Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What?

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

Below are the elements of a short story that I reflected most while reading this piece of yours. Please pick if you like and just disregard it if you don't like. I hope you will find my humble review to be useful to you and will encourage you more to write.

TITLE: The given title gives an impression about adventure maybe by using the word picnic. Picnic always links to adventure, as well as life is full of adventures.

CHARACTERS: I found many characters here, and I can say it didn't centralize to the main characters, each character has a significance in the story

SETTING: I found here the given prompt of the contest, you did well in making it as a background that enhances the story and its sequence.

DIALOGUE: There are lots of dialogue, but it just fine because it makes the story lively and moving as well as it helps to emphasize too the characters personality.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
My only doubt is the climax of the story, I'm sorry I didn't find it here, or maybe there is a climax but I didn't notice it, I would suggest that you add more highlights or detailed on this part to create an impact on it.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, Prosperous Snow celebrating

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

Below are the elements of a short story that I reflected most while reading this piece of yours. Please pick if you like and just disregard it if you don't like. I hope you will find my humble review to be useful to you and will encourage you more to write.

TITLE: The given title gave a mystery impression and any reader will be interested to find it. This captures the given prompt of the contest.

CHARACTERS: Characters are only a few, but you managed well building their characters by showing through the way they act and move in the story.

SETTING: The setting is not totally highlighted in the story, it just serves as the background wherein it didn't outshine the other elements. The sequence is fine too, precise and has a smooth flow.

CLIMAX:The climax is in the ending part, wherein you left your reader to have their own conclusion what will be its ending.

DIALOGUE: The amount of dialogue that you put is also fine and precise, it didn't confuse or distract the sequence, instead it helps to know and shows the personality of each character.

AUDIENCE:You didn't limit your audience understanding, because you used words that are coherent, understandable but strong. It is for everybody.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, PureSciFi

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

Below are the elements of a short story that I reflected most while reading this piece of yours. Please pick if you like and just disregard it if you don't like. I hope you will find my humble review to be useful to you and will encourage you more to write.

TITLE:The given title fit to describe the given prompt in the contest, though its simple but it gives an impression to be intriguing because of its simpleness but double meaning.

CHARACTERS: There are a few characters in the story, though the character was not centralized in the story in their conflict and solution, it just fine because through making up the solution or in making the characters move it was comprehended there their personality and attitudes.

SETTING: This is the part where I found the prompt of the contest the background or the main subject of the story. I can say you did well on this part. By using the different senses the reader are able to comprehend well the background and the sequence.

DIALOGUE: There is dialogue, and you did well in putting the desired amount of dialogue it didn't outshine the other elements of the story instead it makes the story lively.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any suggestion, but I am looking for the climax, if there is a climax, I didn't easily notice it, I would suggest that you add more glaze and impact on it.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, Angus

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

Below are the elements of a short story that I reflected most while reading this piece of yours. Please pick if you like and just disregard it if you don't like. I hope you will find my humble review to be useful to you and will encourage you more to write.

TITLE:The given title reminds me of something I've watched that talks about crashed- I link the given title to the movie Airforce 101 or even Titatic, so my impression is there's no different on the two said crashed.

CHARACTERS: main characters here are only two, the other characters are supporting characters, and I can say that you did well in building the main characters, making your audience or reader to love and be intrigued as well as to follow the main characters. You did well on this part.

SETTING: Maybe this is where I will find the prompt of the contest, the background, and as this element said it just serve only the background of the story. I didn't see or the prompt didn't emphasize more in the story.

CLIMAX:You did well too on this part, you make your audience be very interested to follow the characters and gave a good climax of the story. You did well in platforming it- beginning to hook your audience at the beginning and then it flows smoothly until you gave the climax. Though I already comprehend the ending if some civilian people were found by tribes even if the ending is common, you still created a good climax that left an impact.

DIALOGUE: Dialogue makes the story lively, you have a dialogue part here is where you let your audience/reader to be relaxed after the tragedy at the beginning, its good that you divert the use of a dialogue here not only for knowing the character
personality but making also the audience to be relaxed and following the sequence until the end.

AUDIENCE: I can say that this is for everybody, I mean you didn't limit your audience in how you express and use words. Though there are words that it's hard to understand but it's only a few and its balance in combining them some natural words but strong.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:
I din't find words that distract the flow and no doubts arise.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!

Hi, M.A Gonzales

Greetings! I'm Samberine Everose and one of the judges in the

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Short Shots: Official WDC Contest  (ASR) Use the photo to inspire your creativity. Write a short story and win big prizes! #1221635 by Writing.Com Support

and I'm here to give you a review in your entry.
Thanks for entering in the contest.


Please note that I am not a professional reviewer, anything I say here is just my humble own opinion and views, don't forget that this will be changed by others perspective also. Take it if you like and drop if you don't like.

MY THOUGHT & IMPRESSION:

Below are the elements of a short story that I reflected most while reading this piece of yours. Please pick if you like and just disregard it if you don't like. I hope you will find my humble review to be useful to you and will encourage you more to write.

TITLE: When I glanced the given title, it gave me an impression that this could be a fairytale story, and I didn't disappoint when I begin and finished the story.

CHARACTERS:The given characters are only a few, but you did well in expressing how they deal with the story, or in other words, you did well in building their own character and personality by showing and stating an example.

SETTING: The setting didn't outshine the main element of the story, it really serves as the background. Though the given prompt of the contest is linked here as the setting, it didn't make confuse the other elements.

CLIMAX: The climax here I think is the time when the couple will finally meet face to face, and knowing that they are meant for each other.

DIALOGUE:You only give a one part dialogue, but you only chose the dialogue that will give an impact. Wherein it really gives an impact to the reader.

AUDIENCE: This is for everybody, words used were not only limit to those who have mastered in English, so I can say that this is for everybody.

MY DOUBT & SUGGESTION:

For me, this is a great fairy tale love story, and I don't find any doubts about it. Well Done.

Thank you for your participation in the contest.
I hope to see and read more of your works again!

Just keep On smiling while stay in WRITING!