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Review of Bella  
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Rated: E | (3.5)

An interesting story about a special companion and helper. I thought it would add a little more interest to your story if you mentioned what special training Bella recieved before coming to you for evaluation. Below are listed a few suggestions I hope you will find useful in helping you polish your story.
SUGGESTIONS:
Line One; Try wording this something like; 'My best friend, and helper, is Bella.
Paragraph One, Line Four; add a comma between 'me and or, and commas after the words; ' by'and 'special'.
Paragraph Two, Line Three; 'wondering'should be 'waundering'
I found your story very interesting and it was easy to understand the close relationship and friendship between Bella and yourself.

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Review of Success  
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Good tittle and descriptive line. I liked all the movement and action packed into this very short story. Imagery was vivid and very easy to see in the reader's mind. Emotional impact is quite dramatic as one realizes that for the one Father, simply being out with his child is the true joy and success. Pacing, grammer and punctuation are all well done, and I felt the story fulfilled the contest prompt admirably well.

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Review of Poor Poet  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, I am here to provide you with some feedback on your item. Please note that ALL comments contained in this review are only one reader's opinion and are meant only as suggestions. Use what you find helpful, and ignore the rest.Most importantantly, Keep Writing!


TITTLE, DESCRIPTION, ETC; Short, interesting tittle that caught my attention very well. The descriptive line suited the story contents.

CONTENTS; I liked how Native American lore was entwined into the plot to add depth and suspence to this children's story. I felt this would add great interest for the younger children's vivid imaginations and they'd develop vivid mind pictures from the story, holding them enthralled. It certainly worked on me ! The uplifting, happy ending was a perfect finish to this magickal tale.
I enjoyed the tight, crisp writing style that avoided long narratives. Events flowed logically and in a way that holds reader interest very well.

Characters, Dialogue: I loved the characters of Illeina and her Grandmother, both were very easy to visualize and relate to. Grandmother was a person I wish I knew in real life ! I felt it was her deep, spiritual beliefs and wisdom that made this story so special.

IMAGERY; EMOTION;Imagery was well done and very easy to picture in my mind, particularly the part where 'Poor Poet'returns when his mistress slipped off the steps. Emotions are strong and I experienced sadness, joy and wonder as I read.

SUGGESTIONS; My only suggestion is that a short transition sentence or paragraph would help the flow and clarity if placed between the part where Illeina's father says he'll place the newspaper ad and in the next sentence she's dancing at a campfire.. I got a bit lost there for a few seconds.

OVERALL THOUGHTS; A delightful children's story that catches both the heart and imagination, I can see this being a favorite bedtime story of both child and parent alike.

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Rated: E | (4.5)

I enjoyed the slow, contemplative flow of this poem. It held my interest and made me think about life and the bigger picture. Both the tittle and descriptive line were attention grabbers for me. I found the thoughts and verses flowed easily together, and I thought the last line a perfect finish to this poem. My favorite verse had to be Verse Five, because these are questions I have asked myself. An excellent read that many will relate to and enjoy.

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Review of Berserk  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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TITTLE, DESCRIPTION, ETC; Catchy tittle and your descriptive line really adds to pulling the readers interest!

CONTENTS; A very well planned and executed plot and storyline. I loved the twist at the end of this one. Fresh and unpredictable are the two words that come first to mind in describing this story to others.

Characters, Dialogue: The main character is everyone's 'average joe', just doing his job until circumstances send him over the edge. This could be the person next door, or the person you meet on vacation. You let us know this person intimately without alot of dreary narrative. Show, don't tell is plainly executed in this character. *Thumbsup* Secondary characters are also well presented to add credibility to the events. Dialogue is simple and believable, it moves the story forward, building tension and drama as it unfolds.

IMAGERY; EMOTION; I found the imagery short, concise and very easy to visualize. My emotions seemed to escalate with the POV Character's, he certainly had my sympathies!

SUGGESTIONS; None of any concrete help to improve this, it stands well as it is.

