I thoroughly enjoyed it.
My name is Bob, known here as Candlemaker. I LOVE the sound of your pen name: Conniean. It has a nice ring to it. I love to review. It puts me in touch with gifted writers…like yourself! Bear in mind that the comments included in this review are MY thoughts. Your piece is an expression of yourself. It is a part of you. Feel free to disregard any suggestion of mine that doesn't ring true for you. After reading your fine piece, "A Conundrum
, I offer you the following comments.
I LIKE this poem! I like the spot-on rhyme scheme. Not once did you strain for a word, any word. I like the sing-song rhythm. It makes your poem easy reading, and enjoyable. I like the little undertone of humor all the way through. And I LOVE the ending. It sort of delivers a punch line!
Here is one tiny thing I noticed:
In lines 3-8 you have a perfect 8 beat meter: “taDA, taDA, taDA, taDA.” Now granted, I’m an absolute FOOL for meter. So I started looking at the lines that followed, beginning in the third stanza. I’d have made a few quick changes in order to continue this same meter:
"Due diligence(,) the key," he states.
He looks for value, buys (then) waits.
What goes down (now), in time comes back.
Good management will beat the pack.”
But that’s just ME! Consistent meter throughout is not necessary to improve this delightful poem
for sharing your work!