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Review of expiry  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very bold and yet humble work. You open your heart to the reader, to try and convey the deep hurt within. Articles like yours can help many who are suffering because they remind them that they are not alone. The line that struck me most was;

"My once closed self harm wounds open, they are on fire as the salt pushes it's way into them."

No-one should hurt the way you hurt, no-one should feel worthless. Just because we don't match up to this shallow world's expectations of cosmetic popularity, it doesn't mean we are worthless. My own precious daughter suffers from PTSD and deep depression. She thinks she is a nobody and that she is unloveable. But she is wrong.

You mention the Bible in your words. Let me leave you with some reassuring words from the Bible. When you feel worthless and unlovable, remember the following words from God;

"Whatever our hearts may condemn us in, God is greater than our hearts and knows all things."

"A heart broken and crushed, you will not despise, oh God."

And if you worry about the future or death, remember these words from the Bible;

"God will be with them, and death will be no more, neither will sorrow, nor outcry, nor pain be anymore."

These things are promised by our creator. Remember the "Lord's prayer"? - "Thy kingdom come, thy will be done, on earth as it is in heaven."

Boldly written. I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Heavy  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your words are so honest and humble. Articles like this enable others to reach out and share. Just reading your account felt so familiar, not just to me, but they reminded me of my lovely daughter who has severe depression and has self-harmed many times.

This world is so intense and chaotic that casualties of the mind are inevitible. We were not made to endure such heavy loads on our amazing minds.

May I share something that has helped both me and my daughter to endure, and even find some relief and happiness?

We have found genuine comfort and hope from the Bible. Jesus says;

"Come to me, all you who are loaded down and weary, and I will refresh you."

King David wrote;

"A heart broken and crushed, oh God, you will not despise."

And when we feel the worst about ourselves and think that we are bad or worthless, God offers words of comfort when he says;

"Whatever our hearts may condemn us in, God is greater than our hearts, and knows all things."

And, for the future, do not despair. The Bible promises that, when God's kingdom comes;

"God will wipe out every tear from their eyes, and death will be no more, neither will sorrow, nor outcry, nor pain."

The Bible even promises that God will stop the destruction of our environment when it says;

"God will bring to ruin those ruining the earth."

So take comfort, fellow sufferer, as we, and millions of others do. There is a wonderful future waiting for you, if you want it.

Good writing.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Paradise  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
I relly like your words, especially the way your perspective changes as the poem progresses.
You start with an expression of beauty and you end in despair.

You seem genuinely concerned for our lovely earth. May I share some words of comfort about our environment?

Jesus promised; "God will bring to ruin those ruining the earth."

Those words were spoken thousands of years ago - when man was not ruining the world!

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Morbid  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your words are evocative and true. You highlight a real inconsistancy in our huamn race.

I like your observation about us being human nature.

At times, I feel as you do that we are a waste of space. but other times, I am comforted by the words of Jesus when he promised us;

"God will bring to ruin those ruining the earth."

Those words were written thousands of years ago, when our earth wa not being ruined - think about it!

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Exhausted  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well written.

Your opening words well describe the empty, helpless feelings of so many of us when we witness the dstruction our beautiful planet.

Your final line is very powerful, and humble. We are unwilling participants of this destruction, this rape. We have no more power over what happens to earth than we have over governments and kings!

However, we do have the promises of one who is greater and more powerful than the powers that control our lives. Let me leave you with a wonderful promise from our creator:

"God will bring to ruin those ruining the earth."

Those words were spoken by Jesus about 2,000 years ago. Think about it - the earth wasn't being ruined then!

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is really good writing!

I love the way you capture such emotion with two or three words per line (I wish I could do that but I am such a windbag!). Your passion for nature shines through your words and is so natural.

Like you, I sigh at the inhuman, human treatment of our beautiful world. Though we may personify this planet, it is still a part of creation. Let me leave you with some comforting words, from an ancient source;

"God will bring to ruin those ruining the earth."

Those words were written 2,000 years ago, when there was no pollution - think about it!

Take comfort, the one who made this earth will not let it be ruined!

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Mother Nature  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your words are strong and profound. I like the way you give personality to nature, that of reclamation and revenge. Never before has the metaphor of a mother nature been so apt. as is today in our poisonous world.

I can tell that you are concerned for our lovely earth, as I, and millions of others are. Let me leave you with a comforting thought from a promise made many centuries ago, by one who has the power and the desire to stop mankind's rape of our planet;

"God will bring to ruin those ruining the earth."

Those words were written thousands of years before we started to ruin our world, think about it!

Well written.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Buried Alive  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love the personal perspective of this, your dream tied to our planet. It's pretty good, as far as us mortals are allowed to dream. Brilliant choice of volcanoes, nature re-claiming itself. Your last lines are your finest, portaying great irony.

I too fret about our beautiful home. However, I am no longer so anxious as others because I have comfort and assurance about the future of our planet. It is a promise, written long ago. It simply states;

"God will bring to ruin those ruining the earth."

Think about that, when those words were written, almost 2,000 years ago, the earth was not in danger! Our creator knows what we are going through and, he will intervene, when the time is right.

