*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/staine/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/12
Review Requests: OFF
1,129 Public Reviews Given
1,565 Total Reviews Given
Public Reviews
Previous ... 8 9 10 11 -12- 13 14 15 16 17 ... Next
276
276
Review of Letters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Smile* Hello, Eliot

Wow!! *Cry* This is amazing!!!!!! I am in tears, I can honestly say I have never read such a deeply emotional romantic poem, especially one so so well sad.

You can feel the pained love so much in this poem, the lost, the feelings, and yet a glimpse of not really hope, acceptance that it was worth it.

I love this!! *Bigsmile* Gee if I ever read a good romance poem, I know know where to go!!! Amazing!!!!!! *Shock*




StaiNed-House Targaryen
*Cry**Smile**Delight*






** Image ID #1418985 Unavailable **
277
277
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello, COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME

This is truely delightfully written poem, about how your seeing you life each day, reflectiing and musing to the future as you live on your home on a hill. Very cute! *Smile*

Some suggestions, in stanza five, you should capatilize the first word. Those nasty typos.. *Smile* and in the last stanza is "I'vs" a word intended?

Thanks for sharing, and write On!

StaiNed-House Targaryen


** Image ID #1418985 Unavailable **
278
278
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hugs Sherri. *Worry*

Me again, This is well written too Sher. Speakimg of all the influences of one's muse, things the influence perceptions, and gosh soo much.

Suggestion though, you seem to have partical puncutation, last two lines end in semi comma's and periods and no where else is there any. Perhaps adding it throughout where needed or omitting them all together.

*Smile*

** Image ID #1412516 Unavailable **
279
279
Rated: E | (5.0)
Prayers Sherri! sis.. *Worry*

So to keep my thoughts together, woot I decided to read your poetry Sher, and never am I disappointed. *Smile*

This is touching in it all too real and often reality. Brings images of a mother's worst fear, to say those words, "Give Her Back to me". This scares me more than any of my own poetry Sher, more than any boogeyman under my bed, and demon outside my door.

I have no suggestions to improve or change this Sher, truely you are a wonderful poet. *Heart*



** Image ID #1412516 Unavailable **
280
280
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Dr M C Gupta

Thanks for entering "`Endless Night Dark Poetry Contest" , with a well writtem entry. I am glad one of my prompts inspired your muse, and spewed forth such a interesting poem, for I never really though dungeon, *Smirk* so you really took the prompt and used it well.

Favorite Image:

The scars of my heart are deeper
Than those of the body.
But deeper still are those of the
Soul that is now Devil's.


Bravo, giving up, embracing all the darkness can give in glory and fullfillment, Hehe! ((I'm joking)) I like it. *Smile*

I have no suggestions to change this, and see no errors. Thanks agian for entering and good luck.

StaiNed-House Targaryen




** Image ID #1318840 Unavailable **
281
281
Review of First Attempt  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hiya again, Misty. *Smile*

I am back hehe!

Ok I can show ya what this would appear as with puncutation, and understand how you feel that adding comma's and such take from the poem, but really they are needed in most cases, not all, to really emphaize and add mechanical quality to a static, in this case your poem.

Your wrote:

Your first stanza,

finding new avenues of expression
she smiles like a child with a gift
opening all of its pages
delighting in what's found within.

Ok you ended it will a period and one good thing to remember is all or nothing, Hehe! You can have some puncutation, that looks messy.

Here is how I would edit it, and by not means am I a expert in puncutation either. okies. *Smile*

Finding new avenues of expression(s),
she smiles like a child with a gift.
Opening all of its pages
delighting in what's found within.

Again a title too, I know this is frustrating too, for myself titles are the hardest, and a neat trick that works for me with descriptions, is a great line in the poem.

Thanks for sharing, and I hope I was helpful. Keep them poems coming, you are a talented poet. *Smile*

StaiNed-House Targaryen




** Image ID #1318840 Unavailable **
282
282
Review of First Attempt  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hiya! Misty Breeze

This is a great poem, and I find it hard to believe this is a first attempt. It gives some great imagery, and was very easy to understand. But dear I do have some suggestions in prensation.

You really don;t give this poem justice, as it sits now. A title and good item description means all or nothing in your peom getting noticed and reviewed.

