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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a poem full of memories and wisdom. Your rhythm and flow were spot-on. I enjoyed reading about how things "used to be." It's kinda sad that your poem has such a true ring to it about greed. I love the ending, though. Great job - Keep up the great writing!


Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a beautiful picture painted with words. You did an excellent job with this. I saw no issues with rhythm and flow. I can actually see the sun setting through barren trees and casting a blue light on the snow. Great job - keep up the wonderful writing!


Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this! I love how you relate revision to a doctor who can see the broken bones. Yes, revision is necessary - but not necessarily evil, and you point this out very well in this. I love how you mention the reviews here on WDC as well...and how you mention that an error that is found by an outsider is not a slap in the face but an opportunity to look again with a fresh perspective. Keep up the great writing!


Rhoswen
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Review of Vernal Visions  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved reading this. The rhythm and flow were spot-on. I could actually picture the flowers floating and smell the aroma of fresh spring blooms. Great job! I could see barren branches bursting with life. I love how you added information about the form and the meanings of the words in the last stanza...for those of us who are unfamiliar with forms and don't have a vast vocabulary, this definitely helped. Keep up the great writing!


Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a very informative article, and very well-written. You make so many good points about what one can do when they are anxious. I have used many of these techniques. I only have one suggestion. I would suggest that you make the font bigger - a point size of 12 or higher - the fact that the text was so small did make this a bit difficult for my older eyes to read. Other than that, great job and keep up the wonderful writing!


Rhoswen
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Review of Tweeze  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was an interesting poem. The rhythm and flow were great. I could actually envision someone plucking hairs out one by one. You did a great job painting a picture with your words. I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the wonderful writing. One tip - if this is based on truth, after you get done plucking, try using a coconut-oil based body lotion to help your skin. Write on,

Rhoswen
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Review of No Words  
Rated: E | (5.0)
The rhythm and flow of this poem is wonderful. The rhyme scheme works well and helps the flow. I can feel the love for this person as I read through this. You paint a beautiful picture with your words. You really did a great job on this poem. Keep up the wonderful writing!



Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful tribute to the heroes of war that never get noticed! So many times we only see the ones who are on the front lines, but your poem highlights that there are those who are needed behind the scenes. Your rhythm and flow were spot-on, and I enjoyed reading this! Keep up the great writing!


Rhoswen
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Review of Autumn Leaves  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Reading this brought back memories of raking leaves and diving into the leaf piles as I was growing up. This poem read well, the rhythm, flow and rhyme all worked together. You paint a picture with your words while still leaving some room for the reader's imagination. Very well done! Keep up the great writing!


Rhoswen
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Review of Home  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I love the way you highlight ways to positively interact with those who have memory issues, whether it be Alzheimer's or other memory problems. This story really kept me reading until the end. I love how it ends with it being the son who helped his dad. Great job on this! Keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Mushroom Circles  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This was an interesting topic. The rhythm and flow worked well. I love fairies, and the idea that mushrooms grow in their footprints is something I hadn't even thought of. Great job on this - it will definitely keep me wondering about this! Keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Leaves  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great job on this poem - your rhythm, flow and rhyme all worked together to make this an easy read. Your descriptions worked well and painted a picture with your words that I could see. You definitely have a gift for painting pictures with your words! Keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Perspective  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I enjoyed reading this, and although you don't identify the pain in this poem, I can still feel it as I read. The rhythm and flow of this poem worked well together, as did your rhyme. I love how you compared the empty seats to the pain of loss and past defeats. Great job - keep writing!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I had to laugh as I read this - who hasn't had some unwelcome visitor knocking on the door at the most inopportune times? I love how you interjected a bit of humor into this (what will the wife think of the blown diet bit and how you describe your love for Girl Scout cookies.) Your conversation with Chase was not just comical, but it reminded me of my conversations with my dogs - only mine don't bark back at me....they just look at me like I'm crazy or stupid...LOL. Continue to entertain us with these great, comical stories! Write on, my friend!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You did really well with this poem. You painted a picture with your words, and I could see the butterfly stuck in the spider's web, and see you freeing the butterfly. At the end, I could see the spider, probably wondering where its food went to! The rhythm and flow of this poem worked well together. Keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Toressa  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the rhythm and flow of this. The emotion is real and you can really feel the love as you read through the lyrics. You did really well with this. I encourage you to keep writing. You have a really good way of putting emotions into words where your readers can feel what you are feeling - and that is awesome! Write on, my friend!

