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Review of Bumbeak  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there I’m reviewing this poem for ‘I Write.’

Zelibazo sounds like one weird creature. I enjoyed reading about him.😂
In the first stanza I think it would have been better if the last line had a different animal instead of a dragon, perhaps a lion as a suggestion?

I’m not sure it was a good idea to wake a slumbering Zelibazo, much too risky.

This was entertaining.
Cheers Sue
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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Amy, I’m reviewing your story for I write.
This is so sweet. You described what it was like in a field of pumpkins with an excited boy selecting one to impress his friends. That he wanted happiness both for himself and his mother became a part of the story. You didn’t say whether Brad had died or simply left his family but that doesn’t change things. Cindy has experienced months of sadness and knows it’s time to turn her attention to her son and the practicalities of life. So much in so few words. Well done.


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Review of I Write  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
How wonderful it is you have overcome your doubts and fears. I love this personal piece of writing. Writing honestly about struggles and fears isn’t easy but so liberating. That’s why I like blogs. It’s for myself. When I write to a prompt like: “what was I born to be? As I did a few days ago, it’s difficult to know where to start. Yet when we allow ourselves to open up and just write it can be a journey of self discovery.
You have allowed your mind free reign when you write your stories. You grow, and your mind will continue to expand as your characters grow, and that’s beautiful.


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Carly, I’m reviewing this story for I Write.
Your description of Zayda’s attempt to feel less anxious by creating a circle of peace was lovely. I wonder if it’s something that would work for everyone. A grassy park, a sunny day, bare feet and your own circle of safety. Sounds delightful. You did mention she bloomed twice in close proximity. Her smile bloomed. She felt a sense of freedom bloom within her. Perhaps you can find a substitute word for one of them.
I liked the interaction with Kathleen, the dialogue seemed natural.
Thanks for sharing this delightful tale of witches and the supernatural.


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Those words are so beautiful, the meaning comes from the heart. I can’t imagine losing my partner of almost 60 years and yet it’s inevitable.
The words of the first stanza were the most powerful to me. I have grown with my partner from being almost a child to our old age.
Thank you so much for sharing this poem.


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Review of Tonight  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I’m reviewing your thoughts on the past fortnight as part of I Write.
When adult children leave the nest, we as parents are conflicted. I think we feel, I know I did, we should be sad, however it seems the opposite is true! In fact if there are any signs of them returning, we realise it’s quite nice to have not only the space but the peace which comes of having one less person in the house.
The trouble is, I speak from experience, they often return. If not permanently but certainly for advice, money, food, washing or just a shoulder to cry on. It’s a journey that’s not completed for a very long time, if ever.😂
As for moving furniture and clearing out cupboards it’s a sign of being ready for a change. It’s therapeutic, like a breath of fresh air.
Thanks for sharing your domestic and family goings on. It’s nice to know everyone has the same things to deal with. It’s just life.


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Review of Sonder  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, welcome to WdC. I went straight to your portfolio after I received your review of my micro fiction story. I do hope you’ll continue to write and post more stories here.
I love the lyrical prose you have used in this short story “Sonder.”

How wonderful to have that affect on people who simply cast their eyes upon you. She sounds as if she’s a witch-like creature, bewitching all that see her.

the scars on her hears Did you mean heart?

Anyway please keep writing and welcome to WdC once more.

Cheers Sue
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Review of Lost now Found  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Amy-Jo, I’m reviewing this poem as a fellow contestant in ‘I Write.’

You wrote it as a tribute to WdC and obviously from the heart.
I’m sure everyone feels as you do when first getting the nerve up to join here. I know I experienced the same misgivings.
In the first stanza you write how scared and lost you felt. I’m sorry you were hesitant about showing your talent on the site.
Then as you read the words of others it gave you the confidence to show your worth.
It was lovely to read that you were welcomed and encouraged. I expect that it’s the wonderful people here who remember those first few weeks of feeling out of one’s depth.
In the last few lines you show how you want to return the favour and help other newcomers feel welcome too.

It’s a very sweet poem, one in which you weren’t afraid to show your vulnerability but also shows your strength.


