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Review of The Sanguine Song  
Review by Espero
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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The Sanguine Song  (18+)
She has been alone for centuries. Can she find what - or who - she needs? (Adult Content)
#1767831 by ๐ŸŒ• HuntersMoon
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero

*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: Dark and seductive poem. Flows very well and reads like a story, making reader want to continue on. You start off with the vampire feeling lonely and sad, musing about lost lovers. You end with a victory she has acquired.

*Check2*Form of Poem: Unsure

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors

*Check2*What I liked most: The storyline

*Check2*Errors found: None

*Check2*Suggestions: None, perhaps I could get some from you?

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Review of Pale Woman  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | (3.0)
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 Pale Woman  (E)
The Go-between
#1554568 by bob county
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: I would have liked to see more of a story with these characters. There were so many names in this short story that it became confusing to me.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: Mithra, Iranian deity of covenant, light, oath, justice and the sun. Tammuz, God of fertility, Gia, daughter; others.

*CheckG* Dialogue: n/a

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Suggestions: In such a short story, I think there were too many names to make the reading enjoyable. This is just my opinion; do not let that discourage you from further writing.

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Review of At Folsom Prison  
Review by Espero
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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 At Folsom Prison  (ASR)
Johnny Cash album review (Writer's Cramp entry)
#2291474 by Jeff
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: I thought your review of Johnny's Cash's Folsom was clearly researched thoroughly. I learned some facts that I did not know and thought it was very interesting. Johnny Cash certainly was a colorful musician who overcame a lot of trauma in his lifetime.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: Review of Johnny Cash's music

*CheckG* Dialogue: n/a

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors

*CheckGr* Suggestions: The review went the 'extra mile' and it clearly was written only after doing extensive research.

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Review of Schrodinger's Cat  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Schrodinger's Cat  (E)
A quantum fairy tale
#2180654 by Max Griffin ๐Ÿณ๏ธโ€๐ŸŒˆ
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: Don't cut yourself short on this story. It kept my attention throughout and I thought it was very imaginative. Not to mention, I have a cat.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: And cat and its owner.

*CheckG* Dialogue: n/a

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep using your imagination to write more. I thought you did a good job.

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Review by Espero
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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 star light, star bright  (18+)
first star I see tonight
#1919851 by Rhyssa
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*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: A poem of wistfulness; perhaps a love gone bad and wishing for a new one?

*Check2*Form of Poem: Wasn't really sure of the form. It was not rhyming and had an uneven rhythm. Maybe a free form?

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: The dreaminess of the verse

*Check2*Errors found: None

*Check2*Suggestions: Keep using your imagination in your writing.

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Review of Love is Kind  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | (5.0)
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 Love is Kind  (E)
Christian devotional for parents of preschoolers.
#2292477 by Barbara Swihart Miller
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: The story made me reflect back to raising children (now grown). Did I do all the right things? Of course not. It was a more comfortable time back then when we didn't watch so much TV, didn't have cell phones and computers. Now, I see what is happening and you are so correct, we have all lost touch with each other.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: n/a

*CheckG* Dialogue: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Suggestions: I hope that your message is seen by a lot of people because we all need to take a step back and remember those small acts of kindness could change a life and how great would that be?

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Review of Rebirth  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | (5.0)
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 Rebirth  (E)
this poem is about the changing seasons and the birth of a new year
#859138 by super sleuth
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero

*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is a very lovely poem that takes us through the seasons in descriptive verse. I liked it very much!

*Check2*Form of Poem: Rhyming

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors

*Check2*What I liked most: The poem flowed so well.

*Check2*Errors found: None

*Check2*Suggestions: You showed us in this poem that you have a good grasp on how to write a well rounded poem. Keep submitting, we would love to read more of your work!

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Review of Change  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | (5.0)
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 Change  (E)
Three Minute Read
#2089171 by Jacky
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: I loved the story. I get upset when we talk about animals invading our space. It seems humans forgot who was there first. Where do we expect the animals to go when there is nowhere left to roam. This is true of animals and sadly, human to human. I always am pained when I think what happened to the native tribes of America. This read like a tale that the Indians would tell over a campfire.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: A pack of wolves.

*CheckG* Dialogue: None.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep submitting and we will keep reading.

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Review by Espero
Rated: E | (4.0)
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 Moonbeams and Magic  (E)
what happens by the light of the moon?
#1542843 by Lou-Here By His Grace
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*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: First of all I love the title, it invokes magic. I liked the poem and the descriptive words therein. It was lovely.

*Check2*Form of Poem: This was a semi-rhyming poem but did not have a standard meter. Verse 1 & 2 rhymed the 2nd and 3rd lines. Verse 3 rhymed lines 2 and 4. The 4th verse stood alone. It was still beautiful.

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: The story it told.

*Check2*Errors found: None.

*Check2*Suggestions: Keep submitting and we will read.

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Review by Espero
Rated: E | (4.0)
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 Comely Is Home: Spirits Rise  (E)
The dreams of a romantic couple - athletic aspirations - a sports poem.
#2211373 by Tim Chiu
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*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I like this little poem. It was very descriptive.

