Well, what a surprise! I love your sense of humor in these poetic tales of the bush in Australia. As with your other poems, I chuckled out loud at the ending. "Two wily old dingoes, Each with only one eye!"
Ha!
You make the bush come alive in my mind with these tales.
Hello Jenbo, your poem touch ny heart and soul and made me cry. Not just from the sadness of losing a friend, but especially from the emotion you put into this poem about Old Taffy.
There is not much else to say. Letting you that it made me cry is enough!!!
Hey there Oldnbold. I love this poem out of the bush of Autralia. I read it and chuckled. Then I read it out loud and laughed out loud.
Not only is it funny, but the rhyme pattern and rhythm are good too.
I live in Michigan in the U.S. out in the rural areas. I'm not quite like your bush lady. I don't give 'em a chnce to crawl under the house. I have my own shot gun. I take care of them myself.
The explanation of the word 'mere' helped me understand a little more. I think, though, that a comma after it would help the reader pause in reading the poem and it would come off a little better.
I see that I had given you a 3.5 star rating. If I remember correctly I had intended to give you a 4 star.
However I cleared the 3.5 and gave you a 4.5 rating with the explanation and the comma in mind.
Hello Angel, This piece evokes feelings of relief, comfort, joy and peace. It's good to read something that doesn't depress and make you want to shut yourself away.
I would suggest that in the description under the title you correct the spelling of the word 'children'. Your finger hit the letter 'k' instead of the 'l' beside it.
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The sample questions in 'The Content Of A Review' section emphasized the need for thorough reviews that can help the author know his/her audience.
I hadn't yet realized the purpose of the 'Review Tool'.
I appreciate the mention of it in this article. I will check it out.
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It's wonderful that you had such a good relationship that you can call her your friend. Not everyone feels that way.
You also mentioned the hope that we have, knowing loved ones are waiting for us to join them in Heaven. It kind of gives purpose to living right, doesn't it.
You say this is your very first sonnet,
It seems you have a good handle on it.
Sorry, that was just the poet in me taking over.
This sonnet speaks of love that continues even when the object of that love directs their attention to another. It has the feel of Shakespeare. Each line has ten syllables and the rhyme scheme is right on.
Hey, this is a 'chuckler'. I like this tribute to potato chips. I'm diabetic and that is one thing I miss so very much. You made my mouth water at just the thought of them.
I like the humorous way you proclaim Potato Chip Day.
In the second to last verse the word 'mustn't' doesn't look right to me, but I guess it is.
My favorite lines are:
'Light your candles, recite your chants.
Run around the house and dance in your pants.'
Good to have you join the family here at Writing.Com
This was a good ending for my port raid. You have once again amazed with your talent. This Westen poem should be a ballad. Do you sing it? You have your picture at the end with a guitar in your hands.
Thank you for sharing your 'amazingness' with us. It has been a pleasure to check out your varied 'stuff'.
You write good scary flash fiction. As with some of your other items I've reviewed, this too would make a good movie.
These ideas of yours just flow right out of your mind onto the page. I am in awe of your ability.
One more item and my port raid will be finished, but I will continue to read and review at other times. I don't want to read it all at one sitting. I like to spread out the good reading times.
Oh!! How sad! Maybe poignant is the word. This is a touching short story of devotion following even into death. This is about death without being dark and ugly.
I can't get over how ceative you are. You come up with all sorts of unique 'stuff'. You are not only imaginative in this short story, but in all the other types of items you have written.
Well Wd, just give me your fifty number account number and I'll send you your free review of this item #971229. 100 gps will be deducted to pay for the shipping and handling. LOL
Just kidding. This is a funny, but sadly true, example of the rip-off offers we recieve.
Good job! I'll send you the gps instead. How's that?
What a heart-touching poem about the loss of a child!
You expressed the loss with fond memories. Even though the feelings of loss are evident, it doesn't seem that devastation has taken over.
You followed the dodoitsu form perfectly without it sounding 'forced' It flows naturally.
Hey this is a cute little poem. The rhythm is good. I usually adhere to strict rhyming. But the cuteness of this piece makes it okay.
I've got two favorite parts. 1.'and her tooth jumped out of her mouth.'( I like the imagery!) 2. 'but spits farther than the boys' That's my kind of girl!
Oh my!!!!! I am having trouble writing through my tears. This short story account in the first person about attempted genocide in Germany is riveting.
The imagery takes my breath away. This piece deserves higher than the five star rating. The imagery that stikes me the most is 'the colour draining from my face into my shoes'. The place in the story that grabbed at my soul was where the story teller realised that what was on his hands wasn't tomato soup.
I normally don't read this genre, but was linking it to my brother PSanta-I'm ba-ack! who does. I am glad I did. It gave me the opportunity to review it and put it on the Public Review page so others could experience how wonderfully and insightfully you wrote.
Hi there, what a good outlook on life! So many just look own on the up and coming youth, with disdain.
It's good to see someone who looks for the best instead of the worst.
Your rhyme and rhythm flow along smoothly.
This is the second of your items I have read and they are both wondrful. I am looking forward to reading more. I also intend to check out your daughters 'stuff'
Hello, this is a good one. I would have answered back using 'f' words, but I suppose you have gotten some already. Well, okay. Maybe just one. This is phantastic. Phrom what I can see, you are a phellow of poetic phinesse. Phurthermore this phine poem desreves a phive star rating.
My brother 'notPHrodo' also phound that this tickles his phancy.
I enjoyed this piece about the 2005 WDC convention. It brought me up to the year 2005 in my journey along the timeline of your writing. I makes me want to be able to attend one of these years.
Thanks for including the link to your love poem to yourself. I'm headed there now to check it out.
Hi Diane, In my ongoing journey along the timeline of your items, we have come to 2004.
Your decision to write more comedy was a good one. This comedic resignation letter from a job was very humorous. I especially liked the paragraph about the intentiinal mistakes in the report being missed by those in charge.
Okay, this is perfect. I actually laughed out loud! I love God's sense of humor. And no matter how hard man tries, He is going to be the winner in the end.
It's good to see some brand new 'stuff'. You must be feeling more up to snuff. Sort of rhymes doesn't it?
Oh Kenzie, you have hit upon a truth worth relating.
God is heard in the stillness. We need to stop babbling long enough to hear Him. We need to babble once in a while to get it all out. But then when we have exhausted our resources He steps in.
Good job with this! Nancy
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