Well written.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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for entry "Chapter 2
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
I read the first two chapters to get a feel for the story. I must admit, I don't usually read fiction but, since yours had an ecological theme to it, I was interested.

You write well, in an easy to follow narrative. Your characters quickly become visible and likeable. I enjoyed the interaction between the granddaughter and grandpa. I am curious to see where the story goes and will try to read more when I get time (I have a lot going on at present, my daughter is ill and her little pet rat died yesterday.) I like the positive feel to your story and I like the way it educates while entertaining.

I hope this helps.

Moomin
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
Yet, here you are, drawn to this community of writers. This is a good place to be, it has many fellow sufferers who are relating their sorrow in a dignified and beautiful manner.

It seems that life has dealt harshly with you and has made you question your own worth.

You mention jobs, families, dreams. All important, to a degree, but we often lose sight of our place in the universe. Do you believe that you were created? Do you believe that the one who created you knew what he was doing?

Through the pages of the Bible, your creator speaks and, he understands your sorrow and your low self-esteeem. King David wrote - "Your eyes saw even the embryo of me" and that "A heart broken and crushed, oh God, you will not despise."

When you feel at your lowest, and alone, when you feel worthless in the world's eyes, remember that your creator does not see you that way. the Bible says;

"Whatever our hearts may condemn us in, God is greater than our hearts , and knows all things."

For the future, including your future, the Bible promises;

"He will wipe every tear from the eyes, and death will be no more, nor will sorrow, nor outcry, nor pain."

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Untitled  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
Really like this ("like" is probably wrong word!)

I love the way you capture so many intense feelings in so few words. For me, that is the sign of a gifted writer. I use far too many words when I write.

You words can be a healing process for others because they remind them that they are not alone.

Keep writing.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Mental Mess  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.0)
You capture the whirlpool of mental illness really well with your words. I know it must have taken some effort and courage to write these words and, I admire you for it. In sharing your experiences on this site, you give a voice to the many who are in deep despair with mental anguish. By reading your words, many are assured that they are not alone.

You must keep writing such powerful words, for yourself and others.

As a fellow sufferer, may I share a positive thought with you? I have faith in our creator and I trust his promises in the Bible. Let me leave you with one such promise;

"God will wipe every tear from their eyes, and death will be no more, neither will sorrow, nor anguish, nor pain."

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of First poem  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.0)
Your opening words are promising. You write with a good flow and a positive note. Your first words are definately worthy of attention.

If I may humbly offer a little advice, you should find a subject, a theme or goal, something you are passionate about. I think it would unlock your full potential.

Just a thought.

Well written.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Extraordinary  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
I must admit, when I first saw your words I thought that you had cut short something. But then I read it again. I think I understand and, I think your words are powerful and beautiful and sad.

As someone who knows the dark depths of the soul, I wondered at your last word - "Free."

Well written.

I wish you peace.

moomin
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Lovely thoughts and aspirations, I admire your faith and your conviction. You reveal a Christ-like attitude when you think ahead to what you will do when you are whole and it is to help others.

Good writing.

May I leave you with a positive thought?

The Biblical character, Mephibosheth, the son of Jonathan, was dropped when he was a child, and became disabled. Yet, King David invited him to sit at his table. This is indicative of all of us because, when Adam and Eve sinned, they dropped us all and we became broken, imperfect. Yet God wants us to dine with him and he will make us complete.
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a great article, I really enjoyed it.

You develop your theme logically yet passionately. You sum up the disappointing state of faith in our world today. I like the way you highlight the gross inconsistency of those who criticize the Biblical narrative, presuming it to be false when, historically and legally, posterity demands nothing more than to treat any ancient document as a historical narrative unless, and until, evidence can be provided which proves otherwise. Cynical scholars accept the writings of Babylonia, Rome and ancient Greece without hesitation yet, dismiss the Bible because it makes supernatural claims.

I hope your writing inspires sincere people to build up their own faith by studying and proving for themselves that these things are true.

Well written.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of I Never Knew You  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I enjoyed your article very much and, I'm glad someone called time on the heated exchanges going on in the world (particularly on the internet).

As you so rightly point out, it is a shame that the two combatants feel that they are diametrically opposed and have no common ground. I know of many atheists who entertain the concept of other dimensions, time travel and even spirits. Yet I also know many religious people who are interested in science, in fact many of them have a scientific background. Unfortunately the world has invented stereotypes for both religious and non- religious people.

You are absolutely right about Christians not getting involved in heated arguments. The Bible atually condemns such things. However, it must be said that a Christian has certain scriptural responsibilities toward God and his son, namely to share the good news of the kingdom. In the Bible God says to his people, "You are my witnesses." God doesn't need protection but, when the world is accusing him of all manner of evils, he does grant his people the right to speak about the love that God has shown.

Anyway, good writing. Hopefully it will cool a few hot heads.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
I was moved by this beautiful account. I know the chapter that inspired you to write it. I have seldom come across such honest, sincere thoughts put to paper (or screen).

I was curious, when reading your words though. There appears a paradox in your thoughts. You seem to relate to God and Jesus well yet, you also seem to identify with those whom Paul spoke to who were searching for an "Unknown god."

