Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - So simple words like danger or threat brain region associated with fear - you may have missed some words between "threat" and "brain".
2. In this section - Melissa could look up even open her mouth - you may want to insert "or" after "up".
3. In this section - This when I’m supposed to be out - you may want to insert "is" after "This".
Readability: A very interesting read! It reminds me a bit of the Matrix, if she hadn't called him to the library to warn him would he still be alive?
Overall Impression: Now, what in the world do Gremlins have to do with it? LOL
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - made for her for her very first Christmas - you may want to eliminate one of the "for her"s.
2. In this section - You alarms going off again, Rhoda? - you may want to change "you" to "your".
Readability: A well-written and compelling read! Not your typical Christmas "miracle" but I still enjoyed it!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - that sat on top of side table - you may want to insert "the" after "of".
2. In this section - there are carrots for your reindeers too - you may want to eliminate the "s" from "reindeers".
3. In this section - folding the note neatly in half and placed it in his coat pocket - you have "folding" and "placed", you can go with "folding" and "placing" or "folded" and "placed".
4. In this section - the final caught item caught his eye - you may want to eliminate one of the "caught"s.
Readability: An intriguing and entertaining read! You did an excellent job of leading the reader down the happy trail only to spring the REAL Santa on them!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - in a city with the worse weather - you may want to change "worse" to "worst".
2. In this section - “The hell are you doing here cleaner?!” - you may want to add "What" in front of "The".
Readability: A well-written and interesting read! This could make for a very intriguing novel!
Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!
Readability: A well-written and entertaining read with a nicely developed main character!
An extra tidbit: I chose your story because I just purchased a book called "Hidden Catch" which is about this very thing, it is in my "to read" stack and hopefully I will get to it soon!
Write on!
Thanks much,
Lovina
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