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Review of Anguish  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Renee,

Review of Poem: Anguish

General Comments:
Beautifully written emotional and deep poem. You have followed the prompt well and expressed pain in different forms and explained how pain affects us and leave us like a person roaming as a living dead man/woman. Living every single day in pain is like living in hell and this poem has brought out the feeling of living in such a condition.

The first stanza was a great opening to the poem, you just brought out the depth of pain and the effect in just three lines, nice!
The second stanza, more deep and descriptive, shows how though we walk about doing daily chores, we are totally lost internally. The 3rd stanza shows how when a person is in pain, every single minute seems like million years of suffering.The 4th and 5th stanza look into the places of escapes for a person in anguish and how even there , there is no actual escape. The last three stanzas have also expressed well. The word choice and flow is very good indeed.

Thank you for entering this poem for my contest ,round one for pain prompt, kindly continue to participate in the upcoming rounds as well.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern in some lines while the other lines do not rhyme.

Title:
The title fits the content extremely well and the description below is interesting and surely captivates me.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found. Very well written indeed.

My Favourite Lines:
Expressions of pain in these lines stood out for me..

"Anguish, shatters the spirit,
despondence and chaos reign."

"Beleaguered, with eyes dry of worthless tears
shed over ignorance."

"and yet no one sees the imperfection on the surface,
only the soul is torn asunder."

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Thief of Time  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Hello HesterPrenn,

Review of Poem: Thief of Time

General comments:
A well written poem about the passing of a grandmother due to time. You have given stresses and expressions of the way the grandchild feels as the grand mother is in the death bed. Generally this is a good poem, written well.
Considering that this poem was written for the prompt "pain", I searched the poem and found only the first and third paragraph able to express this emotion. The first shows the pain that the grandmother is in and how the grand child is also in pain because of her suffering. The third stanza shows how the words of the grandmother bring that emotion to the child and how it feels for the child.
In these lines:"Her words matched euphony
striking the deepest arteries inside." I do not understand how her words were considered as "euphony" which means sweet and melodies words of happiness, and how can such words cause what you written in the following lines : "Such agony ,
boiled over my senses. " because if they were happy words why did it bring agony to you, was it written to show the counter effect?
In the line : "for never, child. for never." , I think it should be " Never, child, never." with the punctuations and words corrected as I have written, because to me "for never" does not seem like a proper way to put it.
Few other suggestions I can give is:
In the line: " and what wondrous thing,' time'..." you could add " and what a wondrous"..
In the line: "those, her last words..
last words to which I refuse to resign." , you could change it to, "last words from which I refuse to resign."
These are just my suggestions and comments for the improvement of your poem.
Thanks for entering to my contest.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in this poem as this is a free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

My Favourite Lines:
"striking the deepest arteries inside.
Such agony ,
boiled over my senses."

Overall:
A good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Anything For Love  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello jaya,

Review of Poem: Anything For Love

General Comments:
I love reading poems on love. This one here is a very beautiful and lovely poem. It is truly gift from God if we receive a love that expresses such a promise then it should be held close to the heart with great value and treasured forever. Well written.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"A love that inspires
Me to forgive and forget
Is the kind of love for which I am"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of who am i to say  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello onewomanexhibit,

Review of Poem: who am i to say

General comments:
Lovely poem on how you have fallen in love and expressed it by starting every line with the words " I don't know ". Love itself is a feeling and an emotion that people have been trying to figure out for generations and still have not succeeded. When we are in love we do so many things and we don't know why. Very well written poem and I like it a lot.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is free verse poem.

Title:
The title fits the content well, but my suggestion would be a more suitable one for the readers to come and see. The description below is interesting.

Any mistakes:
No mistakes can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"I don't know what love is but I do know your existance is the definition beyond words "
Love this line, because something we cannot define love by just words...

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Eyes  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Winter Wolf Warrior,

Review of Poem: Eyes

General Comments:
A well written poem about eyes and how they are the window to the world we see. Thought provoking.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern in this poem of the form a-a-b-b but some lines do not rhyme as per the pattern.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"Eyes are the windows of people's souls,
they reveal the cracks, gaps, and holes."

Overall:
A good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

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Review of If I was a bird  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello pallavi ,

Review of Poem: If I was a bird

General comments:
Bold and emotional poem. The society does have a negative influence on many peoples life and yes it does chain some of us with rules and laws that seem more like a life time sentence in jail. I like the way you have written that if given the freedom a bird what you would do. The world is filled with people whom we cannot trust and who nothing but bad. Instead of living a life among them, it is better to soar the skies alone with peace and calm. Very well written

Form:
There is rhyming pattern in some lines while the other lines do not rhyme.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any mistakes:
No mistakes can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
" It is like a prison which has chained my heart,
and restrains my feelings for challenging my rights."

