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Review of Half a unicorn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I hope Ali will be okay with Toby bringing his little sister to see her and the men don’t break her in. I feel very invested in the characters at this point and the dilemma for Toby makes me wonder what will happen next as his parents, especially his father, don’t understand that Ali us a unicorn.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Toby snd Ali deepen their bond despite Ali’s mistrust here as they make a deal. I like how as soon as this is done more tension is added as Toby’s father arrives and threatens that Ali will be broken in. The humour as he says Toby is making the horse neigh but he is actually talking to her was nicely done.
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Review of Summer Squalls  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this poem with its interesting Gwawdodyn format. It looks like it took some time to complete to fit the pattern and I thought it was a fun twist that the poem is about rain as it rains a lot in Wales (I live in Wales and can vouch for it being very rainy at times!). The poem captures the joy of a rainy day, especially for children who enjoy playing in puddles and with their rubber ducks.
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Review of Playing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem captures the love of a dog and the sadness that they have to leave us so soon which is the most tragic thing about the bond with a pet. I love how you captured the character of the dog as they do things they love, like playing with favourite toys, and what a good companion they are sitting nearby and clearly very attached.
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Review of "Lost Soul"  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this spiritual poem about the sea and how the bad weather and storms can make the ghost ship feel tossed. This poem uses the sea and ship as a metaphor for how life's ordeals affect a person and it was nice that towards the second stanza the speaker of the poem realises God can comfort them in their despair like a rescuer at sea.
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Review of The Ocean  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this poem that captures the charm of the sea and how its different moods, from calm to tempestuous, can bring such enjoyment. The lovely pictures accompanying the poem add to its meaning in a personal way that illustrates some of the descriptions that you used.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed how immersive this poem is as it transports readers to a dramatic encounter with a giant fish at sea. The use of sensory imagery and alliteration worked well in the poem at conveying the awesome size of the predatory fish and the danger the occupants of the boat felt. The allusion to Jonah worked well, as did the ending where it was revealed this was just a dream.
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Review of Half a unicorn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This chapter was an interesting and well written read that sets up for an exciting story. I loved the idea of a horse who is part unicorn and how sadly Ali was cast out of her herd for this. Her past was captured in an intriguing way and it made me wonder if she will meet another unicorn. Her capture by humans and the revelation that the boy can hear her talk made an exciting ending.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a fabulous story. I love Frozen and Whinne the Pooh and combining the characters worked so well here. You captured the mood of the stories and characters just right and the story was easy to picture and well written. I like how Anna and Eeyore become friends in the end as Eeyore is such a glum character but cute and it was nice that Anna appreiciated this.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a fun way to write about the 20th birthday party (or twotentieth party) from the point of view of a troll who has to help organise it. Grundle was a fun character who encountered mishaps as he had to invite elves and humans when he normally prefers the company of trolls, but luckily young Bogwart helped out with his new computer. The way you captured the speech and even the spelling mistakes of the troll added an extra layer of humour to the tale.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This story uses the mirror in a meaningful way to reflect on growing up and change and how sometimes growing up can bring negative aspects, like comparing oneself to others and not seeing yourself as beautiful however you are. I enjoyed the picture of the happy little girl who had been eating strawberries grinning in the mirror. I hope that someday the speaker of the story realises that they matter as they are and finds self-acceptance.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It was brilliant to see how many nursery rhyme words you managed to get into this tale. I enjoyed how it contains twists not only on the familiar tales but within the plot itself as Simon sets off looking for Mary Contrary to find information on the Weasel cafe, then turns to looking for Boy Blue, before finally arresting the farmer who overworks Boy Blue and makes him very tired. A fun read that children familiar with nursery rhymes will enjoy.