I suggest giving it a title, and a good description to draw readers to it.
Also you have no puncutation, which takes from feeling and depth within a poem, and in most cases it is needed it good writings.

I will return, if ya want me too, just hollar!

Thanks for sharing, a delightful poem.



*Smirk*StaiNed-House Targaryen



** Image ID #1244741 Unavailable **
283
283
Rated: E | (5.0)
Okies, I'm here again Mari, your favorite person here! Hehe!!!! *Laugh*

Poetry! Gosh talent is just oozing out of your Mari ~ and I am in love with your talents.

All the poems in this folder are well written, and truely expressive of your heart, and muse. We are all so happy to have another wonderful poet amist us here on writing.com, you enlighten me to so many new views and deeply a way to see things I never really saw before.



Still my favorite, "Blind Love"  Rocked me Mari!!



Keep this folder growing, you have a fan that will always be creeping in your port! *Heart*



Your friend, StaiNed-House Targaryen



** Image ID #1268015 Unavailable **
284
284
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hugs Mari!!

This is cute!! I really could imagine the shoe, and relate to it as a breathing being. Goos luck sweetie, and thank you again for the sweet review.

Ann *Heart*
285
285
Review of Amen  
Rated: E | (4.5)
How strong you are to have such a self rewarding faith. I would relate to this poem, not in all it's glory for God, but my muse's sight as I read it.

Oh Lord, how fortunate I have been,
for You have blessed me deep within.

Hehe, I could so twist this! Shame on me I know.

Fifth line Tracey, "You" doesn't need to be captalized I think.

Thanks for sharing, my sister. *Heart*

Hugs!
286
286
Review of Goodnight  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hugs! Tracey!

This is just like a lullabye, a dark spooky one that gee no child would want to hear, for I know many night as a child I laid under the covers, knowing they waited, my fears.

The title is just perfect, Hehe Goodnight! I can not imagime it being a "sweet dreams". *Laugh*

Thanks for sharing intuey You really write poetry that touches me.

*Smile*




** Image ID #1244741 Unavailable **
287
287
Review of NIGHT SHADOWS  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hiya, persivepoetsam

*Laugh* I was surpirised. Delightful. What a mislead perception. you wrote a really neat poem "NIGHT SHADOWS" 


Suggestion.

Poetry and this is a good poem, usually is broken into stanzas, four line or what you deem appropiate. This in it's one long verse, though wonderfully entertaining all wrapped in one big expression.

I really suggest breaking this into stanzas, presentation can mean alot too. This is what the first of your poem would loom like with my suggestion.

Dark death on silent wings
Comes in the pitch black night
A shadow upon the wall
About to take free flight

You think you hear a breeze
Amidst a fluttering sound
As a mist floats by you
Your heart begins to pound

Thanks for sharing and Do Write on!! Delightful! *Smile*

StaiNed-House Targaryen


** Image ID #1372928 Unavailable **
288
288
Review of Pouring Crimson  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Caramir

First gee let me say, Very catchy title. You really capture the readers curiosity.

Short with very poetic in it's harsh imagery. *Smirk*

The edge~` Gee I was a moment lost with what you were trying to express, for "the" seems off a little to me, but as I read through you make up for it. This could be considered prose as poem even free style, usuallly have stanzas, and dialogue is spaced out.

A suggestion in line six.

"“Give yourself to me, as others have before you.”

Well done, and brillant ending!! *Smirk*

Leaving me in agony’s embrace. WOW!

StaiNed-House Targaryen







** Image ID #1373137 Unavailable **
289
289
Review of I HATE YOU  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON *Smile*

Gee I really hope this is indeed fictional for you have really captured the essence of hate for another person all the while keeping it tasteful and expressive of your own poetry style.

I do have one suggestion, in your last line. You wrote:

for taking all I once held dear. I suggest perhaps "For taking everything I once held dear." As a whole "all" for me just doesn't give this poem justice within all the clear imagery you give within the rest of the poem.

Bravo Sher! I liked this poem.


*Smile*StaiNed-House Targaryen



** Image ID #1372928 Unavailable **
290
290
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Ello, illusionist

StaiNed-House Targaryen here, returning a review for your kind review of "~An immortal heart" .