Rhoswen
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Review of Writing ML Games  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is awesome...Some of them I knew about like the slots and the poker. But I am really glad to see how to do a status bar. And the fact that we can flip emoticons now is even better! Thank you so much for sharing this with those of us who are still learning WDC!!


Rhoswen
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Review of Stocking Stuffer  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem was interesting - it kept me wanting to keep reading! I saw no issues with rhythm, flow or rhyme. I love the ending of this poem - it's just like Santa to make the stockings hold more! This was also a bit humorous, something that is sometimes difficult to interweave into poetry - and you did beautifully! Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a sad but beautiful tribute to a loved one lost. I could feel the pain, see the table setting for this loved one's place, and the pain that is still felt. I saw no distractions to take me away from the sad story of the poem. Rhythm and flow were great, and the rhyme scheme worked out beautifully. Great job! Keep up the great writing!

Rhoswen
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Review of Tagged with Honor  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was a wonderful tribute to fallen soldiers. As the wife of a former marine, I feel the pain of the ones who were lost, and will always support our soldiers. This was a great way to show appreciation. I did not see any issues with rhythm, flow or rhyme. There was nothing to distract the reader from the message of the poem. You did really well with this! Write on, my friend!

Rhoswen
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Naverine2!

I see you are new to WDC and want to wish you the warmest of welcomes! I hope you find our WDC community to your liking, with all of the support and friendships you could ever want!

As for Land of Make Believe, I think it is inspired! Your rhythm and flow were spot on, and the descriptions you use paint a picture with your words beautifully.

Keep up the great writing and welcome to WDC!!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this! I loved how you interwove emoticons with the text, and changed the color of the text at "pink fluffy unicorn." Great job! I laughed as I read this, and I hope you won the contest with this! Great job, keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen


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Review of Shattered Pieces  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey Amanda! I love this poem! I only have two suggestions - First of all, you don't necessarily need to capitalize the first letter of every line - I usually only do this if it's two separate thoughts...but if it's a continuation of the line before it, there's no need to capitalize it unless it's a proper name.

The only other suggestion I have is in the third stanza -

These little shards of broken clay,
Have much potential, he would say.

I believe that you should use quotation marks on this, since it is a specific saying, and the potter is stating it as if he was saying it out loud.

Other than that, I didn't see anything else. You did a great job on this poem! Keep up the wonderful writing!

Rhoswen


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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am so sorry for the loss of your mother! It's always hard to lose a parent. You captured that so well in this poem. As I read, I could feel the hurt from loss, but I could also feel the deep love and devotion you had towards your mom and she had towards you and your brother. Since this is a tribute poem, I don't believe you should change anything - that is unless you want to. From my reading it, there were no problems to address, and this flowed quite well. Keep on writing!

Also, I see that you are new to WDC - please allow me to welcome you to this great community of writers helping writers!

Rhoswen


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Review of M3m0RiEs  
Rated: E | (5.0)
First of all, let me start by sending you my condolences on the loss of your mother. I know this was difficult for you to write, and I thank you for sharing. Alzheimer's is a nasty disease to deal with. I can't imagine the heart break you went through as you watched your mother go through this. This was very well-written. It was straight from the heart, and as a reader, I could feel the pain and hurt as I read through this. I don't see anything that needs to be changed or altered in any way. Keep writing!

Oh - I also see that you are new to WDC - please allow me to welcome you to the site! I hope you enjoy it as much as I do!

Rhoswen


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