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Review of Ominous Side  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
To a great group leader who could not be appreciated more." ~WhoMe???~ ! You have been gifted a loyality package from SHERRI GIBSON


We all can relate to this poem in seeing all to often something about oursleves we do not like, or for the most part deny. Very true expressions of these simple denial we have, I myself have written some poetry about reflections and it is a wonderful poem you have here WhoMe.

The ending is creative, and truely sums this beauty up. Thanks very much for sharing, and I hope your countinue to delight us all with such thrawling poetry.



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Review of Move Along  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! *Bigsmile* Daizy May !

Move along indeed! I think this is wonderful Nancy, you offer some unjudgemental insight into christianty, and gives those who are always keen on learning about Jesus, or just want to feel the love and strong faith others have for him, a very relaxing read and thought to muse about. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing Nancy, only dear, I think the you should remove the link at the beginning it is not valid anymore dear. *Smile* I liked this! You do not force for faith for others to understand.



Write ON! Little Daizy!



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Review of The End  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, K.L. Carpenter

I really like writing dark stuff too as you say, but more so enjoy reading others perceptions of the truth so many others do not. This is one poem, I super enjoyed, Thanks Sm for Random Read! Depression is different for each but I think it is safe to say that is as been foregotten, dropped walked on, like that poor man tambled to death in Wal Mart, and people say they didn't see him, like?! *Rolleyes*


This is fab! *Bigsmile* starting each line in the end, and the truthful, most tastefully brutally expressed imagery that follows, well is most enjoyable, and then you end with the beginning, I had the words on John 1.1 ringing in my ears when I finished this, in a twisted sort of way. *Blush*

Thanks for sharing your insight into such a insightful topic. *Smile* I will return for more fo your dark stuff. *Wink*




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Review of Fields of Poetry  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello again! Lawrence !!

Oh my goodness!!!! (jumps around) This is fantastic!!! I was so hoping you would be active again Larry not only in writing some brillant poetry but inspiring others to write themselves hopefully as well written poems as you do Larry.

This makes one ask! *Wink* "What would your happy dance look like?" *Laugh* Some very provactive prompts Larry, oh this is just so great! *Delight**Bigsmile*

I will so see if I can knock your socks off Larry. *Smile* get a flashlight, darkness is coming. *Laugh*


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Rated: E | (4.5)


Congratulations Lawrence I gotta say it again! Welcome Back!! Daizy May has gifted you the review package 2 from "JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM TEMP CLOSED"  from her win in "SHERRI'S HAPPY HOLIDAY AUCTION CLOSED" 

As I have told us and I am sure the feeling is mutual by others here! eh, Daizy May , I have miised you Larry, and those if us who remember Kanaspoet, particapated in your past activites, Splashrama, Kanaspoet's Poetry Contest (my first ever win!) You poetry newsletters, and well you done so much, and taught us poets so much more that we knew was out there.

This is another home for you, I am so happy to see your better, and back among us, people like you are rare, and you may disagree but you truely are a mentor here, even when you were gone.

Group Hug! Larry! and keep the wonderful most thought provoking poems coming! *Delight*



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Rated: E | (5.0)


Congratulations Lawrence You have been gifted a Review package 2 from "JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM TEMP CLOSED"  from Daizy May *Bigsmile* from her win in "SHERRI'S HAPPY HOLIDAY AUCTION CLOSED" .

Wow! I have not realized how much I have missed your poetry Larry. OH! {E;shock} You introduced us to the cleave form and show us what a poignent onslaught of imagery is like. This is so very powerful and I am speechless or in awe I am not sure.

You have not lost your touch Larry if any it has deepened, and this is dark! *Delight* Oh la la!

where decaying morsels of broken hearts
lay in fragments, shattered, and I wonder at the number

Brokenhearted, dead, perhaps damned. Ohh! I am repeating myself now. You are just wonderfully expressive in the words you choose in your poem, and in this cleave, on of my favorite forms, and I fear forms, this is just brillant. I think no one will argue me, and know Daizy May agrees. *Wink*


Welcome Back!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Congratulations! Lawrence You have been gifted this review package from "JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO FORUM TEMP CLOSED"  from Daizy May . It is her win from "SHERRI'S HAPPY HOLIDAY AUCTION CLOSED" .

Neat Larry. What a quietly expressed poem, just like one is daydreaming, so peaceful everthinng is around them, so serene the sense of time has become. This poem is starts like that Larry, Then wow! (you thiught of this while watching kids play!) powerful, and what is sad it is true.

