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Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What sublime imagery and fluent narration! I cannot highlight any one line because they all resonated so emotionally with me. What is the name of this kind of poem? I believe I have seen it before but I think it is derivative of the Japanese style like the haiku. You are well versed in your skill and I congratulate you. Great job and happy WdC anniversary!



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Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What can be said of such a short poem? At the least it leaves me thinking and wondering about deeper insinuation. As the quote goes, "When you take away from what you do have makes one focus more on what you have left." I paraphrased of course. lol. It is also easy to draw out what is written but at the same time it requires more mental inference. To me, this speaks of an undying, continuous, benevolence that cannot be expressed; it is too ingrained within the soul. I could go on of my assumptions but I will digress. lol. This was a gem that piqued my resolve! Good job and happy WdC anniversary!



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Review of Poor Jack  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (3.5)
One thing I like about this is the no need for tags as there is only two people conversing. It brings me deeper into the narrative. I was left wanting to know exactly who the woman was and why he forgets her. This scene left me quite curious. I'd love to see a new development in the short account. Also, why does the black SUV take Jack? I find shorter stories leave the reader reaching for more as I said I was left. lol. All in all, a good account full of intrigue! Good job and happy WdC anniversary!


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Review of Draco Argenteus  
Review by brom21
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This was a very wonderfully descriptive scene account. It was not really a story, but, as I said, it was a succession of scenes. I enjoyed it nonetheless! I like how you used multiple senses to build your setting. The cataclysmic destruction of the building at the end was full of flare and vividness. I did not get how the building collapsed and Krystal was still in darkness. You ended this with a good, lingering contemplation. It also leaves room for a continuation. Great job and happy WdC anniversary!



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Review of Broken Home  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.0)
So much can go on in the mind of a child. You illustrated that in this negative ordeal I felt a sense of torment for. I did feel the last sentence was too long and might be cut into two sentences. I also think the ending somewhat lacked a more emotionally charged finish. I suggest something that describes inner torment than just saying "troubled boy's emotions." I did like the words you used, although others may get hampered down by the tenor of your language. lol. Great job and happy WdC anniversary!



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Review of Waiting  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Great short story! This was my favorite line:

(This waiting was almost done. The ramp hissed down with an icy blast of wind and yawning darkness. The sound became almost as hard as the wind.)

It vividly transforms the scene into an emotionally charged experience. This definitely deserves the awardicon! The title was perfect and it made me curious to read it. The action of the soldiers, including Sergeant Miller, diving into the night was very vivid and succinct! I only hope Miller lives to see his two beloveds soon. Nice job and happy wdC anniversary!



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Review by brom21
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
-A story in the form of prose-wonderful! Your description of Andromeda had a pungent flare! I perceived a metaphorical meaning in how the "The oceans, bays, and rivers" are made of blood. Does it reflect death or war in some way?-or is it just me? lol. You ended this well too. It left me at a loss and forlorn, in a good, emotional sense. It is short but flows well and brings me right into the scene. You had a poetic resonance with the first line; it kind of drifts into my mind. Great job and happy WdC anniversary!




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Review by brom21
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very impressive! I loved how you used the metaphor of a seed and soil. It really paints a nice picture of the growth of a relationship and how deepness is used as a literal sense. And how somber is this poem!-but with such a melancholy bliss, particularly with the last stanza. I like how you used tears to reflect the girl's suffering that "waters" her resolve. Excellent job and happy WdC anniversary!



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Review of Running Away  
Review by brom21
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Forgive me for not understanding, but what exactly is going on here? Is this about the girl's regret about getting pregnant? Regardless if I got the jest, what you have evokes lots of emotion. Great job for putting so much in such a small space. The ending had a poetic flare to it and it fit perfectly! You created a vivid, succinct image that left me on emotion. Happy WdC anniversary!



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Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This was a very exceptional metaphor. I assume this is a metaphor because of the title. lol. What you have is quite short but packs a mysterious, emotionally provoking impact. The last words of the special larva is poetic and very powerful. What is life that is not truly lived? Well written, my friend! Happy WdC anniversary!




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Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You really approached this subject from all sides. I like your fourth paragraph that addresses consigning to peer viewpoints. I do believe once one finds the truth or basis of a matter, yielding to another is no longer wise. Of course you have to know for certain that you are right in the first place; that takes exceptional wisdom I think comes from the Bible as I believe all facets of life are held within it.

On another note, I love how you transitioned each sub-topic inside each paragraphs-something I apparently have an issue with. lol. Great job and happy WdC anniversary!




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Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I picked out one thing that sounded changing.

Below, "mildly" is telling not showing. use action or dialog to express Aunt Laura. Maybe-"She commented while speaking in a steady, low volume tone.
(She commented mildly, "I don't know; I kind of like)

I also think putting a tag here and there just to make sure we know who is talking. Sci-fi is not my forte, although I do off course like it, so that may be why I had to reread a lot of parts to get things. lol. There was something cool about the way you ended this; it just felt very apt and transitional that sets up something more. Kudos for that! Happy WdC anniversary!


