ways); (family, me); (friend, end); (be, memory).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your respect and love for your mum as well as your thankfulness to her for what she taught you and for her wisdom beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of I Fly Now

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your feelings as you perform on center stage. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture that any reader can see in their minds eye of standing in center stage looking out at the audience.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your fear about the performance along with your strength of belief in knowing that you can do it, pushing away all doubt.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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