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Review of GOOD STUFF!  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Joy!
First off, glad you're OK. We were a little worried about ya for bit!
This is pretty good! This main character is the most egotistical moron in the world, or he's just dumber than a rock! Probably both!
I love how you portrayed him. Having him sit there as a week, then two, go by as his dear wife 'slept' was great, and adding that part about the smell was a nice touch! I'm guessing that was something the neighbors were complaining about too.
But it was that ending that made this shine. Yeah, this dude knows his 'paperwork', doesn't he? 'Tis no wonder he didn't/isn't getting any customers! *Laugh*
Great job, Joy!
One tiny niggle in an otherwise excellent piece:
"...You know what, Randy? (")About your offer, I think, I'll pass." (don't need those quotation marks cuz this is still part of the quote)
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! It was a 'joy' to read, and have a marvelous day/evening/week!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings, Mickey Worm!
This is pretty funny (and good!), and I like your outlook on this survey 'conspiracy'! Actually, there really is some truth to this. How do we really know who is taking these surveys? Are they really who they say they are? And will the info we give them be the real info we give them, or will they twist it for their own demented purposes?
I think surveys are a lot like polls. One poll says one thing, another says the complete opposite! I know you wrote this 12 years ago, but if you look at what little donna rump claims these days, polls can't be trusted.
Unless of course, they're in his favor! *Laugh*
Comments and suggestions:
'Was the survey wringing in pain? Was it the Jewish lady in the upstairs apartment singing along to Pat Benetar again?' *Laugh*
"SURVEY!, who was YOUR first kiss?"(.) I commanded. (don't need that comma)
Otherwise, great job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for the laughs, and I hope to see you back here on WdC soon!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there, Football Guy!
I know you're showing both sides of rump's presidency, but since you asked, I will offer my own opinion. I'm very much against little donna rump. One of the many things you didn't mention in this is his obstruction of justice. Now I know people are going to say 'what obstruction of justice', and that saddens me because now we have an argument about what obstruction of justice is! What is collusion? What is this and what is that? It's not that hard to figure out, but the Republicans are using that as their main arguments for little donna, and if it that's all they got, then they're not in good shape. Yes, he has a strong base, but is his base strong enough to win in 2020?
I can't and won't say. Hell, I didn't think he stood a chance in 2016!
Anyway, thanks for letting me vent and get that off my chest. And whatever your own opinion is, I will always stand up for your right to have it! *Salute*
By the way, I'm a registered Independent, but since little rump took over this country, I'm leaning further and further to the left.
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and have no worries about me getting to the ballot box next year!

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Review of Hallowed  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Laurie!
This is pretty good. I like the idea of Satan taking over Paul’s soul and returning in his body (unbeknownst to his companions) to take yet even more souls to Hell with him. And using the ‘quid pro quo’ (sorry—that just seems to be a popular term these days! *Laugh*) was a great plot device!
‘A life for a life. That is the hallowed way.’ *Smirk*
Methinks Satan got a helluva good deal on that one, considering all those other souls he took in the end!
Well done, Laurie! That last line summed it up perfectly!
Comments and suggestions:
‘Too much sizzle, not enough sausage’ (*Laugh* excellent!)
‘ladies man’ should be ‘lady’s man’—I think!
‘As we (w)alk down the streets, our old closeness gradually returned to us.’
‘where many thick tubes of black smoke wafted like demonic fists banging against the very firmament of heaven’ (nice simile!)
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for entering the contest, and I hope to see you enter it again next year!
PS-This is the final story of the contest I’ve read and reviewed. I’ll announce the winners and Honorable Mentions before the day’s out!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hola, Lori!
This is...different. Good, but different. I can’t say it’s the scariest story of yours I’ve read, but I thought it was really cool. I can see you put a lot of work into it (seriously! — the descriptions of the mansion, the guests, and the way Martha interacted with them were excellent!), and the ending, albeit totally hilarious and unexpected, was great! Never in my wildest dreams would I have imagined old Norris Maplefield to have been the one responsible for all that bizarre mutilation and mayhem!
And bringing this full circle with him was genius!
What’s more is that it even had a happy ending! The bad guy dies! That’s what that sick creature deserved for being the perpetrator of crimes against those poor helpless bovines! *Rolling*
Comments and suggestions:
‘the cow-tipping scandal of 1962 when Norris Maplefield got caught doing the naughty with a Guernsey other than his own’ *Laugh*
‘Eloise wagged her finger at her friend(,) chastising her silently for trying to ruin the surprise.’ (strangely enough, Beholden informed me just yesterday of how the U.K.’s rules of grammar differ from the U.S. Seems around 50 or so years ago they slackened the rules regarding commas. Apparently if ‘but’ is used in a sentence, then it negates the use of a comma. This particular sentence doesn’t fit that rule, but I’ll try not to point out any that do from now on! *Bigsmile*)
‘Martha flashed her toothless grin and winked her hazy cataract-consumed eyeball before speaking’ (*ThumbsUpL* like I said, I love the descriptions!)
‘...dropped her vampire teeth right out of (her) mouth’
‘...and the masks of all the merry makers would soon be lifted(.)’
‘She dug at the pile of debris(,) carving out a path of escape.’
‘She climbed hastily back onto the buckboard(,) grabbing the reins of the mule.’
Well done, my friend! I’ll be honest though: when you mentioned the guillotines, I had a feeling they were going to come into play at the end. But apparently you decided to take it down a totally different road. If you ever decide to give this an alternate ending, perhaps you could take that into consideration?
OK. I can’t guarantee this is going to win, but I might have to give this a special secret award for being the most original story of the contest! *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Lori! Thanks for entering The "'SCREAMS!!!' HALLOWEEN CONTEST!" , and I hope to see you enter the contest again next year!

