\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED ITEMS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/hollymerry/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/8
Review Requests: ON
1,603 Public Reviews Given
1,657 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Honest and encouraging
I'm good at...
Proofreading for grammar, letting you know which areas of your writing work and which might be improved
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, historical, adventure, sci-fi
Least Favorite Genres
Murder, horror, erotica
Favorite Item Types
I’m happy to review all types of item
I will not review...
Anything with graphic violence, sexual content or profanity
Public Reviews
Previous ... 4 5 6 7 -8- 9 10 11 12 13 ... Next
176
176
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem shows a deep bond with Big Jack, a special cat. His life is described in loving detail, from the moment he arrived as a stray and all you did to give him happiness to his passing. The poem is a great way to capture these memories, RIP Big Jack.
177
177
Review of In Memoriam  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This piece is a moving tribute to the seventeen people lost on NASA missions in a short space of time. As well as focusing on the loss of colleagues and family, the piece captures the dreams and zeal that inspired these space pioneers. The way it is written with a roll call made me feel as if I was present at a commemoration event as I read it.
178
178
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a wonderful story told from the point of view of the daughter of a 1920s star. The story revolves around a lovely mother and daughter relationship that felt very real, and also timeless. However, the other main element of the story set it firmly in the glamour of the 20s. Music, cars, perfume and hairstyles were talked about. Having a star for a mum was both wonderful and odd as the mum in the story appears in papers and not everyone is kind about her flapper persona. The girl takes it in her stride and both mother and daughter are supportive of each other.
179
179
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
What a life for Mary Boleyn full of expectations, betrayal, jealousy and loss. She certainly had some ups and downs! In the end, I guess she was the lucky sister as if she had stayed with Henry VIII he might have beheaded her as he did her sister Anne.
180
180
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this story with the beautifully pictured fantasy forest setting. Familiar legends, like Merlin, Viking myths and elves are referenced in a way that is very satisfying for an avid fantasy reader. The use of the senses and descriptive language are wonderfully done here and I felt like I was part of the story.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
181
181
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I always try to do my bit for the environment, so this was an interesting read. It was well structured with facts and research to support your points, plus holding back the best point about the fact supermarkets should consider the whole cycle of a bag’s life to the conclusion. Although it is commendable that supermarkets make changes, sometimes they are not as good for the environment as they seem. This article shows it is good to do your own research and find the most environmentally friendly way for you.
182
182
Review of Irvine  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the idea of a giant and siren cross child and the life she leads with humans seeing her and her family as outcasts. The coastal setting is great and nicely described. I like how the story opens with Irvine doing ordinary things like watching the sea and going home to eat soup, as this contrasts well with her extraordinary abilities.
I would maybe look at writing a more attention grabbing first line and try and make the first paragraph more show than tell.
183
183
Review of Woods Words  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem does a great job at capturing the atmosphere of the forest. It invests character into both the trees and animals, like the brilliant described dignified owl on the look out for prey. I also liked the focus on how the mood of the forest affects the person walking there, making them feel spiritually free. This encapsulates the magic and wonder of the nautral world well. I like the use of alliteration and poetic structure. The fact there are some areas of rhyme, but other endings do not rhyme, suggests the freedom the speaker of the poem feels in the forest.
184
184
Review of Secret Cave Swim  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is an intriguing read with a mysterious mood. The piece is highly descriptive and I could vividly picture the setting through the sensory details. Told for the point of view of a female character warily experiencing her surroundings on a night swim, the piece keeps information hidden about the character. There were many interesting details, such as that she came from the night sky and appears to live alone in hiding from ‘them’ that made his story a fascinating fantasy read.
185
185
Review of Wonderland blog  Open in new Window.
for entry " A Mad Tea-Party" Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This story has the moral to stop wishing for things that are impossible and be happy with things as they are. You have picked up on the tone of Alice in Wonderland where characters talk to symbolic individuals, here time. Through what might at first seem a nonsense discussion, the character discovers that it is the past memories and future hopes that make a relationship as much as spending time with a loved one in the present.
186
186
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An amusing and varied collection of short stories. They show how well you can shift mood and write different genres. I especially liked the amusing stories about the mother given a green balloon and giving birth to a green baby and the infant with the first word duck throwing her rattle. All the pieces are well written and inventive interpretations of the prompts.
187
187
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved the creative idea of an unusal coloured purple pumpkin. The story draws on fairytale motifs of reward and a child being warned not to do something, which reminded me of Jack and the Beanstalk and Red Riding Hood. The tone is amusing and I liked how the boy only agreed to pick the pumpkin when he was offered candy as a reward!
I liked the pumpkin appearing again at the end, but the story felt like it should go on here. I wondered if you could create a circular structure by repeating the beginning lines at the end so the poem closes off more neatly?


