Enjoyable poem, about I'm sure many of us more so as we age .I do really see any musical elements to it, but that could be bad. There's some reuse that add to the emphasized feelings of loving till dying. I enjoyed it, and hope you have a good one.
Hello, Anni Pon Classic pirate troupe, entertaining, and a great low reading so may more will enjoy this quaint, descriptive story in a poetry form about mutiny. I enjoyed and Thank you for sharing and stepping into the dark.
Good Morning Solum Anderson I found this on the Recent Reviews page, and despite the very very small font, I can't agree more. So stupid thoughts I believe no one has such. Being alone is a feeling, more than a word, and with more mental health awareness every year, I'm sure we'll grow and understand it more as it affects each and every one of us. It's not to mistake it for others similar feelings like sadness and passive behavior. Like I've said I enjoyed this, you too hard on yourself in the description. I only suggest larger for those with no eye sight like me.
It's a chilly day to give a review and its you, Haha! 👼intuey.
I admit the description made me curious as I usually avoid poems and stories about losing someone but this is powerful but not too emotional. Thank you, and Happy Holidays.
Chilly night, perfect to give Scotty1615 a review.
Butterfly are often said to carry souls, I heard that a lot when my son died. Soul Full Butterfly is almost mystical in the feeling you share about your mom as you see that yellow butterfly. The flow is great and its easy to understand. I thank you for sharing, sometimes it not easy.
Powerful, emotional poem, about a abusive relationship, I understood it well, and enjoyed the quality of it. You do not need a 18 plus rating though, and a lower rating means more people will read what your sharing and perhaps not become those unsaid words that live in every destructive relationship. Somewhat sad, but a message that can't be girdled, no taming. Thanks for sharing` Woot!
Thank you for sharing this somewhat dark brooding poem about betrayal and suffering to move forward.
I enjoyed the imagery, the creepy feel of this beautiful vampire killing and gaining from it, again Thanks! and enjoy your day.
Thank you for sharing with me. A very oversaturated fancy, often misunderstood word usage, I went very slow .Well written and good feelings in this, feeling of country and laws and being proud, even a speck of kings and how they'd rule in storybooks.
It's always nice to come across a well written "E" rated poem. The imagery is quaint and it flows nicely with no tense changes that I've noticed. My only suggestion is you have some spelling errors in both the poem and the description.
Mild erotica this length poem borders, which I'm sure your aware. I enjoyed it, a little vague in imagery but written well with some good word usage. The title doesn't fit with what your expressing in this poem, and I believe you wanted to share the "feel" of that other you love. Grapes will be looked at in anew light.
The rhyming is spot on but seemed forced, teeth like white sheep was a stretch for me, despite the change in the setting, and description and the body parts were great.
Like I said at the the first borders 18 plus.
This is quite the prose. I reread it a few and am still unsure how to proceed.
I understand why your expressing I think, the power of the that companionship when you have that one person, your soul mate. Powerful feelings and imagery, almost religious in a way.
I'm not sure, the cold day, cold play descriptions, and am unsure the mirror imagery. It's not my intend to not like your prose I do! It's just I unsure of the wordage used. Thank you very much for sharing and Enjoy your day.
I spent awhile on it, and didn't find one word. My only suggestion is to capitalize you words to find. All my time here and never done a crossword, Thanks for pulling me out my dark places.
Gosh this is powerful! Just a powerful smack in the face. You description doesn't give this the credit it deserves, and I think it well angry written.
The only suggestion I have is "toe" is "tow" and I'd capitalize you title. There could be some crazy conversations from poems like this, thanks for sharing.
Thank you for sharing this simple heartfelt expression of aging and moving in with children late in life. Its sweet how we reflect our homes as the nest as we ourselves are momma birds tending to our young.
I enjoyed this small refection and its kind to think of memories new, not my normal theme but thankful you shared.
Hello, Spud
I enjoyed your poem, it's simple message stated in the repetition didn't take from what you were expressing. Too often "we never knew" and this stirred up feelings of my own grief.
You need not have the rating you do "E" and more people will have access to it and sharing this type of poem helps others feel their not alone. Thank you for sharing a small part of yourself.
Hello, TheBusmanPoet
This is sad well written poem and I wanna to thank you for sharing a special pet with me. Rescuing an animal is a brave thing to do. Writing about Big Jack is also brave. My Milo is 8 now, only cat so no sharing.
I understood the simple message you expressed in this loose form prose. Sad and some angry showed, and brought some feelings of my own.
I'm not sure if you've edited but there are punctuation errors. I, you need a space in the seventh line, start with capitalization you end with a period. Second last line ends off and I believe "a" is a error.
Nice prose, really, just needs some editing. Thank you for sharing.
I have always enjoys poems about our children or grandchildren, although I pray I never have the later. This is quite cute. I could image the little girl, doing all those things to get popcorn without anyone knowing. Reminds me of my oldest, he loved popcorn also.
Well written and very suggestive, good job in keeping the rating "E". A neat way to look as a relationship, not as I have bit seeing and reading this I'd say I agree. Suggestion separating the questions to emphasize what your describing in those questions.
What is Love, but a battle at war?
The chariot, glides across land for the sake of it.
Body Armor, glistens in the sun as a beam of protection.
Separating that line adds depth and takes the reader in. Thank you for sharing.
I enjoyed this lengthy well written poem about Halloween, and such imagery always makes me think of Sam. Its a great time of year for both the autumn feel and colors but the horror also. Thank you for sharing and Congratulations on your placing.
Simple, enjoyable poem with some small rhyming and imagery of your cat the invasive creatures they are. I too have a cat, Milo.
My only suggestion is the tense changes and there are some "its" "it's" It could be intentional and if so my bad. I am only trying to be helpful and appreciate you sharing. Thank you.
I enjoyed this, and it really came along as lyrics. You almost pass the E rating and I believe the lack of punctuation in intentional.
Early 2000 Grunge feel, like Shinedown's 45. or Seether. I think this might get passed, and it good. I suggest editing the description to show more oh what you have.
Sharing really does help. and I hope it did help you. That must of been so hard. I wonder though why. We should take every moment we can get cause we really don't know. I have regrets and I wouldn't wish them on anyone.
I enjoyed this poem and had a split second where I thought it was going somewhere darker, but you snuck the last part in brilliantly. Friends are great, those that help us and those who don't for they force the hardest behavior change in ourselves.
Small, quaint and blessing, I want to see the pain in you. Buwahaha! Indeed.
Thanks for sharing your dark poem. I enjoyed and and only have the suggestion of punctuation in first stanza, third line, there's a pause and it caught me up. Enjoyed the simple expressions of feeling, and thanks for sharing.
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Classic pirate troupe, entertaining, and a great low reading so may more will enjoy this quaint, descriptive story in a poetry form about mutiny. I enjoyed and Thank you for sharing and stepping into the dark. 
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