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Review of Lost Incantation  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there, Koraro!
This is pretty neat! I like they style you wrote this in-it has an 'old country' feel to it, at least in my opinion. I'm guessing that might have something to do with you live there in Japan, but I could be mistaken.
I like the idea of Grandma Zep reciting that incantation over her pumpkins 'to be kind to them', and the small talk she made with Alberto while she made her pumpkin stew was a nice touch.
But it was what happened when Alberto didn't do as his mother asked (per Grandma Zeppa's request) and instead kept some of those seeds that made this shine.
And having those 'marbles' becoming the hottest item with the kids was great!
But to have Alberto's own son cut his eye out because he didn't say the incantation? Awesome. Just a shame he forgot those special words!
Nice job bring this full circle with Alberto going to the farm house at the beginning and ending the story with him staring at it with his one remaining eye!
One niggle:
‘All bent over(,) she was and barely taller than the chair’ (also kind of awkwardly worded-not sure you need 'and' in there)
Otherwise, great job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Kotaro! Thanks for entering the contest, and I hope you enter next year!
PS-I'm still in the process of reading and judging the stories, but I should have the winners and Honorable Mentions posted tonight or tomorrow!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Bill!
This, like all of your stories, is pretty good!
I like the idea of you following your little sis up to that graveyard and into that mausoleum, only to find her 'praying' (for lack of a better word) to that creature (that she created? *Shock2*) as it hovered over the 'mishmash of human bones and remains'. And the descriptions you used for the creature itself were perfectly gruesome: 'oozing putrescence, rot, and decayed bones of all kinds'! *Smirk2*
But it was the creature's demand that it hear your screams that was the focal point, and having it grab your throats was cool. Thankfully, you were smart to enough to grab that manuscript and save yourself at that last moment.
I'm not too sure about the ending, though. The part about how the creature died was good, but that last line seemed a little anti-climactic, at least in the way it was worded, anyway. But that's just my opinion, for what that's worth!
One typo:
"And now you will die(.) human." (comma)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Bill! Thanks for entering the contest, and I hope to see you enter it again next year!
PS-Love that cover pic!
PSS-I'm still in the process of reading and judging the stories, but I should have the winners and Honorable Mentions posted later today or tomorrow!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there, Kevin!
This is pretty good for a rock-n-roll band-themed Halloween story, and it's certainly a pretty original idea. I couldn't say for sure, but I think you have some real band experience, either currently or in your past.
I like how the group is playing in that Civil War graveyard and having that woman's battle history make such an impression on your main character. So much so that he writes an instrumental piece about her, even though you and Eric seemed to be clashing over the title (or the 'untitle') of it.
Great job with the spelling and grammar, as well as the dialogue, and having the spirit of that woman appear at your gig and demanding for you to play 'her song' was a cool way to end it.
I can't say it was the scariest story, but like I said, I like the haunting idea of it.
Write on and rock on, my friend! 'Twas a pleasure to read, and have a fantastic weekend!
PS-I'm still in the process of reading and judging the stories, but hopefull I should have the winners and Honorable Mentions posted later today or tomorrow. I kind of under the weather with a nasty head cold right now.