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
188
188
Review of The Garden  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This short poem is full of images of spring flowers. It made it feel as if I were surrounded by colourful flowers, which is fitting as the poem ends by revealing that it is about a scene in Keukenhof in the Netherlands, famed for its spring bulbs. I liked the diamond shape of this short and sweet poem.
189
189
Review of OLD MAN  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This poem is a tragic musing on the loneliness of old age and the end of life. You have clearly put a lot of thought into it and it shows as each image and the choice of language reflects the message of the poem. The use of rhyming couplets where some of the rhymes are broken works well as it conveys the sense of the man's life breaking down as he nears his end.
I liked the use the image of the man beside a pond where the ducks he fed have gone as a metaphor for his sadly lonely end near the end of his life after all he did when he was younger and had his family around him. It is poignant that he uses the pond as a means of ending his life. The images of the church bell and final image of the angel also worked well for me.



I think wifes should have an apostrophe as in it is missing out some letters (should be wife has) to fit the rhyme scheme, so should follow the same rule as condensing other words e.g. it is to it's.
I wondered about putting the part where you change the narrative voice to focus on the man's first-person thoughts into quotes or italics so make it stand out more easily for readers? It is this section:
How am I to fill my days?
As all I love fades away
Too old to work, too young to die
To search for purpose, and ponder why?

I also wondered about adding something about the man's children, maybe being busy with their lives and living away from him, to explain why he feels no one cares enough for him to continue living and he commits suicide?
Also, I see you have set the rating to 'E' which means all ages and I wondered if maybe this poem is better appreciated by a more mature audience as it deals with suicide and there are some kids who are members of WDC who maybe need to be warned about this theme?


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
190
190
Review of Night Song  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love these images of the night in a forest and the faerie folk that live there. The atmosphere of the woodland at night is beautifully described and I felt like I was there. The fairies, unicorns, rock trolls and mermaids make it sound an interesting and full fantasy world.
191
191
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
The campfire is a lovely idea. It is autumn here in the UK. I hope we will have snow this winter as it looks pretty, the last time we had lots of snow was 2017. I liked the description of the witch legs hanging out a planter in Barnes and Noble, maybe the witch crashed her broom into the planter? It would make a good story.
192
192
Review of MANGO  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lovely poem that captures the beauty and sweet flavour of the mango fruit as an addition to meals. I got a clear picture of the sunny setting where the mangos grow. It is found as a dessert at buffets, at picnics and with a delcious sounding sweet rice breakfast accompanied by a choco drink. This sounds wonderful and isn't something I've tried before. I see you are from the Philippines to I wonder if it is a speciality there? The rhyme scheme works well in a nicely crafted poem.
193
193
Review of Doggish  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved the image of an elderly dog trying to hop and ending up looking like a frog, I could picture this easily and it made me smile. This short poem is full of amusing imagery and has a lyrical quality. I’m pleased he okayed in the fog and didn’t meet any cars too as I as worried about him in the road for a moment!
194
194
Review of Writing  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed the contrast of emotions between joy and weeping in this poem. This conveys the variety of writing to evoke both happy and sad emotions and share experiences from the soul with others via penned lines. Although only short, this poem does a lovely job at summing up the joy of writing and sharing it with others in the Writing.com community.
195
195
for entry "Whisper To The WInd" Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a beautiful poem full of hope and joy. It speaks of attaining God’s grace by keeping hope in your heart and bring positive and kind to others. This message is reinforced by the inspiring image of soaring like an eagle. The structured rhythm of the poem lends it a musical quality that adds to the pleasure of reading it.
196
196
Review of Enchanting Colors  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this bright and colourful poem where you describe so many beautiful images in a way that makes me think of the myriad of different things in life. Some colours are soft, like pastel baby clothes, others intense like the fire. The poem covers natural images like mountains snd the sea, and images of people wearing colourful clothing as they trying the city streets. The use of repetition worked well to reinforce the theme of the poem.
197
197
Review of His Beauty  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This beautifully written poem has a timeless feel with its descritpions based on traditional love poetry, nature and myths. It reminds me of Shakespeare's sonnets in the use of language to meditate on the beauty of a loved one. The focus on the qualities of the loved one is conveyed well with repetition and close detail. At the end it is revealed that the loved one returns the love of the speaker of them poem, so it was nice to have a happy ending!
198
198
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an original and well written piece where you write from the point of view of dust mite sized fairy. This gives another spin on whether fairies are real and what their lives might be like. The tiny size of the fairy and how they view thier world is vividly imagined. I got a clear sense of what thier life was like from the lovely and interesting descriptions.
199
199
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This story is hilarious! I love the cheek and self-satisfaction of the kitten, you did a great job at capturing cat personality here. What havoc Dr. Zhivago makes at the special birthday party. It would have been even more of a disaster if he got to the toilet rolls stash in Covid lockdown when toilet rolls sold out! The characters where well written and the story progresses well to the crescendo of the disaster as the guests arrive.
200
200
Review of Summertime  Open in new Window.
Review by HollyMerry Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a prophetic song full of memories, hearing about it playing on the radio as you drove back from Lucy’s funeral service showed it was meant to be and she clearly felt the song has a message for you. Hearing about her playing it on her recorder as a child, and later that you sang it at the choir together was poignant. This piece captures the power of music to link to our emotions and special times in life.
695 Reviews • *Magnify*
Page of 28 • 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/hollymerry/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/8