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Review of Mama Bear  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an enthralling and immersive read as the first-person narrator spots a mother bear and cubs and comes to bond with her. The mix of emotions as she sees the bear: thrilled, awed by the beauty of the bear, and scared, comes across well and the understanding they built up came across naturally as they realised they were kindred spirits. I enjoyed how the human did things bears enjoy, like eating fresh berries and seeking a quieter place to walk off the trail.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this allegorical story about how dogs emerged from wolves to guard sheep. The story is set in an idyllic time when animals and humans can talk to each other and shepherd Jordie is sat playing his flute when the sheep tell him that a wolf cub has been nominated to help him guard them. I thought this story was a creative and memorable explanation and it made a fun read.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I loved the creative titles and mottoes perfect for a fantasy world and found it hard to choose between them. When I made my choice of House of Oakheart (based on my dog being called Oakley) I was surprised to see this was the leading choice so far. I would have thought the ‘Let it be written’ motto would be leading.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This looks a fun and popular raffle activity. The dog merit badge is very cute and full of character, plus I smiled at the cartoon of a man who announces that he has won a grass strimmer when it is actually a goat that he has won and therefore more likely to cause more mayhem and trouble than a grass mowing machine!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The wicker sofa and the memories were described in such detail I felt transported into this story as I could both picture and hear the sounds in the scene. The wicker sofa shows the power of an object to be invested with memories as it holds the stories your grandfather told of his life as a boxer and in the navy, plus memories of going fishing with him. It sounded a comfortable place to sit any time of day and comfortable too with the big flowery cushions.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a fun and beautifully put together page. I loved the wording which opened like a mythic fantasy tale. The pictures of the dragons, trinkets and explanation of how to move through the ranks like a dragon tamer in a game made this an exciting read. A lot of work has learly gone into crafting this activity.
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Review of Flower Field  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love this vividly imagined story full of the beauty of the unexpected. The contrast between a heavy winter snow and opening to door to find colourful flower meadows worked especially well. I like how you captured the surreal feel of a dream as the narrator enjoys meeting Elisa and Madeline and spending time in their peaceful, beautiful world. Although neither of the girls speak until the snowflake falls, signalling the narrator to awake, this is taken for granted in the dream world. I enjoyed the twist at the end where the flower ring was real.

Some suggestions:
There is a comma and then a capital F for Frost, you should either put a full stop instead of the comma or make the f a small letter.
‘! how’ sound be capitalised: ‘How’
‘purple-ish’ has a capital i by mistake.
At the end it should be ‘flower ring laid on top of my coffee table’


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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I enjoyed looking at the wonderful pictures of you and your cats in this campfire. Bella and Tigger look so cosy sat with you in the pictures and Tigger watching over you with angel wings was nicely captured in the picture. Wishing you a very Happy Easter!
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Review of A Prince's Vow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a very emotional piece showing the meaning of love and memory. I like how you adopted the traditional tone of a fairytale as the prince learns lessons in how to truly love from the knight. Tragically, soon after he gets closer to the knight through his gifts and taking him on a date, the knight dies. In a memorbale twist it is revealed by the inscription on the statue of the knight that the knight loved the prince afterall and watches over him after his death.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is an interesting poem that uses the subject of the changing seasons to reflect on a relationship. It shows a very creative use of form, for example, drawing out the letters of slowly to suggest a long time passing. I liked the repetition in the first stanza keeping the poem together and the way the form changes in the final stanza, reflecting the change in the realtionship.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a creative and memorable twist on the dragon and dragon slayer tale. Here the Slayer has become bonded to the dragon as a mate through spilling each others' blood, and the dragon reveals this in her thoughts towards the end of the story. The writing style was good and the pace worked well. The only thing I would alter is have a reason for the Slayer to see him pupils widening, such as a reflection in a puddle of water, as otherwise he wouldn't notive this from his point of view.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very romantic and meaningful poem about self-worth, art and understanding true love. I liked how the poem expresses how an artist can be inspired by and love someone because of their appreciation of them as they truly look deeply at the person. The ending about fingers entwining was a nice image and made me think of paintbrushes or a pen held by the artitist.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Angel does some lovely posters, I thought I'd pop by to enjoy looking at and reviewing another of her pictures. You are fortunate to have such a talented art designer as a friend. This picture is more traditional as it shows Alice in a blue dress but again it is excellent at capturing textures, such as the soft fabric and fluffy cat and rabbit. The old fashioned clocks were a nice touch.
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