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Review of Bliss  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Sum1 ,

Review of Poem: "Bliss" 

General Comments:
First of all, I consider this an honour to be able to review your poem.
I'm reviewing your entry in consideration that it was submitted For the prompt/ emotion "Bliss".
This poem explains how love is a blissful experience.
The first stanza explains how though there are many things in life that give us happiness, meeting that one person will bring us a Bliss we have never known until then.
The second stanza explains how everything about that person makes our heart skip and take us beyond the skies, into Bliss.
the third stanza describes the depth of the love and also the first fear that one has towards approaching the loved one. I like this line,"In the future we’ll reminisce", only true love that wants to be lasting forever can promise a wonderful recollection of all the lovely memories of their time spent together. I'm sure there will be no bliss as that.
The fourth stanza explains the first moments that occur to the two people in love, the first look, the first kiss, surely there is no other Bliss.
The fifth stanza is epic, awesome. It explains how now after many years in marriage to that person, there is no one equal to his wife and she has surely brought him bliss.
Beautiful poem, well written.
Thank you so much for your participation in my contest, this means a lot to me.

Form and rhyme:
The form of the poem is A Kyrielle poem. It has Eight syllables per line and the fourth line of each verse forms a repeated refrain. The poem follows this form very well, without any disruption in flow and meaning of the entire poem. Apart from this, the poem also follows a rhyme scheme of the form a-a-b-b and though it is restricted by the form and rhyme the poem is one beautiful love story.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and very apt to the poem's message as well.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
Lovely lines, expressing a content and joyous experience in totality.
"Now I’ve had so many joys in life
None equal you being my wife
You are my love, I can’t resist
I’d never before known such Bliss"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of Together  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Phyllis ,

Review of Poem: Together

General Comments:
It truly is a blessing , a gift from God to get a life partner, who truly says “We are in it together.” Such a person who is always there for us and who is ever so patient with all our ups and downs should be treasured and valued as you have expressed your love and gratitude here. Wonderful Valentine's poem/ letter.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
It really is wonderful to have someone who supports is throughout the hard times, though unseen...
"Though I didn’t see or hear you, I knew you prayed ~ a lot. "

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello typingrhyme,

Review of Poem: A WALK IN THE PARK

General Comments:
Beautiful written poem that truly does want the reader to go and experience the wonders that a walk in the park can bring. I'm a nature person and I love to walk in the park, sit down on that lonely bench and watch people walk by. It is a truly wonderful experience and nowadays I don't find time for this and reading your poem made me want to go to my near by park again. This time of the year, it must be really beautiful and just like you described.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-b-c-b and fits with the flow of the poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
Brings back some very sweet memories to me...
"With smiles on their faces
Lovers walk hand in hand,
While music softly plays
Drifting from the bandstand."

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Chanon ,

Review of Poem: "My Mother's 100th Birthday" 

General Comments:
A wonderful poem/ letter and dedication to your mother. Wow! the things she would have seen and been through as she lived a hundred years would have been historical. You have recorded that change by specifying "from fountain pen to computer" and "from corner stone to acres of malls ". You mother was leading her life by example and though everything around her changed all those years, she had her unchanging faith and humbleness to God.
You have written a wonderful testimony about her here and she has surely touched more lives and changed them, I'm sure. I can't imagine surviving a single day on this earth without going through pain and suffering and now thinking about your mother I know she was able to live a complete life with and only with the leading of the Lord Himself.
The last stanza is my favourite. Since you saw her and knew her, now you have the assurance and faith that she will be most welcomed by the saints in heaven. The last two lines are so insightful to me, because it made me think of my death, when I sleep the final sleep and wake up , where will I be?
I think most of us need to ask that question here so that we can live a better fulfilling life, instead of a dull and confusing life with no purpose. I would like to thank you for sharing this poem about your mother, and thank God for her well lived life.
I just choose your poem to review for the Mother's day raid but sometimes we never know what might speak to us,touch us and change us and this poem has created such an impact in my life today.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern in some lines while the other lines do not rhyme. This is a free verse poem and so rhyme is not a criteria.