While we take for granted the freedom and lifestyle we have here, in war torn countries children are the one who suffer, and no child should. Provactive, emotional poetry Larry! *Smile*

Thanks for sharing.



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Rated: E | (5.0)
Boo! SHERRI GIBSON

What a touching romantical poem Sher! *Delight* This is really emotional, one reading this can feel this special love, all the mushy, kindred oozing fellings that flutter always when we love one person, or some, so much! that even looking at them sets our stomachs into motion like butterflies awakened.

I was wrapped in this heart felt poem Sher and enjoyed it alot. For Sher there is not enought love left in the world, and knowing some still does as bright and burning and yours and your niece gives hope. *Smile*

Kudos!!!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
WOW!!

Hiya! Lawrence OH! This poem, reminds me of one mentor we lost a while ago, so symbolic, sweetly expressed that it just falls into one's feelings without making a sound.

A former moderator here Kananspoet! Wrote just as tremendous as you do. I welcome you to wdc, look forward to seeing and being dazed by more great poems as this one is.

Their wayfaring vessels
roll and tumble upon waves created by
the winds the wind dancers dance upon
before the onyx-eyed ones.


Truely moving poetry! Lawrence


Very nice to meet you!



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Rated: E | (5.0)



Hello Meg {E;smile} Knock your socks off ending! oh my goodness I am lookimg for mine. This is just wonderful!!

It is told just in the most heartfelt expression, misleading to perfection. I honestly thought a small child. Delightful Meg, I think this is one of the most darling, well edited quirky, almost romantical poems I have ever read here. Don't change a thing!

Wow!! Thank you so very much for sharing your muse.



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Rated: E | (4.5)


Boo! ElizabethHayes-DaughterofIAM *Wink**Smile*

A well written acrostic poem is always enjoyable and this one is more so for the somber, kind feeling it gives. I must admit I am not sure of your divine mother but in the expressions you give this poem, it does not matter to understand the emotions, the move the bond embraced between the two.

I liked this alot, one can relate in their own spritual journey they have taken or those the still search as the one in this poem did, the doubt, the confusion, then the divine hand clamning all turmoil.

Thanks very much for sharing this small acrostice poem. Great editing, and well written and presented.


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Review of Bitter Frost  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Boo! *Smirk*

Hello, Jazz Smith

This is a very powerful poem! One of a relationship ended but such a bitter one that feelings still libger leeched in a torn heartbroken essence.

I enjoyed this alot, and love the deep commanding yet morbid tone the poem is expressed in. I do have my suggestions that are only my thoughts - I only hope to to helpful. *Smile*

Very first line you end in a comma, therfore the next line need not be captalized. This second line is off, you state pain as a person, the when reading the rest, that person is is real e lover, and what they gave and still give is pain, if I understand your poem right. So I would "like a" in this second line, for you are not relating her to the mistress of darkness, she is.

Fourth line, first stanza needs a period. Sixth line again, you over owrd what you are expressing, the imagery carries great without "Thus". Ninth line needs a period.

I suggest adding puncution to again the second stanza as needed, for a poem with this much emotion relates and is better presented when feelings beginnning and ending are told, and you use commas just peachy. *Smirk* Line six second stanza perhaps "birth".

Some very outstanding word usage here Jazz Smith *Delight* Welcome to wdc. Wonderful! *Smirk*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Boo!! again Author00 *Smirk*

OH! *Laugh* this is delightfully funny!!! I choked on my coffee unexpected.


"Congratulations on being one of this weeks Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers!"


"Don't spit into the wind" indeed. *Laugh*

This is self reflective and told in a quiet sharing tone. Thanks for sharing some of your thoughts into what you have learned and still live by today.



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Review of Patriotic duty  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Boo! Author00


This is nice meat poem. *Smile* "Congratulations on being one of this weeks Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers!"

We all do feel a deep sense of duty to our countries we reside in, and often we do not know the roots in which these commands grew. You touch this in you poem, and it is simple and well expressed.

Only suggestion I have is you have a period in your description and in the last stanza final line, the period should be last.

Enjoyable poem Author00 with a touch of humor. Thanks for sharing and again Congratulations.









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Review of Our Beginning  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi ~WhoMe???~

A real life fairytale, oh! no many ever truely experience true love, and you found it!!

Simply expressed, and a nice rhymne. This has a feeling of a classic time, when castle loomed still bustling with activty and knights in shing armour rode about.

Thanks sharing a piece of your happiness ~WhoMe???~ . This is a nice poem.

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Hiya, *Smile* Just an Ordinary Boo!


Very neat poem. I always enjoy poetry that end in a question, and yours so hits a quiet storytelling feeling.