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Review of We the People  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Amen to that bro! It is weird how your article totally encapsulates our current government/society. Never before has this been more applicable to the mandates, stolen elections, and outrageous laws and bills being passed. As you stated, the government should represent the people not hijack our God given rights. I am so upset at all the treason being committed! Unfortunately, things will just get worse. Thanks for the insight and happy WdC anniversary!



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Review of The Active Eye  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I marvel at your skill, specifically because I cannot nor have I tried to compose this kind of poetry. I love how you ended with the last stanza. It is so apt and it encompasses all that comes before it! The last line is unique. The soul is the template for all the emotion and occurrences you showed. Nice utilization of larger, more illustrative words. Happy WdC anniversary!



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Review of Mow the Lawn  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Below, your words are in parenthesis mine are not.


With what you have here, if the lawnmower is broken, what is Jimmy doing for hours?
(After hours later Jimmy sat down exhausted.)

In this part, even after reading it a few times over, I do not know what Jimmy is "turning over."
(It turned it over so he could see.)

Excellent visual transition!
(It was almost sundown.)

I would reword this to sound less choppy. Maybe something like-"...a few less harmful plants."
(...and a few other plants that could hurt a lot.)

Here, omit the word "itself." It conserves words.
(The grass itself was about up to his waist)


I was not sure if Jimmy died at the end. I would go back and reword this. I would also love to see more of this. It was creative. Thanks for sharing! God bless!

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Review of The Changing Tide  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a sobering, enlightening narration! You relate very well. As I trust you know, God is the biggest thing to rely and and gain solace from. But even positive change can mull us over when we don't see it as being so. My single mother went through hard times and uncertainties but God always came to the rescue. Thank God for your brother. A lot of people cannot rely on family, sad to say. The father of my best friend's mom did little to help her in time of need. But she does not yet know God as her helper. Thanks for the article! God bless!




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Review of Winter Impact  
Review by brom21
Rated: E | (4.0)
I loved this! Each line was filled with sultry, entrancing flow. My favorite lines were these-



the azure-white skies ring in
a pictures of palm fringed-
beaches of the Caribbean.


I can clearly see and hear a beach with lovely, swaying palms and a soft blue hue in the skies with white cirrus clouds ribboning across. Though I did not get a sense of cold until the end. In any case, I compliment you on a poem well written! Best of luck in the contest!
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Review of Why I Write  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have been told an author writes for themselves and then for others. The latter is when we edit our stories. This piece shows you are a writer! Although this is not fiction, essay-type writing is driven by the same force. Practice makes perfect and it's half the battle. Wonderful work and happy WdC anniversary!



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Review of FLY  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! This such a wonderful and artful display of internal faith in God. You put in so much into this brief narration. And it is so encouraging to be reminded that we are all made in God's image and we are fearfully and wonderfully made. Nice use of simile too! I think the eagle is the ultimate symbol of freedom and life. Did you know the eagle is one of the four faces of a cherub? Cool, huh? Great job and happy WdC anniversary!



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Review of My Psalm  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Anything like this deserves a perfect 5 stars! God bless my sister! Your boldness and sincerity is quite admirable and it is so sobering and a breath of fresh air. Do you read Christian fantasy? would you like to take look of the first chapter of my novel? I would love your input! God bless once again!



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Review of A Kitten Calls  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This was very cute. It was more of a snapshot of a few scenes than a story. But that is fitting considering the brevity of this piece. The thing that came out for me were these brief but affective few words. "...and comforting the little kitten, that started purring. It was soft and fuzzy..." For some reason I could really sense this feeling. Feel is something that usually does not affect me in writing. The only thing I found out of place was when you said they found a twelve-week year old kitten. How did they know it was exactly that age? Maybe you could have said it looked to be twelve-weeks old. I thought this was a charming little story. Happy WdC anniversary and write on!



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Review of Even Now  
Review by brom21
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This was a very powerful message portrayed wonderfully. It is sad how people have to come to the end of themselves to come to God. The ultimate one is death like you said. And if God does save them, they rarely fulfill the promise they made to God if He did save them. This was very moving and I enjoyed it. May god bless you! Happy WdC anniversary and write on!


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Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I have never been in a relationship before, but this makes me leery of having one. lol. This reflects the saying "Better to have loved and lost than to never loved at all." This was well written and did get a sense of how lost love lingers in the mind. I imagine it to be somewhat nostalgic in that regard. By the way, this is the first review I have done in a vey long time. Your piece was quite stimulating after all these months. Great job and happy WdC anniversary!


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Review of Letter  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a beautiful poem. Even though I had to read over it a few times slowly, I was hooked with just the sound and melody of the fleeting verses. The door is the door of the heart, the soul, being discribed as "mother" is the seat of the emotions and a source of warm affection. Most importantly, the letter is the request and courting of another person. Am I right? I find this relatable to the haiku wich is not subject to ryhming or meter. I wish I could compose such work. lol. Great job and happy WdC anniversary!




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Review of The Dream  
Review by brom21
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Rated: E | (4.5)
How sweet! You touched my heart. Eveything was in snyc; the beginining was nice and forthcoming, easy to picture, hooked the reader with the mysterious dream, and was fittingly brief. It's hard to write good flash fiction in my opinion. Yours was great even though it was very, very short. I noticed there was no spelling or grammar blips. Kudos for that! Great job and happy WdC anniversary!



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