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of fEAR  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Hello 2 Winged Dragon,

Review of Poem: fEAR

General comments:
A topic well chosen and written. You have taken a single verse from the Bible, Psalms 23 and have given a very good description of fear, death and how people fear death. Surely as you have described here, everything is in our mind and in what we decide to do about our fears. A truly inspirational and thought provoking poem.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in this poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and very accurate for the given content.

Any mistakes:
No mistakes can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"Every day draws you closer to this unrelenting end, only question is.
What will you do until then?"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of first sight  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello shashi ,

Review of Poem: first sight

General comments:
A well written poem about how a girl feels as she falls in love or has a crush on a guy. She feels that she is losing everything in those eyes and still she wants to be lost any ways.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

My Favourite Lines:
"first you catch my eyes,

second you touch my soul,

at last you took my heart.. "

Overall:
A good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Someone  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Sinfulstyle,

Review of Poem: Someone

General Comments:
It is really nice to have someone to share your sorrows and happiness with, to love and be there no matter what. When life makes us lonely and suffer we wish that there was a someone who would be there with us to comfort us and tell us its going to be alright. This poem here describes the desire to have someone with all those qualities mentioned here. A person who fits all these criteria would be hard to find and if found must be treasured and valued forever. A nicely written poem.

Form:
There is rhyming pattern in some lines while the other lines do not rhyme.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No much mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.
Just a suggestion:"In times like these , we beg and plead, " could use that extra comma there in the middle..

My Favourite Lines:
"one to stay true and never lie,
one who never says goodbye."

Overall:
A good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Remarkable  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Kalos Kagathos,

Review of Poem: Remarkable

General Comments:
This poem is about the loved one who left and how she can be compared to no other girl. Word choice is good and there is a good flow to the entire poem. You have explained very well the empty room and compared to the empty space in your heart. Now that she has left, the search for another is difficult to satisfy because no one fits here wonderful qualities. Well written.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem.

Title:
The title fits the content and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"No more will its
Walls be adorned
With the portrait
You left hanging, "

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Winter  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello MaryAnn,

Review of Poem: Winter

General Comments:
This poem is an acrostic poem about winter. The words used are very good and vivid, each line explains and describes a different scene of winter. The first line talks about how winter is a white time, everything everywhere is painted and covered in white. The second, fourth and last lines talk about the quality of winter , which is the freezing ability that creates beautiful sculptures in the snow and ice. The third line talks about Santa and his preparations for Christmas. The fifth line talks about what happens to the animals as they seek shelter from the cold winter. Not only true qualities of winter are expressed here, but also the fairy tale beauties are included.

Form:
There is no rhyming pattern in this poem. The form is Acrostic and the poem fits the form and does a good job.

Title:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Any Mistakes:
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines:
"Whimsical waves of white, airbrushed in the sky
Icicles, snow-angels, crystalline flakes"

Overall:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of A Ghostly Poem  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Maryann,

REVIEW OF POEM: A Ghostly Poem

GENERAL COMMENTS:
Lovely poem about a haunted house that is actually a good place to live in. This poem seems almost like a story because the flow was very good. The flow of the poem is flawless with the perfectly rhyming words and good word choice all over. The parents have taken a bold step to buy this haunted house and live in it, their choice turned out to be a good one as the ghosts were just two kids who would now join the kids in the family and bring more fun and laughter. As you have said that it was written for a contest, there must have been some prompt and I can see that you surely would have done a good job as the poem shows great imagination and creativity. Well written.

FORM:
There is rhyming pattern in this poem of the form a-a,b-b...

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is very apt and interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
None at all!!

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"I knew they were ghosts as they stood there and stared.
They seemed so harmless. They seemed to know I cared."

OVERALL:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review of Simply Rain  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello hello Maryann,

REVIEW OF POEM: Simply Rain

GENERAL COMMENTS:
This poem "Simply Rain" is simply picturesque. The transition from a grey sky to a beautiful rainbow is well made without any disruption in flow. It is difficult to create a poem that shows a lot with just usage of less words but you have done a marvellous job here by making every line with just two words to give the picture of rain and its beauty. Each stanza explains how the start of a storm would be and then the process of rain/ storm, the calm after the storm and finally the rainbow that appears, all lines are very imaginative and creative. This poem made me think about the power even single words have and if used wisely how just three or four words can create magic on paper just as this one here. A simple yet stunning poem.