OVERALL THOUGHTS; An excellent story of an ordinary person driven to fantasy and madness through the uncaring rudeness of those he is forced to interact with. A Halloween 'Must- Read !

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Review of Dead Steps  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

I loved the flowing rythm of this free verse poem, it really struck a chord in me because it reads like song lyrics and takes on it's own life. The words are intriquing and the poems theme and drama increase verse by verse, I just had to keep reading! *Thumbsup* There were a couple of lines that I felt could be edited/ polished to enhance both the flow and richness of this poem.
Verse Two, Line Four; 'contended' feels out of sync here when I read the piece aloud, like the word is close to right, but not quite, it almost feels used merely to hold the rhyming scheme...
Verse Four, Line Two; same problem as above here with the word 'keeping', is there another that might work a little better, [ I found myself wondering what was meant by keeping.]
Verse Five, Line One; 'should be made' try 'shall be made'[ keeps it in present tense throughout ]
Verse Seven, Line Three; I'd change 'never' to never more' to hold your rythm
Other than that, my only suggestions would be to add a little more punctuation to polish it up,
EXAMPLE:
Commas after; rest and find in last verse.
Overall, a delightful, dark read that I highly recommend to all!

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Rated: E | (4.0)

An interesting piece with an intriguing puzzle to play ! I would suggest capitilizing all of the words in your tittle so it stands out. I enjoyed the blend of honesty, irony and humour in this piece. Thoughts are clearly formed and plainly spoken. I'm looking forward to more of this wrier's work, although I did feel a more effective descriptive line would draw more reader interest. Stop by, maybe you can solve this riddle!

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Review of Mystery Meat  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, I am here to provide you with some feedback on your item. Please note that ALL comments contained in this review are only one reader's opinion and are meant only as suggestions. Use what you find helpful, and ignore the rest.Most importantantly, Keep Writing!


TITTLE, DESCRIPTION, ETC; Interesting tittle, good description that catches reader interest very well.

CONTENTS; Very fitting for a dark tale! I particularly liked how you got the truth of the mystery meat across without an open reference. *Thumbsup*
I really liked the repitition about the 'good folks at Midwest Nuclear Research..'
For me, it sent a shiver down my spine each time you repeated it and certainly kept my attention level high!

Characters, Dialogue: I felt that I was sitting down having a chat with your narrative character while hearing the other's voices mumbling in the background.. eerie! The narrative and secondary characters dialogue combines to move the story ahead clearly and concisely.

IMAGERY; EMOTION; An excellent job of 'show, don't tell.'You manage to give readers an excellent view of background and a sharp build-up of atmosphere in short, concise statements. Emotion rises in accordance with the progression of the story.

SUGGESTIONS; These center more on polishing, than on any real errors. Use what you find helpful, disregard the rest.
Paragraph Three, Line Three; ' But, and this goes without saying,it wasn't there anymore.'
Paragraph Seven; 'times is hard..'I'd suggest 'áre hard' [ same suggestion last paragraph]
Closing Paragraph; Last line; I guess'[ I'd delete that sentence, it seemed superfluous to the mood.

