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Review of Currying Flavour  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

OooOOOoooo PUNS!!! I love them! I enjoyed writing my Epulaeryu form and yours is nicely conceived.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
Your words bring to the forefront that the spices may burn but the taste is divine.

Grammar
My only regret was the punctuation.


Suggestions:
I suggest you check how the punctuation could improve how this is read. Also larger fonts are nice because it is easier to read.

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Review of Yesterday  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I feel your frustration at the way the world is working, that darkness and futility are dominating the scene.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It appears that your past haunts you, affecting how you react to the present and future. We all fumble on that forward path, the trying is what makes it worthwhile.

Grammar
Some punctuation errors noted.


Suggestions:
Use a larger font and check your punctuation for easier reading.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.


Suggestions:
I appreciate the positivity that you wrote about yourself. If you can't feel good about yourself, then it's a lost cause. You are most definitely welcome.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

VERY nice. I loved the rhyming and the word choices.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:

Every stanza is totally appropriate and true to itself.

Grammar

Good grammar, no errors noted.


Suggestions:
I suggest you keep 'co-writing' with your mother's work. It is very good.
Also, use a larger font, easier to read.

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Review of Empty Nights  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I feared and needed to read it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I feel the terror in lost trust and child molestation. This was no nightmare, this is for real, you need to get help.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This is very big, very emotional... that simple sentence sends chills down my spine.

Call ChildLine at 1-800-932-0313.


Suggestions:

I suggest you call this number: Call ChildLine at 1-800-932-0313.

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Review of I hate Mosquitoes  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This is very disturbing. Child abuse is what I call it. Don't hate the mosquito, hate the man who hurt you.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I can feel your fear of this man. Does the mother know?


Suggestions:

I suggest you use punctuation and sentence structure. This would be much more powerful.


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Review of What It's Worth  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was powerful stuff. I feel the pain and suffering in your tones without needing to directly state it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I feel the dreadful realization in that sterile room that this was real loss. That her parents refuse to acknowldge the relationship is a major matter of sorrow.

Grammar
I liked the 'capping' sentences between the verses, did you mean to leave out a capping sentence between the second and third stanzas?


Suggestions:
I liked those capping sentences, could you put one in? Also, use larger font, its easier to read.


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Review of Why Thoughts?  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I was drawn in to the pain and feelings of hopelessness and helplessness. I have been in that place myself.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I feel a bit of confusion of the phrases:

"In spite of my anguished cries
I deny ? within their closeted threats
And offer Childish lies"

You are denying what within closeted threats?

This is a very striking and powerful read, but I didn't understand that part.

Grammar
no errors noted


Suggestions:
I don't know if you left out punctuation on purpose, but using it might help the reader to get what you mean.

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Review of Subservient  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I felt an inevitability for Nature and Change. The leaves falling and changing colors promotes growth in the long run.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I enjoyed the consistant rhyming and form of your work. I particularly enjoyed these lines:

"Seasonal patchwork, colors abound,
dropped from trees, gaudily crowned."

and

"Myriad textures litter the ground.
Farewell message, most profound."

These simplly stated lines promoted a much bigger idea than simply falling leaves. They show that live continues, each in its own season and time.


Suggestions:
The work stands alone and needs no changes that I can observe.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
My impression was a list of things that women can not have and a list of things men CAN have. Clearly, being a female, I think this is outrageous, but I can't do anything to change other cultures except to live by being an example of tolerance and open-mindedness as I can be.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It reads a bit awkwardly and the rhymes seem a bit forced. I can look up the word "Khalish" but what does it mean? I liked how you provided a bit of background to your work.

Grammar


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Review of Sweeping  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was rather scary. She was calmly sweeping while the house was getting ready to burn down.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I wonder what the papers were? I wonder whose house this was, and how he would relate it to loving her? I can just see a wild-crazy smile while sweeping (or like Nero when he burned down Rome while fiddling).


Suggestions:
The only thing I had a problem with was that the font was too small and made it harder to read.

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Review of Souvenirs of Love  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
The emotional overtones are ones of pleasure and remniscing memories

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like the way you described how the flowers were memorialized, the care with which they were preserved. I also liked how you grouped the verse centered, it made them separate memories.