Title:
The title is attention grabbing and that's what made me chose this poem to review, it fits the content very well. Not many people live to be a hundred and your mother was one of the lucky few and you must be very happy to have been with such a lovely woman for so long.

Any Mistakes:
Since this a personal poem to your mother, I did not want to be pointing out mistakes, but this one line felt like it needed a little looking after so.
In the fourth stanza, the last before line:
"When we look at your life, then who can deny
He has led every step you have trod."
This lines ends as a question but it also continues to the next line without any question mark. It is a bit confusing so you could edit it as "When we look at your life, no one can deny"
These are just my suggestions for a better flowing and meaningful poem, which it is already but clearer words speak out louder.

My Favourite Lines:

The wonderful and blessed assurance that comforts the soul. Insightful and Inspirational last two lines.

"I have not a doubt; heaven waits for your soul
And the saints will accept you with joy
When your temple lays down for its final sleep
And awakes in the arms of your Lord. "

Overall:
An excellent poem, I love it, I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Hello SHERRI GIBSON ,

Review of Poem: "Mother's Day, 2007" 

General Comments:
The first two lines, I can say remind me of my grandmother, she would start laughing and that was all that was need everybody else around her would immediately cheer up. The same quality of my grandmother is there in my mother too. I'm glad I'm reading this and this poem reminds me of my mom too. A mother is a person you cannot compare to anyone else,in no way and your poem clearly proves that. She is always doing something for the better of the entire family.
It surely is painful when such a mother has left you and gone but to remember her in your memories and think of what she has done that made you the person you are today. Surely one day you will be joined again with her and can share all those things that you've wanted to share with her.
This poem is a wonderful dedication and love letter to your mother and I'm surely she must be saying "I Love you too" and smiling down at you. Thanks for touching me today with this beautiful poem. With you, I'm wishing her a Happy Mother's Day too.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-b-a-b which flows well in this poem. I almost didn't notice the rhyme scheme and thought it was a lovely free verse poem because I was so drawn with the feelings in brought to me.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
Most beautiful lines of love in this poem
" What we share burns on for eternity.
Someday I'll sit on the star beside you."

Overall:
An excellent poem, I love it, I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of CHANGED LOVE  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Hello Itchy Water,

Review of Poem: CHANGED LOVE

General Comments:
You would not believe me if I said that I was just talking about how we look and understand others is based on us and what we have within ourselves and not them. I'm glad I'm reading this as a confirmation about may be something I need change, may be the way I look at myself or others. It is so true that sometimes things are not what they always seem to be,we realise later and wonder how come we have missed this. Surely until God opens our eyes to His truth we will be blind to everything in this world. Thanks for this thought provoking, insightful and useful poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting, and that's what made me want to know what the content of the poem might be. Apt title and description.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
Love all the lines, but some lines had deeper meanings to me,
"Perceive me as you will.
I am you and you are me.
We only see and know what we choose."
and
" No longer are you, you,
Distorted by my hopes, lies, and denials."

Overall:
A very good poem. I love it, so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Hello Itchy Water,

Review of Article: Poetic Form & Other Poetic Resources

General Comments:
You have a very informative and useful article here. This is going to be very useful for me as I'm just improving my poetic skills and this article here gives an A-Z of most of the things a beginner or an established poet might want to know or recollect.
Thanks for sharing this. I will be learning a lot from here and also from your contest. Thanks again. Great article.

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Review of Since You Left  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Joto-Kai ,

Review of Poem: Since you left

General Comments:
It is a sad poem about a loved one that is left alone now. We get so used to them being around and now that they have left it is difficult to leave the habits and little things done when they were there with us.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting. It is a summary of the content.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"As I bathe in the sunrise's golden aura,
my fingers still search for your welcome shoulders."

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of Open Your Eyes  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Hello Bird ray of sunshine ,

Review of Poem: Open your eyes

General Comments:
An Inspirational poem. It is always easy to tell something but doing it is always difficult. When it comes to forgetting the past and forgetting negative things it is difficult but through trying it can be achieved. Your poem has inspired me and encouraged me.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-b-c-b and the flow is very good with this form.