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Review by Angus
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Bon jour, Beholden!
Well, for just realizing you’ve acquired a taste for horror, I’d say you’re doing pretty good!
I had an inkling somebody would use that prompt for a police-themed story since they take pictures at crime scenes, but I wasn’t expecting something like this!
You did a nice job of building up the suspense, and the descriptions were great. I also like how you brought Sophie into this. You could have just left her out completely and let Callaghan discover those pictures by himself.
And yeah, I’m a big fan of surprise endings, and you came through there too! *Thumbsupl* Normally I can spot those, but this one got by me. Touché!
One tiny niggle (sorry to be so picky):
‘Memory was still there with all the usual faces and events(,) but those few hours leading up to my death were gone’
Otherwise, bravo! I can see why bobturn put that ribbon on this. Congratulations on the victory, and I can tell you’re going to be a formidable adversary for the other contestants!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Beholden! PLEASE! And have fantastic weekend!
PS-I just noticed that as of today you're no longer considered a 'Newbie' on here! *Bigsmile* Congratulations!

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Review of The End  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hey there, Horror Scribe!
This is pretty good for a FF piece! I like how you used that prompt phrase for this apocalyptic ending of the world from these nasty creatures. I just wish you had more words to describe them! And I guess a little more time wouldn't have hurt either, huh? *Laugh*
I kind of also wish you could have let us know how it was your fault.
For God's sake, what the he** did you do, Horror Scribe! *Laugh*
Great spelling and grammar (thank you!), and the ending, albeit a tad ambiguous, was cool!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, have a great day, and good luck in the contest!

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Review of Joe's  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, J.C. Pickens!
This isn't bad for your first piece on here. It kind of hits home because I'm from a small town (currently living in large city, and not liking it! *Angry*), so I know all about small-town bars. But we didn't take too kindly from city folk wandering into our water holes!
I like where this was going with the stranger wondering what was up with all of Joe's customers, but we never find out, and it doesn't really have an ending. Don't get me wrong; there's nothing wrong with ambiguous endings, but I wish you could have squeezed a little more information into this to give us at least something to go on. You still had 59 words to use.
Course that's just my own humble opinion, for what that's worth!
Great spelling (thank you!) and telling, but I did spot a couple of typos:
"Hey, you see that guy over there?" The man whispered to Joe. (the)
"Not that!" The man snapped. (the - these are speech tag niggles - if you want more info, check out the link below)
Otherwise, nice job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, J.C., good luck in the contest, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something more about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies"  and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there, Norman!
I see we share the same opinion of this moron who claims to be our president, and I thank you for standing up for our moral and ethical values!
You've done an excellent job here of telling it like it is, but what scares me more than anything is why can't the republicans see it? For God's sake, it's a plain as the nose on their face!
But I've done some thinking, and I think most of them CAN see it! They won't admit it, but they're scared of little tiny donna rump! That's a damn shame too, cuz I have a feeling that when a lot of those senators come up for reelection, they're not going to fare too well at the voting booths!
Great rhyming and meter, and a few of those stanzas really hit home. Especially
'He plays at war and peace each day
As if it is a game
If things don’t go the way he wants
He finds someone to blame'
What idiots gave him the power to blow up the world?!?
It doesn't so much scare me myself as much as I'm scared for my Grandannachildren and all the other children of the world!
Hey! I just read another poem a few hours ago dealing with little tiny donna rump that I think you might enjoy! I liked it so much I even put a ribbon on it! It's about as short as this one, but it says a lot, just like yours! Here it is: "Invalid Item" 
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! It was pleasure to read this, have a fantastic day/evening, and don't forget to vote!

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Review of The False Hope  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Howdy, RS!
I only became computer savvy in the last few years (and I still consider myself to be only the first grade!), but I know enough LAN and internet to know what this was about.
It seems you were given a two-sided coin here, but at least you had the choice of making lemonade when life gave you lemons! I can certainly see your conundrum: having access to a treasure trove of any and all things of entertainment value whenever you like versus having a fast internet speed. They say you can’t have your cake and eat it too, but at least you have one joy out of that little square port.
But does that make up for what you originally desired? I really don’t know, and apparently you don’t either.
Oh, well. If I was in your shoes, I guess I’d just be happy with what I have.
A few niggles (sorry to be so picky!):
‘bit it wasn't what i expected’ (but, I)
‘It meant they they considered watching movies something wrong...'
‘broadcasted’ should be ‘broadcast’
‘Now, after almost an year of using it’ (a)
Otherwise, nice piece, RS!
By the way, where is BIT and what college/university is it?
Kee ponw ritin gon, RS! Thanks for sharing this, and I hope to see you back here soon!