What a neat vampire poem, "The Vampire's Mirror"  for a vampire cannot see a mirror's reflection. You made this believeable in all it's dark glory, and alot a found the first stanza the flow a little off, that is only my own though for free form poetry does not guide itself but the standards of other poerty. It is truely one on it's own. My personal favorite.

*Laugh* As I once said in one of my own poems. "Come drown in the shards of my mirror's lifeless ocean."

I liked this alot and the rhymne was a nice added quality to your poem.

A fav for me, this really stuck out to me and my own muse.

I once lived my life free -
And though I fill you with terror,
Just look inside your mirror
To see what I used to be.

Kudos! and Write ON!

StaiNed-House Targaryen







** Image ID #1318840 Unavailable **
291
291
Review of Daffodil Slumber  
Rated: E | (5.0)

 Daffodil Slumber  [E]
Waiting for Spring.
by Legerdemain
WOW!!!!!


Hiya again, Legerdemain

Brillant~!! I am loving your poems and geeze missed out the past year here on WDC.

Such calmness, poetic beauty and the subject, Daffodils, so heartwarming described.

Bringing forth above the earth
beauty like no other.

The flow and rhyme are great, just roll off the tongue quality, and the feelings you gave the flowers are truely felt and touching. Now that's good poetry, feel what you read!!

Thanks for sharing, I am a fan of yours now!! *Smile*

StaiNed-House Targaryen



Angel Divider 1
292
292
Review of Prom Queen  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Hello, Legerdemain

"Prom Queen"  Secret indeed. Have a peek..

This is good Kim. You really have a talent for adding loads of clear brillant imagery into your poetry, and again I am truely delighted with the quality of this poem.

I never really glimpsed her secret until "bingo" in was in my face and that's always a nice touch, lure the reader in and slap! *Smirk*

I am enjoyed this folder and look forward to reading more.

Take care and Write on!!

StaiNed-House Targaryen





         Angel Army Signature 9
293
293
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
HUGS!!! katherine76

LOOKY EVERYONE!!!

The Earth Day Challenge  [ASR]
Read, Review, 'Rite in honor of April 22nd. See you next year!
by iKïyå§ama


You have to be one of the most outgoing supportive person here Kathy, for every time I look in your port, you have another darling idea on the go.
This is terrific, and indeed for one of the most dire saddness in socity today, child hunger.

I don't review well, but here's a donation to help, sweetie.

HUGS!!!!!


** Image ID #1268015 Unavailable **
294
294
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hello, LookAway

Check it out everyone!~
 Wretched Little Nothings/ The Many  [13+]
A sort poem by me.
by LookAway



Brillant, and expressive. I was delighted with your poem. The title is catchy and interesting. The description though doesn't give this poem justice and I would suggest changing it. Give readers a glimpse of what the poem's about just enough a taste of what's inside. *Smirk*

A suggestion is third stanza, last line, ands doesn't need a "s".

And yes you hear it
You’re all that I can ever see
I’m all that will ever be
I wish you could be just like me

Wonderful!!!!

Thanks so for sharing!!

StaiNed-House Targaryen


** Image ID #1244741 Unavailable **
295
295
Review of Doors  
Rated: E | (3.5)

Hello,Angel Lillard

"Doors" 

Interesting image of doors, forever leading onward, mazelike and slowly driving one mad in frustation and despair for none open.

You open tnis up smooth and with a "ab" rhymne. Then poof it's gone. I would suggest a rhymne scheme be countinued and breaking this into stanza's, four line would work well. An example:

I walked up to a closed door
With my feet flat on the floor.
I tried opening the wooden surface
But couldn't be opened.

And onward, replacing the last words to add the rhymne back in.

Thanks for sharing and Write On!!


StaiNed-House Targaryen




Angel Divider 1
296
296
Review of The Last Patient  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Kiya, *Smile*

The first few paragraphs had me thinking "Pet Cementary" *Laugh* Her holding her cat, lifeless and almost creepy, ohh I'm getting sidetracked.

Here are some suggestions I have noticed that you may find helpful, or I hope you do.

         Was he really that terrible a cook?

Was he really that terrible of a cook?

         .She stared into the usually bright green eyes, now dark and empty, pupils hardly dilating as they stared into space.