OVERALL THOUGHTS; A great little dark short story that I'd highly recommend to others!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Interesting tittle, you're descriptive line has a typo, 'to'' should be 'too'. Good flow to this piece, it reads quite smoothly and expresses a number of rather controversial opinions in a rather light-hearted way that, in my opinion didn't seem to come across as simply mean jabs at reviewers, but asked honest questions in the author's mind. Although I must admit the closing line read slightly controversial. I did feel this piece would have a better style and flow if it were edited and put into more definate seperated verses...
Example: Line Seven should be a period after, árt' rather than a comma - to keep it in sync with the previous verse.
Sorry, I'm not great at critiqing poems, but I did feel the lines should be a little more similar in length - even though I assume this is a free verse poem.
Overall, a memorable opinion piece on reviewing poetry. I'd also suggest raising the rating to ASR simply because we have many very young writers and reviewers on site that could be put off if the views were taken too much to heart.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed the rythm and flow of thispoem. It touches on a subject that is both sensitive and all too common, but this piece handles it with skill and sensitivity.
I could find no obvious spelling or grammatical errors and could think of no constructive suggestions for improvement.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed all the information given in this poem, it reads more like a story than a poem, which I always enjoy. However, I did feel this one might actually be better suited to
being written in short style. [ just my humble opinion from all the information and slight political overtones]
FAVORITE LINE: "Is Go mad at us? [I didn't do it] It's always great to see humour in a piece.
LEAST FAVORITE LINE: úmm, global climate change, [ the úmm' reads a bit rough in comparison to the overall flow ]
I also felt the verses might be broken down into shorter verses to holdreader attention tighter and provide natural pauses for readers to absorb all the great imagery.
EXAMPLES: [ please note these are simply one readers humble opinions ]
Break between Lines Five/Six in Verse Two, another break between lines Ten/Eleven in Verse Two.
Break between Line Six/Seven of Verse Four. I noted similar seeminly natural break points throughout this piece that I felt would make the overall flow of the poem smoother.
Overall, an interesting poem with vivid imagery and strong emotional connections for readers to enter into the piece.

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Review of Empty Tracks  
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Catchy tittle and descriptive line. I liked the soft, thoughtful flow to this poem. It made me think of nights as a child listening to the train whistles blow and wondering where they were going. I also enjoyed how each verse flows smoothly into each other and the gentle reminder that loved ones are like old trains, if taken for granted, they could one day be lost as well. I could find no mistakes or rough spots in this poem that could be improved, it is engaging, the imagery is well described and vivid and the piece itself is incredibly melodic and memorable.

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Review of Dear Gretel  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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TITTLE, DESCRIPTION, ETC; Cute tittle with an interesting descriptive line.

CONTENTS; Very creative. I enjoyed the humour hidden in these words and the story made me feel good just reading it. It brought back memories of childhood bedtime stories and my insatiable questions about characters after the story was done. You create an excellent, imaginative world and atmosphere for readers to enter into.

Characters, Dialogue: I found the character of Hansel most intriguing! His dialogue throughout as portrayed, is intriguing while moving the story forward at a relaxed and smooth pace. Nicely done!

IMAGERY; EMOTION; Imagery was well thought out and portrayed. I got quite caught up in Hansel's emotions of loneliness for his óld home'combined with his excitement over his new world. You handled these mixed emotions in a smooth, free flowing style that intrigues.

SUGGESTIONS; These are only one readers thoughts as I read - if you feel they don't fit your story, ignore them!
I can't tell you how...
'lots of lots of the others...'
'hollow place in my chest..'
'Not that I'm trying to exaggerating... [ exagerate]?
'they baths with yellow streetlight..' 'bathe [ the town}?] with yellow streetlight...'
çan I'[ I can ]

OVERALL THOUGHTS; A sweet, endearing story that I thouroughly enjoyed reading!

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Rated: E

A touching poem that really captures both the emotions and reality of living with a loved one facing this illness. I enjoyed the vivid imagery invoked by using winter scenery to depict emotions. I felt the poem flowed very well, with natural stopping places that allows readers to pause and reflect on what they've read. My only suggestion for improvement would be in Verse Three, Line Two; I suggest placing a comma between the words; ' subsided'' ánd'. Altogether an enjoyable and enlightening read.

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Review of June 3--Waiting  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, I am here to provide you with some feedback on your item. Please note that ALL comments contained in this review are only one reader's opinion and are meant only as suggestions. Use what you find helpful, and ignore the rest.Most importantantly, Keep Writing!


TITTLE, DESCRIPTION, ETC; Your tittle struck me as a little long, although it does draw interest, I think I'd shorten it to 'Waiting', as June 3rd doesn't feature in the story.