Your writing is sheer quality.

Well written.

Mooomin
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Review of Godly Sorrow  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is lovely, filled with humility. You say so much with so few words.

I will read more of your works.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed your article. You are very observant and you bring out details from the Genesis account which are not noticed by many. Your comment about archery is particularly insightful. You obviously research the things you write about.

You paint a noble picture of the first human couple, with Adam choosing a double suicide, like Romeo and juliet (perhaps that was what Shakespeare was alluding to?). Your interpretation of the events in Eden seem tangible, at first glance. However, with, respect, you have overlooked some details in the Genesis account.

First of all, Eve would not have deteriorated or died on that day, despite God saying she would. The original Hebrew word "day" is preceded by the the adverb “in, rather than "on". The Bible was not referring to a 24 hour period, neither were the creative days 24 hour periods. Elsewhere in the Bible it tells us that God uses “a day for a year” when making certain prophecies. Finally, Peter tells us that “One day is as a thousand years to God.” Sometimes a lifetime is described by the word “day” (“in Noah's day”). Remember that God told Adam that "In the day you eat from the tree, you will positively die." But, ask yourself, what would have happened if Adam (and Eve) had not eaten from the tree? They would have continued living indefinately.

As regards Adam being noble and willing to die for his love. notice his words, when confronted by God. Eve blames "The serpent who deceived me." Adam actually cowers, to save his own skin and betrays his wife by saying "The woman you gave me, she made me eat." The truth is that Adam sought independence, the first democracy, and rejected God's love and generosity.

The good news is that God hasn't given up on the human race. He has arranged for us to be restored to perfection and unending life. "Thy kingdom come, thy will be done, on earth as it is in Heaven."

Sorry to ramble but, I do feel strongly about God's creation.

Good article.

Moomin
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Review of For Dad  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is so strong and deep. Your words are so raw that they caught me in a recollection of memories. Your love and devotion seep through the words.

These days, many are ungrateful for the love their parents give them. It is so refreshing to read your words about your dear dad, he must be an exceptional man.

I also read your poem anout your brother. I have to assume that it is not fictional and that you lost him. I am so sorry, if that is true.

May I leave you with a comforting thought?

Jesus promised that all those who pass away will be remembered and brought back to life, in perfect health. Remember that prayer - "Thy kingdom come, thy will be done, on earth as it is in Heaven." Guess what God's will is for us?

"Death will be no more, neither will sorrow nor crying nor pain."

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review of Rainbow World  
Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.0)
Lovely words, lovely dreams. Your writing shows your yearning for justice and peace. I like the way you compare colours to the human experience.

I wanted to share a lovely thought with you. Did you know that all the things you wish for in your writing have been promised by our creator?

Jesus taught us to pray "Thy kingdom come, thy will be done, on earth as it is in Heaven."

Guess what God's will for the earth is? The Bible tells us;

"God will wipe out every tear from their eyes, and death will be no more, neither will sorrow nor crying or pain."

"Happy are the meek, for they shall inherit the earth."

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed your article and your experiences. You seem to be genuinely searching for truth, not easy in this dogma-saturated world! I agree that organized religion has been a terrible representative for God throughout history. However, you may be surprised to learn that the very book that millions of religions follow - the Bible, actually denies and condemns their beliefs and ativities.

Regarding faith, it has been misrepresented and presented as a blind optimism or a credulity without evidence. Neither is true. Feel free to read my articles on "Faith" and "Suffering." Oh, and by the way, you were right, the Bible does not teach that there is a fiery "Hell."

Just because a tool is used for a wrong purpose, it does not mean that the tool was badly made or is of no use. Please give God a chance to answer the many accusations. Read the Bible for yourself, instead of another philosopher's (who has not read it) interpretation of it.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your words are powerful, honest and, most of all, understandable.

You have seen both the worst of man and the worst of religion.

Like you, I detested religious organisations and leaders, I watched fanatics hurt others and make themselves rich, in the name of "God."

But, one day I made a discovery that changed my life. I learned that the religions of the world do not represent our creator. In fact, the religions of the world actually stand condemmed by God himself. When I actually read the Bible, instead of being told by others what God says, I found out that God does not condone money-grabbing and tithes on his behalf. Neither does he condone man's wars and terrorisms. Furthermore, the Bible makes it clear that God does not select certain groups to save, while allowing others to die. And, contrary to what religious leaders claim, God does not "Work in mysterious ways" or "Take children to be with him in heaven." These are all misrepresentations and lies from the organized religions of the world, who do not know God.

If you want to know more, please feel free to read my articles about Suffering, and God's kingdom.

I am truly sorry for your losses and your personal suffering. I hope that you can give God a chance to show you that he is not the indifferent monster that the world has made him out to be.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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Review by Moomintroll
Rated: E | (4.5)
Lovely poem, lovely sentiments.

It's not often I read someone trying to encourage and support others who suffer from this numbing affliction. You should be proud because Jesus himself said that "There is more happiness in giving than receiving."

Well written.

I wish you peace.

Moomin
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