FORM:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-b-c-b,but this maintained in the first three stanzas and the last two stanzas have no rhyming pattern.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is apt and interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
None whatsoever.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"First drop,
First tear,
Birds zoom,
Storm here."

OVERALL:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Maryann,

REVIEW OF "The Wounds of a Dogwood":

GENERAL COMMENTS:
This prose here is about what happens to a dogwood tree and how it gets healed from the wounds and scars of its past. This tree like each of us lived a life full of peace and happiness with friends. A sudden storm causes one of the friend trees to hurt the dogwood tree leaving him with pain and wounds, this situation can also be related to many of us, as we have been hurt by our closets friends too. Slowly the dogwood tree healed with time and the dogwood's outer wounds were beginning to heal but the inner scars still remained, just like for most of us we tend to heal very quick physically but emotionally the pain and the scars remain. Finally , time had brought the dogwood tree to the initial stage of the story where he is happy and well, totally healed with no scars but only peace and joy, if each of us have the determination and patience of this tree surely we can reach back to the place of peace from our fallen darkness and live life to the fullest again. A beautifully well written Inspirational prose.

FORM:
Although this is prose,it seems like a free verse poem to me. Love the emphasis on the words "That changed",reminding us that every situation of our life will change and surely Change is the only thing that does not Change. So let's hope for a better change for a better tomorrow.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is apt and interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
No mistakes found. That's obvious, isn't it ?

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"The dogwood, now enlightened and stronger than before, smiled once again upon the deep forest.
The terrain surrounding the dogwood tree was a beautiful place."

OVERALL:
An excellent piece of work so I am giving it 5 stars.

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

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Hello MaryAnn,

REVIEW OF POEM: Penelope, My Beloved Cat

GENERAL COMMENTS:
Lovely poem written about your cat, Penelope. I have two little cats and I love them both very much, I can relate to the lines you have written about the qualities of a cat. I too have lost a cat when I was too young, I remember asking my mom and she just told me Rosy is gone for a while and will be back, but I waited in vain only later to realise my mom had lied to me knowing how I would react to the cat who would creep up to me every morning when my mom used to wake me up. I surely miss Rosy as she was almost my childhood friend.
Excellent and diverse word choice and flow, love for the cat is well expressed in such creative lines. The entire poem gives a good feeling about the cat and the owner, shows about the wonderful times they has together. Very well written.

FORM:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. The last line in every stanza is repeated to stress on the sadness caused by the death of the Beloved Pet.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and that's what made me read it.

ANY MISTAKES:
No mistakes at all. Come on, there can be none, because you are a Pro !!

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"Your soft, warm fur and wispy whiskers against my skin,
Enchant my psyche, to make me happier than I've ever been."

OVERALL:
An excellent poem so I am giving it 5 stars. I would give a million if that was allowed *Bigsmile*.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..
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Review of whole love  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hello melfen,

REVIEW OF POEM : Whole love

GENERAL COMMENTS:
A nicely written poem on finding and searching for true love. You have explained well the qualities of true love and its effects on the person.

FORM:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem.

TITLE:
The title fits the content but a better catchy one could have been sued and the description below should have been made more interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
You have used very little punctuation and that kind of disrupts the flow of the poem. The starting words of each line should have been capitalised to make it easy for the reader to pause and read. If the correct punctuations are added there would be no grammar errors as well.
A typo error in this line "keep searching keep searching till youn find whole love " it has to be "you".

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"look near and far your destiny is in the stars,

Its worth the wait so dont hesitate,"

OVERALL:
A good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of The Dead  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hello R. D. Negron,

REVIEW OF POEM: The Dead

GENERAL COMMENTS:
You have written a poem about how one feels life less without the loved one needed for them. The first lines I think is taken from the Bible and then you have explained how the dead are walking without any emotions and life because there is no love in them and because there is no love given to them.

FORM:
There is no rhyming pattern in this poem.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below should have been made more interesting,instead of the keywords present in the poem displayed there.

ANY MISTAKES:
"For you was my air" I think it should be "were my air", I'm not sure though.
You could use punctuations to make the poem more easy to read.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"And the dead shall walk the earth
Without life
Without love
Without emotion"

OVERALL:
A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

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Review of A Mother's Love  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

Hello Loreley St.James,

REVIEW OF POEM: A Mother's love

GENERAL COMMENTS:
Surely mother's love can be different for different people. She may express her love through anger and sometimes we feel it is not love at all. You have written well about all aspects and different ways the receivers may feel about mother's love.

