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Review of The Cleansing  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Kare, I love this story. I love the humour, the wonderful visuals such as : She stifled the urge to spread her wings but hopped on her baby-blue Vespa instead, dreadlocks flying.
You gave your character a certain sense of unique style. She had no compunction doing what she needed to do and yet she was so particular about the way she presented herself.: She was wearing her red and black checkered frock just in case she spilled a drop or two. She was proud of her profession; she didn't like stains. Her favorite launderer never asked questions but they were expensive and the alternative, pre-soaking and scrubbing by hand, was tedious and time-consuming and — she had a party to go to at midnight
I also loved the imparted information revealed in your own inimitable way.
I don’t believe I’ve ever read anything in this genre from you before and although gory, in its own way, was tempered with a sense of the ridiculous.
Thank you for sharing your writing talent in this format.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Time  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, it seems you’re on a bit of a winning streak! Congratulations.
You deserve it.
This poem, Time, speaks to all of us I’m sure, except maybe children who are under the illusion that Christmas takes a whole year to come around instead of about six months😂
The older we get it’s a fact that time does speed up, it’s something to do with the percentage of our life span we’ve used and how much is left.
It’s a well written, interesting piece to read. Thanks for sharing.
Cheers Sue


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Review of The Chinese Box  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Bill, yet another of your imaginative stories hits the mark. Your children must have loved having a dad who could tell stories no other kid had ever heard before.
This one was a twist on the fable of Aladdin’s Genie in the lamp. You described the mayhem he was able to cause so well that when he went off to make the wish come true I could almost see the damage done to the kitchen ceiling and the roof of the house. I enjoyed the innocent, humorous, dialogue from the snake/dragon. But I think he may be a little too much of a handful.
Sue


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Review of Brad's Epiphany  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Jim, I figured this prompt may have been right up your street, so to speak. I know as you must spend so much of your life in hotel rooms, you certainly would have come across loads of books left behind by previous guests. The choice of the bible though was interesting and useful as there are so many apt verses to use when writing a story.
I enjoyed the read, and it’s true when we’re feeling at rock bottom just the right words from a song, a book, or from some wise person can gift the lift needed to carry on.
Just one thing I noticed was you hadn’t included your word count. It’s advisable to do so as disqualification is on the cards.
My entry was deemed invalid yesterday as were three out of the four entries although I’d put the line count at the start.
Anyway good luck with the entry.I love a happy ending.
Sue


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Review of Thanksgiving Day  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Jim, This is a beautiful use of the acrostic verse. it contain beautiful sentiments which should not be used only on Thanksgiving Day. In Australia it's not a day we observe. I have often wondered if the Thanksgiving meal with the turkey and all the trimmings is repeated on Christmas Day, which is so close?
We only usually buy a turkey for Christmas, its not a popular meat throughout the year here.
This poem of yours could be used on those memorial days such as Anzac Day here in Australia on 25 April. It is the national day of commemoration of Australia and New Zealand for victims of war and for recognition of the role of their armed forces. It marks the first major military action fought by Australian and New Zealand forces during the First World War. ANZAC stands for Australian and New Zealand Army Corps.
I digress from reviewing your poem but the sentiments are so similar. We give thanks to those who have gone before and reach out to our families and bless the fact we live in a safe country. Beautiful words, Jim. Thank you for sharing.
Sue


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Review by Sumojo
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Mia, welcome to WdC. I must say as English isn’t your first language this is a really well written story.
I don’t know whether this is a true story, but it certainly sounds as if you’ve experienced that painful first love which so many of us do.
I didn’t like how the main character was taken advantage of and to tell you the truth I thought the guy was a snake in the grass taking what he could for his own gratification.
There were a few sentences which could be improved but I’m loath to criticise because of you not speaking English as a first language.
He really loved me but I didn't (which I feel bad for). it would sound better if you had written: he really loved me but I didn’t feel the same towards him as much as I would have liked, which made me feel sad. Don’t put lines in brackets when you’re writing a story, try to incorporate how bad you felt about not loving him, within the story. I “met” no need for quotation marks here.
Two years later, a normal sunny Thursday of may you we actually met. Your brother had a football thing near my town so I drove 30 minutes to you. This sentence needs a little work. Did you mean a normal Thursday in May we met?
Not sure. These words need to be on the same line as why did I fall for it a second time? I’m not sure.
On day 3. Always write a number using the words. On day three…

Anyway, Mia, you have great potential as a writer, and I hope you continue to practice and sharing.
Cheers Sue



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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, thank you for asking for a review on the story. I think what you wanted to know was if the idea had legs, (so to speak.)
Well the idea of an inept magician certainly appealed to me, and certainly is one worth pursuing. I can imagine if you made a series of stories each containing a disaster because of his inability to do spells correctly could be very funny.
I was a little confused as to whether he was using a book of magic or a computer when you mentioned Control-+Z to reverse the spell. I liked the idea of a book. Perhaps Dolby could be from 2023 but has found the book of spells and his ineptitude causes mayhem in each story. Anyway great idea.