I had a feeling this tells of neglect and abuse and self love, for one would ask what is in this poem if living under such torn circumstances, and relating it to a flower is just great.

I have no suggestions, this is simply a well written, and edited poem.

Write On!



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Review of She Walks  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Nikola~Ugh Summer!


Never a truer sentiment spoken, dear, Love never truely dies, no as long as one perosn lives that loves lives, in remebering and loss.

This has such a somber feel to it, like walking through time standing still. You do have a great way with expressing emotions in what you write and this poem does not disappoint.

You go, oH! horror leader! *Smirk*


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Boo ~WhoMe???~

Oh! "What Did You Just Say?"  Why? This talks of a new encounter, and chance at something more and you leave it Untitled, of my dear. *Smile* One could see that as well a closed door, when this talks of all the possiblies of a open door, when two people come together, but strange and torn in their damaged ways.

True events? I hope all the best came from this. *Wink* I do see one evil typo dear, Me,practically a stranger, needs a space.

Great poem!! I liked this alot and appreciate you sharing.


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Review of Wall Barrier  
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Rated: E | (5.0)


Boo! ~WhoMe???~ in the dark I creep into your port dear, for you staycation, you go me. *Laugh* All lights go out.

"Wall Barrier"  free style indeed Jenny, I was really wrapped up in this small very well written and complex poem. Most part for its mood and well portrayed imagery. One could almost get lost, and that is a good thing, getting lost in the dark. *Smirk*

The words you bolded out, seem to contrast what you are telling in this poem, you go from three simple image, drinking a bubbling drink, all the moss, the quietness, the peace of that drink, to an allergy, and the uncertain sensatations, to a wall that seemed to grow around its all, to somber understanding to finally know all led to self entrapment. Content distortion. Oh! *Delight*

Wonderful poem! *Bigsmile*'s!!



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Review of Released  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Boo! *Laugh*

This is quite a neat simple poem, Legerdemain about the lost of love, one experience too many have endured.

You keep in clear, and the subtle added insight to someone else moving in, was really a great touch Kim. This is a great poem, for in its small size, wow! you express alot.

*Smile*

Keep writing Kim.

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Boo! Kung-Fu Kayla

Delighfully happy I am to have stumbled across this dark, not in a horror sense, but for the message this creates in the readers head to ponder... "Are We Already Dead?!"  Very creative! *Smile*

There is so much mystery in death, and agreed alot will be answered only after we have died. To suggest though that we are already dead, wow! well I gotta say you go!

You have a darling rhymne, and well paced flow, without any major bumps to toss the reader off track.


Thanks for sharing, and welcome to WDC. *Smile*





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Review of Deep Well  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hiya! ~WhoMe???~ *Smile*

Oh this is neat poem hiding way back in the depth of you port, small, paced in a almost deadened emotions of well giving up.

You keep to you idea that the turmoil within ourselves something causes us to become lost in all the unblanced roads that are laid out before us.

Only I see in the second stanza, an I am not 100% sure on this dear, for I am no tense expert, but your last line you write, "Silently within" and keeping with the rest of the poem, and the flow, should be "silent".

I enjoyed this alot! ~WhoMe???~ You are a delightful poet!




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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


Looky!

"AUTHORS' SPOTLIGHT - Season 6"  [18+]


Wonderful idea! Dr Taher writes again! to bring members together and have some fun, for I really think this will be fun! *Smile* in stepping out of our comfort zones, and perhaps making a friend or two.

Rules are clear, and you leave those who enter in the dark a little as you waht you have planned for activites, all the while we all get some exposure, which we all like!

hence "Author's Spotlight"

Only you should chnage the staring date, as it has not started yet and people may not be looking thinking it has and they are too late.



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Review of A Day in My Life  
Rated: E | (5.0)
OH! *Laugh*s!!!


This is so funny!!!! writehanded~on hiatus and told so well! The flow, the comedy, and that darling glimpse of love we all have for our children felt.

I swear I could see you face when he said that! *Laugh* (giggles} I must thanks ~Vikki~ for choosing this, for "Simply Positive" I find it so very funny, and can so relate to what my own boys do to me.

Full five from me, for making a stain laugh! *Bigsmile*



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Review of Scrap Metal  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hiya, Hyperiongate

Hmm! Well this is defiantly well written, and creativelly told. I could really keep with the story, the caharcters are simple, and the events are told, uninvolved in complex feelings and tremendous personalities.

Only Aliens? *Laugh* Classic! Bravo! You have some muse here, to think up such from the prompt words given.

I do see one error.

That was where is (it} ran into Thelma.


Write ON!!!


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