*Check2*Form of Poem: It was a rhyming poem but the meter was off in a few places:
Verse 1: 10 10 9 9
Verse 2: 9. 9, 9, 8
Verse 3: 9, 9, 9, 9
Verse 4: 9, 10. 10, 10

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: I liked the flow of the poem; the meter did not seem to change it.

*Check2*Errors found: None

*Check2*Suggestions: Keep submitting. I enjoyed the poem.

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Review by Espero
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Flying without a Net  (E)
A letter of peace from a love that brought costly thrills
#1421910 by Redtowrite
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: I like this story. It was a glimpse into a world most of us know nothing about with all its glamour and excitement. At what cost though? Some get so hooked on drugs and power that you wonder why they want this kind of life. That's why we are all different, I suppose.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: A woman talking about life with a band member.

*CheckG* Dialogue: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I only found 1 little thing:
1) a acoustic (an)

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep sending in your stuff. I enjoyed the story!

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Review by Espero
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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 The Stone Cottage-prologue  (13+)
something i've started...need to know if i should continue...your thoughts please :)
#951432 by Fyn
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: Absolutely! A resounding YES, to continuing with this story. Not often have I read such vivid descriptive test and I was taken into that little stone cottage and shared the discoveries that the new owner was experiencing. This reads so well. Quaint, imaginative, interesting......more please.


*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: A woman who has purchased a stone cottage.

*CheckG* Dialogue: None present.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I questioned a couple of things:
1) her self (I thought this should be one word)
2) in to (I also thought this should be one word)

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Definitely keep going on this one. It is totally worth doing.

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Review of Pandora  
Review by Espero
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Pandora  (13+)
Poem describing Pandora's dilemma.
#2260615 by Beholden
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*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I thought this was very well written. It started with a descriptive verse of the box then transitioned to the wonderment of opening it. The poem slowly built up the curiosity that could hardly be contained and then the submission of finally opening it. Aren't we all faced with a choice like that sometime in our life.

*Check2*Form of Poem: Free form.

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: The way the poem built up the suspense.

*Check2*Errors found: None.

*Check2*Suggestions: Keep submitting. You kept my interet throughout.

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Review of Sideburns  
Review by Espero
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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 Sideburns  (13+)
Adapted from life...
#1433750 by Lou-Here By His Grace
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*CheckGr* Overall Impression: This is a story of judgment and how we often judge someone without knowing much about them at all. Here, we have a Vietnam veteran who most likely went through some horror in the war and found it hard to re-enter society. Children, can be bullies without realizing what they are doing. This poor man was a hero after all.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: A group of children and a Vietnam Vet known as Sideburns.

*CheckG* Dialogue: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep submitting. I found the story interesting.

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Review of The Key to It  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | (5.0)
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 The Key to It  (E)
microfiction challenge week 4
#2267825 by My Sox Are Green! Don't pinch.
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: Thank you for posting the Prompt. It helps to review. I think you did a wonderful with the prompts you were given. This story begs for more; you could do a lot with this. I can see an old clockmaker with a beard (someone like Geppetto in Pinocchio) in his shop guarding them. Maybe one has a secret? Maybe they are magic?

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: An unknown person with a watch and a key. Oops, the key is gone! Oh no!

*CheckG* Dialogue: There was none.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep writing. This little piece of yours got me thinking. That means you have the ability to keep the reader interested.

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Review by Espero
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Did Death Come Knocking This Morning?  (ASR)
True event in the early morning hours of December 15, 2017.
#2174447 by TheBusmanPoet
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero

*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This was about an experience with death that most of us will experence one day. Sometimes a bad dream can lead to us thinking we were near death, but it was just a dream. I wasn't sure which it was in this verse.

*Check2*Form of Poem: Not sure. Most of the verses rhymed on the 2nd and 5th lines but it varied on the verse: Death never scared - this rhymed on the 1st and 5th verse. Verse no one knows had 4 lines; the rest had 5. I felt the meter was off and the poem didn't flow well.

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: The writer had a good plot and imagination.

*Check2*Errors found: None.

*Check2*Suggestions: It is my preference not to have all of the lines bolded; to me that distracts from the overall poem but that is just my opinion. Keep sending more writing!

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Review of Ordinary Heroes  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | (3.5)
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 Ordinary Heroes  (E)
Ordinary Heroes
#1573214 by Charity Marie - <3
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero

*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is a poem recognizing our heroes out there. I don't think that theme can be overstated as these people put their lives on the line each and every day for others.

*Check2*Form of Poem: I couldn't come up with a type of poem or a distinct meter. To me, this was a free verse without rhyming or meter.

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: The theme.

*Check2*Errors found: None.

*Check2*Suggestions: From your comments it sounded like you were not entirely happy with this verse. I think your heart was in the right place and the sentiment was there. For me, I had trouble with the flow and meter of the poem but I liked the tribute to the heros.