My Favourite Lines:
" Free your soul from sadness
Feel the sun's cleansing rays
Its time to listen to your heart
Ignore the mean things they say"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Hello Renee,

Review of Poem: Sublime Enchantment

General Comments:
I'm reviewing your entry in consideration that it was submitted For the prompt/ emotion "Bliss".

The first stanza like the first page of a best selling novel reels the reader in. In the first stanza the line I liked is the second line, "Unencumbered Delight" meaning how the delight is with any encumbrance and how the delight is free and so it sets the heart free, surely bliss is an expression of totally free happiness.
The second stanza is my most favourite one because surely bliss makes us float in cloud nine, but instead of using the usual expressions you have done a very nice job in the picture of how you are walking on air and it is like a poetic imagination of dancing and joy in every step.
The next two stanzas are a continuation of the scene that happens as you are walking on air, the words "caresses" and "warmth" explain the kind embrace and lightness in the joy and "idyllic display" give a feeling of peace to the entire scene here.
The last before stanza is a sudden return back to earth or happens in the air, may be? It is written to depict, may be the speed of the flight of the person in the air and the fluttering of the heart in joy.
The last three lines have three words that have created an "incomparable" effect to the end of the poem. Those words are "Unconstrained", "Unfettered" and "Ineffable" which describe how the emotion or feeling that is experienced is actually the exact opposite of some thing. The splendour is without constrains and the spirit is not chained or in fetters and finally the joy is so great is cannot be expressed.
The word choice is vast and excellent and flow is good. The length is good and precise.
You have written very lovely poem almost anybody in such joy can relate to this, this bliss may be due to many things can could have happened but you have not explained the reason for the bliss which to me is a very thought provoking way of writing.
Thank you for your entry to the contest. Do continue to participate, as I would love to read more of your talented, creative and imaginative works.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free verse poem. The free flow of the poem is very good though there is no rhyme and rhythm.

Title:
The title is the first line of the poem and the description below is the next two lines in the first stanza. The title and the description are unique and interesting making the reader want to know what exactly might the content be.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
Picturesque, poetic and expressive lines
"Walking on air,
each movement is
an ethereal dance. "

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Hello Gwyn Max ,

Review of Poem: I think I could be a poet

General comments:
Well, I think you already are an amazing poet to me! The words used, the flow, the emotions, the expressions just loved it. I can explain and detail how this poem is and what it actually says, I do love poems that are thought provoking, insightful, expressive and have hidden meanings. This poem is such one. I appreciate that you have put it here in WDC.
I would like you to look into my contest, "Expressions of Emotions Poetry Contest"  and give a try at the prompt. I would be happy to read your talented works in the future.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any mistakes:
I don't seem to find any mistakes. I'm drawn by the poetic lines that don't let me see the mistakes if there are any.

My Favourite Lines:
The entire poem is a favourite, but here below are a few lines that stood out to me.
"And I understand that poetry
isn’t just for anyone
but that it is for the brave
and the beautiful
and those who can mold words into waves and formations
that pierce like candied bullets on the tide
right through your heart,"

Overall:
An excellent poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello shelby,

Review of Poem: in a stranger company

General comments:
A very calm yet romantic poem I should say. Expressions of emotions and feeling is very well done here. The first line portrays how a man's voice is the attraction even though he be a stranger. The voice draws you and that is also what you seek. The look that the stranger gives affects you and leaves you changed forever. I like how you have described the effect of the look in the line "Forever your undone" which is think should be better read as "Forever you are undone". The next line has just one small typo error "The loss of ones" should be written as "The loss of one's" and even in the last line it could be "stranger's" instead of "strangers". With the right punctuations the poem would flow better but I don't have nay suggestions with punctuations as I'm not good with them myself*Bigsmile*. A well written poem, hope to see more work from you.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and a better one would reel readers to want to read your work.

My Favourite Lines:
"The stranger
The one love
He steals you away with a look"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

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Review of Good Bye  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello DarkHeart-BlueEyes-StangeMind,

Review of Poem: Good Bye

General Comments:
A well written poem describing how the departure of friends and family causes sadness in us. It explains how when they are reunited the joy comes back and even if when they are apart , the memories that they had brings great happiness.

