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ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3354249

Review of Spring

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about springtime that is short, concise and succinct. Well crafted free verse couplets.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of spring coming into bloom and love being renewed in this season.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express the joy of spring blossoming before ones eyes and the sounds of the season that warms the heart.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3354232

Review of you fill my heart

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your prose.

Form/Style:

A good write about true friendship and love. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted prose.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'your giggles fall like a waterfall' - a good descriptive/comparison of her laughter.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the warmth you feel for this very special friend and the love the two of your share for each other.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line one, should be 'you're', line two, should be 'fills' and line three should be 'Your'.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3353557

Review of For my love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the courage it takes to truly love someone. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I would add a comma after love in line six, and after behold in line seven. This will make the flow and rhythm in these lines even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of simile: 'you are like the sun, shining above' - good descriptive/comparison on how you see this person you love.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express beautifully the courage love brings to a person in giving it and accepting it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line nine, should be 'off'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3353534

Review of Summer Sun Foe

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about summer and relaxation from your point of view. Heartfelt, introspective, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of you resting under a summer sun.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter - eight syllables per line throughout poem. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: ababbcbc. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line one (high, sky), line two (so, below), line three (to, do; I, lie) and line five (no, go).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your intention of lounging under the sun; to have a lazy carefree summer day. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3350461

Review of Nature's Voices

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about the characteristics of nature that is concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid and imaginative picture of the sights and sounds of nature.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very nice personification of the wind whispering, a brook babbling and birds holding choir rehearsal. Very good descriptive/comparisons that capture the traits in nature.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcbdefe. Lines two, four, six and eight is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you express the beauty of the sounds in nature. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of onomatopoeia (brook babbles). Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3350455

Review of Cottonwood Tree

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your favorite tree. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of this tree as shelter, what it is like during the summer, and it being your favorite place to daydream and write.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about this lovely tree and how it inspires you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3350454

Review of The Haunting

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the sounds and creatures of the night on Halloween night. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the scariness on Halloween as seen through the lens of your imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good meter - five syllables per line throughout the poem. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef ghgh. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; you express the eerieness on Halloween as the children are trick or treating.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of onomatopoeia (howls, yowls, shrieks). Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3350444

Review of In the Dark

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the going-ons on Halloween night. Imaginative. Skillfully crafted rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your imagination you paint a vivid picture of the 'spookyness' of Halloween night.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter in iambic tetrameter, eight syllables per line throughout the poem. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aa bb cc dd ee ff gg. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express all the things you do not fear in the dark. I love the twist and humor of the last couplet in your poem... just in case, knowing nothing is scary in the night, maybe its best to turn on the light.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of onomatopoeia (tap, tapping) in line seven. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3350433

Review of The After Dark Dance

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good fantasy story poem that is imaginative and magical. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this 'after dark dance' of sprites and fairies that we see through the lens of your imagination.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very nice personification of the stars that fall asleep and the moon that shuts his eyes; bullfrog singing bass and the owl being bandleader for the music at this dance. Nice simile: the sprites 'cartwheeling and tumbling like clowns.' - vivid descriptive/comparison of the action in this poem.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Nice use of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Lilting and lighthearted fun that any reader can enjoy.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the joyful fun of the dance. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an entertaining piece. Write on.

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#3350399

Review of Sweet Dreams

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about sweet dreams with the one you love as you whisper words of love to each other before you go to sleep. Heartfelt. Very nice form, three rhyming quatrains separated by two free verse couplets. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye we see you lying in bed as you converse with each other and confess your love to each other.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. The love you share shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3350081

Review of my limerick

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Form/Style:

A good write about taking a picture that is humorous. A well crafted limerick that is short, concise and succinct. Free styled rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this little ones antics.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Lighthearted and fun.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3350063

Review of Shake The Skin

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the love you feel for this special person in your life. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your feelings of love for this person and the affects of it upon your life is expressed very well in this piece. These special moments shake your foundations as your 'love songs' wear you thin.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3350057

Review of Back Back

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about love, how it is life and world changing. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling; a chestnut for all of us to think about. Thoughtful. Lovely words of wisdom.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration with nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3350051

Review of Passionesque!

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about this special love you share with the man in your life. Heartfelt, introspective and romantic. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a beautiful picture of your love, through the air you breathe, sunshine that pours through a window, the moon as it rises in the night sky.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of metaphor: 'you are in the air I breathe' - a lovely descriptive/comparison of how much he means to you.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the love you have for him, a gift given you by God who made it so, who bonded you with His loving hand.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a very good read. Write on.
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#3350045

Review of Instincts of My Inner Animal

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your 'inner animal', the characteristics of a mother wolf. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye and heart you paint a vivid picture of a mother who protects her young, respects her elders and the wisdom she learns.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as you express the traits of the wolf, the keen senses of hearing and scent as well as your faith in the Great Spirit who gave you the wolf as your guide.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3350022

Review of Universal Cycles

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the journey found in our lives. Creative form. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of life, how it is seen and felt.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about the journey of humanity very well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3350020

Review of Hungry Dreams

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your pleasant dreams, about what makes you happy. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'curtain lifting from pleasant dreams' - good descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your emotions beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3350018

Review of My Light and My Salvation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your song/lyrics.

Form/Style:

A good write about our Savior. Heartfelt and melodic. Well crafted free verse in this hymn of faith.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love of our Lord through praise and adoration. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.
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#3350015

Review of Dreams of a Future Man

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a man's life journey and purpose, how it becomes clear once his feet are set on the right path. A well crafted Senryu, short, concise and succinct. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a note, haiku/senryu doesn't usually use punctuation.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how perseverance about his purpose will allow him to reach his goals. Encouraging.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3350011

Review of Breathe

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your relationship with God that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your faith beautifully in this short form.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3348418

Review of Loathing

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good dark write about the character of hatefulness. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Very good personification of violence in the descriptive/comparison to the darkness of her character.

Rhyme:

Nice use of near rhyme.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the age old traits of violence that has been with mankind since the fall of man.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.
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#3348410

Review of Meditation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about meditation that will calm the spirit. Nicely crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You describe the exercise of how one can calm the mind and body very well in this piece.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how peacefulness comes through meditation which with practice becomes effortless.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.
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#3347818

Review of MY SISTERS, MY ANGELS

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and dedicatory piece to your WDC sisters. Heartfelt and loving. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of simile: 'their smiles are like a heavenly glow' - good descriptive/comparison.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the bond you share with these special women, true friendship and love for each other that shines.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of LIGHT THE WAY

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about lover's bliss and true love. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the act of love in this piece.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well ine this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion; delightfully sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of AN INDIAN'S DREAM

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation. Heartfelt and introspective dedicatory piece to the Native American people. A well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme in the first two lines of each stanza that is executed very well.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the plight of the Native American, how they have been abused by the white man which resulted in the destruction of their way of life from broken promises, the loss of dignity, spirit and dreams of the Indian people. I like the glimmer of hope in the last line of the poem... 'this battle to be realized', a dream to be won in your heart and life for your people.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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