MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I think this is a very good introspection of ones self. The poem speaks of a mind filled with emotion, waiting to be expressed through the medium of writing. Great job... This poem was also filled with urgency. You did a very good job of conveying the immediacy of the moment. You also gave the poem closure, you had a resolution.
SUGGESTIONS:
I have no suggestions for this poem.
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
You obeyed no particular syllable count, but this poem still had good structure. Here is your rhyme scheme: /a/a../b/b../c/c../d/d../e/e../f/f../g/g.. This was done in seven quatrains. The poem had shorter lines which made it linear and added to the drama of the overall feel. Great Job!
SUMMARY:
A very inspirational poem. I say BRAVO! AUTHOR! BRAVO! God bless and keep writing!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
The form is perfect Haiku. The content is ironic, which is more Senryu style. The Haiku is more descriptive of nature in some way. The Senryu is structurally similar to the Haiku, it differs from the Haiku by dealing with human nature rather than physical nature. The Senryu is usually ironic, or satiric in nature.
SUGGESTIONS:
Call this a SENRYU.
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
The ironic nature of the poem. Not being able to write the poem but doing an excellent job.
SUMMARY:
Aside from the name of the poem, I think it is structurally sound. And humorous. Great Job!!!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Being an ocean person, I was transported back to the beach, walking with sand between my toes and watching the drift wood wash ashore. This poem was very visual for me. It brought back many memories. You have a good rhyme scheme and the poem flows well from start to finish.
SUGGESTIONS:
I have no suggestions for this poem.
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
The last stanza was my favorite. I loved the way your drift wood found a home and settled in content and, "asks not a thing more from you" Great job! Also, I love the color of the text. It is the color of seaweed!
SUMMARY:
Woderful, visual poem about the beach and drift wood. This poem left me with a special feeling. Thank-you.
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A poem about growing old or being old. This poem verges on being very good, but in my opinion, has a few problems.
SUGGESTIONS:
This poem does not work well without punctuation. There are a few spots that slow me down rather than increase the flow of the poem. The most obvious spot is the second line, when you repeat the word old it throws you for a minute because of the lack of a comma. Also the rhyme scheme which is: AA- BB- Cc- DD- //. The last stanza leaves the rhyme scheme flat.
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
I thought the linear stanzas worked well here, And the rhyme that is in the first four stanzas works well. The content is also enjoyable.
SUMMARY:
A good start to a poem which has great potential. God bless and keep writing.
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
Overall Impressions:
I thought this was a great little story. Because you are so descriptive, you made it clear from the start what was happening. I don't know the exact word for it...(Don'nt want to give anything away,) but I knew what was taking place. The imagery was great and the end of the story brings us back to something unexpected. Great job!
Suggestions:
I have no suggestions for this story!
What I Liked Most:
"For precious fleeting moments I was a sylph soaring through the balmy air, freed from the heft of oppression." This line becomes even more significant at the end of the story. Wonderfully done! I also like some of these words you use: Sylph...Thalassic...Quavered... Your making me smarter than I want to be. Good job!
Summary:
Wonderful little story. Bravo!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR SHORT STORY, ESSAY, POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM. IN MY OPINION, IT IS JUST AS IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
Overall Impressions:
Passion. Poignant. Powerful. I think this is wonderfully written. Read it through several times and loved it every time.
Suggestions:
I think the whole poem flows very well- but the last two stanzas seemed two flow even better. So I did a syllable count: 8788- 7788- 8888- 8888. Don't miss understand me- This is a GREAT poem! And because the syllable count is so close in the first two stanzas it is hardly noticeable. Just wondering if it could be even better with perfect four foot lines.
What I Liked Most:
The whole poem- this is a well crafted, and beautifully written poem!
Summary:
Bravo! Bravo! Bravo!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM, AND IN MY OPINION, BELIEVE IT IS MORE IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I think this is a good poem. I thought it lost it's flow a little because of the inconsistent rhyme scheme.
SUGGESTIONS:
Here is your rhyme scheme: (/ means no rhyme.) /b/b, cdcd, efef, //. There is no aa rhyme in first stanza and no rhyme in the last two line stanza. You certainly do not have to be consistent and can write this with any variation you choose- I just know for me, I get a little stuck on the read when that happens. It takes away from the flow.
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
"This heart has wretched and torn my soul asunder." Great line.
SUMMARY:
Overall, a very good poem! God bless and keep writing!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM, AND IN MY OPINION, BELIEVE IT IS MORE IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Good poem. Well written, but the rhyme scheme does not stay consistent.