FORM:
There is rhyming pattern a-b-a-b. Well written into this poem.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below could have been made more interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
No mistakes found.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"Her words cannot be removed with mental scouring.
The hurtful glare of her eyes can burn your soul like a demon."

OVERALL:
A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Longing  
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hello lostghost ,

REVIEW OF POEM: Longing

GENERAL COMMENTS:
The longing of a person in love is well expressed within the form and pattern of the Musette form. Considering this your first attempt, a very good poem I say. What is love without some longing and pain.

FORM:
There is rhyming pattern and form as required by the Musette poetry form. This poems includes the syllable count and the rhyme scheme as required by it.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below could have been more interesting for the readers to just open this and read it.

ANY MISTAKES:
No mistakes found.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"Each time,
longing for hearts
to chime."

OVERALL:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hello Connor,

REVIEW OF POEM: The story of the sun.

GENERAL COMMENTS:
A well written poem about the qualities of the sun and the effects of the same on a woman. You have described here all the lovely qualities of the sun and how the woman loves the sun due to this.

FORM:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
I do not find any mistakes.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"Dawn begins
Out rises the yellow glow of warmth and life"

OVERALL:
A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Butterflies  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hello Lala,

REVIEW OF POEM: Butterflies

GENERAL COMMENTS:
The feeling of butterflies in one's stomach the first time is a lovely experience. The way our insides act up makes us feel so different. Sometimes we do get these butterflies later in life when even we are sure that its just another crush. Nicely written.

FORM:
There is no rhyming pattern in the poem.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
No spelling errors found. You could have used punctuation and made the poem more exciting.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"Like I'm back in middle school with a crush
It makes the kid in me giggle"

OVERALL:
A good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hello Magoo,

REVIEW OF POEM: The Beautiful Girl

GENERAL COMMENTS:
I have two little nieces and I can relate to this poem as an aunt to enjoy their company. Sometimes I just sit and look at them dream and be in world of their own, the innocence and the cuteness is what I love about them. Here this poem is describing the love of the father for his cute and adorable little daughter. The dad admires all the lovely qualities of his daughter and even thinks about her marriage in the future. You have managed to keep the reader thinking that this is a poem about a love story between a girl as felt by the boy , but you have surprised the reader by revealing that this is a sweet relationship between a father and daughter.

FORM:
There is a-a-b-b rhyming pattern that fits very well in this poem.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting,but most people would be fooled to think that this poem is about a girl in her teens or so, since you have used the word Beautiful. After reading this poem, they would realise that there would be nothing more beautiful than that little girl.

ANY MISTAKES:
No mistakes found.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"She's adorable with endless charms;
the kind you want to wrap in your arms."

OVERALL:
A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

- Zelda
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Review of Lie to Me  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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It is your account birthday, so I just thought I'll drop in for a review or two.

Hello Gwilym John ,

REVIEW OF POEM: "Lie to Me"

GENERAL COMMENTS:
Thought provoking and very imaginative poem. First a blacksmith, the descriptions of the work of a blacksmith and that of lies are well expressed. Next a chef, I like this line, "Crushed false and mixed with a pinch of deception. " very well compared with cooking(lies). A spinner, I thought it would be about some web of lies but it was not so, but very intriguing.

FORM:
There is rhyming pattern of the form a-b-c-b-c, which is well done.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
No mistakes found in spelling or grammar.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"You are the executioner of my soul, so pray
that you bring no harm to me again, because next time, you won’t be excused."

OVERALL:
A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

- Zelda
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Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello KayLee,

GENERAL COMMENTS:
People say that seeing is believing and so when we see certain things in the world we tend to believe it without a inch of doubt. This poem here reminds all of us that what we see may not be always what is real and what is the truth. The things that we see may be a outcome of after various changes as here in this poem, the outcome of a ugly person is due to the broken and lost qualities of a mirror. Not only mirrors trick us but also people, circumstances and situations in life by showing us things that are not the real or original ones.

FORM:
There is rhyming pattern in some lines while the other lines do not rhyme.

TITLE:
The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

ANY MISTAKES:
No spelling or grammar errors. Word choice and flow is good.

MY FAVOURITE LINES:
"Mirror, Mirror in the trash,
Your trick on me will be Your last!"

OVERALL:
The poem is good and so I'm giving a rating of 4 stars.

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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Review of Meant To Be  
Review by Princess Zelda
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello melfen,

I like your poem a lot because I'm able to relate to it. Feelings and emotions are well expressed. You have written well in a free form. There is just one typing error in this line "We had what others didn't we were unstopable," it should be "unstoppable".

Thanks for sharing your work.. Keep writing..

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