She stared into the cat's dark eyes, once bright and green, now empty; her pupils hardly dilating as they stared into space.

         Nick rolled his eyes, wondering why his girlfriend was so obsessed with the god-forsaken animal.

Here Kiya, you go from describing the cat's lifeless eyes, trying to build up a mood, to go to the boyfriend's eyes. For me it takes from the previous paragraph. Perhaps, Nick can do something else, grunt in frustration, crack his knuckles, deep breaths, whatever you think.

         To think he’d be competing for affection with a cat.

Perhaps, He never thought that he'd be competing for affection against a cat.

         Sometimes she wonders if she’s terrible for being glad that her parents died in the fatal plane crash five years ago.
This isn't really needed in the story, Why do the readers need to know her parents died in a creash five years ago?

Your had a few words in bold, I am unsure why.

This is good Kiya, you give great life to the personality of the cat Betsy, and some terrible vivid, not for a weak staomach imagery ain the last few paragraphs.

         He had been scalped, revealing the pink and gray matter of his brain – now an attraction for a stray moth that rested and feasted hungrily on the thick creamy fluid mingled with blood. WOW *Smile* Never knew you had iit in Kiya, I'm delighted!!

This is defianatly a story for those who love pets gone evil, possessed, rotten, a threat.

I liked this Kiya, and thanks for sending it to me. I hope my review was helpful.

HUGS! StaiNed-House Targaryen









** Image ID #1244741 Unavailable **
297
297
Rated: E | (5.0)
I can understand how all your friends gifting you images, would fill your port up Kiya, and this is another darling way to keep them, show them off a little, *Smile* and let those friends know that that they mean something.

Absolutely Beautiful. I love the header, the pale pink, and the care that shows in the web page.

Thanks for linking ot to me, so I could see it!!

Luv ya!
298
298
Rated: E | (4.5)
"Midnight, Oil, and You."  An interesting poem.*Smile*

Hello, Poetry Emotion

I am finally here with your much deserved reviews. This poem describes a writer's challenge to produce a poem, against the distractions of night and inability to sleep.

I liked the decription it really caught my eye, and you have a talent in giving your poems, some truely captativing titles.

Some suggestions.

In the first stanza, your third line seems a little off, you wrote,

as my mind begins to wander
through the jagged crazy maze
my thoughts lost in a tired haze

I suggest this,

as my mind begins to wander
through this jagged crazy maze
my thoughts are lost in it;s tired haze.

This describes the night as a being something alive working against the writer. You give some peeks at this throughout of the poem.

This is presented well, and you have edited it well, although I like poetry to contain puncutation, this one does well without it. For your have captured some clear imagery in the writer's night time thoughts.




Keep writing, StaiNed-House Targaryen







** Image ID #1244741 Unavailable **
299
299
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, tayasky.

Thanks for entering, "`Endless Night Dark Poetry Contest"  with you poem:

The other brain within me...  [18+]
Following the darkness of the soul...(won second place in endless nights poetry contest)
by Captaintaya


This is good, decriptive, emtional, and well written, and almost to me an epic poem. For this tells a rhymning tale of murder,and perhaps multi personaliy. I pictured Susannah's personalties in The darktower. The forever torment of another mind, soo evil, and crontolling.

You have a typo in the description. Following. and I suggest editing it soo it conatins puncutation. Within this poem, there moments you emphazine with puncutaion, and then it has none. To me this takes from the quality of your poem, since it is so long.

Thanks for entering, and good luck!

StaiNed-House Targaryen


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

** Image ID #1304937 Unavailable **

300
300
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

BEYOND THE SHADOWS  [18+]
What lies beyond the shadows?
by SHERRI GIBSON


Hugs!!! SHERRI GIBSON

Bring out the shadows in all their dark glory and unpure light!

Tasteful and wonderfully descrpitive.

I adored this line:

In the darkness, they await.
Grisly horror to be my fate.

It has a nice, very oviously rhymne pattern, flows well, and it very easy to understand.

I liked it Sherri, you have a talent for gothis poetry.

StaiNed-House Targaryen



** Image ID #1244741 Unavailable **
402 Reviews · *Magnify*
Page of 17 · 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/staine/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/12