 Scary thought. Creative idea for a story. It sort of reminds me of that old story from Stephen King in Creepshow 
It's scary how one little spot he experienced on spread all over the world, so fast.
Please don't be discouraged. I hope you find the review helpful. The story is definitely worth revising. These are just my suggestions, please use them as you see fit. 
 paper after this but
paper after this, but
 I haven't been outside in I'm not sure how long.
I don't know how long it's been since I've been outside.
There're
There is
 bodies(,) but skeletons.
 thought that, in case anybody survives and
thought if anyone survives, and
 human alive(,) but
Aunt Jane(,) since
died and Kit was
died. Kit
right away(,) although he
 He said if he had a special brain it must have been given to him for a reason.
He said he must have been giving a special brain for a reason.
farmers around where we lived outside of Council Bluffs.
farmers, where we lived, outside of Council Bluffs.
After all Uncle Elmer's hard work the
After all of Uncle Elmer's hard work, the
 sprouts and weeds(.) Even the
body together(.), so to speak.
Kit's idea was a plant food that would make things grow. Rice and beans and other nutritious foods for us and for the world. Something to make things grow in a drought things to make food grow in the deserts and feed the world!
Kit's idea was a plant food which would help rice, beans, and other nutritious food grow all over the world, in different enviroments, including the dessert.
 put it, afraid
put it, for fear
You have to understand the attic is very hot in summer and very cold in winter so probably some of the chemicals had been changed or damaged as the set had been up there for a long time.
You have to understand -- the attic is extremely hot in the summer, and freezing in the winter, which made some of the chemicals change or become more potent from sitting over such a long period of time.
up there(,) except me
clean(,) very clean(,) I washed
rope ladder(,) meaning
I said try it on some weeds first and see what happens.
"Try it on the weeds first, and see what happens."
He didn't have much of it and he used only a few drops.
rubber mill(,) he looked down at the bottom of the property and said(,) "What
That summer of the drought any vegetation that was doing well stood out like a sore thumb.
The drought of that summer was so bad, that any vegetation which was doing well, stood out like a sore thumb.
results(,) which I have to say were encouraging.
The thing is the
property, And then it began to grow on the neighbors' property.
property, and spread to the neighbors'.
the Grass continued
the grass continued
The bad thing that is one of the bad things was that cattle couldn't eat it, because of the saw tooth structure on the back of the leaves.
One of the bad results was that cattle couldn't eat the grass, because of the saw-tooth structure which grew on the back of the leaves.
But the trouble with that was the grass was spreading
killing them climbing
killing them. It climbed
It died everywhere and the whole
We were wrong about that.
back to oil lamps before long.
more food. but
more food, but
It will be dark ~~ soon ~~~~
It will be dark -- soon.
Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed it.
Tracey
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as I need to use more imagery in my showing.