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Review of How to be special  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, John, you did very well to write this story about a boy who wants to be special. I also belong to a creative writing group and being put on the spot to write something there and then, and achieve it, can be quite special in its own right. There were a few things I discovered about you as a writer, one is you know your chess pieces and their individual capabilities and the other is that you are a special human being. Someone who has achieved this piece of writing, a piece that didn’t exist before you put pen to paper. Thank you so much for sharing.
Sue.


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Amy, I’m reviewing your poem for the twenty-three in eleven challenge.

This poem is intended to encourage the reader to wonder about an age old question. Are we alone? You, as most of us, surely must have come to the conclusion, as we stare into the night sky in wonder, that we are the only planet to sustain life must be an impossibility.
The conditions for life to grow, thrive and establish a foothold need to be perfect. Just the right temperature, the air must have the correct amount of oxygen to breathe and have oceans for sea creatures. Its sun must be exactly the perfect distance away. Too close or too faraway and life couldn’t exist. How lucky are we?
But as you say we’ll probably never know. The question certainly tests our faith.
Well written, thought provoking poem. Thanks for sharing.
Sue


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Hope, thank you for giving me a smile when I read this flash fiction entry. I also entered this same contest using the words: bright, play and sign. I’m always amazed at when given a three word prompt so many ideas come to mind to different writers. I did enjoy your entry though, a great twist at the end.
Thanks for sharing
Sue.


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Review of Walking Home  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, Jacky, I’m reviewing this story for Read and Review. I see this is an old story written six years ago. I often read your entries in The Flash Fiction Contest.
This story of nosy Jan who loved nothing more than to peek into others windows is one which could do with expanding but of course you’re limited in flash fiction to the requirements of the contest, usually around three hundred.
My suggestions are: Tonight, in her old neighborhood walking home after visiting her parents. It was like being a fly on the wall as she walked by window after window of people she’d known all her life These two sentences would be better written as one complete sentence.
I was confused whether the stone house was still a brothel or had it been sold and was a private home?
Was Jan’s husband visiting a brothel or was Cathy simply having an affair with him behind Jan’s back? It would be good to clear up that confusion. It might just be me who didn’t quite understand though.
Thanks for sharing.
Sue


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Review of The Endtimes  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi, thank you so much for sharing. I found this little story written so long ago, 2003 in fact when WdC was in its infancy. I know how you feel at the thought of losing our favourite writing site. I would be lost, wouldn’t know what to do with myself. I realise I’m a borderline addict come to think of it!
I loved the line: The ground heaves suddenly, angrily, tossing pets and bikes and sprinklers like popcorn in a sizzling pan. That was a great image.
Suggestion: serve as eclectic backdrop serve as an eclectic backdrop
Your descriptions of a world spinning out of control were colourful and imaginative. Thank you.
Sue


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Review of Just Sayin'  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This poem gave me a smile, even a chuckle as I read it, several times in fact. It reminded me of real conversations which we have on a daily basis. They’re meaningless, simply simply words to fill in the silences, gossip even in some cases. Words that are forgotten in a short time. Nothing serious, or even worth remembering. These sort of conversations are ones I might have with friends, having coffee or something I might relate to my husband who never listens anyway. You nailed it. I loved all the verses, each had a line I use regularly. Just saying’


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, I’m pleased to read that you’re not giving up even though this piece didn’t win the Writer’s Cramp Contest. We as writers must never give up, simply write for the joy of creating an item which wasn’t there before you penned the words.
This piece made me smile. I liked the idea of a talking cloud who wants to make the world a better place.
The format was so different to anything I’ve read previously. At first I didn’t grasp the rhythm and rhyme.
The first line A cloud of rain followed the crowd, to emerge through the sky,, endowed by the numerous sights of intelligence found on the ground. I found a little confusing. I think it was just the way it was phrased. I suggest you change the word endowed you could have said, enchanted, surprised, or amazed. I wasn’t sure what emotion you were going for.
The line: The situation may be splendid; it was very well attended. The choir blended very well when the speaking cloud had a render thought about how it tended to make someone feel cheerful, instead of being tearful I suggest to use another word to replace render
Perhaps random thought?
Thank you for sharing a very uplifting poem.
Sue.


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Review of Monster  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there, I see this is the first piece you have written for WdC. First of all let me welcome you and I hope you continue to write and publish here.
My first thought was how sad this piece is. Written by someone in a very lonely and self loathing place. Is this autobiographical? If so I’m so sorry your feelings are so dark. Maybe we all have thought we go through the world pretending to be something we’re not. It’s actually imperative sometimes to hide our true selves. We must go through life, if we’re to be accepted, following certain rules of life. Being polite, keeping our real thoughts to ourselves. I often think I’m pleased there aren’t such a thing as the thought police or we’d all get arrested!
You’re thinking you’re different to the rest of society but you’d probably be surprised at the number of the population who feel as you.
We seek to hide in our own homes, close the door behind us and just be ourselves. This was a difficult piece of writing to read and I’m sure for you to write. I hope you use this forum to get your thoughts out where they belong in the fresh air and out of your head.
Just one suggestion Re the font size to make it easier on old tired eyes to read please use a larger size. I think the default here is 3 but size 4 is much better.
Good luck in the future.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Sign  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, there, welcome to WdC. What a glorious user name, Sunshine Lollypops. You must be a really cheerful sort of person. Not that has anything to do with this cheeky little poem about cats. Of course being a dog person myself I totally agree with your cat outlook. That missing cat? It didn’t get stolen or lost. A cat never gets lost, let’s face it.

