ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3347804

Review of Follow Your Heart

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and heartfelt message about following your heart. Inspirational, uplifting and encouraging. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about love and how following your heart leads to cherishing those around you and all that is precious that we find here on earth, especially when we look for it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on

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#3347799

Review of For An Angel

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and tribute to this special woman and WDC sister in your life who passed away. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'on wings of angels, she took flight' - a lovely descriptive/comparison of going home to be with the Lord.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Heartfelt. You express your love for her beautifully in this piece and the blessing Jaye brought to you and those who knew her.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a suggestion, I would change the period to a comma in line three of your first stanza.

Overall:

Well penned and a beautifully written dedicatory piece. Write on.

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#3342879

Review of Paper World.

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your short story.

Structure
The story flows well as this father prays for his very sick child that is in intensive care. Point of view is mostly in the third person, as you reveal one character's inner thoughts, then in line three you change to the first person, then back to the third person. My one suggestion would be consistent in keeping to one point of view, especially in such a short story.

Language
You express true to life feelings of this father who worries about his child and his prayerful conversation he has with God. My one suggestion would be to revise 'turning to the sky' since this takes place in a hospital.

Character and Idea
The character of the father is believable. You express the feelings of fear, worry, helplessness and his faith in God as he walks among the relatives that stand outside the intensive care unit with him.

Overall
Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3342874

Review of Destiny... (The Move Ahead)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about spirituality, your conversation with a higher power. Introspective and heartfelt in your search for your life journey, your path of life. Well crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of 'wandering' in places that seem unsafe and dark.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express your confusion in your journey and in the same breath that you should not worry about the path of grace because all paths end in the same place.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of the scene and feeling. Nice use of dialogue. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.
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#3342869

Review of HAIKUS (about trees)

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Form/Style:

A good write about how you see trees that is short, concise and succinct. Nicely crafted Haiku. Perfect form of 17 syllables or less.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the stature and color of trees as seen through your eyes.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a note, haiku doesn't usually use punctuation, nor do they rhyme (in second haiku: each, speech).

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of trees--that they speak to each other.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling; you express the beauty you see in them.

Word Choice:

Nice word choice; good alliteration and nice assonance in your first haiku.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3337416

Review of Flowers

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Talent Pond

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Talent Pond Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the beauty seen in nature. Nice take on the picture prompt. A well crafted Cinquain. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the beauty and joy you find in nature very well in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Best wishes in the contest. Write on.
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#3337412

Review of Amour

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Talent Pond

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Talent Pond Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about love described through nature. A good take on the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted Cinquain. I like the brevity of the piece.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor of love: the heart taking flight on wings.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Best wishes in the contest. Write on.
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#3336002

Review of Magnolia Blossoms

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write about love and romance. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Dodoitsu. Perfect 7/7/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a heartwarming picture of love under a night sky.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Lovely metaphor: being a magnolia blossom, nestled in its green leaves under darkness which is like being in your loved ones arms.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the warmth of love with passion in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3335996

Review of Without You

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about how you feel about the one you love that is concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Dodoitsu. Perfect 7/7/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of how you would feel without the one you love with everyday articles, saucer without cup; lamp without lightbulb and one lonely sock.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of metaphor, without the one one love, you're a saucer without its cup, a lamp without it bulb - good descriptive/comparison about being alone and incomplete.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling about expressing how you would feel separated from the one you love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3335985

Review of "Forever Echoing"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your memories and feelings that remain with you after one you loved has passed away. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile

Nice metaphor: 'I have only to open the eyes of my heart and there you are.' Lovely descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your thoughts about the comfort of sensing that the one you lost is always near you, through hardships, disappointments and through joy and laughter--an echo that is always with you through all the moments in your life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3335980

Review of "The Life of a Bubble"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the travels of a bubble on the wind. Heartfelt and whimsical. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this bubble carried on the wind that we see through the lens of your imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of nature's winds- this bubble being buffeted about at her whim

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling; you express the peacefulness as the bubble travels from one fantasy land to another. Graceful and magical.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3335955