CONTENTS; An interesting plot line for such a short piece and it kept me curious throughout. I particularly liked your opening sentence, I expected the whole story to be along a different line just from that one sentence, so it hooked me nicely! Well done. You manage to create excellent atmosphere throughout this piece. I could easily picture the small, hard-working farming community.

Characters, Dialogue: Dana comes across as both smart and slightly desperate. Unhappy with her life, but accepting. I found her both strong and likeable. Her inner dialogue moves the story forward very well and provides interesting side notes for making the piece lengthier in future - I'd enjoy learning more about her life turns out. You have a third character in there that sounds very interesting for future! *Smile*

IMAGERY; EMOTION; Excellent use of images to create mood and build characters. Although I felt close to Dana, I'd have liked to know more about her past connection with Bobby Joe. [ I know you're on a word count limit, but this is one thing I felt kept this piece interesting and piqued my continued interest.
You did a wonderful job putting us in the location and through that, into the story itself.

SUGGESTIONS; The only real suggestions I can offer are on bits of punctuation, although I also felt some sentences were very long and the piece might be improved by providing a mix of long and short, punchy sentences.
Example:: But Bobby Joe had done it. and Now, the hypocrites who cursed his leaving, were lined up to welcome him back,even though they knew he would be leaving again. Probably before the last note faded.
I'd also edit for missed commas between words;
Paragraph Two, Line One; comma needed between 'deal'ánd' -- you have a few similar areas throughout.


OVERALL THOUGHTS; A well planned and delivered story with an excellent plot and theme. I'd definately be interested in re-reading this if you do decide to expand on it! I'd definately recommend this story to other readers who enjoy drama and romance.

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Rated: E | (4.5)

Great tittle, very catchy descriptive line! They certainly piqued my interest in reading this humourous short story! The story certainly delivers on thier promise, I was laughing all the way through this one. Excellent use of dialogue to move the storyforward and the narrative is filled with little details that put the reader in the scene, sharing a secret with the POV character. Nicely done! I did note a couple of places that I would suggest some punctuation.
Paragraph One, Line Two; comma after 'Luckily' and 'off'
Paragraph Five, comma after 'download'
The ending of this story was great, summed up the story and left this reader laughing! Well done!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I enjoyed the humour in this short story, it was well done for such a short piece. I did get a little confused between the beginning and end because at first it sounds like a child having breakfast, than it seems to be simply an adult woman doing something really bizarre - going by the 'Psychiatrist time' comment. It lost believability to me here because I really couldn't see it happening or the husband just leaving afterwards, it would be nice if this part was clarifyed a little for readers, although I understand the limits of word counts! I have a couple of punctuation suggestions;
Line Four; 'comma required between, 'sloppy' 'watery'
Paragraph Seven; Line One; I think slip sliding needs a dash between the words; 'slip-sliding'
The Author definately has a talent for the humourous side of life! Keep Writing!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello,Kilpikonna ! You have won a review package from me in the April Showers Of Joy Auction. Please accept all reviews as simply one readers feedback on your item. No disrespect or hurt is ever intented by ANY comment or suggestion. Use what you find helpful and delete the rest. Your story should be written as YOU see fit.
Thank you for sharing your work!

Tittle, Description: Sharp, catchy, fits the piece perfectly and develops reader interest from the start.

Contents;[Flow, Clarity]: I liked the interesing, fresh perspective on the 'James Bond' frenzy. My favorite part was the Birthday Card note regarding the 27th sequel - I couldn't help both agreeing andlaughing, because the Bond sequels do seem to just keep coming and one often wonders why these women keep hooking up with him. A very intriguing perspective in this story!
I liked the easy flow and pace of this piece, events fall into place easily, happening in a logical and believable manner that kept me reading.

Plot: Well planned and believable. I could see an actress wondering about her career after one of these parts.

Characters, Dialogue: Your main character was a person I'd love to meet. Her sense of self and humour were well-developed and her emotions of jealousy and 'who cares?' at the end were not only consistent, but believable.