Well I’m here to give you my non-expert opinion on poetry, not wax lyrical about felines. I love poetry, you can say so much more in a poem, express an opinion using fewer words. I dislike being tied down to rules though and there are so many rules in the poetry genre. I prefer rhyming poems myself, I can never do free verse, I don’t know the rules. But having said that I love this free verse poem, it’s perfect for a cat poem. Freedom, that’s what all cats crave and maybe even though you’re a dog person you maybe more like a cat than you know.
A couple of suggestions if I may. I feel the rhythm may be improved by writing the word ‘the’ at the start of the line Love you had for that cat,
You already used the word ‘better’ in the line : Better to forget the cat, , perhaps find a different word in the line: A better place to deposit your care,
I’m so looking forward to reading more of your whimsical offerings. Well done, keep on writing.
Sue.


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Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (5.0)
My word Carly, what a great story following an impossible prompt. Well for me certainly living so far away in Australia.
I sighed audibly at the end of the story as I thought how wonderful is the enthusiasm of youth. I wish you’d put the year and your ages at the time of this great adventure. I could almost touch your excitement and optimism, it’s hard to remember ever feeling like that and yet I know my hubby and I did too.
I’d love to turn over the page and find out what happened next. Did Rye ever get discovered?
I hope your story won the Writers Cramp Contest. It was surely a worthy winner.


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Review of Missing Cows  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there. I’m reviewing this unique poem for 23 in 11.
I love this poem. It’s original, comedic and puzzling. It asks the question why is Mrs McDonald so pleased about the missing cows? I have a sneaking suspicion she has had a hand in their disappearance. But will we ever know? I loved the rhythm of the poem, it would make a great children’s book, but of course for the children the mystery will have to be solved.
Good luck for the month of September 23 in 11, plenty of chances for completion this month.
Cheers Sue
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Review of Toe in the Water  
for entry "A Long Lost Tale
Review by Sumojo
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This whole sorry story reminded me of my husbands youth. His parents were reasonably affluent but were very tight with money. My husband, he was my boyfriend at the time, desperately wanted a leather jacket and motorcycle riding boots. He’d bought the bike himself. It had taken two years of doing a menial job at weekends scrubbing the floor of a local business. When he was eighteen he asked his parents for a jacket, but in the end he bought himself a cheap plastic black jacket and a pair of Wellington boots with the top rolled over! At least he had the Fonzie hair and the inevitable comb, which helped a little for the image.
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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, ~TwistedPretzels~ your item on how to screw up a character came to my attention and when I looked at your bio I was pretty stunned to realise you were fourteen at the time of writing. This fascinated me. I’d love to know what you’re up to now 13 years later. The article itself was really good with great advice. I hope you’ve been successful in your writing and are some famous writer who has made a fortune from the craft.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi again Amy, it seems we’re playing tag.😂
You’re very good at expressing yourself in forty words. I really liked this entry. I think sometimes we become invisible, unseen as we get older especially. We do still matter even if we’re not young, beautiful or someone in the news.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Amy, I’m reading your Sweet 40 words for the Twenty three in Eleven
Challenge.
And very sweet they were too. You’re absolutely right, there is nothing like a strawberry freshly picked from the garden. Especially if it is one you have planted and nurtured yourself. It really is the taste of summer.
You filled the brief of expressing yourself in forty words, not a mean feat in itself. Summer has many pleasures but as you state a fresh still warm strawberry is one of them.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Writing Blog  
for entry "20230720 Rewritering
Review by Sumojo
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good luck with the rewrite Steven. It’s going to be a great novel, I’m sure.
Sue
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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Carly, I'm reviewing this item for the Twenty Three in Eleven Challenge.
Your poem discusses the topic of using watercolours for the whole of World Watercolour Month.
I'd never heard of such a thing either. It seems there is a day or a month for almost everything these days.
What I liked about your poem was a sense of delight as you imagine using all the colours available. All having their own special meaning, to someone. With watercolours, if one is clever enough, one can mix different hues until that perfect one is achieved. its a little similar to writing in that respect, isn't it?
Well done. Thank you for sharing.
Cheers Sue.


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Review of Contest Entries  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, I had to smile when I read your most embarrassing time of your life. I must say you’re lucky as far as embarrassing moments go, I thought yours was just a tale of a little girl getting words mixed up. Not really embarrassing but kind of sweet.
I once asked my much older brother‘What’s a lulu?’ He seemed puzzled and asked me what I meant. So I sang a line from this song ‘On a lulu or Siam’ He couldn’t stop laughing when he explained the words were: Honolulu or Siam!
I should imagine that most people don’t hear or sing the correct words when they sing a song. Anyway I loved your story. Thank you for sharing.


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