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Review of Great Uncle Bert  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Aloha, Michael, and happy early 12th 'birthday' on here!
I thought this was great! I can just picture these two older, bible-thumping relatives being initiated into the Georgian 'lifestyle'! Talk about getting off the path of the straight and narrow (by no fault of their own!).
But the best part was the ending with how Uncle Bert and Aunt Matilda were 'found' after having some of Mother's 'wonderful' compote! *Laugh*
One comment, one suggestion:
'...which had been erroneously predicated by some misguided divine' (are you sure you don't mean 'predicted'?)
I love your description of Aunt Matilda and Uncle Bert! *Laugh*
Bravo, Michael!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the laughs, and I hope to see back here soon! We need more of your brand of humor these days!

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Review of Am I a Slob?  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there, Cardawnia!
I don't know if this a true self-recollection of yourself or not, but I can tell you it speaks volumes for me! *Laugh*
I'm not exactly the neatest person in the world! Far from it, in fact! I rarely put things back where they belong, but that doesn't mean I don't know where everything is! Yes, I know it might look like to total mess to some, but like you, I consider it just 'buried treasure'! *Laugh*
One other thing you touched on with this:
'I beg, I cry, I plead, I whine!
I scream; I don't see why
I must clean this space
Called 'mine'!'
I totally agree! If it's MY space, then why does it to be tidy and neat? *Angry*
My sister is so clean, I'm scared to even walk into her house!
Great job, Cardawnia!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a very messy wonderful day/evening/tomorrow!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Greetings, Harlow Flick, and happy 18th 'birthday' on here!
For a short FF piece, this is good! I write horror, so I was intrigued with that byline, and you pulled it off well! I also enjoyed how you kept us in suspense right up to the very end wondering just what that terrible creature was that was about to attack you!
Could it be...SATAN? (*Laugh* Sorry-just had a flashback from The Church Lady on an old Saturday Night Live skit!)
Seriously though, I've heard of people really doing this in landfills, and your descriptions were great!
I also like how you threw us a curve ball with that line about a disposable diaper absorbing a trickle of blood from its mouth.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Harlow! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Review of The Next life  
Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Bon jour, Kindred!
This is neat personification piece about a Travel Clock, and it's not wonder it won that contest! Congratulations!
What's neat about this is that you're showing that this clock not only keeps time, but sees time as well. Even after it has stopped working. And then to have the Master and Mistress either lose it or forget about it, only to be found, refurbished, and put in a glass case as a valuable antique was good way to end this.
Some clocks and time pieces truly are special! My father gave me his father's 1916 Elgin pocket watch once, but I told him to put it back in the safe because I knew how much it meant to him, not to mention how old it was!
Well done, my friend!
A couple of tiny niggles:
'I almost worried the numbers off the dial until (I) heard the rasp of the key in the lock'
'They talked of the fine food prepared (for) each meal.'
Kee ponw ritin gon, Kindred! Thanks for sharing this, and have a magnificent day/evening/tomorrow!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Привет, Paul!
I like this, and I can see why it won the FF contest! Congratulations!
I believe all parents think their kids are aliens at least once in their life, or at least I have! To use the title from that TV show, Kids Do The Darndest Things, although I never caught one of my daughters eating snails or bugs!
But they're not French, either! *Laugh*
Great job with the prompt phrase, and the dialogue was natural and realistic, or at least as realistic about two people talking about alien children.
'Beatelgeuseans'? *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Paul! Thanks for sharing this, and have a fantabulous day!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Jim, and happy early 19th *Shock2* 'birthday' on here!
I'm not very computer savvy, but I understood most of this, and I thank you for that bit of history on how that term came to be in your new job. I too would be extremely curious about where that term came from and what exactly it meant. But I really enjoyed your idea of it! 'Medical specimen bottles flying all over the room with little notes stuffed inside them'! *Laugh*
Well done, my friend!
It's amazing how far we've come since the turn of the century, eh? I remember when people were asking what the Internet would be/could be used for! And these were allegedly smart computer folks!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Jim! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Review of The Trigger  
Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, BXC!
I don't read sci/fi as much as I used to, but I thought this was a catchy little piece. You've given the reader enough background to pretty much know what's going on with Robert, his mother from the past, and he himself in her womb.
And, just as mysterious as time travel is, you've left us with unanswered question: if he kills his mother while he's still inside her womb, what will happen him? Will he cease to exist, since he would never have existed at all?
Quite the paradox, eh? *Bigsmile*
Great spelling and grammar, but I did spot one tiny typo:
'ofthe day he had left his home'
Otherwise, nice job! Not sure where you're going with this or if you even to plan to expand on it all (since you have other things to attend to-I see you in the process of writing 'Return of the Vinslings'), but thanks for sharing it!
Kee ponw ritin gon, BXC, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS- I noticed you don’t have any Merit Badges yet. Click on My Account (on the left hand side) > Achievements, and then go back and check your email. You should have a few surprises waiting for you there! *Bigsmile* You only need to do this when you’ve reached certain ‘achievements’.
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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*