SUGGESTIONS:
I would lock the rhyme scheme down to a steady and consistent structure- this will give the poem a better rhythm. Here is your rhyme scheme: abab-ccdd-efef-ghgh-ijij-kkll-mnmn-oopp-qqrr-sstt-tt//-uvuv-wxwx-yyzz/. This is a rough break down. Do you see how you go from aabb-ccdd, but don't stay consistent with this. That's were, in my opinion, you lose your rhyme.
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
The message is wonderful! A little mini story leading to salvation.
SUMMARY:
Overall, very good write- just has some rhythm issues in my opinion. Great poem though! Good job! God bless and keep writing!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM, AND IN MY OPINION, BELIEVE IT IS MORE IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I have had this feeling before. Almost a melancholy, wanting to write, but can't kind of a feeling! You conveyed the start and triumphant finish of this experience very well!
SUGGESTIONS:
I have no suggestions for improvement!
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
"I listen to the thunder roll in the distance, and wonder does my tempest withdraw with it?" Beautiful line!
SUMMARY:
Wonderful poem about finding one's muse! God bless and keep writing!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
This poem has a good linear flow to it. Good rhyme and excellent rhythm- The content is interesting. To me it speaks of breaking the normal mold and reaching for the stars. Good job! God bless and keep writing!
Beautifully done- To write this at eleven is amazing! Have to rate this five stars for that alone- Great rhyme scheme and good rhythm! Good job! Bravo!
I think you have created a wonderful rhythm with this rhyme scheme- and of course the content is one we agree on! Good job classmate! God bless and keep writing!
I like the linear effect here. I also like the lack of punctuation- Combined it gives the poem a downward collapsing effect. Almost as if lying down! Bravo! God bless and keep writing!
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM, AND IN MY OPINION, BELIEVE IT IS MORE IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Very interesting little poem. Don't know if this is an established form or not but I got stuck on the second stanza.
SUGGESTIONS:
I would take the second line of the second stanza and make it the first line of the third stanza:
"Sound
Of wings."
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
The whole poem.
SUMMARY:
I think this is a great little poem- In my opinion, I would just rework the line structure. Or not! God bless and keep writing!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
I love the linear style here. It gives this poem power! Powerful emotion here. Another Great free verse poem! A little tip- Change your rating to 18+ or WDC will do it for you! It is a drop down on the edit page! God bless and keep writing!
Poignant, beautiful, and tender! What a wonderful poem! Great free verse. Can't pick a favorite part because I love the whole poem. Perfect. Bravo! God bless and keep writing!
Great little form. Love the way he syllable count climbs here. Discriptive and visual. I can feel and smell and see the summer night. Great job! God bless and keep writing!
Right on the money Magi! good perfect rhyme- some good slants- overall great poem. And as always our favrite subject! The written word! God bless and keep writing!
MY NAME IS DUTCH AND I AM HONORED TO REVIEW YOUR POEM. I WILL GIVE YOU MY HONEST AND HEARTFELT OPINION. I BELIEVE IN THE RATING SYSTEM, AND IN MY OPINION, BELIEVE IT IS MORE IMPORTANT THAN ANYTHING I WILL SAY. PLEASE REMEMBER THAT ANY RATING ABOVE THREE STARS IS ABOVE AVERAGE.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Sounds like a terrible day-dream. At first I thought you were talking about being at war or in the military. Then I thought maybe hell (The heat and the cold)I'm really not sure. But that dosen't always matter with poetry- It's the feeling or impression that I am left with. And for me it is one of relief I think- Glad that the day-dream (Nightmare) is over and the antagonist can get on with his life and his studies.
SUGGESTIONS:
I don't think I have any suggestions- I think this poem does it's job just the way it is- it makes you think. Is this a dream? is this about the writers family? Is it a real place, and can i figure this out through the clues given in the poem?
WHAT I LIKED MOST:
What I liked most was what made me think the most: "The rain burns my skin yet fire doesn't seem to bother." and, "The sun seems radiant from inside but when looked upon, just a dull star." and, "Night feels like a hot summer day, when day is as cold as mid winters." It's like a riddle.
SUMMARY:
Very Interesting poem. Thought provoking. God bless and keep writing!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** THE DUTCHMAN. PROUD MEMBER A1 WRITING ACADEMY
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.17 seconds at 4:05pm on Jul 14, 2025 via server WEBX2.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