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Review of Birthday Candles  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh, wow. What a great story! That’s some imagination you’ve got going there. It’s dark, pardon the pun, and I think the way it made be feel was unsettled. Yes I’d say the story is unsettling more than horrific. Even thought provoking. Be careful what you wish for.
Good luck with the contest.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, GW, I’ve had a read of your story
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Nutcracker in Hell  (18+)
A dancer/musician caught in the destruction of climate change is betrayed by a neighbor
#2278990 by Graywriter
and my first thoughts were I liked the title. It certainly fits the prompt, ‘Death in the key of C.’
My favourite paragraph is in chapter four, paragraph seven. Your descriptions of his thoughts about losing all the things he loved about life, were great. You even managed to include final C chord in the story.

In chapter one paragraph 12:
Denton reached across the fence, grabbed Carver’s arm and twisted. the dialogue following perhaps should be on a new line as I had to read it twice to be sure it was Carver still speaking and not Denton.

You too, Dent. You bin an okay neighbour, for a fuckin’ libtard fag guitar picker and ballet dancer needs commas.

The only other confusion, (mine! )I thought the relationship between these neighbours, confusing. Perhaps you meant it to be one of mutual dislike with a touch of tolerance. It just seemed as if they begin quite civilly, which then turns violent and returns to a sort of neighbourly concern, before turning to attempted murder? Maybe it needs a bit of back story for these guys?

Anyway thanks for sharing this with me. It’s a great story with startling descriptions of the end of the world as far as these two characters are concerned.

Good luck, A E Wilcox is extremely hard to please.

Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Death, the messenger of joy and rest. I believe the old and ready to die could receive comfort from that sentence, not so those who had so much life yet to live.

A beautiful poem though. It is an example of evolution, the young and strong inevitably taking over from the old and weak.



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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, there, welcome to WdC.
I really liked this thought provoking piece. It made me look at my life from being both a child or young adult, to being a parent myself.
I recognise your childhood family. They were mine. Yes they were there for me, yes they loved me, but they never told me I could be something, someone great. It was that expectation of just being, the getting of a job and praying that nothing terrible happens to me whilst alive. It sounds great doesn’t it. But it really isn’t enough.
When I was raising my family I always tried to make the as independent as possible, whilst always being their safety net.
I loved the title of your writing too. No one is coming to save you. So true.


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, I’m reviewing this article as part of ‘I write.’
I’m an Australian so I’m not familiar with New York except of course for what’s portrayed in the movies, so I found the information in this piece really interesting. I like the fact of the Bronc’s throwing lavish parties which only the best people attended. I can certainly imagine the throwaway line “are you going to the Bronc’s this weekend was meant to impress other unfortunates who were not invited to some Shindig or other.
I may get asked this question one day at a quiz night. “How did The Bronx get it’s name. It probably won’t happen though, so I’ll just throw it into conversation one day.😂
Well done, cheers Sue.


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Good take on the prompt. The fish’s eye view. Poor little things must wonder what’s happening to them being hauled out of their environment and unable to breathe. I wish I didn’t eat fish.😩
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rupali, that’s a sad tale of fisherman, David. I like the last line, “David lives with fish on their earth.”
I think there is one word which detracts from your story and that is in the line: So, there is no minimum sign of rain. Minimum doesn’t seem to be the correct word there. ‘there is no sign of rain’ sounds better. Of course for the word count to be exactly 100 words you would need to adjust and add another word somewhere else.
I love this story though, a fisherman gets caught out by a freak storm and ends his life with the very thing he was trying to catch. One might say it was divine justice?
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)
That’s so sweet and so sad at the same time. I’m sure you’ve reflected since that time so long ago that a girl needs more than a presumption of a relationship. I liked the fact that because you thought one thing you presumed she was thinking the same. You were very young, it breaks my heart to imagine how you felt when she sprung the “I’m engaged” conversation.
Isn’t it amazing though the power of musical association?
Thank you so much for sharing your painful memories.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Damage  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Nice little story plus a great little song. I’ve never heard the song but it’s really catchy, something you could really grow to love.
Your story fits the music and lyrics. A story of regret but also one which made me feel a sense of relief for Chris’ sake.
Jazz wouldn’t have been good for him and I was pleased he had the foresight to imagine a future that would’ve turned sour.
Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed the read.
Cheers Sue


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for entry "Refugee Resettlement
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

Hi, Jeff, thank you so much for this thought provoking question and answer to a blog prompt.
It’s good to get an insight into one’s reaction to such questions. I think you answered as honestly as you could, but none of us really know what we’d do until we faced with such a dilemma.

It’s no good to anyone if we are willing to sacrifice ourselves and our families for the sake of others. We do need to think of ourselves first. No doubt there are those who are so self sacrificing and by being so feel we are teaching our children that this is what it means to be a good person.

