I liked your poem. It had romance, goth, and verry dark imagery. The emails you had received was probably too drastic for people that felt your intro rating was "E". I don't feel that way but it is just my hunch.
Good writing.
This is was awesome. I know someone exactly that fits this mold. He used to be my boss. I know this poem is about him. Thank you very much for this great poetry. I wanted to write something like this but I couldn't because I'm still not there yet. Write on dude!
I thought your poem was very entertaining. I was thinking it was going to be a holy roller poetry but I was pleasantly surprised with the graphic imagery almost out of a horror picture. I enjoyed it and I bet you'll catch flack from the religious faithfuls. Just write on!
I think this is an excellent poem. It's probably great since I think could relate to it at this point of my life. You've successfully used a mythic bird as a metaphor to real lives. When people fall down, they have to pick themselves up, dust off and keep on going. Goood writing.
Your poetry had a very positive feeling towards the institution of marriage. Today marriages end up in divorce over 50%. This is a nicely written romantic poem with a positive outlook. Good writiing.
This was cute and very nostalgic poem. It really captured the child's memory of the fair and carnival-like atmosphere. I thought it had a good flow and fun feeling. The imagery was vivid and very well described.
This was a very good poll. I put "other" and these are my thoughts. I think you should get published in some capacity but there should be an agreement with the publisher that gives you some independence since you have a legitimate marketing concerns. You don't have to give them everything in your arsenal, so to speak.
Congratulations, and if I may make a suggestion? I would not put anything about your monetary gains out in the open. Just keep that within yourself because some people will take it the wrong way. Just my opinion. I feel you need to make yourself as an creative artist more than a businessman, intitially. Money will come in good time, if your work is good. Just watch your back when your're signing your contract.
You have to start someplace so maybe this is it, and this also could help you get through another publisher's door before actually going with them.
Your poem is really good expecially because it's Christmas Season now. It's a kind of a poem that could be used at school play or a Christmas Carol lyric. Good writing, I liked it very much.
This is poem "Somewhere Inside is Screaming" is a really good poem. You've successfully captured your feelings and conveyed to the reader with vivid emotional imagery. You are a real poet. I really liked this one the best.
That was a very nicely written romantic poem. It captured the happiness and the cloud 9 state of mind you had experienced. The poem was short but very effective because the imagery was vivid. BTW, if you were describing our galaxy then, it's Milky Way. "Way" should be capitalized, unless that was intentional on your part. I liked your poetry. Keep on writing!
I liked this one better than the other one. It's highly controversial for Christians and other religious faithfuls. I'm not an atheist but I'm an agnostic. That simply means, "things (like God) are unknown and unkowable". I wrote an essay / prose titled "AGNOSTIC" and it's in my port.
Some people liked it but Christians hated it. But the negative comments subsided when I wrote Bill Gates and Warren Buffett are both agnostics. We all know what they did, right? No priest put up their own money for a great cause like those two.
I admire your honesty and kind of understand your feelings. You sounded very bitter but maybe you needed to write this poem to vent out? Sometimes venting does help. Just keep writing because I did like your poem but the words were harsh & some typos, that's why I only gave you 3.5 rating.
Your poem "Eye of the Heart', was very well written and had a good flow to it. I liked the imagery created with your words. The love always has obstacles and your poem managed to capture that. Good writing.
I liked your poem "I Dreamof You and Me" because of it's romantic and warm feeling. But it also had sadness and coolness to it. Good writing, I enjoyed it. Keep on writing.
Your poem "Secret" is short but to the point. The secret sounds like someone's betrayal against you and in the end, the time heals all wounds. That's what I thought you were saying in this poem.
Your Madlib started off great but from blank 8 it wasn't in the madlib section to be filled in. I would check it if I were you because this is not a bad one if you had all 18 blanks.
Your poem "Moving Target" really captured the loneliness of traveling on the freeway or highway. The unkown environment made it sound more mysterious and I liked that part. The only thing I failed to catch was the "moving target" part. Is that description of the destination?
Your poem, "Paper Cups" is very deep and I think I understand it. I used to live in Los Angeles and the imagery was like downtown over there. People throw away cup and litter the place because everyone else does it. L.A. is a place of lost dreams, too. Good writing.
Hidley Boxn
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