Howdy, Medz, and happy early 11th 'birthday' on here!
These may be just random thoughts that have been drifting around in your head and you wrote them down because you were bored, but you said some very wise things with this, whether you know it or not!
You're darn tootin' there's no such thing as a perfect relationship, and to paraphrase a certain judicial saying, 'anybody who thinks there is has a fool for a partner!'
It's just not possible! No two people are so perfect for each other that they can't find at least one tiny fault with the other! And the sad thing is that when they do find that one tiny fault, it's going to grow so quickly and exponentially they won't know what hit 'em! They'll be in divorce court within 24 hours!
Have I 'been there, done that?' What do you think? *Bigsmile*
Great job with this, Medz!
Love that line about the 'expedition of the soul' and the 'mystic elements of relationship mechanics, when all it was just pure dumb luck that you two happen to be very compatible'! *Laugh*
So true!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend, wherever you are! Have a great day, and I hope to see you back here soon!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Greetings, Lucky Lady!
And speaking of lucky, you really do seem lucky to have somebody so special in your life like this! And then to write a short tribute to him to a bunch of crazy people like us?
I'm kidding! I'm hardly what you'd call a 'romantic' (I write horror!), but I think it's great that you did this! Not many people can say what you've said, or maybe I just don't know about them, but either way, hold onto what you have! As you say, you'll never give up your 'addiction'!
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, LL, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Review by Angus
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello there, Thisoddlife!
I know this is an older piece, but if you think Republican times were rough 13 years ago, you should see them NOW with the whack job Republicans put in office!
Oh, I guess you do, huh?
It's been so long I almost don't even remember who was in office in '06, but you've given me enough clues to figure it out!
Anyway, like I said, we currently have the most dishonest, dumbest, racist, narcissistic, law-breaking, goat-banging scumbag you could ever imagine for a president! And ya know what the really funny thing is?
This MORON is currently in the process of being impeached! Granted it likely won't pass the Senate because it's controlled by the Republicans and they're so scared of little tiny Donna Rump they kiss his a** every chance they get, but when their turn comes around to be re-elected, they ain't gonna have a prayer in h*ll!
Nice job, my friend!
'I happen to like red, so I registered as a Republican.' (*Laugh* What a perfect reason!)
$50K Contribution? Door Prize? *Laugh*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Thisoddlife! Thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful day and weekend, wherever you are!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Guten tag, Ken!
Seems like it's been ages since I last R&R you, so I was happy to find this whilst perusing the Comedy Genre today!
As always, you've knocked another one out of the park with this piece about a talking mirror and a woman who misses the fine line between what is spoken and what is heard! *Laugh*
Very well done (as usual), my friend! The rhyming was superb, the meter was spot on, and that cover photo is perfect! Apparently not all that is seen is also not all that is shown! *Laugh* Dang! I just made that one up! Gotta remember that one!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my Ken! Thanks for the laughs, and have a super-far out day/evening/weekend!

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Review by Angus
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, SandraLynn!
This is a neat and rather bizarre poem about something most folks wouldn't even think about, and you did a great job of writing it!
A crocodile for a pet?
Sorry. I wouldn't consider having a croc for a pet in a million years, regardless of whether or not I read this! And you gave some very valid points on why they shouldn't be pets!
I'm no expert on poetry, so I'll try stay away from the technical stuff. Some of those two line stanzas were not only vivid, but hilarious as well! Having one wear a collar? Seriously? *Laugh* About the only thing you left out was would he fetch a ball? *Laugh*
My favorite two stanzas were:
I endure winter; freezing winds, snow, ice, and sleet.
Picture a croc wrapped; hat, coat, scarf, boots on his feet.
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Dog responsibility; stooping and scooping.
I do not want to consider a croc pooping.
You don't want to consider it? Heck, I don't want to even imagine it! *Shock2*
Well done, my friend, and I can see why this took home those two 1st place ribbons! Congratulations!
Kee ponw ritin gon, SandraLynn! 'Twas a pleasure to read, and have a wonderful day/evening/tomorrow!

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