Title:
The title fits the content very well. A better description will make readers want to read more.

Any Mistakes:
Appropriate punctuation could have been added to make the poem a better one.

My Favourite Lines:
"Departure brings such sorrow yet makes you truly appreciate
what you lose. "

Overall:
A good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

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Hello StoryBob ,

Review of Poem: The Teenager on the Hill

General Comments:
A lovely poem depicting the events of Christ's Birth from the perspective of a shepherd boy. The entire poem flows well along with the rhyme and rhythm of the form. You have used day-to-day words and brought out this story, I like that.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-a-b-b.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"That night I'll never forget;
It was spooky and yet
It'll stay in my head
Until I am dead."

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of Just Listen  
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Hello Kimberly Danielle,

Review of Poem: Just Listen

General comments:
I love your poem. It is true how we should take the time to listen and be silent. It is important to stop and listen which will actually make us more peaceful and better than just rushing about doing things. A well written poem.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any mistakes:
Punctuations could be added for the better flow of the poem.

My Favourite Lines:
These lines are insightful and thought provoking...
"Silence is beautiful
But under appreciated"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of Ode to Music  
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Review of Poem: Ode to Music

General comments:
A well written ode to music. Surely music is an inspiration and an escape from the cruel reality of the world.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any mistakes:
You could work on the punctuation a bit more and that would help with the flow of the poem.
Just a small typo: "As i walk through the crowds" I should be capital letter.

My Favourite Lines:
"as it soothes my soul in the darkest of hours
Oh music, inspire me"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Poem: IT BEGAN WITH A KISS

General Comments:
I love poem on love and this one has every aspect and incident that is precious in any love story. Some of your words create warm and lovely emotions while the others create intense and deep emotions, you have written here a wonderful poem of emotions that spark in love. You have explained the incidents such as the kiss, the first "I love you", the proposal and the wedding without any disruption in flow and just within these 20 lines. I like your poem a lot, you are a truly gifted writer.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-a-b-b which fits the flow of the poem very well.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
Love these lines that hold deep emotions of love..
"Kiss me until I can take no more.
I long to be all you’ve waited for. "

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of LED BY A STAR  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Poem: LED BY A STAR

General Comments:
A beautiful poem describing the events that happened during the birth of Christ. You have very flawlessly written the entire poem without missing details. I like the way you start the poem with a well known nursery rhyme and then bring this story into it. A well written poem to be read at Christmas time.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-a-b-b in the poem, and the flow is very good with the form of the poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"Twinkle, twinkle, big bright star
led three wise men from afar"

"They had traveled such a long way,
and would never forget this special day."

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of I Pledge to You  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Poem: I Pledge to You

General Comments:
A lovely poem of realisation of the value and worth of the loved one. Sometimes love blinds us, other times we are blind to love itself. We realise and change only at the brink of a sad event or when we have lost the loved one. This poem talks about the precious loved one who would have been lost but is now with the person. We have to learn never to take someone for granted, we night be busy searching for stones without even realising that the only diamond we had is lost.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern as the poem is A Quatrain and it manages to maintain the rhyme scheme and syllable counts very well..

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"But know this now I pledge to you,
my pure, undying love.
I seek naught else but to be true
assured by Him above."

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of Heartbreak  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review of Poem: Heartbreak

General Comments:
A well written poem about heartbreak. Just a few lines written but they mean and say a lot. Surely a lost love causes loneliness and leaves nothing behind but the pieces of a broken heart.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

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Review of The Flowers  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Poem: The flowers

General comments:
A good poem appreciating the beauty and qualities of a flower. It is sad to know that some people hate flowers, I cannot find a reason as to why they should not love flowers. They are such pretty things that need to be admired and valued the most in all of nature. I cannot imagine an earth without flowers, without fragrance, without colours seems almost like hell to me.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in this poem. This is a free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any mistakes:
In the line: " the symbolize hope, love, and forgiveness." I think it should be "they symbolize"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Poem: Why me? (free form poem)