Perhaps a refugee would be so desperate that he wouldn’t care where he was so long as he was safe, but how unfair it would be to him to have to hide feelings of resentment when having another human being constantly underfoot begins to irk..

Foster carers are a group of people who have my utmost respect and admiration. I wish I had their capacity for empathy and love to those who are desperately in need.

Thanks, Jeff, for sharing this thought provoking piece. Let us hope if we were called on we would do the right thing.


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Whiskerfacebythefireplace
I’m reviewing this chapter as a part of ‘I Write.’ I have read a chapter of yours before and although I’m not up with what’s been happening, I did enjoy reading.
I sat down with my pen in hand to jot down anything I thought I could suggest in the way of improvements or spelling or grammar and didn’t write down one solitary thing.
I love the easy flow of dialogue, it’s certainly one of your strengths. Even when not a lot happens to progress the story, the gentle back and forth of the conversation is really lovely.
I may meet this story again a little further along which would be great. I wish you all the luck in the world for this novel.
Cheers Sue


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Review of Spellbound  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Carly, what a fun story.
I really enjoyed it as it showed what could happen when you begin to read a story with the aim of editing. You could get dragged into the pages and experience all sort of intrigues and even a love scene, whether you want to be there or not!
Anyway thank goodness it was a dream.
There are a few punctuation errors such as in the first paragraph: ”I've heard about you." I say staring down at the photograph. I pulled out of the envelope along with the manuscript Margaret had forwarded to me.
“I’ve heard about you,” I say, staring down at the photograph which I pull out of the envelope, along with the manuscript Margaret had forwarded to me.

The correct spelling is throes of delivering…

Needs commas
writing, gripping, spellbinding work.


Thanks for sharing, it’s very funny.
Cheers Sue



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Review of Relax By The Sea  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Jim, I’m reviewing this lovely poem for ‘I Write’.
It’s beautifully written from the heart. I wondered if perhaps you may have been the naughty Jimmy?
I loved the conversational tone the poem has. It reminds me of a woman relating the story to her neighbour. They would be agreeing and tut-tutting about kids and lack of respect etc.
But the mother realises they were there to have fun, reconnect, and relax. Sometimes it’s difficult to wind down and let things slide but I’m pleased the mother was able to see what she was about to spoil. A chance to have fun.
Thank you so much for sharing this delight.
Cheers Sue
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Review of Old  
Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, I’ve just read your piece about being old. I have reached that part of life and I’m not at ease with it. Have not accepted the senseless of it either.
You raise a great question in your first line. Even though I’m there, I still can’t answer your question. Would I rather be young? Probably not.
Would I go back to start again? Probably not.
The knowledge one has achieved is priceless. Life seems to make sense somehow. And yet there is no shortcut to take, we all have to plod the same path to where I am right now.
I wish I could answer your question.

I liked the poem, I liked the way it was set out, but remember that writing, in whatever form is always better with punctuation.

Thank you so much for sharing.


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Review by Sumojo
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This story made me laugh out loud. It reminds me of the time we had a mother possum with a baby on her back, in the top of a cupboard. As my husband grabbed the mother to take her outside, her baby dropped off and ran up his leg. I laughed so much. I couldn’t help him but he eventually managed to get them both out of the house.
Thank you so much for sharing.
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Review of My Story  
Review by Sumojo
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Emma again, I’m just browsing through your port and feel as if I’m getting to know you a little.
This story about your relationship with your biological dad is one that many children have gone through. It’s hard when an innocent child’s eyes are opened to the truth but I’m proud of the way you stood your ground and decided for yourself that the relationship wasn’t in your best interest. One day you may think differently and decide to reconnect with your dad but that will be on your terms.
I have a granddaughter who’s relationship with her estranged father wasn’t good. Fortunately he lost interest in her when she was very young. His loss, because she has four beautiful children of her own who he will never know. No doubt you will have your own family too and your dad will miss out on ever knowing them. Karma maybe.
You expressed yourself in a very mature way in the telling. Well done.
Cheers Sue


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Review by Sumojo
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Emma, Really, the things dog get in to when left to their own devices. June sounds like a sweet little dog, I love her name, was she born in June?
I’ve seen pictures of dogs with all four legs through the holes in a hammock, looking very confused as to how they got themselves into such a mess.
I hope your story does well in the contest.
Cheers Sue


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