Suggestions:
I would suggest a larger sized font.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Murderous Christmas... right up there with grandma and all those reindeer! Some people would wish for that to happen. We need a little frivolity here!

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked the song-based poetry. Makes it kinda hippity-hoppity fun, in a gruesome sort of way!


Suggestions:
This needs no changes except maybe a larger font to read by.
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Review of Banana Bread  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Oh my goodness! She really wanted to move to a new town! Wow, and he got his vacation to boot!

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
" As they passed the window, he noticed police surrounding Lisa’s car.
Vacation!"

This was an unexpected benefit from banana bread. LOL

Grammar
I saw no errors


Suggestions:
I suggest you use a larger font for easier reading.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This WAS very sad. You see the moments and record them, but you are never IN them. I always felt that way.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
You express in words that which you feel so clearly. It is a sad realization.


Suggestions:
Your words say what you mean, the only change I would make is using a larger font to read more easily.

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Review of Fulfillment  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was most certainly a work with over-whelming erudition and description.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I've never seen so many words meaning the same thing in one place except in a thesaurus! Very amusing.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
The only suggestion I have is to have a larger font size for easier reading. It was a bit overwhelming in meaning contained in such a short work, so I deducted half a star for that.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a fun topic to read... imagine all those lamps to be inherited. It was almost inevitable the lamp with wishes would show up.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It was almost inevitable that the lamp with wishes come to be in that pile of lamps. The only thing I would like a confirmation of, wasn't Alladin the one rubbing the lamp with a genie appearing from the lamp? Or did Alladin get sucked into the lamp after his wishes were completed?

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
The work stands with no suggestions.

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Review of Itchy  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This really made me feel ITCHY! Thank God I have Benedryl! LOL

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I loved the couplets, it really added to the itchy feel for me. Short staccato scratches of text and then onto the next. LOLOL

Grammar
I saw nothing that needed changed or fixed in grammar.


Suggestions:
Normally I would suggest a larger font, but in this case, the smaller font makes me think even more of itching. Small scribbling itching words.

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Review of Neighbourhood  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This writing had a sad, yet contented feel. It is clear they are satisfied with their life together but keep the memories at the core of their hearts.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
A young couple has a home isolated in the country, but "almost imperceptibly, the district became urbanized."
This was a very good line that stated the whole of the story. I enjoyed the visualizations very much; The old tire in the tree, new schools springing up.


Suggestions:
I see nothing to change or alter.

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very disturbing bit of writing. The road to Hell is paved with Good Intentions.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It is clear that this gentleman realizes (toward the end of the document) that he may be in more trouble and deeper than he realized. "I'm so tired of being overlooked."


Suggestions:
This was written very well, and chillingly possible. I see nothing to change but perhaps the font could be larger and easier to read.


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Review of Garbage truck  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
It's funny, I was ready to be indignant and angry with you at that mean driver. And then the tone of the short fiction took a drastic turn. A surprise indeed.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"The Law of the Garbage Truck" is truly a good way to view life. This hit me just right and I will have to try to remember this.

Grammar
I saw no errors.


Suggestions:
The content is perfect, I would suggest that the font could be larger for easier reading.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I read contentment in every line.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The words you choose are so beautiful, I guess beauty really IS in the eye of the beholder.


Suggestions:
I have no suggestions beyond using a larger font for easier reading.

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Review of The Plan  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
The voice of truth from a kid... very funny.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
That large block of paragraph aptly demonstrates how dad gets away with NOT doing tasks around the house.


Suggestions:
No suggestions are needed for the content. You might want to use a larger font size to make it easier to read.

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Review of Awakening  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a clear complaint.. 'I don't want to be here I would rather be back in THERE!'

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
One of the more interesting ways of portraying giving birth to be sure. 'A kaleidoscopic array of feeling "Put me back!"'


Suggestions:
A larger font would make this easier to read. I see no other changes that need to be made.

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Review of The Work Out  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very funny poem/song. I could pretty much sing my way through your verses to the tune of "The Sounds of Silence". And that single workout was so dramatic and of course, came to nothing in one day.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I really enjoyed this one. The whole concept of the poem based on a tune was just great.


Suggestions:
I see no need for changes.

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