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Review of More  
Review by Espero
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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 More  (18+)
...that you ever dreamed you could be.
#2273119 by Fyn
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*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I like the story behind this poem. The writing is bringing a person from hopelessness into the light. They are showing them that they are worth more than they think they are. Letting this person know that they do not have to be the best but do the best they can. It is a story of hope.

*Check2*Form of Poem: That I am not sure of. There was no particular rhyming pattern that I could figure out nor likewise a meter. That being said, it did not distract from the message.

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I did not find any errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: The positivity of the verse.

*Check2*Errors found: None.

*Check2*Suggestions: In my opinion, I prefer to read something that is not all bolded To me it is distracting. The bolded type did not take away from the message the writer was trying to impress on the person. This writer shows a lot of emotion.

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Review of Maniac Act 2  
Review by Espero
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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 Maniac Act 2  (13+)
Beyond Reality
#2290808 by Josy
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*CheckGr* Overall Impression: Very imaginative story. Is this a screenplay? I ask because I see it is referred to as an Act. Appears that Adrian has stumbled into something unworldly and finds an old friend or acquaintance there. The friend has turned into something different but still tries to help Adrian escape.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: Adrian, Lynn, Lynn's wife, Prescence

*CheckG* Dialogue: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found a couple of things to point out.
1) the massive metal door in our had its valve. (needs a word after 'our')
2) Am I sure that is him? (not sure on this but can you start a sentence with the word "am"?)

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Good plot, interesting story.

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Review of Lynn Samuels  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | (4.0)
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 Lynn Samuels  (E)
A reflection on my brief period as an aspiring singer/songwriter
#2290911 by VeeJay
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*CheckGr* Overall Impression: Ah, the sad world of starving artists, singers, and writers. Makes you wonder how many go unnoticed just because a host or reviewer did care for your work. And yet, there are so many different opinions out there.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters:A struggling singer tries to get more work or notice.

*CheckG* Dialogue: No errors that I found.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: Just a couple small things to point out.
1) In my opinion it would read better with spacing between paragraphs. That is just a personal preference on my part.
2) your phone umber (number)
3) like my choice of music (likes)

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep sharing stories of the heart.

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Review by Espero
Rated: E | (4.5)
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 View from the back of a Pick-up Truck  (E)
Focusing on the past
#1925914 by Prosperous Snow Valentine
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*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This is such a cute little poem. You have a lot of descriptions here which makes the reader feel as if they too, are watching things speed by. I liked the 'country' feel of it.

*Check2*Form of Poem: I am guessing free form.

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: I liked this whimsical feel to the poem.

*Check2*Errors found: None.

*Check2*Suggestions: Keep submitting and using those descriptions that make us feel part of the story/poem

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Review of Ren-Ren  
Review by Espero
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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 Ren-Ren  (18+)
She is who she is and who she isn't
#2150624 by Fyn
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero

*Check2*Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: I looked at the prompt on this and thought, oh, I don't think I'd ever be able to do this. You did a marvelous job and it was entertaining and comedic, thoughtful and bold.

*Check2*Form of Poem: Freestyle I believe?

*Check2*Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*Check2*What I liked most: The sassines of it and the way it flowed.

*Check2*Errors found: n/a

*Check2*Suggestions: Keep submitting it was fun to read your work!

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Review of Substitutes  
Review by Espero
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Substitutes  (13+)
When someone is absent, someone else does the job. CRAMP winner.
#2238662 by THANKful Sonali LOVES DAD
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*CheckGr* Overall Impression: I really laughed at your story. You were able to put some humor into what is actually something many of us might face one day. I liked the annoyance of the old lady and her spirit. Also the nephew who made light of a difficult situation and took it in stride.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: An old abent minded lady. The nephew. A worker. The Mayor.

*CheckG* Dialogue: Perfect

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep sending your stories. They are enjoyable!

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Review of Halloween Mystery  
Review by Espero
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Halloween Mystery  (E)
A little mystery
#2199646 by Queen NormaJean healthathand!
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: I liked the 1st paragraph. All too familiar story of being trapped on the interstate but you created a mystery with the constant phone calls. When the apparition appeared in the car window, I was thinking it would end with a slasher or some kind of terrible Halloween murderer. Instead, you surprised us with an old ex.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: A woman and her ex.

*CheckG* Dialogue: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: I found no errors.

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep creating suspenseful stories for us to read!

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Review by Espero
Rated: E | (4.0)
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 The Will of the One Who You Can not See  (E)
You know theyโ€™re there, right? Alternate title, The One Near the Willow
#2217951 by Joesmoe
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This review reflects my opinion only. I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful! Espero.

*CheckGr* Overall Impression: Interesting dark story. I'm wondering if this is a parallel to someone who hears voices. In this case it was someone you cannot see. I can understand how everyone around would be freaked out.

*CheckGr* Plot/Characters: A man and his voices.

*CheckG* Dialogue: None

*CheckGr* Grammar/Spelling: Only 1 small error I found.
1) you can't bare (bear)

*CheckGr* Suggestions: Keep using that imagination to create interesting stories.

Thank you for sharing your story! Keep writing - we will keep reading!

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