Suggestions: I have no constructive suggestions on this piece. I really enjoyed it. There were no spelling, punctuation or grammer errors that I could find.
Well Done! *Thumbs-up*

Closing Thoughts, Rating: An enjoyable, fun read that packs alot of entertainment value into a great flash fiction! My rating is based on the quality of writing, believability and the fact that this piece appears very well polished as presented.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, , you have won a review package from me in the April Showers Of Joy Auction. Please accept all reviews as simply one readers feedback on your item. No disrespect or hurt is ever intented by ANY comment or suggestion. Use what you find helpful and delete the rest. Your story should be written as YOU see fit.
Thank you for sharing your work!

Tittle, Description: Both are excellent and interesting choices that fit this piece to perfection.

Contents;[Flow, Clarity]: I was impressed by the clear flow of this story, backstory and inner conflicts are woven carefully throughout the story with no wasted words to confuse the reader or place them outside the experience. I felt as though I were part of the family expieriencing a deep and personal tradgedy and experience.

Plot: This story delivers a heartfelt reality in the message that 'although we know everyone must die, nobody can ever be emotionally prepared for the fact.'

Characters, Dialogue: Each character is alive and three-dimensional with very strong and different personalities. I felt drawn to each one for thier own particular brands of inner strength. Dialogue between the family and limo driver was well handled and believable. It gave great insights into each person's thoughts and personalities, while showing varied customs and reactions to funeral customs.

Suggestions: I can offer no suggestions to improve this piece, grammer, punctuation, flow were all handled exceptionally well. I found the piece very polished in it's presentation.

Closing Thoughts, Rating: An exceptional story that delivers the true inner horror and struggle on losing a loved one and the strength of character and understanding of family ties to deal with these emotions. My rating is based on the fact that in my mind, the story is polished enough to be published if the author should so desire. An emotional and inspirational read.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Excellent tittle and descriptive line for this story! I really enjoyed how you used dialogue to tell and move this story foreward, it works very well to fill in background and put your readers right there with the characters in that subway. Both Elijah and Will are very easy to visualize and I could easily picture Will as a friend or neighbor. Elijah was also an extremely believable character whom you portrayed without an ounce of put-down or dis-favour, a most refreshing change there! Your plot and story-line appear well thought out, which creates a very compelling read. I do have a few minor suggestions, mainly on spelling, that I felt would help this story, please use or disregard any suggestion as you see fit...
Paragraph Four, Line One; 'shuttered' should be 'shuddered'
Paragraph Eight, Line Three; he decided was best..' [ insert 'it' between he and decided]
Paragraph Nine, Line Five; 'interest' should be 'interested'
Paragraph Nine ' flicked his yes.. [ yes should be eyes ]
One last note on your closing sentence, I found it a let-down and quite jarring in comparison to the context of the rest of the story, which was really very up-beat.
You might want to change the last line simply to one of Elijah having warm feelings over the universe NOT being ended yet, or perhaps his hope to see Will at the taco shop on another day? [ just a thought]

A story well worth reading, I'll definately be spending more time in this Author's portfolio!
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Review of Let Go  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello, Lilith. I am here to provide you with some feedback on your item. Please note that ALL comments contained in this review are only one reader's opinion and are meant only as suggestions. Use what you find helpful, and ignore the rest.Most importantantly, Keep Writing!


TITTLE, DESCRIPTION, ETC; Good tittle!Short and catchy. I liked your descriptive line, it made me want to read your story.

CONTENTS; Your story has an interesting theme and a good message that, 'doing what's best isn't always simple.' I felt you had a very promising start to a truly dramatic story but that it could use a little expanding and editing to make it as strong and compelling as I believe you intended it to be. For example, I think a little more detail on Alyssa would help readers connect with her on a deeper level - one needs to have a firm connection to care about a characters fate. You give some excellent details and imagery, but it feels you are only scratching the surface of her emotional turmoil.

