Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose
and one of the judges in the
and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.
Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.
MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:
Below are the elements of a short story that I reflected most while reading this piece of yours. Please pick if you like and just disregard it if you don't like. I hope you will find my humble review to be useful to you and will encourage you more to write.
TITLE:The given title fit to describe the given prompt in the contest, though its simple but it gives an impression to be intriguing because of its simpleness but double meaning.
CHARACTERS: There are a few characters in the story, though the character was not centralized in the story in their conflict and solution, it just fine because through making up the solution or in making the characters move it was comprehended there their personality and attitudes.
SETTING: This is the part where I found the prompt of the contest the background or the main subject of the story. I can say you did well on this part. By using the different senses the reader are able to comprehend well the background and the sequence.
DIALOGUE: There is dialogue, and you did well in putting the desired amount of dialogue it didn't outshine the other elements of the story instead it makes the story lively.
MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any suggestion, but I am looking for the climax, if there is a climax, I didn't easily notice it, I would suggest that you add more glaze and impact on it.
Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!
Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!