Review of Waiting

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a love lost that is short, concise and succinct. Well crafted free style metererd rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a note, I don't think you need the commas at the end of lines one, two and three. If you remove them it will make the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your sadness at not being loved by the one you love. Lamentful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line two, should be 'I'.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3331766

Review of DUET

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a special bond... an artistic duet that blends beautifully in togetherness. Heartfelt and romantic. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'these sips like tonic' - good descriptive/comparison of the blending of music and poetry.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababbcc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the beauty of creation in blend of poet and pianist giving birth to art.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3330216

Review of Purer than a Dove

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a budding bloom and the bloom of spring. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a picture of waning winter and awakening spring.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I would remove the period at the end of line two in the first stanza and a comma at the end of line three. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line throughout poem is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the warmth of the season, the renewal of spring that brings hope, joy and love that blooms along with it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3329208

Review of Only in Wonderland

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write based on Alice and Wonderland. Imaginative. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets that are concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of being late and the emotions it brings about in others in this wonderland.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ab cb de fe gh ig. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (hurry, fury; fun, run; drinking, thinking). Nice internal rhyme in line one (late, date) and in line ten (tea, he).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling and humor. A fun piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of action in story poem. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an entertaining piece. Write on.
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#3328923

Review of Never Alone

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about the love and character of God. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Your faith, love, trust and conviction that God will never leave you alone even when you're lonely, shines in this piece. Uplifting and encouraging. I can relate to the truth of this message.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3328895

Review of The Mold of Life

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about direction of ones life, the uniqueness of each 'mold' and the importance of trusting in yourself and in your life journey. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Thoughtful. Good advice.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling regarding ones 'mold' in life. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3328886

Review of a children's counting rhyme

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write that teaches children to count, add and subtract. Imaginative. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your imagination you make a clever game of counting that any child would enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line throughout poem is near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Lots of fun and nice humor.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of having fun learning to count. Nice use of onomatopoeia (bees, busy, buzzes). Strong alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3327917

Review of Red Roses

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about love and romance. Heartfelt and introspective. A skillfully crafted Cinquain string. Perfect 2/4/6/8/2 syllabic form in each stanza.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of love through the beauty of roses.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'roses scented, blushing like a smile at midnight' - good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express and define love romantically and with passion in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3327911

Review of Manhattan

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about Manhattan a year later, after Sept. 11th. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of our city a year after the carnage of Sept. 11th, bathed in sunlight and hope as well as sorrow and grace, growing ever stronger as we rebuild.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of sunlight - it smiles.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the love for our city that is encouraging and uplifting and the faith in knowing that those we loved and lost are safe in the arms of God.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.
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Review of Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about time and how it affects your body. Clever. A skillfully crafted Dodoitsu. Perfect 7/7/7/5 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling ad sense of humor about what time does to ones physicality.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3327897

Review of Savage Waves

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the sea, its power as it flows and is salted in God's patient grace. A skillfully crafted Tanka. Perfect 5/7/5/7/7 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the waves of the sea, unchartered and raging.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of waves - 'raging'

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Powerful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3327890

Review of Jubilation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and dedicatory piece for Stormy that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture through nature of the character of your friend that is bright uplifting.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a note, punctuation isn't usually used in haiku/senryu.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how special she is and the joy in knowing that she will return home safely.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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Review of Envy

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good story poem about the need to be loved and feelings of envy of the person who is loved by James while she wishes to be loved by him who belongs to another. A nice blend of free verse and rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of Cassie's eyes we see her fun and laughter she enjoys with James that ends when Sandy arrives and leaves with him leaving Cassie feeling pain because she knows he is not hers.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express Cassie's sense of loss in not being the special person in James' life, something that she envies and wishes was hers.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.
Nice rhyme in lines two and four (ball, tall); lines five and six (uproar, shore). Nice internal rhyme in line five (seashore, uproar) and line seven (sunshine, line).

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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Review of Scars

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of this monolgue/prose.

Form/Style:

A good dark write about the painful scars that remain in the heart, mind and body due to the failure and expectation of the person you thought loved you. Heartfelt and introspective. A well crafted monologue/prose.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Powerful, passionate and painful as you express thoughts of suicide at being seen as not good enough for her, a failure in her eyes.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice use of rhyme (reviving, surviving, depriving). Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.