Characters, Dialogue: Alyssa is a strong character, but I felt that stronger emotional detail would bring this out in her. Perhaps her eyes look red and swollen, or she's shredding a tissue into bits [ shows deep inner turmoil]
You could also add in some inner dialogue to break up the long narrative. Example, the chapter where the various thoughts are going through her mind could be written as an inner argument with herself to create tension and drama, perhaps another passenger might speak to her...

IMAGERY; EMOTION; The imagery you have is quite good, but I think you could add to it to heighten the readers emotional investment to keep reading. Example from Paragraph Two-
She hadn't always looked like this, with her long, dark hair hanging loose, limp, oily from lack of shampoo. Dark smudges lay like etched shadows under her swollen red eyes. Gone was thier carefree sparkle, instead they stared back at her in accusation, dim, washed-out green orbs of pain and sorrow....' [ I'm certain you could do better than I with this scene, but you get an idea of my meaning anyhow.] I'd make her feelings a seperate paragraph told through inner dialogue and narrative of memories of her relationship and why she's running away. A hint at her age might be good.


SUGGESTIONS; I noted a few spelling typos, here are the ones I found;
Paragraph One, Line One; comma needed between 'window' 'and'.
the sun shined 'shone'
Paragraph Three, Line five; use semi-colon after 'wide grin' comma after teeth. End sentence after 'eyes. New sentence;' His hair was dark brown.'
Paragraph Four; 'It was fading...' 'It faded more with each mile she put between herself and her old life.'
Paragraph Five, Line Three; ' spin' 'spine'

OVERALL THOUGHTS; I enjoyed the concept and conflict of this story, if you decide to edit it or expand it, let me know, I'd be happy to re-read and change my rating.
Keep Writing!

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Rated: ASR | (3.0)

I felt that with a little polishing and editing, this would be a very nice fantasy story. I did find it confusing that one remembered them being 'girls' together, what experiment? Could you make this part clearer, maybe expand it to note in more detail if an experiment had made them animals? I also found the idea of animals believing in vampires, etc. to be a bit unbeilavable, which threw me out of the story. I would suggest a strong edit for partially spelled words, particularly 'it', you have a number of these errors throughout your piece, easily fixed by a read and polish. Here are a couple of things I noted;
Descriptive line: 'is' should be are or become.
Paragraph One, Line three; 'and forced them'.. might read smoother as ' which forced them' or ' forcing them'
Line Four; comma needed after 'over' and spelling; ' up i' [ up in' ]
Paragraph Two, dry, little real feeling- try re-writing it from Eleyana's point of view including her feelings. [ you might want to do this throughout your story]
A very promising start to an interesting fantasy tale.

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

A cute, entertaining story that was fun to read. I enjoyed following along with all the comparisons to different fairy tale princesses because it leads to interesting information on this author's true life. I liked the honesty and reflective thought throughout this piece. The story kept to a nice easy flow that made it easy to follow along with the author's thoughts. My only suggestion for improvement would be;
Paragraph One, Line fifteen; I think you meant to type;' WHEN others..' in this line.

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Rated: E | (5.0)

A sweet and enchanting story about a little boy's love for his mom. I found it so easy to visualize the family all snuggled together and the little boy slipping off to check out the beloved tulip plant. I could hear his little feet swishing over the carpet and hearthe seriousness in his tone. I felt this story was well planned, it flowed so smoothly that I was captivated throughout the piece. You gotso many important background details included in this short piece that really made it shine, no wasted words. *Thumbsup*
I saw no grammatical or spelling errors and felt the piece to be truly polished.

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Rated: E | (5.0)

An interesting and informative article! I particularly liked the tips on creating business cards to hand out and the one for ebay and other auction sites - that one Inever would have thought of! Excellent points were given on the value of inviting family and friends, I hadn't really thought about how many people that would include who weren't related to me. I also enjoyed the easy, comfortable toneof this aricle because it was like two writers sitting down over coffee trading ideas. Points are well made and easy to understand, directions are given in a manner anyone can easily absorb and benefit from. A very helpful and well presented piece on marketing one's work through networking.

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