General Comments:
Expressive poem. You have used words wisely and given a strong theme to your poem while managing to stay of the prompt of expressing pain. I liked how you have said that the pain is actually felt in the middle of the chest but the new perspective about how though the heart is on the left, the pain is not. The first paragraph is fully the expression of pain and you have done that well. The second stanza you have written about how people never know the pain that is hidden inside and how everything people see about the person is the mask and not the real suffering person.The next three stanzas are very strong,they almost shout the cause and give a deep message. You not just left it by giving a reason for the pain but explained in detail the reason and in every line pain and anger is felt. This situation explained here is a sad story of many women, who still live in pain because of the past.

The last stanza is a bit confusing for me. Who is the "She" you find , his daughter?
Why did you end with a final question/statement "Hell, Why not?"

Thank you for entering my contest, do continue to participate in the upcoming rounds as well.

Form:
There is rhyming lines but there is no particular pattern of the rhyme, this is a free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"WHY ME? I know it’s cliché but what else can I say
that explains the piercing shard in the center of my chest?
They say the heart is on the left, but I say that can’t be right. "

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Common ground  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Kage,

Review of Poem: Common ground

General Comments:
Insightful and thought provoking poem about how the pain a person seems to hide deep inside has become a part of him that does not go away and how it has made him to wear a mask that does not show anything true about him. This person gives a clear message to another person who is also in the situation like him, he wants them to know that once the mask is worn it is impossible to remove and it finally becomes the only face you have. A poem with a clear message indeed. It is important to express pain and any emotion so that it will not kill us from the inside. Pain is surely a common ground we all share but should not become the only ground on which we always stand.
Considering that this poem was submitted for the prompt "pain", you have expressed it by saying that it actually hides inside the you and that it is "A prison that I can't escape,Iron bars with crushing strength that grind against my heart." Overall you entire poem has a sad painful tone about itself, the feeling that the pain you have should not be anyone else's fate is a good message.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem as this is free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.
Words such as cheerful and smiling have been repeated , so you could try and change them with new words meaning the same.
In this line: "I've lost my heart, I wear his mask. Anger took its place." I think it should be , "I wear this mask".

My Favourite Lines:
"Pain I know, Pain I've seen. Not the one that heals with time. Pain that always stays the same."

Overall:
A good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Poem: A POET’S LIFE: editor's choice

General Comments:
I consider this an honour to be able to review one of your poems. I went through your profile and wanted to find an item that no one has reviewed but I got lost in all those plenty lovely, insightful and philosophical poems. Finally I choose this poem because, I as am able to relate to this very well. To a poet, the words, the rhyme and the entire come at odd times, odd times when the poet is not ready or is occupied with something else. As a little girl,I used to get up in the middle of the night and write into my diary. As I grew up I lost track of all my writings and just this year I have come back to writing, to being myself and this poem here brought back all those memories. It is a wonder how words come to us and how they create miracles such as poems. I have lost the ideas that come to me by not being able to jot them them immediately and have regretted it, seems to me poems are rare flowers that bloom once in a while and it is up to us to capture its essence as it blooms. I like the way your poem is simple,thought provoking and very true about the life of a poet.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-b-c-b and syllable form 7-6-7-6, the poem is well written with these forms and maintains the flow.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and apt.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
" Often it does so happen
When it is past midnight,
Some word or a phrase or tune
Does make me sit upright. "

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of Poem: Thoughts for a rainy day...

General Comments:
Picturesque and thought provoking poem. A rainy day makes us actually think a lot. I too have had thoughts as too why we have rainy days in our lives too. Then I realise only after the rain everything becomes new and fresh and something new begins to start to grow. Your poem again brought back those thoughts to me, which is very inspirational indeed. Well written.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in this poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.
In the last stanza:
"That with all this turmoil here
My season of flowers and new begins
will always come again."
should be "new beginnings"

My Favourite Lines:
"I close my eyes and listen
to the rain that pounds the pavement
taking in all the sounds and smells
calming a place deep within me. "

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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